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  • TheLiteracyShed 2017

    MarshmallowsResource1a

    StarterSentences

    Themoonlightreflectedontheripplesofthelake.Therewasafireintheforest.Therewerethicktreesbytheedgeofthewater.Inthedistance,thereweremountains.Aroundthefire,therewerestones.Therewereinsectschirpinginthewoods.Nexttothefire,therewasalog.Therewasroughbarkonthetreetrunks.Thegrasswasshort.Therewasasmalltentnearthefire.Infrontofthetent,therewasasleepingbagandpillow.

    SentenceStretchingHowcanweextendoursentences? Saywherethingsare Useadjectivesbeforeanoun Useadjectivesafteranoun Addinextradetail(youmightneedtousea

    conjunction) Useasimile

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    Itwasaclear,warmnight.Cricketschirpedinthedistance,

    andintermittentlyanowlhooted.Asolitaryboatbobbed

    onthelakeandfromtime-to-timethewaterslapped

    againstit.Moonlighthittheripplesonthelake,reflecting

    littlesparksoflightlikediamondsonthewater.Faroffin

    thedistance,behindthelake,greatmountainsloomed.

    Theylookedlikegiantpurplesleepingbeasts.Talltrees

    withthicktrunksedgedthewaterandbirdsroostedin

    theirtangledbranches.Ashortleaf-litteredpathwayledto

    acampingarea.Inthemiddleofthecamp,afirecrackled

    withredembersandashrisingupwardsintothenightsky.

    Bythefire,afallenlogwasusedasamakeshiftbench,and

    totherearofthecampwasasmallcanvastent.

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    Adjectives Verbs PrepositionPhrases

    clearwarm

    chirpedhooted

    Inthedistanceonthelake

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    Nightwascreepingin.Thewateronthelakewasbarelymovingandtheskywasabrilliantblue-violetcolour.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

    Vocabulary PhrasesReflectingRipplingLappingGlisteningToweringEntwinedSubstantialSilhouettesDarkShadowyEmbersCracklingCanvasTemporarySituated

    beyondthetreelinebeneaththedarkeningskyNext tothefireTowardtheforestAcrossthewaterBytheedgeoftheIntheshadowoftheUndertheshadowybranchesWithinseveralfeetofBythesideofthetentAlongthepathwayBythefiresideInviewofthe

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    Skin

    Ears

    Tail

    Movements

    Sounds

    Likes/Dislikes

    Body

    TheCreature

    Eyes

    Mouth

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    Thedonriphant isalargelandmammal;adultmalesoftenweighupto3500kg.Itsthick,wrinkledskinhelpstotrapmoistureandkeepstheanimalcoolforlonger(somethingwhichisimportantintheAfricanheat).Typically,thedonriphant walksinanuprightstanceandusesthelargepadsonthesolesofitsfeetforstability,thoughitcanrunforshortburstsonfourlegs.Ithasashortgreen-tippedtail,whichiscoveredincoarse,wiryhairs,andisusedforbalance.Twoarm-likelimbshelpittoclimbtrees,anditshandsarecapableofgrippingandutilisingtools.Itslongneckisusefulwhengatheringvegetation,andstrong,flexiblemusclesallowthecreaturetoextenditsneckbyafurther8-10inches,whenneeded.Thedonriphant hastwolongearswhichprimarilyfunctionascoolingdevices.Astemperaturesclimb,thedonriphant rotatesitsearsinacircularmotiontocooltheheadandtrunk.Thedonriphant hasacutehearing.Manyanimalshavefairlylimitedvisionandsodonriphants relyupontheirkeensenseofhearingtoprotectthemselvesfrompredators.Althoughthetrunkfunctionsmainlyforbreathing,itisalsousedforgrasping,feeding,smelling,drinking,makingsoundsandforprotection.Itgrowsaninchforeveryyearofthecreatureslifeuntiltheyreachmaturity.

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    Thedonriphant isfoundonlyinAfrica,thoughfossilsofamammalsimilartothedonriphant havebeenfoundinSouthAmerica.Mainlyfoundlivinginherds,thedonriphant iswelladaptedtoliveinahot,dryclimateand,likeacamel,itcanstorefattokeepitnourishedonlongjourneys.Theanimalsbodyisdesignedtoreachtheleavesandbranchesfromthetopoftrees.Typically,anadultmalewilleataround30-35kgofleavesaday.Leavesprovidethedonriphant withsomeofitswaterandtherestisconsumedatthewateringholes,ofteninlargegroups.

    Duetoitslargesize,thedonriphant hasveryfewpredators.Hyenaswilloftenworkinpackstoseparateyoung,orweak,animalsfromtherestoftheherd.Insomecircumstances,lionswilltargetalonedonriphant,thoughareunlikelytopursueaherd.Adultdeathsaremorelikelytobecausedbycrocodiles,whichstrikeintheriversandwateringholes.

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    Openers

    The _________________isfoundSomeanimalsTypicallythe______________...Afurtherimportantfeature,istheDuetoits_____________,the_____________...Insomecircumstances,Today,there areOnaverage,Anadult_____________isAlthoughtheyappearto.AnotherobvioustraitisTheirdietconsistsmainlyofItiswidelybelievedthat__________usetheirsenseof___________to,Ingeneral,Unsurprisingly,Onthewhole,Aspredators,the________________,LifeexpectationisTheirhabitatisusually

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    habitat physical appearance diet

    omnivore herbivore carnivorous nocturnal

    prey predator species endangered

    inhabits exhibits vertebrate invertebrate

    colouration prominent marine aquatic

    acute ambush scavenger territory

    forage hunt population diverse

    environment feature function limbs

    migration juvenile adult communicate

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    IntroductionWriteashortintroductiontoyourcreature.Thisonlyneedstobealineortwo.Explainbrieflywhatitisandgiveafactortwoaboutit.E.g.Thedonriphant isalargemammalandamemberoftheelephantfamily.ItisnativetoAfricaandlivesinlargeherds.

    Main paragraphsWritetwo(ormoreifyouhavetime)paragraphsaboutyourcreature.Keepyourparagraphsbasedaroundatheme.Thingstothinkabout: Thirdperson Presenttense Soundlikeanexpert Varyyoursentenceopeners Usetechnicalvocabulary Sentencesshouldflow Extendyoursentences Remainformalformostofthepiece Useheadingsandsub-headingstopresentyourinformation Additionalinformationcouldbeaddedasbullet-pointsoradid

    youknow?box Attempttointerestthereader Usenounsandpronounstoavoidrepetition(saythecreature,the

    animals,theyetc.ratherthanrepeatingthename

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    There are ripples on the water and the creatures eyes and ears appear.

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    StepNumber Foreground Background

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    Time Whathappens

    SequenceOne

    11s Firstseethe creatureappearbehindtheboy

    16s Boyhearssomething ashestoastingmarshmallows

    20s Theviewinganglealterssothattheaudience looksuptothecreaturesface- seehisteeth

    22s Boystandsupandholds upthestickwiththemarshmallowonit

    SequenceTwo

    1m17s Creatureshowshisteeth, eyeschangeandhegrowls-viewinganglefromthefloormakesthecreatureseem

    verylarge

    1m22s Theboyattempts torunawaythroughthelongrustlinggrass

    1m23s Theboyfalls

    1m25s Theboylooksup andthecreatureisapproaching

    1m28s Theboyspots thepillow

    1m29s Thecreaturehashismouthopenwideasiftobite

    1m33s Theboy hidesbehindthepillow

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    Witheyesglaringandteethsnarling,thecreaturerose

    upwardstoastandingpositionbehindthechildsatby

    thefire.Atwigsnapped.Withouthesitation,theyoung

    boy-scoutwhippedhisheadaroundandleaptfromhis

    seat,legsshaking.Themarshmallowhehadbeen

    toastingsatpoisedontheendofastickandhethrustit

    towardsthecreature.

    Canyoufind.

    Anynoun-verbpairs

    Ashortsnappysentence

    Aprepositionalphraseoftime

    Aprepositionalphraseofplace

    Verbswhichimplyspeed

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    Itwasawarmnight.Anowlhootedandcricketschirped.A

    solitaryboatbobbedonthelakeandfromtime-to-timethe

    waterslappedagainstit.A pairofbrightyelloweyesandthe

    tipsoftwopointedearsappearedfromthedepthsofthelake

    andmoonlightreflectedonthewater.

    Ashortpathwayledfromthelakesidetoacampingarea,and

    inthemiddleofthecamp,afirecrackledwithembersand

    ashrisingupwardsintothesky.Alogwasusedasabenchby

    ayoungboy.Theboywatchedthefireashetoasted

    marshmallows,oblivioustothecreaturewhichwasslowly

    makingitswayupthepathtothecamp. Thecreaturerose

    behindthechildsatbythefire.Atwigsnapped.Theyoung

    boy-scoutwhippedhisheadaroundandleaptfromhisseat.

    Themarshmallowsatontheendofastickandhethrustit

    towardsthecreaturetoscareitoff.

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    Itwasaclear,warmnight.Cricketschirpedinthedistance,and

    intermittentlyanowlhooted.Asolitaryboatbobbedonthe

    lakeandfromtime-to-timethewaterslappedagainstit.

    Moonlightreflectedlikediamondsonthewaterandslowly,

    fromthedepthsofthelake,apairofbrightyelloweyesandthe

    tipsoftwopointedearsmomentarilyappeared.

    Ashort,leaf-litteredpathwayledfromthelakesidetoa

    campingarea,andinthemiddleofthecamp,afirecrackled

    withredembersandashrisingupwardsintothenightsky.By

    thefire,afallenlogwasusedasamakeshiftbenchbyayoung

    boy.Theboywatchedthefireashetoastedmarshmallows,

    oblivioustothecreaturewhichwasslowlymakingitswayup

    thepathtothecamp.Witheyesglaringandteethsnarling,the

    creatureroseupwardstoastandingpositionbehindthechild

    satbythefire.Atwigsnapped.Withouthesitation,theyoung

    boy-scoutwhippedhisheadaroundandleaptfromhisseat,

    legsshaking.Themarshmallowhehadbeentoastingsatpoised

    ontheendofastickandhethrustittowardsthecreatureto

    scareitoff.

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    1. TonguehangsoutAlongpinktonguelolledfromhismouthdowntohischin.

    2. Startspanting

    3. Tailstartswagging

    4. Pupilschange- becomeround

    5. Friendlyface- eyebrowsup

    6. Stopsbaringteeth

    7. Whimpersforfood

    8. Smilesattheboy

    9. Tiltshead

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    SURPRISESEditingMethod- Year3/4

    Sayinhead

    Rehearseinheadtolistentowhatimmediatelystandsout,whichsentencesareyouhappywith?Unhappywith?Markanythingyouthinkneedstochange.

    Underbreath- mumble

    Inamutteredvoice,begintoFEELhowthepiecefitstogether- areyoursentencesvariedenough?Areyoursentencelengthsvariedenough?

    Readaloud

    Haveyouaccidentallyrepeatedanything?Areyourtensescorrect?Doesitneedanythingaddingin?

    Punctuationpower

    Lookatyouruseofpunctuation- isitcorrect?Isitvariedenough?Haveyouusedcommasafterfrontedadverbials?

    Readtheopeners

    Isthereenoughvarietyinyouropeners?Haveyouusedfrontedadverbials?

    Improveworrisomewords

    Improvevocabularybycheckingyourwordchoicesparticularlyverbs,adjectivesandadverbs.

    Sayinheadoraloud

    Readitthroughtolistentohowitisnowsounding?Haveyoudoneenough?Hasitimproved?Whatmoreneedstobedone?Couldyoure-ordersomesentences

    toimprovetheoveralleffect?

    Extendingsentences

    Lookatyoursentencechoices. Haveyouexpandedyournounphrases?Canyouaddinformationintoyoursentence?

    Sharewithafriend

    Togethercanyouimproveyourworkinanyotherways?Doesitfeelfinished?

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