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Topic: The tourist industry has grown enormously over the last fifty years and there are few

places which are unaffected by it. However, tourism rarely benefits the countries which

tourists visit. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

There has been a significant increase in the number of people who are travelling around and this

trend is likely to continue as travelling has become one of individuals’ one of the favorite pastimes.

However, some people argue that such a trend brings no benefit to the host country while as I see

it, the booming tourism industry benefits the tourist destinations in many aspects.

It is obvious that tourism promotes the local economy. Numerous visitors flood into the area

spending tons of money in on transportation, hotels, restaurants as well as a variety of recreational

activities, which will definitely boost the entire economy of the area. This point is best illustrated

with the example of Greece where the tourism industry contributes to thea major part of the

country’s GDP.

In addition, host countries can also benefit culturally. By travelling to any other foreign countries,

visitors gain a more clear perspective of foreign cultures and thereby promoting the mutual

understanding between different nations which is the best interests of both visitors and local

countries.

Admittedly, there are some cases that where uncontrolled tourism can negatively impact the host

countries. For example, a multitude of tourists crowded into the host country and it will cause

disturbance to the local residents. In some extreme cases, tourists may produce a huge amount of

rubbish and may even damage the local cultural heritage sites. However, these unpleasant

behaviours of tourists are still a minor part of the whole tourism industry and with proper

management and regulation, all these negative impacts can be minimized or even avoided

completely.

To sum up, the ever-growing tourism industry is beneficial to tourist destinations in terms of their

economy and culture, but we still need to pay more attention to protect the local environment and

local residents.

Grade Criteria Estimated

Grade

Comments

Task response 7 Your position is clear throughout the essay.

You have relevant main points to support your opinion

Comment [z1]: Present continuous tense = aux.

verb + verb +ing

Comment [z2]: spending..on

Comment [z3]: this doesn’t seem to be what the

paragraph is about, you should replace it with

something like “benefit by spreading knowledge of

the culture”

Comment [z4]: maybe mutual understanding is

the key point of the paragraph.

You never really directly answer the EXTENT you disagree – you could say

“somewhat disagree” in the introduction and conclusion to make this clearer. To

what extent do you agree or disagree.

Cohesion and

coherence

7-8 A logical structure is used throughout the task.

It would be clearer if you stated EXTENT you disagree – for instance if you say

“somewhat disagree” in the introduction then the examiner will anticipate you will

say something negative about the tourism like you do in paragraph 4 (Admittedly,

there are some cases)

Vocabulary 7-8 Only minor errors. Some good rephrasing of the given key words of the task.

Grammar 7 Mostly minor errors. You need to reduce errors with articles:

Errors with articles (a, an, the) you can do a quiz here:

http://www.ieltsanswers.com/IELTS-Grammar.html

overall 7-7.5 You seem to be somewhere between a 7 and 8 for each category. Reducing the

common errors will get you to 8 for vocabulary and grammar. For the other

categories it will help to answer the question directly by saying “somewhat

disagree”

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