year 4 english optional sats set b

8/19/2019 Year 4 English Optional Sats Set b

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Year 4 EnglishReading

Story text:Record Breakers

Reshma Rapunzel

Set B


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Record Breakers

Guinness Book of World Records: a timeline

1951

1956

1999

2005

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1968

2000

2007

1955

1977

2003

2012

10 November 1951Sir Hugh Beaver, Chairman ofthe Guinness Brewery, is outhunting game birds when he

misses a shot at a golden plover(a kind of river bird). Sir Hugh

wonders if the plover is thefastest game bird in Europe butcan’t nd a reference book that

answers the question.

1956The rst US edition of theGuinness Book of Records is

published.

1999The Guinness World Records 2000book is printed in a single run of

2,402,000 copies, the largestsingle print run of a hard-backedbook in colour (making a

record of its own!).

August 1954Sir Hugh Beaver asks Norris

and Ross McWhirter to compilewhat was then known as

the Guinness Book of Records.These two men were sports

journalists who provided factsand gures to the newspapers of

Fleet Street in London.

1968By 1968 editions arepublished in French,

German, Japanese, Spanish,Danish, Norwegian, Swedish,

Finnish and Italian.

2000www.guinnessworldrecords.com

launches

27 August 1955

The rst edition ofthe Guinness Book of Records

is bound and released in the UK.It became a Christmasbest-seller that year.

1977

By 1977 editions arepublished in Dutch, Czech,Hebrew, Serbo-Croat and

Icelandic.

2003

The 100,000,000th copyof the Guinness World

Records book is sold!

9 November 2005

The rst annual Guinness WorldRecords Day takes place.

2007

The Guinness World Records‘Gamer’s Edition’, containing recordsabout video games, launches.

2012

Guinness World Records opensan ofce in Beijing, China.


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10 of the World’s Craziest Records

Bruegger’s Bagels of upstate NewYork baked an 868-pound giant bagel.

It was presented at the New YorkState Fair in an attempt to crush the

record for ‘biggest bagel ever’.The world’s largest shoe was made inTurkey. It was 5.5 metres in length,2.25 metres in width, 1.83 metres in

height and 30 people could t inside it!

An 11-year-old boy called Fin allowed 43snails to be put on his face for 10 secondsin a (gross!) effort to beat the Guinness

World Record of 36 snails on a face.

A team of cooks from the Croatian townof Vinkovci prepared the world’s longestsausage. At 530 metres, it easily beat

the previous record of 392 metres heldby a team from Romania.

The record for the most balls juggled is 11; it was achieved by AlexBarron (fron the UK), who managed 23

consecutive catches.

David Alexander wore 121 T-shirts tobreak the record of most

T-shirts worn at one time!

American Mitch Cohen became thefastest ice-cream scooper in GuinnessWorld Record history when hescooped 18 scoops in 18 cones

in one minute at.

About 10,800 students brushed their teethfor about three minutes in an attempt tobreak a Guinness World Record of ‘most

people brushing their teeth simultaneously’in the Philippines.

Bettina Dorfmann (from Germany)owns the world’s largest collectionof Barbie dolls. She owns 15.000

different ones and has been collectingsince 1993.

Julia Gnuse is ofcially the most tattooedwoman in the world, with 95% of her body

decorated in ink.

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Reshma Rapunzel

A deep blue, plastic bottle of coconut oil sits on top of thedresser in the living room of Reshma Khan as she gentlyrocks her 15-day-old baby boy on her lap. It looksmore a prized trophy than a simple hair product.

The day Reshma’s baby was delivered two nursesat the maternity hospital in Kalyan, India, did somethingcurious. They slyly undid Reshma’s dense hair bun, exchangedwide-eyed glances during the almost unending process andthen struggled to tie it back up again.

Reshma, 25, laughs at this memory. As someone whose hairis a foot-and-a half longer than her, Reshma is used to suchstrange invasions of her privacy. “Many local people refuse tobelieve it is real,” says the shy lady, about her 6-ft-10-inch(about 208cm) long tresses. A doctor recently provided herwith a certicate to prove her hair was real and this helpedher nd a place in the Limca Book ofRecords (similar to the Guinness Bookof World Records) this year, as thewoman with the “longest hair” in India.

Adapted from an article bySharmila Ganesan Ram, TNN


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At 5 ft 4 inches, Reshma has to climb a stool to makeher hair just touch the oor. There have even beentimes when she has stepped on her own hair. Anunwritten rule in Kamble’s home is that she will alwaysuse the bathroom last. “It takes her over an hour to

wash her hair,” says Reshma’s mother, Sunita, proudly.Sunita herself has extremely long hair (althoughnothing like as long as her daughter’s).

It has been twelve years since Reshma last cut herhair. “I just wanted to see how long it would grow,”she says. Her brother Rahul, who used to enjoypulling Reshma’s hair as a child, is now a quality ofcerwho checks products such as shampoos and soap. Hestill remembers his sister waking up early for schoolin order to have time to tie her hair into long plaitsthat she would later fold into ribbons. “Teacherswould stare at her hair even as they spoke, as if in atrance,” he says. Reshma’s husband says he thinks herhair makes her look like a princess and he jokes thatwhen they move house, he won’t be using the stairs!

For several years, Reshma, who has never used shampoo, conditioner ora hair-dryer, has been following a simple ritual. “Once a week, I wash myhair with gentle soap and then apply coconut oil,” says Reshma, whoselocks drink up over half a bottle each time. Reshma, who once starred

in an advertisement for shampoo, says she plans to continue growing herhair to ‘see how long it might get’.


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Year 4 EnglishReading

Answer booklet

Set B


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In August 1955...1

Sir Hugh Beaverwent hunting.

the rst GuinnessBook of Records

was released.

a French editionof the book was

published.

the rst WorldRecords Daytook place.

1 mark

When was www.guinnessworldrecords.com launched?

What year was the Guinness Book of Records published in the US?

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3

1 mark

1 mark

Year 4 Optional SATs – Reading Answer Booklet

Look at Guinness Book of World Records: a timeline

to help you answer these questions.


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a. Who were the two men Sir Hugh asked to compile his new book?

b. What was their job at the time?

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2 marks

a.

and

b.

Between 1968 and 1977, how many different languages was thebook published in?

What year did the Guinness Book of World Records set arecord of its own?

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1 mark


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What was the record?

What event caused the Guinness Book of World Records to becreated?

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1 mark

1 mark

What do the arrows in the timeline do?

Which two records are all about giant items of food?

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10

1 mark

Look at 10 of the World’s Craziest Records to

help you answer these questions.

andRecord number

1 mark


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Record number 4 is all about a boy having snails put on hisface. What might he have been thinking:

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Before the record attempt?

During the record attempt?

After the record attempt?


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Answer these questions about Reshma Rapunzel.

Reshma lives in...

The nurses in the maternity hospital...

Many people...

To help her hair just touch the oor, Reshma has to...

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Khan.

washedReshma’s hair.

would like tocut Reshma’s

hair.

pick it up inher arms.

Limca.

gave her atrophy.

pull Reshma’shair.

climb ontoa stool.

India.

undid Reshma’sbun.

laugh atReshma’s hair.

tie it up inribbons.

England.

gave her acerticate.

don’t believeher hair is

real.

cut some ofit off.

1 mark

1 mark

1 mark

1 mark


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Reshma decided not to cut her hair for 12 years so that...

Reshma once starred in...

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it would be longenough to plait.

an advertisementfor shampoo.

she wouldn,thave to pay

for a hair cut.

a story aboutRapunzel.

she could useit to sweep the

oor.

a lm abouthairdressers.

she could seehow long it

would grow.

a play abouther life story.

1 mark

1 mark

1 mark

1 mark

How did Reshma react to the two maternity nurses undoingher hair? Why do you think this is?

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Find two problems caused by Reshma’s long hair.8

2 marks

2 marks

1 mark

1 mark

What does the word ‘slyly’ tell you about the way the two nursesundid Reshma’s hair?

What are ‘tresses’?

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Find two phrases which give us an idea of Reshma’s personality.11

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1 mark

1 mark

How have Reshma’s family and friends reacted to her long hairover the years? Give two answers.

In the text, Reshma’s brother says, “Teachers would stare at herhair even as they spoke, as if in a trance.” Why do you think thismight have happened?

In the rst paragraph, the plastic bottle of coconut oil is comparedto a prized trophy. Why do you think this comparison is made?

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Why does Reshma’s husband joke that he won’t be using thestairs if they move house?

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How do we know that Reshma is proud of her hair?Tick two.

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1 mark

She uses a lot of coconut oil to keep it healthy.

She has won lots of trophies.

She was once in a shampoo advertisement.

She climbs on a stool to show it off.

She ties it up in a bun.

1 mark

1 mark

Why is there some humour in Reshma’s brother’s choice ofcareer?

What are Reshma’s plans for the future?

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2 marks

2 marks

2 marks

Join the boxes to show how different people feel about Reshma’shair. One has been done for you.

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The nurses at the maternity hospital proud

mischievous

admiring

mesmerised

helpful

The teachers at Reshma’s school

Reshma’s mother

Reshma’s husband

The doctor

Why is the title of this piece Reshma Rapunzel ?

What other problems might Reshma face if she continues togrow her hair?

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1 mark

Which was the most interesting fact in the story?Explain why you found this interesting.

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Year 4 EnglishWriting assessment

A day in the life ofReshma Khan

A new world record:newspaper report

Set B


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A day in the life of Reshma Khan

What must Reshma Khan’s life be like? Think about the sorts ofthings which might happen to her on an average day.

Write about a day in Reshma’s life, beginning with her gettingout of bed in the morning and ending with her going to bed at

night. Think about the problems she might face as well as otherpeople’s reactions to her hair and even some of the funny things

which might happen to her.


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A new world record:newspaper report

10 of the World’s Craziest Records gives details about some strange

and unusual record breakers. Choose one of the records shown andimagine you were sent to interview the people involved in it.

Your job is to write a newspaper report about the record attempt,using the information given in 10 of the World’s Craziest Records as a starting point. You can add details from your own imagination

and make up extra facts if you need to.

Recordbreakers!


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Year 4 English

AnswersReading testWriting assessment

Set B


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1. In August 1955

1 mark

2. Award 1 mark for the answer ‘2000’

1 mark

3. Award 1 mark for the answer ‘1956’

1 mark

4. Award 1 mark for Norris McWhirter and Ross McWhirter (you can alsoaccept Norris and Ross McWhirter)

Award 1 mark for the answer ‘sports journalists’

up to 2 marks

5. Award 1 mark for the answer of ‘14’

1 mark

6. Award 1 mark for the answer of ‘1999’

1 mark

7. What was the record?

Award 1 mark for an answer which refers to the largest single print run

(or printing) of a colour hard-backed book (or hard-backed book).Do not accept answers which refer to the number of copies printed butdo not make reference to the largest single print run.

1 mark

8. Award 1 mark for answers which refer to Sir Hugh Beaver being unable tond the answer to his question about the golden plover. Do not acceptanswers which only refer to Sir Beaver hunting but do not reference hisquestion.

1 mark

Year 4 Optional SATs – Reading and Writing answers

Sir Hugh Beaver

went hunting.

the rst Guinness

Book of Recordswas released.

a French edition

of the book waspublished.

the rst World

Records Daytook place.


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9. Award 1 mark for answers which refer to the arrows showing thechronology of the time line or make reference to the arrows showingwhich section to read next.

1 mark

10 of the World’s Craziest Records answers.

10. Award 1 mark for the answer ‘Record number 2 and 5’. Do not accept ‘6’.

1 mark

11. Award 1 mark for each section correctly answered. Accept anyreasonable answers for each section, which may make referenceto emotions such as anxiety, disgust, relief, etc. Do not accept answerswhich recount the record but do not indicate thoughts or feelings,(for example, I had some snails on my face).

up to 3 marks

Reshma Rapunzel answers.

1. Reshma lives in...

2. The nurses in the maternity hospital...

1 mark

1 mark

Khan.

washedReshma’s hair.

Limca.

gave her atrophy.

India.

undid Reshma’sbun.

England.

gave her acerticate.


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3. Many people...

4. To help her hair just touch the oor, Reshma has to...

1 mark

1 mark

1 mark

1 mark

5. Reshma decided not to cut her hair for 12 years so...

6. Reshma once starred in...

7. a) Award 1 mark for an answer referring to Reshma’s amusement at thememory.

1 mark

b) Award 1 mark for answers which show an understanding of Reshma’samusement coming from her being used to invasions of privacy, forexample: She is used to people being amazed by her hair. Do notaccept answers which infer she found the nurses’ actions funny,for example: They couldn’t tie the bun back up so it was funny.

1 mark

would like tocut Reshma’s

hair.

pick it up inher arms.

pull Reshma’shair.

climb ontoa stool.

laugh atReshma’s hair.

tie it up inribbons.

don’t believeher hair is

real.

cut some ofit off.

it would be longenough to plait.

an advertisementfor shampoo.

she wouldn,thave to pay

for a hair cut.

a story aboutRapunzel.

she could useit to sweep the

oor.

a lm abouthairdressers.

she could seehow long itwould grow.

a play abouther life story.


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8. Award 1 mark for each problem correctly retrieved from the text,for example: It takes an hour to wash her hair. Do not acceptassumptions or guesses (She might get tangled up in it sometimes.).

up to 2 marks

9. Award 1 mark for any answer which indicates an understanding thatthe nurses were trying to undo the hair without being seen or caughtor answers which infer the nurses’ curiosity got the better of them,for example, They couldn’t help themselves, they had to look, eventhough they probably shouldn’t have.

1 mark

10. Award 1 mark for any answer which indicates an understanding thattresses means hair/long hair.

1 mark

11. Award 1 mark for each word or phrase from the text whichindicates Reshma’s personality, for example: rocked the baby gently;the shy lady; laughs at the memory. Do not accept answers which arenot taken from the text (She is funny.).

up to 2 marks

12. Award 1 mark for each example of reactions, for example: Hermother is proud of her hair; Her teachers stared at her. Accept answers which may not be worded exactly as in the text, butstill indicate a reaction which has been mentioned.

up to 2 marks

13. Award 1 mark for any answer which logically explains why theteachers may have stared at Reshma, for example: They maynever have seen such a sight before. / They were amazed to see somuch hair. Do not accept answers which do not relate directly tothe text (The teachers might have been daydreaming).

1 mark


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14. Award 1 mark for an explanation and comparison between thecoconut oil and a trophy, for example: The coconut oil is what keepsReshma’s hair in such good condition and won her the prize ofthe longest hair.

1 mark

15. Award 1 mark for an answer which references the story of Rapunzel and the fact that her prince climbed up her hair (rather than thestairs) to meet her in the tower.

1 mark

16. Award 1 mark for an answer which understands the irony of Reshma’sbrother teasing her about her hair and now working for a soap and

shampoo company, for example: He used to pull Reshma’s hair but nowhe earns a living from shampoo. Do not accept answers which do notrelate to the text (He has grown up now so he knows better.).

1 mark

17. Award 1 mark for answers which reference Reshma’s suggestionin the text that she will continue to grow her hair (She is going tosee how long she can grow it.). Do not accept answers which are notbased on evidence from the text, for example: She might get sick ofit and get it cut.

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1 mark

How do we know that Reshma is proud of her hair?Tick two.

She uses a lot of coconut oil to keep it healthy.

She has won lots of trophies.

She was once in a shampoo advertisement.

She climbs on a stool to show it off.

She ties it up in a bun.


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up to 2 marks

19. Join the boxes to show how different people feel during the recount.One has been done for you.

20. Award 2 marks for answers which recognise the similarities betweenReshma and Rapunzel and use evidence from the text to support this:Her hair is very long like Rapunzel’s and her husband says he won’t usethe stairs, which might mean he’s going to climb up her hair like inthe story.

Award 1 mark for answers which recognise the title and/or limitedsimilarity, for example: She has long hair and the title is Rapunzel.

up to 2 marks

21. Award 1 mark for each reasonable suggestion of a problem which Reshmamight face in the future because of her long hair, for example: She couldget it caught in the door when she leaves the house. / It might cost her

a fortune in coconut oil.

2 marks

22. Award 1 mark for an interesting fact taken from the text, along with asupporting reason, for example: I found it interesting that she hasn’t hada hair cut for 12 years because I have to go every 6 weeks!’Do not accept answers without a supporting reason (I thought the partabout her teachers was interesting.).

1 mark

The nurses at the maternity hospital proud

mischievous

admiring

mesmerised

helpful

The teachers at Reshma’s school

Reshma’s mother

Reshma’s husband

The doctor


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Award 1 mark if:

Meaningful words and phrases express ideas in sentence-like structures,although occasional omission of words detracts from the sense (Reshma’s hairwas longer than mum’s; missing word ‘her’). Some relationships between ideaswithin sentences is suggested by simple connectives (and, because). Someawareness is shown, in writing or discussion, of how full stops are used.

A day in the life ofReshma Khan

Sentence structure,punctuation and text organisation

This assessment allows children to

demonstrate that they can: - organise and present whole textseffectively, sequencing and structuringinformation, ideas and events- construct paragraphs and use cohesionwithin and between paragraphs- vary sentences for clarity, purpose andeffect- write with technical accuracy of syntax

and punctuation in phrases, clauses andsentences.

Marking your child’s writing

When teachers and examiners mark children’s writing they analysethe sentence structure, punctuation and composition.

These marking notes aim to help you help your child to review their

work, as well as identifying ways to improve their writing. They willalso allow you to assign a mark to their work.

Which of the four writing ‘bands’ described below does your child’swork fall into? Pick one to assign the correct number of marks.Practical examples are offered to help you (they are shown in red).


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Award 2-3 marks if:

The text is written in mainly simple sentences, predominantly beginning withthe repeated personal subject (Reshma) and action verb (Reshma brushedher hair). Some chaining of speech-like clauses is used to convey Reshma’s

thoughts (It was a funny situation I nearly fell over my own hair.). Aconclusion is developed in a sequence of sentences but some transitions maybe awkward.

Sentences are sometimes demarcated by both capital letter and full stop.

Award 4-5 marks if:

Your child has written a mixture of simple and compound sentences with

clauses joined by and, but, then, when, so; there is some use of the pronounshe to avoid repeating Reshma (Reshma was walking to work. She noticed thestares of her neighbours).

Variation in word order and/or the position of clauses highlights meaning andcontributes to the pace of the narrative (Down fell Reshma in a mixture ofarms, legs and hair). Nouns are modied by adjectives (glossy hair; friendlyfaces; sweet coconut oil); time adverbials mark stages of the day (just then,by this time, before, after ten minutes). Sequences of sentences develop thestory conclusion logically.

Full stops, capital letters, exclamation marks and question marks are mostlyaccurate; some attempts to demarcate direct speech; commas used in lists.

Award 6 marks if:

Sentences are structured for precision and impact; some subordinatingconnectives (when, if, because, until, as) are used to form complex sentences;short sentences are used to add pace (She thought about her childhood. Shethought about her friends. And then Reshma smiled at her baby son).Adverbials (quick strokes of the brush) and expanded noun phrases (the lasthaircut) vary the construction of sentences. Dialogue may include fragmentedsentences and different sentence types (“Goodness!”; “Stop staring.”).Sections of the conclusion may be organised into paragraphs.

Some commas mark phrases or clauses; inverted commas demarcate directspeech, usually correctly.


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Composition and effect

Assessment focus: write imaginative, interesting and thoughtful textswhich are appropriate to task, reader and purpose. Select appropriate andeffective vocabulary.

Award 1 mark if:

Understandable ideas are expressed; word choice is limited.

Award 2-3 marks if:

Your child describes a brief sequence of broadly chronological events,generally related to the task, with an appropriate ending (Reshma will grow herhair some more); the ending may be brief or over-long.

The ending may be expanded through some apt vocabulary choices (she swayed) or the inclusion of detail, for example Reshma’s daily routine (It took her anhour to wash her hair and then it dried by itself in the sunshine).

Award 4-5 marks if:

Links are made to events in the original story to build up contextual detail(Reshma nished her jobs around the house, balancing her baby on her hip asshe did so. The neighbours who had gathered earlier had all gone).

The narrator’s or characters’ reactions to events are described; characters’feelings / attitudes are mainly consistent with original story (Reshma noticedthe people staring and smiled to herself).

Details included create a sense of how Reshma deals with her hair (She didn’thave time to pour the oil on her hair – the baby was crying loudly for her

attention); direct speech is sometimes used to relay events (“Please help me tieup my hair!” Reshma begged her mother.).

Award 6-7 marks if:

The alternative ending provides a credible and engaging conclusion to theoriginal story; well-paced developments may integrate additional problems forReshma to create a sense of suspense (Reshma’s hair was slowly comingundone… she hadn’t noticed.).

The viewpoint set by the original author is maintained with Reshma’s attitude


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held consistently (“I wonder how long I could actually get my hair to grow?”).

Effective adaptation of the style of the original, for example using and orthen to build tension. (Then she realised what might happen.).

Words and phrases may be repeated for emphasis (brushed it slowly, strokedit gently; “Beautiful!” said her husband. “Beautiful!”).

Vocabulary choices add to the interest of the piece (The plaits fell like thickropes), and reveal how Reshma felt (panting and pufng she pulled theenormous weight of her wet hair out of the water).

A newspaper report

Sentence structure andpunctuation

Assessment focuses: varysentences for clarity, purposeand effect. Write with technical

accuracy of syntax and punctuationin phrases, clauses and sentences.

Record

breakers!

Award 1 mark if:

Meaningful words and phrases related to the writing task are used, some ofthem expressing ideas in sentence-like structures (The cooks made a giantsausage). Some awareness is shown of how full stops are used.

Award 2-3 marks if:

Mainly grammatically accurate clauses are used, joined with connectives (If you saw it… when the record was broken). Some sentences start with simple

personal pronouns, others with topic-related subjects.


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The present tense (The record is held;They like) and some modal verbs(They can do; They would be ready) are used to make denite statements andgive advice.

Sentences are sometimes demarcated by both capital letter and full stop.

Award 4-5 marks if:

Varied connectives such as and, because, when, or, if link clauses. Sentenceopenings highlight main ideas (Preparing to cook the bagel; Showing hercollection) but are not always controlled (With everyone watching he startedscooping the ice-cream). Some expansion of noun phrases (juggling skills; pileof shirts; fresh air). The use of the general pronoun you and the present

tense (You can break a record like this one!) convey advice effectively.Full stops, capital letters, exclamation marks and question marks are mostlyaccurate. There may be some use of commas in lists.

4–5 marks

Award 6 marks if:

Some variation in sentence structure (The crowd were very excited. Suddenly,there was a hush and David began to pull on the rst shirt) and questions andexclamations (Can you believe it?; The crowd went wild!) are used to give bothinformation and create atmosphere. Pronouns (that, this) used to avoidrepetition. Expanded noun phrases express ideas economically (reporters fromaround the world) and adverbials (round in a circle) dene activities clearly.

Some correct use of commas within sentences to mark phrases or clauses.

6 marks


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Text structure and organisation

Assessment focuses: organise and present whole texts effectively,sequencing and structuring information. Ideas and events constructparagraphs; use cohesion within and between paragraphs.

Award 1 mark if:

Ideas are developed within sentences. Some relationships between ideas maysometimes be marked by simple connectives (and, because).

Award 2-3 marks if:

Facts about the record attempt are grouped into sequences of sentences; thereport may begin with a simple opening sentence (A young boy from the UKhas broken the record for snails on a face).

Some sentences are linked by topic (He juggled with great skill. Not one ballhit the ground) but information is sometimes uneven or unconnected (Theice-cream piled up. It was a great day).

Award 4-5 marks if:

Simple overall text structure includes a brief introduction (Have you everwondered about world records?) or a concluding sentence (Perhaps you couldbreak a record one day). Subheadings, bullet points and paragraphs are used.

Similar information is grouped together. Within sections, pronoun reference(giant bagel / it) or vocabulary choices (determined / attempt; achievement /accomplishment) generally maintain links between ideas.

Award 6 marks if:

The text is structured and includes an introduction and ordered sectionsgiving information about the record attempt and a brief conclusion (forexample, including encouraging comments about the records in order topersuade the reader to attempt one).

New sections are indicated by subheadings, bullet points, introductoryphrases (There’s nothing amazing than…). Connections between ideas areestablished and maintained, for example by reference to a previous part of

the text.


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Composition and effect

Assessment focuses: write imaginative, interesting and thoughtful textsproduce texts which are appropriate to task, reader and purpose. Selectappropriate and effective vocabulary.

Award 1 mark if:

Meaningful words and phrases convey some recognisable information. Wordchoice is simple but linked to the topic (They took a photo).

Award 2-4 marks if:

Your child has written a short series of informative points, aimed at a widerreadership (Children can break records too. Record breakers come fromaround the world). Suggested activities may be reliant on the text or personalexperience and listed or repeated (You could try to eat as many sausages as

you can in one minute). Limited vocabulary choices (amazing; record breakers)may be overused (The record was broken by a record breaker).

Award 5-7 marks if:

Your child’s work takes the form of report, mainly suitable for a newspaper;explanations of record-breaking are general (Everyone could have a go.)

Some evidence of viewpoint (for example the attitude to record-breaking) ismainly positive but may not be maintained (Having a go at breaking a recordmight be fun; you’d have to practise all the time).

Vocabulary choices draw the reader in, sometimes using an informal style(Putting on that many T-shirts must have been a real challenge. I wonder if hecould move afterwards!).

Award 8-10 marks if:

Coverage of activities is balanced and the report addresses a readershipconsistent with a children’s newspaper; it may include advice / guidance, forexample warnings about safety (Remember children shouldn’t have tattoos).

A persuasive viewpoint is established and maintained (Remember, practicemakes perfect… You might have to do it every day.); information may bepresented with some authority (Look on the website for more information.).


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Activities are made to sound appealing (Everyone loves to be a hero) and/ormanageable (You don’t need to have any expensive equipment) to engage thereader, for example by giving alternative examples of record attempts. Thereare attempts to use technical, precise vocabulary (World Record history,previous attempts).

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