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Warm Up
D.I.R.T.
Dictionary Skills
Complete the dictionary skills #3 sheet
When you finish, you may work on your story
Sketch Notes
Sketch NotesWe will be taking “Sketch Notes” today over Personal Narratives
Sketch NotesWe will be taking “Sketch Notes” today over Personal Narratives
Very important! Keep in a safe place!
Sketch NotesWe will be taking “Sketch Notes” today over Personal Narratives
Very important! Keep in a safe place!
You can take them however you want, but do it the way you
remember best.
Sketch NotesLet’s see some examples!
Sketch Notes
Sketch Notes
Personal NarrativeAs we go over these 5 things,
look briefly at your paper to see how you did on them.
Personal NarrativeAlways in the past tense
Personal NarrativeAlways in the past tense
Always in the first person
Personal NarrativeAlways in the past tense
Always in the first person
Always answers every part of the prompt
Personal NarrativeAlways in the past tense
Always in the first person
Always answer every part of the prompt
Has a narrow scope/focus
Hook/Introduction
Hook/IntroductionYou ONLY have 26 lines for your
essay.
Hook/IntroductionYou ONLY have 26 lines for your
essay.
You need to hook the reader IMMEDIATELY
Hook/IntroductionYou ONLY have 26 lines for your
essay.
You need to hook the reader IMMEDIATELY
Your hook should pull the reader in and make them want to read
more
Personal Narrative Hooks
using The Lion King as a sample
THESIS: “I had to be courageous in the elephant graveyard.”
We are imagining that we are Nala and need to write a personal narrative essay
What is a hook?Hooking your reader
means getting the reader excited and pulling them into your writing like a fisherman catching and reeling in a fish.
Hook your reader!Choose a strategy:
1. Begin with a famous quote.(Reminder: Be sure to reference who said or wrote the words.
2. Compare your topic to an unlike thing using a simile or metaphor.
3. Give a startling statistic or fact.(Reminder: Be sure to take from a reliable source and reference)
4. Begin with a zoomed in detailed description.
Sample introduction using a quote:
Simba’s father had once told him, “One day all of this will be yours.” It becoming more and more impossible to imagine us having any sense of control over the elephant graveyard as fear crept in like a thief in the night, and stole any ounce of comfort that Simba and I had felt at home. It would take courage that only a lion has for us to make it out alive.
Sample introduction using a simile:
It was like a dream. Fog hung low to the ground, making it difficult to see the creatures clearly. But I knew they were there, off in the distance, waiting for me. It would take courage for us to make it out alive.
Sample introduction using a zoomed in description:
The barren wasteland of gigantic bones and dirt surrounded us, choking out all signs of life. In the distance we could make out the menacing shadows that were waiting for us. Simba and I had to have courage to make it out alive.
YOUR INTODUCTION (paragraph 1)FOR YOUR PERSONAL NARRATIVE(3-4 sentences total) 1-2 sentence hook
A connector sentence that explains the hook and makes it flow into your thesis.
A thesis statement. In this case, our thesis is simple: “I had to be courageous when…”
EXAMPLE:
“What doesn’t kill you makes you stronger. Stand a little taller.” Those lyrics by Kelly Clarkson played over and over in my head as I ran. I had to be courageous as Simba and I were chased through the elephant graveyard.
Hook/IntroductionLets practice writing a hook:
Hook/IntroductionThink of a time that would be
hard to forget. Think about what makes it so hard to forget. Tell
what happened.
Write a hook for this prompt
Sensory Details
Sensory DetailsDescribe surroundings
Sensory DetailsDescribe surroundings
Add depth to your writing
Sensory DetailsDescribe surroundings
Add depth to your writing
Use your five senses to pull the reader into your story
Imagery and Sensory Details
What is Imagery?
Imagery is the use of vivid descriptions to create pictures
inside the reader’s mind.
What are Sensory Details?
Descriptive words that appeal (attract or influence) to the 5 senses to create “word pictures” in the readers mind.They help the story come alive!!
What are the five senses?
• Hearing• Sight• Touch• Taste• Smell
What kind of examples of sensory details are these?
The birds sang sweetly. The tinkling of broken glass. She shrieked with joy.
What kind of examples of sensory details are these?
As stinky as a dirty diaper. He reminded her of her grandfather, a scent of peppermint and tobacco.
What kind of examples of sensory details are these?
The sour leftover impression of vomit. As salty as a potato chip. Thick, not-too-sweet chocolate, with a hint of orange. The bitterness of getting her mouth washed out with soap.
What kind of examples of sensory details are these?
The bright green leaf glistened in the sunlight.The students at El Cajon Valley High School shined in the hall with their bright red and blue school colors!
What kind of examples of sensory details are these?
She caressed the cool, smooth cover of the laptop. The lotion gave her baby-soft skin. He was tied tightly, and the rough bark gouged his back. It was as soft as rabbit’s fur. The biscuit was as hard as a rock.
Let’s Practice!
Practice 2: Directions
Rewrite the following “sense-less” sentences using sensory details. Be creative! Use your imagination!
Practice 2: Sentences
1. The pizza was delicious.
Practice 2: Sentences
1. The pizza was delicious.2. The fans enjoyed the game.
Practice 2: Sentences
1. The pizza was delicious.2. The fans enjoyed the game.3. It was raining outside today.
Practice 2: Sentences
1. The pizza was delicious.2. The fans enjoyed the game.3. It was raining outside today.4. I ate the nachos.
Practice 2: Sentences
1. The pizza was delicious.2. The fans enjoyed the game.3. It was raining outside today.4. I ate the nachos.5. The students clapped during the movie.
Practice 2: Sentences
1. The pizza was delicious.2. The fans enjoyed the game.3. It was raining outside today.4. I ate the nachos.5. The students clapped during the movie.6. These are my very old tennis shoes.
Directions Norman Rockwell, a famous 20th century
American painter, created an astonishing 321 covers for “The Saturday Evening Post,” each portraying typical American life and values. His covers were so successful that when his art appeared on the magazine’s cover, 50,000 – 75,000 additional copies of the Saturday Evening Post sold at newsstands.
For each of the Rockwell paintings that follow, create a list of sensory details for each picture. Then write a descriptive paragraph on the slide that follows using your sensory detail list. Be creative and use your imagination to describe the scene in each picture.
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Sight:Hearing:Touch:Taste:Smell:
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Sight:Hearing:Touch:Taste:Smell:
3
Sight:Hearing:Touch:Taste:Smell:
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Sight:Hearing:Touch:Taste:Smell:
5
Sight:Hearing:Touch:Taste:Smell:
Show Not Tell
Show Not TellDO NOT LIST
Show Not TellDO NOT LIST
Don’t say it was “hot, sunny day”, actually show me how hot
and sunny it was.
Show Not TellDO NOT LIST
Don’t say it was “hot, sunny day”, actually show me how hot and
sunny it was.Talk about the condensation on the glass of iced tea, or the sweat beading up on the end of your nose. Talk about how your clothes were sticking to you or about how the sun was draining your
energy.
Show Not Tell
Show Not Tellhttp://swandawritingresources.wikispaces.com/Show+NOT+Tell
Grammar/Punctuation
Grammar/Punctuation
Sentence structure can really help your writing.
Grammar/Punctuation
Sentence structure can really help your writing.
It can add to the tone/mood and help your narrative flow
naturally.
Reflection/Conclusion
Reflection/Conclusion
ALWAYS REFLECT AT THE END
Reflection/Conclusion
ALWAYS REFLECT AT THE END
How did this experience affect you/what did you learn from it
Reflection/Conclusion
ALWAYS REFLECT AT THE END
How did this experience affect you/what did you learn from it
Try to think deeply
Reflection/Conclusion
Here are some examples: