Veganuary Article Editing

Scott Harrand

One of the biggest changes a person makes when they become vegan is their diet. Many think that the vegan diet is very limited, when in actual fact it is not. A vegan diet consists only of plants, or foods made from plants such as vegetables, grains, nuts and fruits. You are able to get all of the nutrients that you require from eating a varied and balanced vegan diet.

Vegans do not eat animals, or their products such as milk and eggs. “But where will I get my protein?” I hear you ask, well nuts, beans and pulses provide a great source of dairy-free protein. As for the calcium and vitamin D you would usually receive from dairy products, you can find these in fortified soya drinks, calcium-set tofu, dried fruit or alternatively you could consider taking supplements. Surprisingly, in the UK calcium is added to white and brown flour for bread, by law.

A great benefit of a plant-based diet is that your body will thank you. Being vegan reaps many health benefits, including increased energy and younger looking skin. You are less likely to become obese or suffer from heart disease, diabetes or cancer. For those wanting to lose weight, a vegan diet has proved more effective than any standard low-fat diets.For some people, becoming vegan is not about what you cannot eat; it is about exploring what you can. With becoming vegan comes many fun and exciting recipes that you can try. There are many vegan food bloggers that are dedicated to sharing their favorite recipes with others online. “Post Punk Kitchen” is a blog by Isa Chandra Moskowitz, from Brooklyn. It shows clear moral and ethical reasons behind the meat and dairy-free cooking. The website is particularly good for those seeking recipes and great vegan bakes and desserts. The intention of her website was to support her own TV show, as well as to foster a vegan cooking and baking community. “It's time to ask ourselves: if it is now possible to live a life that involves delicious food and drink, delivers better health, leaves a smaller carbon footprint and avoids killing other creatures - then why don't we?”– The Vegan Society Animal cruelty and animal exploitation is everywhere, but by becoming vegan there is another person preventing the cause. Many become vegan as they feel an emotional attachment with animals and believe that they too, have the right to life and freedom.

To become vegetarian simply isn’t enough to stop the harm caused to animals in many cases. The production of dairy is responsible for the death of countless male calves that prove no use to a dairy farmer. Many cows are also slaughtered prematurely when their milk production decreases. Likewise, when it comes to harvesting eggs, even ‘free range’ or ‘ethical’ eggs contribute to the slaughter of male chicks at just a day of age.Farming animals for the production of meat or their products is also bad for the environment. The animals consume a lot of water as well as crops, which take up a lot of space, contributing to deforestation, species extinction and loss of habitat. The space that is used to harvest crops for animals could be put to much better use had the land been used to create crop for humans.Not only is a plant-based diet the best thing to do for you, the Earth or the animals, but also it is the most sustainable way of feeding a human family. The vegan diet only requires one third of the land than what is needed to support a diet with dairy and meat products. Research also shows that becoming vegan is financially beneficial, too. So, why not go vegan for January?

Original Article: Word count, 624

Factual Sources

“You are able to get all of the nutrients that you require from eating a varied and

balanced Vegan diet”

• http://www.nhs.uk/Livewell/Vegetarianhealth/Pages/Vegandiets.aspx

-“ …nuts, beans and pulses provide a great source of dairy-free protein.”

• http://www.mindbodygreen.com/0-4771/10-Vegan-Sources-of-Protein.html

“Surprisingly, in the UK calcium is added to white and brown flour for bread, by law.”

• http://www.sustainweb.org/realbread/flour_fortification/

“ A great benefit of a plant-based diet is that your body will thank you. Being vegan reaps many

health benefits, including increased energy and younger looking skin. You are less likely to become

obese or suffer from heart disease, diabetes or cancer. For those wanting to lose weight, a vegan diet has proved more effective than any standard

low-fat diets.”

• http://www.nursingdegree.net/blog/19/57-health-benefits-of-going-vegan/

-““Post Punk Kitchen” is a blog by Isa Chandra Moskowitz, from Brooklyn. It shows clear moral and ethical reasons behind the meat and dairy-free cooking. The website is particularly good for those seeking recipes and great vegan bakes and desserts. The intention of her website was to support her own TV show, as well as to foster a vegan cooking and baking community.”

• http://www.theppk.com/

-“It's time to ask ourselves: if it is now possible to live a life that involves delicious food and drink, delivers better health, leaves a smaller carbon footprint and avoids killing other creatures - then why don't we?”

– The Vegan Society”

• https://www.vegansociety.com/go-vegan/why-go-vegan

-To become vegetarian simply isn’t enough to stop the harm caused to animals in many cases. The

production of dairy is responsible for the death of countless male calves that prove no use to a dairy

farmer. Many cows are also slaughtered prematurely when their milk production decreases.

Likewise, when it comes to harvesting eggs, even ‘free range’ or ‘ethical’ eggs contribute to the slaughter of male chicks at just a day of age.

• http://www.veganuary.com/why/animals/cows/

• http://www.veganuary.com/why/animals/chickens/

-Farming animals for the production of meat or their products is also bad for the environment. The animals consume a lot of

water as well as crops, which take up a lot of space, contributing to deforestation, species extinction and loss of habitat. The space that is used to harvest crops for animals could be put to much better use had the land been used to

create crop for humans.

• http://www.veganuary.com/why/environmental-benefits/youll-save-water/

• http://www.veganuary.com/why/environmental-benefits/youll-protect-nature/

• http://www.veganuary.com/why/environmental-benefits/youll-save-wildlife/

-“The vegan diet only requires one third of the land than what is needed to support a

diet with dairy and meat products.”

• https://www.vegansociety.com/go-vegan/why-go-vegan

-“Research also shows that becoming vegan is financially beneficial, too.”

• http://organicgreenmommy.com/20-amazing-benefits-of-going-vegan/

Edits and Alterations

• “The intention of her website was to support her own TV show, as well as to foster a vegan cooking and baking community.”

• I removed this sentence because I felt the most important things about the website had already been said.

• “A vegan diet consists only of plants, or foods made from plants such as vegetables, grains, nuts and fruits. “

• I changed this sentence to “A vegan diet consists only of plant-products, like vegetables, grains, nuts and fruits” in order to keep it shorter.

• “For some people, becoming vegan is not about what you cannot eat; it is about exploring what you can. With becoming vegan comes many fun and exciting recipes that you can try. There are many vegan food bloggers that are dedicated to sharing their favorite recipes with others online.

• “Post Punk Kitchen” is a blog by Isa Chandra Moskowitz, from Brooklyn. It shows clear moral and ethical reasons behind the meat and dairy-free cooking. The website is particularly good for those seeking recipes and great vegan bakes and desserts.”

• I edited this paragraph and merged into one, shorter paragraph, trying to keep most of the information.

• “For some people, becoming vegan is not about what you cannot eat; it is about exploring what you can. “Post Punk Kitchen” is a blog by Isa Chandra Moskowitz, from Brooklyn, which is just one of many Vegan food blogs, all with fun and exciting recipes that you can try. It shows clear moral and ethical reasons behind the meat and dairy-free cooking. The website is particularly good for those seeking recipes and great vegan bakes and desserts.”

• “A great benefit of a plant-based diet is that your body will thank you. Being vegan reaps many health benefits, including increased energy and younger looking skin. You are less likely to become obese or suffer from heart disease, diabetes or cancer. For those wanting to lose weight, a vegan diet has proved more effective than any standard low-fat diets.”

• I made small changes to this paragraph to lower the word count

while keeping all the information essentially intact.

• “A great benefit of a plant-based diet is that your body will thank you. Being vegan reaps many health benefits, including increased energy and younger looking skin. It decreases chances of becoming obese, suffering from heart disease, diabetes or cancer. A vegan diet has also proved more effective for weight loss than any standard low-fat diets.”

• “One of the biggest changes a person makes when they become vegan is their diet. Many think that the vegan diet is very limited, when in actual fact it is not. A vegan diet consists only of plant-products, like vegetables, grains, nuts and fruits. You are able to get all of the nutrients that you require from eating a varied and balanced vegan diet.”

• I removed the sentence “Many think that the vegan diet is very limited, when in actual fact it is not” because this information is mentioned in later paragraphs.

• “One of the biggest changes a person makes when they become vegan is their diet. A vegan diet consists only of plant-products, like vegetables, grains, nuts and fruits. You are able to get all of the nutrients that you require from eating a varied and balanced vegan diet.”

• “Vegans do not eat animals, or their products such as milk and eggs. “But where will I get my protein?” I hear you ask, well nuts, beans and pulses provide a great source of dairy-free protein. As for the calcium and vitamin D you would usually receive from dairy products, you can find these in fortified soya drinks, calcium-set tofu, dried fruit or alternatively you could consider taking supplements. Surprisingly, in the UK calcium is added to white and brown flour for bread, by law.”

• I made a few minor changes to the length of sentences in this paragraph, while trying to keep the information essentially intact.

• “Vegans do not eat animals, or their products such as milk and eggs. “But

where will I get my protein?” I hear you ask, well nuts, beans and pulses provide a great source of dairy-free protein. As for the calcium and vitamin D you would usually receive from dairy products, you can find these in fortified soya drinks, calcium-set tofu, dried fruit, bread (calcium fortified by law), or supplements.”

• “A great benefit of a plant-based diet is that your body will thank you. Being vegan reaps many health benefits, including increased energy and younger looking skin. It decreases chances of becoming obese, suffering from heart disease, diabetes or cancer. A vegan diet has also proved more effective for weight loss than any standard low-fat diets.”

• I removed the first sentence of this paragraph, as I believe the

following sentence was a sufficient introductory sentence, and therefore the original was not needed in the shortened article.

• “Being vegan reaps many health benefits, including increased energy and younger looking skin. It decreases chances of becoming obese, suffering from heart disease, diabetes or cancer. A vegan diet has also proved more effective for weight loss than any standard low-fat diets.”

• “Animal cruelty and animal exploitation is everywhere, but by becoming vegan there is another person preventing the cause. Many become vegan as they feel an emotional attachment with animals and believe that they too, have the right to life and freedom.

• The production of dairy is responsible for the death of countless male calves that prove no use to a dairy farmer. Many cows are also slaughtered prematurely when their milk production decreases. Likewise, when it comes to harvesting eggs, even ‘free range’ or ‘ethical’ eggs contribute to the slaughter of male chicks at just a day of age.”

• I changed this paragraph by reducing it to the first sentence, and then merging it in with the next paragraph, I also made a few additional word changes to the paragraph to lower the word count.

• “Animal cruelty and animal exploitation is everywhere, but by becoming vegan there is another person preventing the cause. To become vegetarian simply isn’t enough to stop the harm caused to animals in many cases. The production of dairy is responsible for the death of countless male calves, who are slaughtered prematurely when their milk production decreases. When it comes to harvesting eggs, even ‘free range’ or ‘ethical’ eggs contribute to the slaughter of male chicks at just a day of age.”

Edited Article: Word count, 500One of the biggest changes a person makes when they become vegan is their diet. A vegan diet consists only of plant-products, like vegetables, grains, nuts and fruits. You are able to get all of the nutrients that you require from eating a varied and balanced vegan diet.

Vegans do not eat animals, or their products such as milk and eggs. “But where will I get my protein?” I hear you ask, well nuts, beans and pulses provide a great source of dairy-free protein. As for the calcium and vitamin D you would usually receive from dairy products, you can find these in fortified soya drinks, calcium-set tofu, dried fruit, bread (calcium fortified by law), or supplements.

Being vegan reaps many health benefits, including increased energy and younger looking skin. It decreases chances of becoming obese, suffering from heart disease, diabetes or cancer. A vegan diet has also proved more effective for weight loss than any standard low-fat diets.“For some people, becoming vegan is not about what you cannot eat; it is about exploring what you can. “Post Punk Kitchen” is a blog by Isa Chandra Moskowitz, from Brooklyn, which is just one of many Vegan food blogs, all with fun and exciting recipes that you can try. It shows clear moral and ethical reasons behind the meat and dairy-free cooking. The website is particularly good for those seeking recipes and great vegan bakes and desserts.”

“It's time to ask ourselves: if it is now possible to live a life that involves delicious food and drink, delivers better health, leaves a smaller carbon footprint and avoids killing other creatures - then why don't we?”– The Vegan Society

Animal cruelty and animal exploitation is everywhere, but by becoming vegan there is another person preventing the cause. To become vegetarian simply isn’t enough to stop the harm caused to animals in many cases. The production of dairy is responsible for the death of countless male calves, who are slaughtered prematurely when their milk production decreases. When it comes to harvesting eggs, even ‘free range’ or ‘ethical’ eggs contribute to the slaughter of male chicks at just a day of age.Farming animals for the production of meat or their products is also bad for the environment. The animals consume a lot of water as well as crops, which take up a lot of space, contributing to deforestation, species extinction and loss of habitat. The space that is used to harvest crops for animals could be put to much better use had the land been used to create crop for humans.Not only is a plant-based diet the best thing to do for you, the Earth or the animals, but also it is the most sustainable way of feeding a human family. The vegan diet only requires one third of the land than what is needed to support a diet with dairy and meat products. Research also shows that becoming vegan is financially beneficial, too. So, why not go vegan for January?