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Chapter 1

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Chapter 1

Created: 5 February 2014, 11:18


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Synopsis

Introduce Main Character as Narrator, mention alien pressence that has

appeared. Have main character reveal her normal life slowly begin to

introduce the mascot to her. She treats it well not knowing it was looking for

someone to represent earth. Eventually she goes to work begins to think

deeply about whether these aliens are a threat or not. She decides to take a

break and go to the bathroom after a incident happens at work (maybe

something bad) as she sits in the toilet. She gathers herself. But what she

doesn't know is that the little mascot from before had followed her there and

the minute she steps out the bathroom she sees the creature as it glows a

bright gold, blinding Alicia. As it enwraps her in a light and takes her to the

spaceship. At first Alicia panics and she doesn't know what's happening.

Other people see it as well but people don't know her. As they come to a

clearing they fly into the sky, add moments where police try to trap them,


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but they escape and when they fly upward planes almost crash into them.

But they get higher they become faster, as Alicia looks as the earth

disappears beneath her. She tries to escape, she believes she's going to die.

And she faints only to see earth below, almost as if it was ball. She has a

dream of her mother as a creature in some dark form, as she awakens she

finds herself in a bed, where a mascot and alien council member meets her.

He speaks to her briefly about her current location and about himself, she

meets Alien Council Member Kerushuu.


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Alicia stands before a gorilla like beast who's breaths mists the scene. As she

stands before him, her eyes fearing him. She begins to wonder if she had

made the right decision. If she could really change. She speaks of change,

and if people could change like a tree We could could possibly… shift

colors…

The monsters runs forward about to strike her down...

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Panel 1 Alicia stands before a gorilla looking Seralon

(Taint), it's breath mists the air. As his shadow

overcomes her. Her small frame standing in his

greatness.

Caption Fwoo (taint taking a deep breath)

ALICIA


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I can't do this.....

(Inner Monologue)

Panel 2 As she stands there before him, her eyes small and

trembling. WE see his rom reflected in her eyes.

Caption Devu (Tremble of eyes, figure shown in eyes

towering her)

ALICIA

I thought I could change? I thought I was

different... But I don't feel different. I

feel the same... I feel like the same weak

person from before.

(Inner monologue)

Panel 3 His arm twitches

Caption *za/hiku/koki/guki/gokin*

*crack/gurchh/twitch/* (Make into smaller

panel)

Panel 4 Lower angle, and the seralon takes off to charge

at her. We see his feet and arms thrusting dirt

and rocks into the air.

Caption *zazaza/urya/dododo* *rumble/brum/brrm*

ALICIA

Are we all doomed to never change.... to

always be the same people we hate

ourselves for being.

(Inner monologue)

Panel 5 The taint get's ready to strike her, it's arm

raised over it's head. Show action lines showing

the direction of its swing.

Caption *bun* *Swoosh, whoosh*

ALICIA

To lose everything, we wish to protect to

things we can't even fight against. Unable

to save ourselves....

(Inner Monologue)

KASERNAGE

Aliiiiciiaaa!!!!!


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(Spikey Ballon, urgent message

or yell)

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Show Alicia at her house putting on shoes in her doorway, light beautiful

colors. In school uniform. Pinks, blues, browns, warm colors for this

drawing. (Research modern home designs).

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We see a view of earth from spacecraft (try to make the room look dark and

clearish as if they are floating in space) Get pictures of earth and collage it


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into the background. Draw someone standing leaning against a glass pane,

looking over earth. As another being approaches. The approaching being

tells him that the council seeks word of him. But the being avoids the

answer, he talks about earth, insulting the humans for their lack of focus and

power. The other being says that the council has word that one of the

ancestrial beings has locked on to a target. The other one mutters so him

saying, a insult about earth once more before a cackling.

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Page 3 Alien Ship

Panel 1 Earth lays beneath (collage it in) has faint tiles lining the bottom of the picture. Show the darkness of the room some but make it all seem transparent.

Caption *jiii/hmmm* sound of silence

Panel 2

We zoom in on figure that is walking across the floor. All we see is his feet nothing more. We see another distant figure beyond the feet though blurred (Stanger #1)

Caption *toko/tmptmp* *tap* walking. (Stranger #2)

Panel 3

The shadow stops short, we get a peek of them through the glass, though the one who was was walking before the face is hidden under hood. And we can only see the chin of the one who is leaning against the glass.

Caption *bita/pita* *click/tap* Stranger #2 footsteps

stopping.

STRANGER #1

What news do you bring to me now? Have

they found one yet, or this is planet too

much of a coward to greet us?


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STRANGER #2

It the ancestral beast has locked on to

someone. 2And is bringing her up as of

now.

Panel 4

As the first figure slowly turns around we now see his sharp teeth and blood eyes piercing through the darkness upon his shoulder is another set of scary eyes. They are wide with small pupils, silver. His hands pressing into the glass that is facing earth.

Caption *gari/giri/schkrrrk* the sound of his

metallic hand scratching the glass.

STRANGER #1

Her... Hahaha. Well, well. Then let's go

and... Great her, shall we?

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Header says a few hours earlier that same day... And we finally come back

to earth where we introdue the main character finally. We are shown a peek

into her life, and her room. As she speaks about herself. Alicia's mother calls

for her but she doesn't wakes up at first she ignores and rolls over in bed.

1 Stanger #1 turns into the villain look for name later in Kerushuu's character form. 2 Stranger #2 follower of the Villian (cause he also lost his planet, last of his kind)

But he turns good later on.


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Text

Page 4 Alicia's Home

Panel 1 Header says, a few hours earlier that same day.

And we finally come back to earth where we

introduce the main character once more. We are

shown a peek into her life, and her room. The room

is filled with light colors, decorated by her

mother, pinks, browns, blues, whites and other

cutesy colors. Manga books, regular reading books,

tablet (Bacom), papers and binders around the edge

of the bed on the floor.

Caption A few hours later that same day...

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Alicia speaks more of her life and mentions her mother. Sweet things, we get

a feel for Alicia and her likes and dislikes. Her cellphone rings and Alicia's

mother calls her. Alicia turns it off.

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Panel 1 Alicia's mother calls up to her to wake up. The

small bump moves a bit and we hear a groan.

Caption *ugh/uh* groaning in protest.

MARY

Alicia!!! Time to wake up!

Panel 2 We get a peek of her room, her cellphone that sits

upon her dresser ringing acting as a alarm for her

to wake up.

Caption *pipi/beep* alarm.

ALICIA

Morning always has a way of waking me up.

Between my mother, this alarm and the

dreams that practically scream at me to

wake up. I always find myself...

(Inner Monologue)

MARY

Alicia!

Panel 3 Alicia reaches over for her phone.

Caption *Pipi/beep* cellphone still ringing (might

not add). *Gishi/rustle/shhhck,squeak* bed

moving.

Panel 4 Alicia taps the phone.

Caption *tap/ton* tapping cellphone.

ALICIA

Shut up.

(Spoken in a soft mutter.)

Finding a way... A reason to open my eyes

to the same day.

(Inner Monologue)

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Alicia turns it off and we get a full page view of Alicia sitting up in bed and

how she looks. She rises from the bed undos her scarf. And walks out her

room, her cellphone still on the bed with a picture of an alien on it.

Text

Page 6 Alicia....

Panel 1 Alicia holds cellphone, her hair is wrapped up. We

get a peek of her for the first time. As she gazes

at it.

Caption *pachi/sigh* Eyes are droopy but open,

showing she has woken up.

ALICIA

Or I believed would be the same day.

Panel 2 Alicia rises from her bed, undoing her scarf

letting her hair fall out at the same time.

Caption *za/shhh* the sound of her scarf coming

undone.

ALICIA

Maybe I'm trying to hard to find something

different.

(Inner Monologue)

Panel 3 She opens the door. Her cellphone sits back on the

bed. And a picture of a cartoon alien in on her

screen showing she was looking at a article.

Caption *pisha/open/click* door opens.


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ALICIA

Maybe I should be happy with how things

are.

(Inner Monologue)

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We continue in the story with her eating breakfast, she busily discusses her

mother and her life with her. She speaks of her mother's work and their

daily life together under the same roof.

In the panels she eats the rest of her oatmeal. She kisses her mother for

goodbye.

Text

Page 7 Eating breakfast

Panel 1 Alicia blows a spoonful of oatmeal.

Caption *fua/blow/huuu/fuuh* blowing on food.

Panel 2 We are introduced to Alicia for the first time,

show Alicia eat her spoon still lifted and with

her hair done and her body shape.

Caption *eating/chk/mogu* eating food.

ALICIA


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My name is Alicia Ebele, I'm 16 years old

and as of now I'm a sophomore in high

school. I'm not exactly the pick of the

litter, the rose of the garden or the

sharpest needle in the haystack. In fact

most would consider me a bit of a

introvert, a shy person..a loner.

Panel 3 Show a part of the kitchen layout, basic brown,

white, light beige/sandy color walls and silver

stove and fridge. Show mother leaning, a laptop

before her, a cup of coffee in her hands.

Cigarette bud sitting in a cigarette tray not to

far. Her mother is wearing normal clothes though

she is wearing a animation convention shirt.

Caption no sound effects, just show steam of

cigarette, cups and bowls.

MARY

You better hurry Alicia. Or you're going

to be late catching the bus to school.

ALICIA

Hai!!!

Panel 4 Introduce Mary, her mother for the very first time

and begin to go into her relationship.

Caption *zuzu, siiip* sipping coffee.

ALICIA

This is my mother, Mary as her co-workers

would call her and mama or mom for me. Is

a bit of a ditz at times. Though a hard-

working one at that. She unlike me is a

confident person.

(Inner Monologue)

Panel 5 Talk about Mary's job as a writer for a cartoon

show. Show the bump on Mary's Hand

Caption Have a small background pic of her mother

dressing in various of cosplay costumes and

uniforms.

ALICIA


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You see that bump on her ring finger? It's

a writer's bump, meaning she writes a

Lot!! She's a writer for a cartooning

company. Where she does a various range of

shows ranging from romantic parodies to

straight horror. And often times she is

stuck between writing stories for a novel

or tv show and shopping for various

cosplay uniforms and dresses to display at

the annual anime convention or everyday

use like going to store or going out with

friends. But today she's normal.

(Inner Monologue)

Panel 6 Talk about the normalcy of the day. Show her

rising to her feet.

Caption *kachan/Clatter* chair moving as Alicia gets

up.

ALICIA

And like any other day, we do normal

things. Though you would think the various

amounts of costumes and clothes would make

every day new for me and creepy for when I

come home. I have gotten quite used to it.

I mean as long as she doesn't dress me.

Panel 7 Alicia goes up and kisses her mother one the

cheek. Her mother blushes faintly and smiles.

Caption *uki uki* Brighters colors and warm, showing

family love. Make picture bigger

ALICIA

Bye, bye Mama!

(Dialogue)

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Synopsis

Alicia quickly puts on her shoes and bag and runs out the house. Show her

walking and the high sun above her, and a shadow or transparent form of a

ship above her.

Text

Page 8 Leaving Home

Panel 1 Alicia puts on shoes, and she begins to hint at

strange happenings.

Caption *supo/swip/slip* slipping on shoes.

ALICIA

And like most days, I precariously accept

these situations and little personas. Just

as much as I accept my own personal flaws.

(Inner Monologue)

Panel 2 Alicia slips on book bag.

Caption *Slip/supo* Slipping on straps.

Panel 3 Open door to the outside world, skip entry way and

such and have her walking down the block.

Caption *jiri jiri/shinning* Instead show the

brightness of the sun.

ALICIA

And though sometimes I wish to break

normalcy, to create a new me. A better me.

A braver me. Sometimes its hard to know

that life is filled with predictable

endings and openings. With generic and

genetic personalities and traits.


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Especially since everything around me

seems to be changing....(inner monologue)

Panel 4 Alicia walks out and we see the alien ship above

faintly in the sky but vast enough for us to know

that's not supposed to be there.

Caption *Devu,zumomomo/zumo* Show shadow of the

spaceship in the sky and the sun refracting

around the edges.

ALICIA

So fast. And I'm... Not.

(Inner Monologue)

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She arrives at the school and skip forward to her arriving in her class, this

begins the mention of the aliens above the planet. She speaks of the noise

that increased around school.

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Page 9 School

Panel 1 Alicia arrives at school a few seconds before the

bell and she lays her head upon the desk sighing

softly.


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Caption *fu* Alicia sighs, as she rests her head upon

the desk. Her classmates walking and sitting

around speaking to one another.

Panel 2 Peek of classroom during pre-period and some of

her classmates.

Caption *Gya-gya/chatter chatter* Show students

chattering and running to each other's desk.

CLASSMATE #1

Hey did you hear about?

(Faint talking)

CLASSMATE #2

Why do you think they're here? Do you

think that maybe they want to do us harm?

CLASSMATE #3

I hear they have a 10 legs and arms! And

their eyes are huge!

CLASSMATE #4

Ewwww stop!

ALICIA

Since the ship appeared above, normalcy

for the world broke. At first it was

debate, end of the world prophecies

and scary stories of alien appearances.

People disappearing, weird happenings and

sudden appearances of strange beast in

other cities and towns across the country.

(Inner Monologue)

Panel 3 One of the girls bump into her chair, show her

walking into Alicia.

Caption *Battari/bump* Sound of butt bumping into

Alicia's head.

ALICIA

And even though the year just started off

and the space ship just hovering over the

earth....

(Inner Monologue)


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Panel 4 The girl doesn't even notice she bumped into her

and continues the conversation with the group.

Seeing to be squealing, the group laughs at her.

Though Alicia is gloomy and lonely.

Panel 5 Show Alicia's loneliness.

Caption *Dyon/depressed* Color a black shower(aura)

around Alicia and brightness around her

classmates who are all grouped up.

ALICIA

I still have yet to make any friends!

(Inner Monologue)

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Alicia talks about her lonliness and how everybody has changed somewhat.

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Page 10 Lonely

Panel 1 Alicia grips her head and she sinks into

depression. (Funny moment)

Caption *Doon/depressed/gloom* Show funny chibi

moment of Alicia turning into liquid. Show

brief moments of loneliness, moments where

she should be with friends but is not.

ALICIA

Normally at school I would be lonely

meaning I would have no friends for the


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entire year. An entire year of no partner

for field trips, science projects or lunch

time meals.

Panel 2 Small panel of her seeing the ship and her face

sinking or utter hopelessness.

Caption Show her sitting before the tv and the her

melting.

ALICIA

When the apparent doom machine appeared

above, I thought I would die lonely, with

no hope of ever having a girl conversation

with a dramatic and lonely friend who made

up of lies about past boyfriends.

Panel 4 Show her coming into class room and seeing her

classmates busily talking and active. And her eyes

glittering with hope.

Caption *Pa/light/shine* Eyes's shinning.

ALICIA

Till I came to school on the first day and

found loads of people talking to each

other. Pretty girls, jocks, nerds, geeks,

nobodies, rebels, idiots, fattys,

foreigners, loners. Everyone! This was my

chance! My chance to show through, to

become more than what I have been making

myself for these last couple of years.

Panel 5 Regular Panel. But show Alicia turned to stone and

her classmates happily talking along.

Caption *Shun/rock bottom,fwoomp* Alicia's skin

turning to rock.

ALICIA

But that didn't happen. It was as if I

missed the last chord of the apocalypse!

And everyone died and went to heaven and I

was left to walk the earth alone. (like

the man in Twilight, "Time Enough At

Last".)


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Get view of a someone's drawing of a ship hovering over the planet, reflect

on the moment of how Alicia doesn't know what this means for her. The

class begins and outside the window we happen of the mascot running

around in the area but happens to stop at the school. Its eyes stare at the

school seeming to have found its target.

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Page 11 Alien ships and Alicia

Panel 1 A small panel showing the chalkboard and a picture

of a space ship hovering a planet. Alicia reflects

on how the world seemed to have drastically

reverted to normal after the alienship. Even how

the kids in her class once grouping up changed

back to their normal.

Caption Nothing here but brighten drawing on the

chalkboard.

ALICIA

But even with all the alien talk around

school. It's normal. It's as if it faded

into the pool of celebrity gossip, fashion

trends and whispers of war amongst the

enemies. It became the everyday talk of

normalcy. People slowly began to accept

the spaceship for what it was... A hunk of

junk in the sky.


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Panel 2 Who now sits gazing out the window, her chin

leaning against her hand. We get a better view of

her.

Caption *eee* or just show light and wind blowing in.

ALICIA

What does this mean for me? Should I

accept it as normalcy and go about life as

I always have. Or should I....

Panel 3 Outside the window, we see Alicia gazing out the

window but this time we see Alicia's mascot

(Carina) looking down at Alicia from the opposite

building. Show Carina as a bit menacing.

Caption Nothing here really.

ALICIA

See it as an opportunity to become

something more than just me.

Panel 4 Full view of Carina (Mascot) who is staring down

at her herione. But Carina looks a bit scary look

at Madoka Puella Magical mascot and somehow copy

eyes.

Caption *gugu/stare* Carina (mascot) staring at

Alicia.

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Its eyes stare at the school seeming to have found its target.


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Text

Page 12 Mascot

Panel 1 Full view of Carina (Mascot who is staring down at

the heroine. But Carina looks a bit scary looking,

like the mascot from Madoka Puella Magica (Copy

eyes)

Caption *gugu/stare* Carina (mascot) staring at

Alicia

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Alicia is now at gym and people are playing dodgeball, to scared to step

forth she hides in the back.

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Page 13 Gym

Panel 1 Show ball getting thrown, showing it's gym time.

Caption *bishi/shu/whoosh* ball being thrown.

Panel 2 Show people playing dodgeball, funny pic where

other kids dodge and one kid getting hit in the

face and flying back.

Caption *gokiiaa/Bam!* ball hitting someone rough.


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ALICIA

Dodgeball....

Panel 3 Kids looking like demons holding the ball, and

dark aura around them. The kid from before

twitching from swollen face and bruises, and other

kids horrified of the damage.

Caption *nyari/grin/evil grin/demonic aura* the

opposing team.

ALICIA

I hate dodgeball!!

Panel 4 Alicia trembling behind her classmates, her

teacher pointing to her to get into fray. But

Alicia shaking her head no.

Caption *bishi/points* teacher pointing Alicia out.

GYM TEACHER

Alicia get in there! Your team needs you!

(Shouting/accusatory)

ALICIA

Never!!

(Shouting/defensive)

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Till a ball comes flying towards one of the students. Alicia takes the charge

and steps in front of the ball.

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Page 14 Taking Action

Panel 1 Alicia leaning over sighing.

Caption *Fui/sigh* Alicia sighing.

ALICIA

I'm not a person with much stamina and

most of the time, I usually like to feign

sickness or tiredness in order to get out

of these things. But this week teach ain't

having it.

Panel 2 Show small panel/moment of the gym teacher chewing

her out or turning into a demon.

Panel 3 Show ball flying from boys hand.

Caption *potosu/hurl/throw* boy is tall, slightly

muscular and has blonde hair.

ALICIA

I mean its not like they recognize me most

of the time anyway. I'm basically an

invisible player for the team.

Panel 4 Show ball going towards one of the girls sitting

on the ground behind the game. And a group of her

friends fearful and quivering.

Caption *shuu/woosh* ball flying through the air.

ALICIA

I mean it doesn't matter if I'm in or out.

(Inner Monologue)

CLASSMATE #2

Watch out!!

Panel 5 Show smaller panel of Alicia's feet running.

Caption *zazaza/run run run/tmp tmp* sound of

Alicia's feet running swiftly.

Panel 6 Show Alicia's hand reaching out in order to

protect.


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Caption *Hyoi/pop/reach* show hand reaching

desperately.

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Alicia Stands before the girl as mascot watches.

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Page 15 Alicia Protects

Panel 1 Carina Mascot witnesses the scene.

Caption *gikuu/surpise/shock* Mascot witnessing the

scene from shadows.

ALICIA

I mean....

Panel 2 Alicia standing in front of girl, bravery.

Caption No Sound.

ALICIA

It isn't like my existence is important to

anyone.

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Of course getting hit by it. Alicia coments on how the bal wasn't going to hit

the girl anyway. People go to the aid of the girl, while Alicia is asked if she's

okay. The mascot witnesses the scene (not being the first time it had

watched Alicia do a good deed.)

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Page 16 Funny Moments of Epic Proportions

Panel 1 Small Panel of Alicia getting hit by ball.

Caption *Gotsu/bam/pow/thud* Alicia getting hit in

the gut while defending the girl. Show shock

lines or crowd being astonished.

Panel 2 Small panel of Alicia quivering while holding

stomach as ball bounces away.

Caption *domu domu/bounce bounce*

CLASSMATE #4

Ahh are you okay?

Panel 3 Alicia turns around and smiles are her classmate

(make regular pic).

Caption *niko/smile* soft air around face.

Panel 4 Go back to chibi mood and have teacher pat

Alicia's shoulder saying she's out.

Caption *Pon/pat* on shoulder from teacher.


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TEACHER

Your out.

CLASSMATES

I don't think that's the real issue

here....

(Thoughts)

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We skip towards lunch and Alicia is eating her lunch outside by herself,

mention how even with all the news of aliens she is still lonely she sighs and

shifts causing her juice container to roll away.

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Page 17 Lunch Time

Panel 1 Alicia is eating lunch which consists of a wrap,

fruit and two juices, and a usual side of cookies.

Drinks from a juice cup. Upward angle show her

looking up to the sun above.

Caption *kupu/slip/suck/siiip* Alicia drinking juice

from container. *Bzz* dragonflies fluttering

about.

ALICIA

Well at least I can still eat, it would've

been troublesome if I couldn't hold down

my food. Though in all honesty...


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Panel 2 Alicia looks down at her stomach (downward angle)

and sadly looks upon the ripples that appear

there. Show in panel also some other people who

are chubbier than Alicia (putting not true

underneath)

Caption *bosho/sad* as she gazes upon herself.

ALICIA

Then again... I am a little chubby. I mean

I am nearly one of the biggest people in

my class.

Panel 2 Alicia smiles as she gazes at her cookies ogling

their goodiness.

Caption *Shi/shimmer* Eyes gazing upon cookies.

ALICIA

But I mean I can't change that right... I

mean losing weight would mean giving up

these babies and who would want to do

that!

Panel 3 Chibi mood: Alicia places cookies against cheek as

she shakes her head as if she was hugging them.

Alicia giggles as she blushes.

Caption *Gyuu/hug* Hugging sounds. *Baku/waku*

excitement. *Hehehe/gera gera* giggling.

ALICIA

Oh my sweets, my precious you will soon be

mines. I don't care if your filled with

chubby goodness, I would rather eat you

now and forget my worries than to put down

a cookie!!

Panel 4 Show Alicia with Super rape face!!! And her hands

clutching the cookies trembling with excitement.

Caption *waku waku/trembled* evil aura around Alicia

and make eyes scary and funny looking. *poto*

in the corner of picture.

ALICIA

Soon you will be eaten and swallowed to

become one with my body! Muwahahaha!


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(Hahaha!) To a source of happiness for the

depressing and normal life I live!!!!

Panel 5 Alicia looks up and we see one of her juice

containers rolling away into bushes.

Caption *poto**drops and rolls* the sound of the

container rolling away.

ALICIA

You got to be kidding me.

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Sighing she rises and goes after it only to find it sitting before the mascot

who is trying to chew into it. The mascot and her meet eyes, something

rather interesting happens. Seeing the mascot taking her drink, she reaches

out first. The mascot trembles slightly, growling at her. She pauses briefly

before giving it over to the creature, after opening it wider. The bell rings

and Alicia hurries back to class. The mascot watches as she runs off, and

decides to follow her. She mentions throughout this experience what a

strange creature it was and yet how familiar it looked, as if she had met it

before.

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Page 18 Meeting the mascot for the First time

Panel 1 Small panel of Alicia rising up to get it. And we

see a shadow of a small beast (mascot).

Caption *Kasa, rustle* bushes rustling from mascot

twitching.

Panel 2 A hand reaches down before the mascot and light

enters in as the mascot is seen for the first

time. A cute little griffin with dragon fly wings.

Caption *zawa/rustle/shine* from the light hitting

the griffin's shiny artificial coat.

Panel 3 Show large shot of Jannie before the mascot.

Caption *gaze/ahh* Jannie seeing the pet for the

first time.

ALICIA

A.... owl.....

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She mentions throughout this experience what a strange creature it was and

yet how familiar it looked, as if she had met it before. We skip to the job,

Alicia is busy at work. She works at McCornel ( McDonald's) where she

works as a janitor for the most part. She works hard, mopping the floors. She

speaks of why she is working here and such, event to the point of enjoyment.

Until..the manager calls her.


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Panel 1 We skip to her at work and mopping the floors. She

is wearing a fast food costume. For the first time

we see her outside of the school setting.

Caption *Squish* mop being used.

ALICIA

What was that?

Panel 2 Small panel of the mascot jumping to attack her

and her getting scared. But on the other side of

the panel what really happened. Alicia running

away from the mascot when it steps out. While

Alicia is reminded of that horror before, her face

becomes drastically fearful.

Caption *OOOOO/roar/howl* of mascot. *Da/dash/run*

Alicia running away. *Kyaaaa/scream/ahhhh*

Alicia screaming.

ALICIA

Some weird mixture of a owl, cat and bug.

It looked like some mutated kitten. Maybe

it escaped from test facility, if so I

should really listen to those emails that

talk about those medical and make-up

facilities where they test on animal

subjects.

Panel 3 Alicia boss calls for her to come over. Show

Alicia in distance and her bosses hand waving her

over. Alicia jumping from coming out of her state

of shock

Caption *come over* hand waving her over. *Pachi!*

from her snapping out of it.

MANAGER

Hey Alicia come here for a second!

Panel 4 We see Alicia's hands and sheets of paper being

placed into her hands.


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Caption *pera/thump/thud/dosa* paper being placed

into hands.

MANAGER

I need you to hand out these pamphlets

today. For our new item on the board and

the sales we're having for this weekend.

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The manager tells her he wants her to handout pamphlets to which she

dislikes. Though she wishes to tell him this she goes anyway.

Text

Page 20 Alicia hands out pamphlets

Panel 1 As Alicia clutches the papers she gazes upon the

papers with utter dread. Upward angle of Alicia

clutching papers and shadows of demons in the

background as she cowers in fear of the fragile

demons.

Caption *puru puru/shake shake/quiver*

ALICIA

Pamphlets.... But I hate handing out

Pamphlets. These demonic word filled paper

mache that have caused wars, established

meaning for children existence and covered

the internet with mountains of junk.


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Panel 2 Alicia stands out in the open as she stands

practically in the middle of traffic(people

walking on sidewalk) as she trembles in the crowd

of people walking past. Alicia screaming silently

out loud.

Caption *doon/doom* Showing utter depression or

making known of utter depression or doom.

ALICIA

Worst of all I hate handing them out to

people!

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Alicia tries her best to hand them out but to no avail. She tries but people

can't hear her because of her stuttering and shyness. And eventually she gets

pushed away and the papers fall out of her hand.

Text

Page 21 Handing out Pamphlets

Panel 1 Alicia tries to hand them out to people do side

view make shadows of people in front of her to

show she's in a crowd but make her clear. And show

Alicia trembling to hand them out to people.

Caption *suta suta/walk straight pass/tap tap tap*

crowd walking past.


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ALICIA

Would you......? We're

having......next...?

.....take....pamphlet......

(Soft Spoken Voice)

I hate feeling uncertain. I hate this

feeling of being lost, or being possibly

being pointed out.

(Inner monologue)

Panel 2 Smaller Panel of Alicia going up to a woman in one

corner, then a group of boy students in another

corner and trying to give them a pamphlet.

Caption *puru puru/no* for the woman. *Buru

buru/refuse/shake/no* for the boys.

ALICIA

Of my thoughts clouding my reality. Of

seeing the hatred in everyone of knowing

that people are bound to society where

people like me is the bottom denominator.

And how its never going to change.

(Inner monologue)

Panel 3 Alicia gets pushed away and her papers fly out of

her hand. As a man rushes and past and calls her

annoying.

Caption *ba/push/slam/bam/thud* Man shoulder hitting

Alicia. *Gocha

gocha/confusion/flutter/mess/rustle* paper

sounds.

STRANGER #1

Get out of my way if you have nothing to

say!

(Angry Voice)

ALICIA

Ahhh!!

Panel 4 Show Alicia's Papers scattered over the ground,

some people standing others walking on it. Dark

scene show only pants legs, shoes, legs and

papers.


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Caption *zaka zaka/tap/tmp* footsteps walking around

and on the papers. *Pasa/rustle* paper on

ground. *Gusha/crush* Paper being crushed

under foot.

ALICIA

How it's okay to walk over people like me.

(Inner Monologue)

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As she goes to pick them up she looks up and begins to see people's faces.

Somehow talk, some in shock others laugh. Eventually unable to take it just

before someone reachs to help her up. She pushes them away and runs inside

her manager tries to should to her. But she locks herself up in the bathroom.

Text

Page 22 The Breaking Point of Alicia

Panel 1 Alicia bends down and reaches for the papers and

begins to gather them up. But as she does she

looks up at the crowd now around her. (Downward

horizontal angle seeing her from the crowd view)

People begin to look tall and big, slightly

menacing.

Caption *gogogo/menaching atmosphere. Only draw

picture of shoes everything else is dark of

course for the ray of light around Alicia and

the papers. But for papers deep in crowd do


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not paint shoes white, instead paint as black

and the shoes on them as black. Only shoes

around Alicia (mostly the tips of shoes) are

lighted.

ALICIA

Stop looking at me like that... Stop

looking at me!

(Inner Monologue 1)

Someone help! Please help!

(Inner Monologue 2)

I can't take it anymore...

(Inner monologue 3)

Panel 2 Small Panel show young teenage girl from another

school. And a cellphone in her hand.

ALICIA

Stop it!

Panel 3 Another Small this time of a business man looking

slightly angry or disgusted.

ALICIA

I know you don't like me...

Panel 4 A third small panel spanning the middle of the

page in a row along with panels 2 and 3. This time

of a boy and another one who seem to be smiling or

cackling at the situation.

ALICIA

So stop laughing at me, stop walking away!

Stop! Stop!

Panel 5 A hand reaches down to help her and Alicia pushes

the hand away as she runs inside. Show Alicia's

hands backs and the door opening, as she runs

inside. With the crowd looking on as she runs and

the young man who was offering to help watching

her run away with his hand still out to help her.

Caption *zazaza/run run run* Alicia running inside.

*Kara/open* door opening up.

ALICIA

STOP!!!


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Panel 6 Alicia runs past counter, where her Managers calls

out to her.

Caption *Zaza/tmp/tap* Alicia's tapping shoes as she

runs.

MANAGER

What's a matter?! Alicia?!

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Sitting there she sighs softly as she feels stuck, tears well up in her eyes as

she thinks of how useless she is to everyone. She voices her desire to

change, but how its impossible to change cause we bound to always be the

same person.

Text

Page 23 Alicia Desires to Change

Panel 1 Small Panel show little girls sign on door and

soft hiccuping sounds within.

Caption *Hiiku/hiku/hic/hiccup* sounds of Alicia

crying.

Panel 2 Upward angle of Alicia crying, tears and snot

smearing her face. As she cries and hiccups, she

tries to wipe the tears from her face but its too

much. She is sitting on stall.


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Caption *Hiiku/hiku/hic/hikku/hiccup* sounds of

Alicia crying (hiccups).

ALICIA

I hate this..... I hate myself. I hate

being like this. I hate being looked at

like that, of being ignored, of being

laughed at, of being worthless. I hate

being me!

Panel 3 Having a slightly nude picture of Alicia drifting

into the darkness and a small light within her

shining brightly and her clutching furiously to

it.

Caption *jiwa/tearing up* *zu/sink* Alicia sinking

into darkness that reaches and clutches for

her.

ALICIA

I don't want to be like this anymore! I

don't want to stay like this! I want to be

something. I want to be something more! I

want to change.

Panel 4 Near the bottom of the stall we see a shadow like

someone's there and a soft knock. Catching

Alicia's attention. We can't see Alicia clearly

but we see a shadow for sure.

Caption *kon/knock* a soft knock.

ALICIA

Someone's by the door!

(Inner Monologue)

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As she opens the door she happens to look down. There near her feet is the

mascot, we look up at her to see the tears in her eyes. "A…(insert animal)".

Text

Page 24 Do you wish to change?

Panel 1 This time we can see outside of the door and we

see someone saying "Do you truly wish to change?"

Caption Nothing really here just make bubble soft

looking.

CARINA

Do you truly wish to change?

Panel 2 Small panel of Alicia's eyes twitching.

Caption *piku/flinch/twitch* Alicia's eyes twitching

or blinking.

ALICIA

If I could only become more, a little

braver.

(Inner monologue)

Panel 3 Small panel of Alicia grubbing the handle of the

stall. In a row across like the last and the one

after this one. And she jerks the door open.

Caption *gu/grip/pull/jerk* the door open.

ALICIA

A little happier, a little prettier, a

little smaller. Then maybe... Maybe

then... I could

(Inner monologue)

Panel 4 For the first time we see the mascot in all of her

glory. Carina and Alicia comes face to face one

more time. Alicia stares down. Side view and we

can't really see the bathroom but we have hints

that it is a bathroom. Stall walls.


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Caption *dodo-n/ahhhh/reveal/tada* Mascot is revealed

once more. And this time their meeting is

fatal (complete)

ALICIA

Change, maybe then could I be the me I

dreamed of being. That I have always

wished to be.

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But she quickly tries to wipe them away, kneeling down she goes to touch

the creature. Saying how she remembers this little creature, she ask if it's

lost, if its misses its owner. But then a soft voice speaks, asking her does she

truely desire change.

Text

Page 25 Alicia's Unspoken Desire

Panel 1 Alicia jumps a bit clutching the sides of the

stall as she gazes down at the creature. In

Alicia's thought ballon have the mascot hovering

over small Alicia's chili's body, hungrily.

Downward or sky angle of Alicia.

Caption *munzu/grab* Alicia clutching to the stall

shivering.

ALICIA

It's that mutant creature again! Here to

finish the job.


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Panel 2 Alicia reconsiders the creature when she sees it

tweet and she realizes. That she has done the

something that she dislikes society doing to her.

And for once finds the small little creature cute.

Upward angle from mascot point of view. Show soft

images of the Carina's and Alicia's face in the

corner.

Caption *piyo piyo/tweet/peep* Carina chirps at

Alicia.

ALICIA

Wait... It doesn't want to hurt me. The

only thing I have done to it was avoid it.

Like how the world does to me, like what

it does to it's problems.

Panel 3 Alicia's hands reaches towards the creature.

Caption *hesitant* reaching out to mascot.

ALICIA

Have you been following me?

(Spoken)

It has never wanted to hurt me. The only

thing it seemed to want was me.

(Inner monologue.)

Panel 4 Show Alicia's hand reaching towards Carina, but

this time the voice comes out again.

Caption *Buooooo/roar/whoosh* rush of wind that

radiates from Carina. *Zawa/shine/wrap*

Carina glowing this time.

CARINA


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Synopsis

Before she could answer she is enveloped in light. Floating in the ball of

light, she panics as her feet lift off the ground. Turning around in the ball

uncontrollably unable to stir herself. Banging against the shield she tries to

get out. But seeing that the field was like hard glass. Looking to the mascot,

she begins to wonder what this thing is. The mascot does a smile.

Text

Page 26 Alicia and Carina enters a pact

Panel 1 A ball of light consumes Alicia and her Mascot as

Alicia gazes upon the mascot. And she is now

floating in the ball of light.

Caption *jijijiji/shhhhhh/woooo* energy ball forming

around Alicia, *bachi bachi/buzz/zzzzz*

electricity around the base of energy ball.

*Fuwa fuwa* Alicia floating.

ALICIA

Huh?

(Spoken)

Panel 2 Alicia flinches as she turns around in the ball to

see the stall breaking and toilet water spilling

on the ball. But nothings hitting her.

Caption *Gogaaa/krakkkk/smash/crash* things breaking

around her.

ALICIA

Ahhh!

(Screaming)

Wait what's going on? This is real, this

is really happening?!


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Panel 3 Alicia bangs against the walls of the ball and

yells to get out. Show legs swimming like in the

ball trying to keep her balance.

Caption *gon gon/slam/bang* Alicia hitting the glass

of the energy ball.

ALICIA

Get me out of here! What is this! What's

happening! Someone help me! Help me!

(Shouting)

Panel 4 Smaller Panel of us seeing her hands and the

redness of them, and throbbing from her banging

her hands upon the glass.

Caption *zukin zukin/throb throb/sting sting*

throbbing pain from hands.

ALICIA

It's as Hard as glass, its not budging one

bit.

Panel 5 Larger panel of Alicia looking over her shoulder

at Carina who is floating. But this time Carina is

smiling away.

Caption *kiran/twinkle/shine* Carina's metal coat is

showing now and her real form is revealed.

*Kuoon/whoosh/fwoosh* great force of energy

or wind blowing around.

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Takes off as it crashes through the door the field not bending as it gets into

the open of the store. The people scream as they look at the ball. Her

manager comes out from hiding and sees Alicia in the ball, "Alicia". Alicia

screams for him to help before the mascot takes off again.

Text

Page 27 Going for a little ride

Panel 1 Small panel of effect, like explosion.

Caption *dodooo/smash/boom/crash* Sudden explosion,

dust everywhere. And pieces of rubble blown

out of proportion.

CUSTOMERS

Ahhhhh!!!!

Panel 2 We see the manager coughing and asking if people

is okay. He is behind the counter.

Caption *googaa/crumble/rumble* rubble around and

dust clouds. *Ririri/loud buzz/alarm/beeep

beep/clang clang* alarms going off.

MANAGER

*Cough,cough* Is everyone okay? What

happened? Did the gas go off somewhere?!

(Calling out)

CUSTOMERS

Oh my god!!!

Panel 3 Manager looks up and sees Alicia in the ball,

Alicia gazing from the inside of the ball gazing

at him. She screams out for help.

Caption *gon gon/slam/bang* Alicia's hands against

the glass. *Ji-ko ji-ko/hmmmmm* faint hmm of

the forcefield.

ALICIA


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Manager! Robin help me! Help me Robin

please!

MANAGER

Al...Alicia?

Panel 4 The wind disperses and we see Carina in her real

form as a mechanical being. Shining in the light.

Alicia in the background.

Caption *pashuu/fwwsshh/sst* Make Carina cute but

cool looking (pokemon should come in handy

here).

Panel 5 Carina takes off again and Alicia lands hard

against the back of the ball. As Carina leaps or

jumps ahead.

Caption *kata kata/click click* of Carina's paws

running through the wall.

*Dan/smash/crash/bam* slamming into the back

wall of the ball.

ALICIA

Ugh!

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Crashing into the street they almost cause a accident, people scream, some

people takes phots others run. Alicia asks the mascot where is it taking her.

But the mascot does not respond. In the distance sirens is heard and the

mascot takes off again, running down the street, it jumps upon the cars

slightly denting the top from the ball.


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Page 28 On the Run

Panel 1 The ball of energy bursts forth from the wall and

drawn into the middle of traffic show pieces of

rubble and cars dodging the scene.

Caption *dan* Slamming through wall and pieces of

rubble clatter about on the ground.

*Tick/smash/goa* of

rocks.*kikii/kikiki/screech/kee/squeal* tires

screeching over the pavement.

*Gya/aggggh/ahhh* screaming.

Panel 2 The ball of energy stills itself as people either

run from it or stands and watches the scene.

Distant squeal of of sirens can be heard. In the

distance. Alicia begins to stand to her feet.

(Make into slightly smaller panel.

Caption *re------whooo- re whooo-----/fan fan fan*

Sirens in distance. *Bara

bara/scattered/disperse* crowd noises.

ALICIA

Ouch...

Panel 3 Thinner panel Alicia asks Carina where she is

going. Carina doesn't respond she only hears the

sirens

Caption *re-------whoo-re whoo-----/fan fan fan* cop

sirens a little bigger than before and harsher.

ALICIA

Where are you taking me?! Hey! Can you

hear me? Hey?!

Panel 4 Carina takes off again but this time she leaps and

dents a car's hood. Show jumping lines of Carina

taking off again. And Alicia bouncing about in the

ball of energy.


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Caption *Goa/dan/Smash/crush* Weight of Carina as she

lands upon the hood of the car.

ALICIA

Aghhhh!!!

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As the mascot runs into a open street the cars dodging the ball, the police

catch up and it tells them to stop. Alicia begins to panic trying to tell the

mascot to stop, the cops. She screams to them to help her. But the mascot

doesn't stop, after coming some distance to an open field, after Alicia

screams, "STOP!" the mascot looks back at her. Suddenly another soft voice

echoes in her head, "Do you want to change?"

Text

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Panel 1 We get to an intersection where we see the ball of

energy taking a hard tun and hear the screech of

metal upon pavement. Now behind her are cop cars

also sliding across the pavement.

Caption *Kiii/screech/kyeeeeee* sound of Carina's

paws screaming over the pavement as she

slides into intersections.

*Kyaruru/screee/screech/shriieek* of tires.


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Panel 2 Carina is running the length of a street and stop

cars now on either side of the ball as Carina runs

telling them to "Stop" Alicia is screaming for

help the whole time trying to get the cops to help

her.

Caption *buun/vrrm/rumble* cop cars speeding

alongside them, as some cars quickly get out

of the way as they take to the sides of the

road. *Kata kata/ click click/kch kch* sound

of Carina's paws upon the ground.

COPS

We order you to stop right now! Stop

running away! Or both of you will be

severely punished.

ALICIA

Help me! Please!

Panel 3 We see their destination a open field in the

middle of a park just in the distance.

Caption *Kata/click* Carina's paws. *Re----whooo-re-

whoo* alarms.

ALICIA

Stop....

(Inner Thought)

Panel 4 They enter through the gate entrance.

ALICIA

Stop....please just stop.

(Inner thought.)

Panel 5 As they travel through the brushes, Alicia her

arms covering her face and its dark around her.

Caption *Kasa kasa/rustle rustle* going through

bushes.

ALICIA

I said stop!!

Panel 6 Big picture of the open field and Carina looking

back at Alicia and Alicia unfolding her arms.


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Carina ask her once more. Do you truly wish to

change?

Caption *gobaaa/whooosh* Wind blowing around them,

and Alicia still floating before Carina.

CARINA


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Alicia hesitates before she answers and suddenly a light bursts from the

mascot forming a beam up into the heavens, the blast pushes some of the

cops back as it become blinding. Slowly they are lifted into the sky. Alicia

looks around seeing the ground disappear beneath her. As she lifted into the

sky.

Text

Page 30 The Bond is forged

Panel 1 Carina and Alicia stands there still. In the

corners of the panels show their faces. And Alicia

unable to answer.

Caption *za za/rustling* breeze blowing.

Panel 2 Suddenly a light appears in the sky and hits

Carina and Alicia is blinded by the light.


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Caption *Buo/whoosh* wind and power of blast.

*Pa/bika* Light striking Carina.

Panel 3 Small panel of Alicia seeing Carina in utter

shock.

Caption *voo/shooom/whoom/whoosh* wind blowing past

her as she gazes upon Carina.

ALICIA

What....what...is that?

(Inner Thought)

Panel 4 The force is strong enough to blind the cops as

well, who appear in the distance of the blast. And

we see four wings appear upon the light image of

Carina. They are huge and spread over most of the

field. As Carina seems to take on the form of a

huge griffin. The ball slowly begins to lift off

the ground.

Caption *Kue-/kweh/caw* Carina's call. Same wind

sounds from before.

Panel 5 Small panel of seeing the ball of light travel up

the pole, people seeing it from rooftops and the

sky opening up to see the ship.

Caption *whoosh* powerful wind even from far away.

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As they get higher, they come to a point where a helicopter rushes past them.

She is now more afraid of the bubble popping than banging on it. But they

continue onward upward into the sky. Till the point of flying further up till

they barely miss a plane.

Text

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Panel 1 Alicia looks over the town as she presses her

hands into the glass. Seeing the world she once

called home starting to get smaller. And two

helicopter watching the scene. Radio chatter from

the one closest to us.

Caption Wind sounds being heard from before. *Bara

bara/spin spin/shoom shoom/fwoom fwoom* of

helicopter.

COPTER CHATTER

Take the shot! Take the beast down!

COPTER CHATTER #2

We can't there's a little girl in there.

ALICIA

The ground.... Is becoming less visible.

I'm really floating. I'm flying away.

Panel 2 As they go higher they break through the clouds

this time they are high enough for a plane and she

watches as a plane nearly hits them.

Caption *bu-n/zoom* a plane whiting by them.

*Kyuiin/keek/kreean* plane engines.

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Alicia remembers her mother brief moments of her father and her promise to

him. Carina asking her if she's willing to change. Protect.Change.

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Page 32 A forgotten promise. Change.

Panel 1 As they get higher, Alicia begins to see darkness

as they begin to enter space and her field of

vision begins to freeze over.

Caption *bori bori/crunch/krick* ice forming over ball.

ALICIA

Home.... Mom.... Cold. I'm so cold. So far

away from home... Mom... Mommy.

Panel 2 A smaller Alicia standing before a man and his

hand upon her head. Telling her to protect.

Caption *nade nade/stroke stroke* stroking Alicia's

head.

ALICIA'S DAD

Promise to protect.

Panel 3 Carina looking at her before when she asked her if

she truly wanted to change.

Caption No sound.

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Panel 3 Small panel of her saying mommy lips only and

tears cradling face.

Caption *Shin/silence/shock*

ALICIA

Mommy....

(Whisper)

Protect.Change.

(Inner Thought)

Panel 4 Black Panels... Leading into next page.

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Alicia has a dream of her mother dressed in black silently screaming. Alicia

clinging to the wall as fear and sadness takes her face. But then her mother

turns her head and her eyes are black. Alicia wakes up.

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Page 33 A Bad Dream

Panel 1 Nothing. Black Panel but soft cries is written in

white.

Caption *mi-/cry/wail* soft cry.

Panel 2 Alicia speaking mommy as her hands clutch to the

wall. Everything is dark and eery.


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Caption *gashin/clutch/grab* Alicia's grip.

ALICIA

Mommy...

Panel 3 Her mother's body twitch roughly. And Silence

falls.

Caption *bikun/hard flinch/sudden twitch* Alicia's

mother twitches.

Panel 4 Alicia's mother turns around and her eyes are

black, skin pale and lips are gone leading to a

plain open mouth with sharp teeth. Deep red

pupils.

Caption *gokin gokin/crack/disjoint* Alicia's

mother's head at a weird angle as she calls

her.

MARY

Alicia.

Panel 5 Alicia's eyes open as she wakes up. Just her eyes

opening frightened.

Caption *pachin/snap open* Eyelids opening.

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She wonders what she just saw, trying to calm herself that it was just a

dream it was all just a dream. She lays back down, rolling into a pillow she

believes to be hers, when the mascot appears before her.


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Panel 1 Alicia is sitting up in bed, and she seems to be a

hospital room. Rubbing her head some. Side angle.

Caption *soyo soyo/breeze breeze* a light breeze

blowing the curtains.

ALICIA

A dream...

Panel 2 Show a small panel of her pulling the shade back

some chibi mood.

Caption *sharan/rattle/slide* Curtains being pulled

back.

Panel 3 Still in Chibi mood she is still looking outside.

Caption *Ho/phew* relieved sigh.

ALICIA

I'm home.... It was all a dream. A highly

intricate nightmare at that.

Panel 4 Falling back upon the bed, she sighs as she curls

into the comfortable pillow. Hugging the covers to

her face. And closing her eyes. Not seeing that

beside her is her mascot sleeping away on the

pillow.

Caption *bofun/fall/fwump/dosa/thump* falling onto

the bed. *Gururu gururu/purr purr* sleeping

Carina.

ALICIA

Great! It was all a dream. I'm probably at

mountainside hospital and the only thing

to do now is to wait till my mom picks me.

I wonder what happened before. Maybe I hit

my head during work or something.

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Shocked she jolts up in the bed. She doesn't quite remember what happened

before but for some reason she keeps thinking of alien reports, images,

messages. The mascot purrs and rubs against her before curling into her

hands. She stares down at this creature wondering what it is, how it was able

to do what it did. Was this the alien they was speaking about. This small

creature. But her thoughts is interuppted. Till a voice speaks.

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Panel 1 Alicia acts as if she's about to go to sleep.

Small chibi panel.

Caption *gururu* purring and *su/sigh* Alicia's soft

sigh.

Panel 2 Suddenly Alicia's eyes burst open and her eyes

balls sticking out of her head in utter shock sees

Carina next to her. Chibi mood.

Caption *pisha/crack/shock* Alicia is extremely

shocked.

Panel 3 Alicia plastered against the wall trembling

watches as Carina wakes up slowly. Chibi mood

Caption *chi chi chi* soft chi as Carina stretches.

*Kata kata* trembling.


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ALICIA

Y-y-y-y-y-y yo-yo-yo-your your your re-re-

real?!

Panel 4 Carina approaches her as she curls into Alicia

purring loudly. But Alicia is utterly terrified of

the creature.

Caption *gurururu/purring* Carina. *Gaku

gaku/shiver/tremble* Alicia

ALICIA

But that's impossible. You was all a

dream. It was all a dream. This isn't

real. Your not real. None of this is real.

Panel 5 A faint shadow appears in the corner of the panel,

as Alicia looks up at the figure.

Caption *kero/croak/ribbit* Kerushuu.

KERUSHUU

I woun't sa dat. ( Translated: I wouldn't

say that).

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One of the council members (look at pictures of elk legs and draw tall lanky

legged and yet round belly fellow. Older creature) smiles upon her. Alicia

eyes widen as she looks upon this creature and backs into the wall. And the

little creature that once purred in her hands now growled and hissed at the

creature glowing. Though it looked terrifying a look rested in its eyes. The

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this common gesture shows one is vunerable or wishing for peace, surrender

possibly in this matter". Alicia doesn't calm herself, as she studies this being.

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Panel 1 We see Kerushuu for the first time and he's

sitting in a chair, one legged crossed, in one

hand he's smoking a water pipe and in his other

hand is a cane made of wood.

Caption *buku buku/bubbles* Water pipe.

KERUSHUU

Wal awl et seems ya awake now? Yah?

(Translated: Well Well it seems your awake

now? Yes?)

Panel 2 Smaller Panel of Alicia clutching the curtain and

her heart pounding in her chest. Do close up on

wrist to see something shimmering on wrist.

Caption *dokun/heartbeat/da-dump/heartache* Alicia's

heartbeat. *Gugu/clench* hand clenching

drapes. *Zawa/bo/shine/ignite* wrist band.

ALICIA

A monster....

(Inner thoughts)

Who-who who who are you?! What do you want

from me?!

Panel 3 Carina's eyes flares up and a soft growl starts to

emits from its throat. Show viciousness of

Carina's cute looks.

Caption *garuru/growwl/snarl/ragghhh* Carina's snarl.

Panel 4 Kerushuu puts his hands up as he smiles at Alicia.

Caption *sara/rustle* Kerushuu's clothes.

KERUSHUU


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I believe on your planet this is a common

gesture for vulnerability or wishing for

peace, surrender possibly in this matter.

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Who are you? What are you?" she asks him. But he doesn't answer her

question, "You shold calm down you wield a very powerful weapon. That

creature is now connected to you, whatever you feel, whatever you fear it

fears. If you are not careful, you'll do something you'll regret" he mentioned.

Alicia looked to the mascot, as she noticed the mascot was looking upon her

with a look of plea, though it also seemed to bare its fangs.

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Panel 1 Alicia doesn't calm down her heart rate only

increasing. As Carina's growls become more verbal.

We see her bracelet is lighting up even more as

Carina's eyes shine.

Caption *ranran/intense* Eyes of Carina's and

Alicia's.

ALICIA

That didn't answer my question. Why should

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you?! Your one of those aliens, I've been

hearing about. Aren't you! Aren't you?!

Panel 2 Kerushuu doesn't say but he points out how Alicia

is the real threat in this room due to Carina who

is on the offensive.

Caption *bishi/point* kerushuu pointing out Carina.

KERUSHUU

The only threat in this room, is you my

dear. The guardian beast you have bonded

with is connected to your feelings.

Whatever you fear it fears and whatever

you hate it shall hate. Such a beast with

immersive power should be dealt with care.

If you are not careful you'll end up doing

something you'll regret.

Panel 3 Alicia looks upon Carina for the first time and

sees the fear in its body. How it's body trembles

before Kerushuu.

Caption *wana wana/tremble tremble* Carina trembling.

ALICIA

It's scared. For me?

Panel 4 Alicia reaches out and touches Carina and

instantly the fear disappears. As she pets her

relief sets in and Carina purrs against her hand.

Show only Carina responding to her hand being

placed upon her. Though in the corner do a shot of

Alicia reaching out to Carina.

Caption *gururu/purr purr* Carina purring. *Nade

nade/pet pet* petting Carina.

Panel 5 Small panel of Alicia smiling at the sound of

Carina purring. And Kerushuu smiling. In the other

corner.

Caption *gururu* Carina purring.

ALICIA

Your actually pretty cute.

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"I won't hurt you, you don't have to fear me. Plus even if I did what use

would it be when I could've taken one of your leaders instead" he smiled as

he reached over and poured something like warm milk. Smelling the

soothing scent of milk and honey. "I believe on your planet warm milk is

soothing to you" he placed the cup looking container before her. It was

strange looking she could see it resembled something of a cup but it was

rounder and transperant. The liquid inside seemed to float inside.

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Panel 1 Kerushuu reaches from his chair to a end table as

he rolls it over. And speaks of how he doesn't

wish to hurt her.

Caption *goro/rolling over* End table rolling over.

KERUSHUU

I won't hurt you, so you don't have to

fear me. Plus even if I did seek for

blood, I would have taken one of your

leaders instead. Or I would've done by

now.

Panel 2 Kerushuu placing cup upon end table, of a round

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gazing upon it with a faint blush at the smell of

it.

Caption *hoka hoka/warm/sweet smell* Heated milk.

KERUSHUU

I believe on your planet warm milk is

soothing to your kind? Yah?

ALICIA

Sweet milk?

(Inner Thought)

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"That's for babies, warm soothe children" she muttered softly. "Are you not

a child yourself?" he asked her. Thinking this through she finally relaxed

some, as she reached out and looked upon the cup. She mentions how warm

it feels in her hands, how the container fills her hands. Cupping it she smells

the sweet scent of honey and milk as she tips it back. A faint blush spreads

across her cheeks. The council member smiles. "See no harm" he responds

back.

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Panel 1 Alicia hesitates as she goes into chibi mood and

gazes upon Kerushuu almost upset at the motion he

made. Seeing this was childlike. But blushing

slightly.

Caption *pita/pause*

ALICIA

But... It's for children....

Panel 2 Kerushuu smiles as he leans back and goes back to

blowing his pipe. (Side view) His eyes are closed.

Caption *buku buku/bubble* water pipe

KERUSHUU

Are you not a child yourself?

Panel 3 Alicia blushes at the thought of him saying. She

reaches for the cup anyway. Chibi mood.

Caption *pashi/grasp/grab* her grasping the cup.

Panel 4 Another Chibi panel she tips it back.

Caption *kokkun/gulp*

Panel 5 Alicia blushes as she has a ring of milk around

the top of her lip. She looks away shy and soft

looking as she normally does.

Caption *nuku nuku/ nice and warm/soft*

ALICIA

Than... Thank you.

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A little dazed asks him what happened, he smiles sighing as he pulls back

the curitan beside her bed a bit more. And as the curitan is pulled back, the

whole room like a cloth shed away to show earth, sun and space. Alicia gasp

and arrises and yet she sits amazed at it all. He tells her she's on the alienship

above earth. She doesn't believe him till the room begins to reform around

them to a show they was in some simulation ward.

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Panel 1 Panel of Kerushuu smiling.

Panel 2 Alicia stares out of the window as she holds the

cup in her hands.

Caption Nothing.

ALICIA

What happened? I mean... Why am I here?

Why are you here? Where am I?

Panel 3 Kerushuu stands alongside the bed as he gazes out

at the world as well.

Caption *saku saku/squish*

KERUSHUU

Well my dear as for where you are...

Panel 4 Pulling back the shade of the curtain till it

rips. And we see the first evidence of space.

Caption *buchi buchi/ripping* curtain ripping.

Panel 5 The room begins to peel away till all of space is

around them. Earth is below them.

Caption *Shin/silience* Space. *Hmmmm*

KERUSHUU


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Your in space my dear, aboard a alienship

that's currently hovering over your dear

earth.

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Alicia gasp and arrises and yet she sits amazed at it all. He tells her she's on

the alienship above earth. She doesn't believe him till the room begins to

reform around them to a show they was in some simulation ward. "What are

you?" she asks him again as she touches where the glass was, feeling her

finger tips touch the last bit of space before it disappears. He smiles, "I am a

Kerushu, I am what you call an alien."

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Panel 1 Alicia stares out at space as if she's floating

away, and loses herself in the vastness of it.

Caption *fuwa fuwa/floating* sensation.

ALICIA

Space....

(Inner Thought)

Earth... Its below me, was earth always

that small. Was it always that far away?


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Panel 2 Alicia turns to see Kerushuu and he is bowing

before her, his long limb bent to show he is

bowing. He looks like a servant.

Caption *buka/fuka/bow* Kerushuu

KERUSHUU

And I. I am Kerushuu. And yes I am one of

those aliens. Nice to meet you.


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Created: 27 October 2010, 21:00

Modified: 29 October 2011, 19:09

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untitled (angel wing) new chapter one rough draft script

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