TPCASTTD TEST EXAMPLES

A closer look at what’s perfect, what’s close, and what’s wandering

away

STEP ONE: TITLE Great:

I think the poem is going to be a bout a captain of a sea ship, and his crew is enduring hardships through the ocean.

Okay: I think the poem will be about a captain sailing a ship

and they’re in danger of crashing or something. I predict this story is going to be about a really bad

storm that the captain and crew members had to face

Needs more: I think that it will be about a captain

STEP TWO: PARAPHRASE Good:

Lines 1-4: they won a prize/treasure and are nearing the port

Lines 5-8: the captain of the ship is dead on the deck Lines 9-16: crowd on shore wants to see him but he

won’t respond to his son Lines 17-24: the ship is safe in port but the son is still

mournful Okay

The ship has weather’d every rack: every rack is old Rise up for you the flag: honor the captain

Needs more/Not close The captain is dead wich is the father of him or her The ship has weather’d every crack that it has on there

the people are all exulting

STEP THREE: CONNOTATION Good:

Dead (-) not alive; bleeding (-) dying, losing blood; mournful (-) sad; won (+) achieved; eager (+) excited; grim (-) dark-looking

Okay: The words that have negative are that his

captain is fallen cold and dead. The positive ones are where he says they’re trip is done.

Positive words: won, done, head, father, eager Negative words: dead, tread, still, pale, stale, red

Needs more/Not close: I believe he or she’s tone is loud Line 2: weather’d

STEP FOUR: ATTITUDE Good:

The attitude of the people/person is that they’re happy that they won but once they go tell their captain and he’s dead, it’s like good and bad. Everything was going good because they won the trip and prize, but sad to find their captain dead with no pulse or will.

Okay: The author’s tone is very sad. Overall the poem the attitude could be love because

everyone is theire just for the captain to show appreciation. And depressed someone died.

Needs more/Not close: The attitude and the plot does not change because it

starts and ends the same.

STEP FIVE: SHIFTS Good:

The attitude went from happy and everybody cheering to sad because the captain died.

The poet shifts in attitude from happy in lines 1-4 to sad in lines 5-8. Then repeats this in lines 9-12 (happy) and 14-16 (sad)

Okay The change in attitude stays the same and also time.

What changes is the description of the captain at each stanza.

The time shifts along with the stanzas Poem shifs from end rhyme to not rhyming throug out

the whole poem Needs more/Not close

No shifts

STEP SIX: TITLE REVISITED Good:

I was half right. It is about a captain and ship, but it wasn’t saving anybody. The captain was dead.

Okay: I was correct on my prediction and the poem

did describe what I had originally believed and thought. My prediction overall was correct.

Needs more/Not close: My prediction was right

STEP SEVEN: THEME Good:

The theme is that the enormous terrifying sea is dangerous because it even killed the captain.

The theme in this poem is that life isn’t fair, and that to obtain something you need to give something away. In this poem, an example was winning a battle and then having someone die.

Okay The purpose of this poem was probably to show how

much he loves him and wanted to show it. He also has good meaning toward this story to show how even the happiest days can go wrong.

Needs more/Not close: The theme was about them being on a boat for a long

time. It wasn’t pretty on the boat. The people were frightened and scared.

STEP EIGHT: DEVICES Good:

Rhyme: gets one point across to the next Head/dead, still/will, won/done

Okay The devices used were illiteration, end rhyme,

rhyme. Illiteration – flag is flung for End rhyme – head/dead Rhyme – near/hear

Needs more/Not close: The device of the poem is the captain because it

is the main character There is figurative language in the poem like

head/dead

MARKING UP THE TEXT - POOR

MARKING UP THE TEXT - POOR

MARKING UP THE TEXT - OKAY

MARKING UP THE TEXT - GOOD

MARKING UP THE TEXT - GOOD

MARKING UP THE TEXT - GOOD