THE HAPPY RAINBOW FUN-TIME REVISION SLIDE SHOW

BADDA-BING

PERIOD 1

1

Bannister

Matz

DiCredicoGorman

Malinchock

Padilla

Taskin

2Brunnquell

Ross

Dilatush

Keswa

McMullen

Peltekis

3

Godshall

Aptekar

Dziekonski

KhosaMcQuillen

Sheung

4

MannAbrahamson

Goldstein

KotheMulholland

Tarasiuk

PERIOD 2

1

Carlson

MillerGong

Lyon

Rosario

2

Goldstein

SinesiKirschner, J.McLaughlin-

McMannis

3Kirschner, A

WolfTalbot

Pannepacker

Schmidt

4

Kruse

Zingarini

Garven

Richards

Rothstein

PERIOD 6/7

1

ABRAMS

DEARDEN

ESPLIN

KOGAN

PECKVILLANTE

2

COHEN DIENSTMAN

FELS

KUIKENMcKESSEY

SINGH

3

DEVITT

KELLER

HARTLEYLEDBETTER

REDNOR

WANG

4

DURKINLAGUNTINAKIRKPATRICK

MANGANO

SELVAN

WONG

PERIOD 9

1

BALAJIMORRISONRABINOWITZ

BARRY

EICK

MICCIOLO

2

CAREY

NORDENRUBINO

CAMPBELL

FOOTE

O’BRIEN

3

COHEN

OLIVARI

STRESSCARDUCCI

MARQUES

PIETROWSKI

NORDVEIT

4

KANER

PRICEZAVODNICK

CREWMcLAUGHLIN

SOYKA

GREEN = GO FOR IT!Excellent Critical Writing With

Researched, Well-Reasoned Arguments

• Uses original ideas (doesn’t let the critic take the lead)

• Uses Text {PROOF} from the short story in their arguments. Expands and analyzes that {proof} often.

• Frames all quotes from critics.

• Uses present tense when criticizing literature.

Yellow = Slow Down and Revise

Unbalanced, Unproven Arguments With Possible Faulty Reasoning. • Allows the critics to lead at times.

• Needs more detailed Text {PROOF} from the short story.

• Needs to cite author in detail.

• Needs to cite author and page number when paraphrasing.

• An alarming number of grammatical and formatting errors.

Red = Stop and Rethink. Inadequate Evidence and/or Failed

Reason• The critics take the lead. Article is

basically a summary of what critics think, rather than an original literary research article.

• Little to no actual textual {PROOF} to back up arguments.

• Appears rushed and unclear often.• Contains multiple typos and mechanical

errors.

CONCISE

• MAKE “TO BE” YOUR ENEMY.

• “IS” “ARE” “WAS” “WERE”

• WRITING BECOMES CLEARER

• LESS PASSIVE VOICE (PV)

CONCISE

The plot of the story is based

almost entirely on a group of

three young girls that enter the

store. [20 words]

CONCISE

The plot follows a group of

three young girls who

enter the store. [13 words]

[FRAMES]

• Make it clear if a critic or the author is writing the quote.

• Make you sound clearer and prepared for your reader.

[FRAMES]

[FRAMES]

[FRAMES]

[FRAMES]

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[FRAMES]

TEXT {PROOF}• Increases your LOGOS

• Makes your argument more convincing

• Makes it clear that you KNOW the story and you KNOW your stuff!

TEXT {PROOF}

TEXT {PROOF}

TEXT {PROOF}

TEXT {PROOF}

TEXT {PROOF}

PARAPHRASEHelps your reader follow the important action. Cites the AUTHOR’s last name, not the critic’s.

Cites the PAGE NUMBER also.

EX: (London 7).

Keeps you from sounding pretentious

Effective use of Conciseness (C)

PARAPHRASE

PARAPHRASE

INTRO HOOKHelps your reader engage the material.

Uses a plausible connection. - Author quote- Metaphor- Comparison

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