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TRANSCRIPT
Bring me the man
that doesn’t lie
Yes your lordship
The king sends a nobleman out to fetch the man who never lies, who is named Mamad. Mamad promises he has never lied and won’t lie in the future. The king sees the man as a key asset.
Is it true you never lie? And
you won’t in the future?
That is true my
king
You will be a key asset
to the monarchy
One of the kings noblemen, James was becoming tired of been out of the limelight. He decided to plot how to get rid of Mamad
James suggests that the king should go hunting The king sends Mamad to the summer palace to tell the Queen to prepare a feast, since he was joining her for lunch.
James tells the King that it might not be the best day to go hunting. The king forgets he has sent Mamad to the summer palace, James’s
plan is working
Great idea James
My king, shall we go hunting
today?
Maybe it’s not the best day for
hunting
Maybe you’re right
James
Murder?Beat him?
We need to get rid of
him
Too messy, we won’t harm him….
for now
Mamad this, Mamad that
Mamad, go tell the Queen to
prepare a feast Yes your majesty
I could change the size of the slide because the characters size cannot increase due to the backdrop, so a slide size change is probably beneficial.
This will then create room to increase the size of other slides on the page.
The colours used could be changed on the text bubbles and description boxes on all or a few of the slides, black would be more of a striking colour and would catch the consumers eye better. On the other hand, Black may take some of the focus off the illustrations, this may need to be reviewed.
The Queen is waiting at the summer palace Mamad tells the Queen to prepare a feast for the King, the Queen says she’ll prepare one.
Mamad returns and expects praise, instead he gets accused of lying
James, who has spent the last few years tainting the kings mind, tells the King to punish Mamad.
The king orders Mamad’s execution, the man who now feels two feet tall
The crowd shout for Mamad to be burnt. The man who never lies gets burnt at the stake.
Summer Palace
Your lady, the King is coming
for lunchOk, I shall
prepare now I’m back
BURN HIM!!
You are charged
under the lying to the
king act
PRESSUREThink of the food
he’s wasting
The man who never
lies?!?
Mamad!!
James for
king
You are sentenced to DEATH!
James hatches a plan to kill the king with his rogue gang of ‘noblemen’
The Nobleman James offers the King some wine, but has poisoned the beverage. The king accept and drinks the wine, he starts to feel
ill.
The king is on his death bed and expresses his desire for James to be the king and rule Winchester.
The King’s funeral is the following day. Everyone in Winchester is sad, except James, who is using it as an opportunity to show off his
new title.
James officially takes up the King position and tells everyone to bow down to him and brands them ‘peasants’.
King James uses his power for bad and demanded taxes out the poor of Winchester.
weep
I AM KING JAMES, BOW TO ME PEASANTS!!
How do I get rid of the
king?
Beat Him?
Murder?
You might be right this
time
Would you like some wine my
king?
Yes please James
James…I…want…you…to…be…king My sweet
king, please
don’t die…
Slowly
Taxes Taxes Taxes
£
Too many of my slides have a picture of the castle, a rotoscoped or comic book effect background could be better for the effectiveness of the slide. However, just one of the castles could be on the slide and the characters could be increased in size, along with the speech bubbles.
The ‘£’ doesn’t need to be in there because King James is saying “Taxes”. However, this is a minor change I will have to undertake to improve my production poece.
Eventually people are tired of James’s behaviour so start an uprising against the Monarchy. Due to James only having a few noblemen and no army, it’ll be easy to overthrow him as king.
The resistance confront James to get him to back down without a fight. James, who’s currently power crazy, believes he can take on a whole army.
The army overthrow James and have an equal share in the Monarchy. James’s head is put on a spike and paraded through the streets of Winchester, cheers flood the streets of the City, as well as James’s blood.
You have abused your power, stand
down or be captured
I’ll take you all on!!How do we overthrow the
monarchy?
The kingdom is ours
The backing colours of the characters don’t ft into the colour of the background, this makes the characters look block like compared to the background. This could be a change I need to carry out for the benefit of my production piece.
The soldier could be removed or moved down. It looks like he’s levitating next to the tower instead of standing next to it.