Peer Feedback On Rough Drafts Of Music Video

After I had composed my two videos in the basic way they would be presented, I uploaded them to Youtube and partook in hot-desking. Here I

let peers of my class with a similar taste in genre to my music video watch and evaluate both of

my videos, both asking what they liked about it and how it could be improved, and which one

they wholly preferred. The next few slides shows their responses to my questions and how I will

respond to their feedback.

1.) Which video/ version of the video do you prefer?

The first one

The first one

The second one

Second one

First one

Although not much difference most preferred the first video. I was happy with this, as it was the one I also liked the most but I wanted them to judge themselves which one was better and easier to follow.

2.) What do you like about the video?

The story goes really well with the song and the rewind effect makes you think a bit more

It’s got a clear narrative with imagery that illustrates the lyrics

The rewind version makes you consider the storyline, and conveys more sad emotions.

Story reflects song. The narrative works well

Narrative works better with the first but the song is better with the second

I'm glad my audience picked up on the lyrics matching the visuals, showing my choice of imagery conveyed my narrative and linked with the son. They also show they understand the narrative and that its not set out how you think it would, making you think back on it after you’ve watched it, which was the intended effect to have on my audience. They do comment on how the reverse version makes you consider this more, yet I think if I include more hints as to time going backwards in my first video, this may be a bit clearer.

3.) Does the editing fit with the music video?

Yes

Yes

Yes

Yes

Yes

This plain but informative answer was useful in knowing my choice of continuity editing within each of the individual scenes works with the plot of the video.

4.) Does the videos suit my genre of indie music?

Yes

Yes

Yes

Yes

yes

Again, my feedback shows I have explored enough into my indie genre and to what it entails, and included it enough through my use of micro elements. The fact they've all said yes lets me understand that the audience have recognised my attention to detail through clothing and instruments they use when performing, that convey an indie genre that they can recognise and identify with.

5.) Should I include lip synch in my video? There are only two shots of it at the moment but should I include more?

Or get rid of it entirely?

Get rid of it because it doesn’t fit in that well and the lips don’t sync up very well because you have slowed it down.

I wouldn’t, as it would interrupt your quite complicated narrative.

I wouldn’t, because it interrupts the storyline.

I wouldn’t but maybe try not including lip synching, the story is much stronger

Get rid of it, is he in a band or something? I don’t understand

Even though I still had more performance pieces to include within both videos, I will listen to my feedback and have decided to discard it all together. I agree, it stands out too much against the narrative and in doing so interrupts your focus on the story, especially as its quite a confusing concept. Also what I thought would work well with the slowing down of the motion would have possibly worked well if I kept to my original idea of using slow motion throughout whole video, yet against everything else in normal speed, it just looks a bit odd.

6.) What could be improved on? In footage, editing or effects on the video?

I wasn’t to sure on the long shots when we are reminded of the story, I thought the computer had frozen

In the part where you have loads of clips going fast near the end get rid of the ones where it stops on the boys face and the flower.

I wouldn’t have the images at the end, perhaps replace them with a high speed montage of these moments as video clips, like a flashback.

I’d have that same pace, but maybe a new story, so like, the story’s resolution.

Sometime the narrative was a little confusing

I feel the main issue with this question was the way in which premier pro played the last sequence of footage in my video. On every beat the shot should change and overall should give an overview of the relationship. However this is fine once the video is exported, leading me to decide to hold another focus group and ask this question again when the video works correctly. For the comment that says the narrative can be confusing I feel I need to alliterate and emphasise the fact that the narrative is playing in reverse, either through the use of extra footage or my style of editing, maybe repeating parts as flashbacks.

Acting upon my feedback I have decided to:● Remove the performance footage entirely from my video. My feedback clearly shows it

doesn't fit with the rest of my video and disrupts the narrative rather that flow between. Instead, for the performance shot at the first point the guy starts singing, as I didn’t collect enough footage in the park I have decided to go out again and re-shoot some establishing shots of the surrounding area of the bench. I feel this will introduce the scene and setting more in which the relationship revolves around in the circle narrative, and will work better than re-shooting the performance concept of my video. Because my video has such a strong narrative I now want to completely focus my attention on conveying this clearly to my audience.

● Filming clocks to illiterate narrative. From some of the comments I got on the narrative of the story, they still said it wasn't clear in places. Therefore to emphasise my narrative is playing in reverse of the sequence of events of the couples relationship, I have decided to film some clocks and watches. I might experiment with the use of time laps on these and then reverse them, showing the clock turning quickly back in time that links with the lyrics of the song. This should alliterate the aim of my video and also convey the passing time in thee couples relationship.

● Reduce the length of some of my shots. Although the comments made about the long shots at the end of my music video was a glitch when playing it through premier pro, there are some shots that need reducing. Especially the shot in the park with all three people, I think this would work better if I reduced the length of it, or change shot a bit more frequently to add variation. Therefore I have decided to look back over my footage to see what I could fit in to find a solution to this, as well as in other scenes, to create a cleaner cut of my video.

Acting upon my feedback I have decided to:● Remove the performance footage entirely from my video. My feedback clearly shows it

doesn't fit with the rest of my video and disrupts the narrative rather that flow between. Instead, for the performance shot at the first point the guy starts singing, as I didn’t collect enough footage in the park I have decided to go out again and re-shoot some establishing shots of the surrounding area of the bench. I feel this will introduce the scene and setting more in which the relationship revolves around in the circle narrative, and will work better than re-shooting the performance concept of my video. Because my video has such a strong narrative I now want to completely focus my attention on conveying this clearly to my audience.

● Filming clocks to illiterate narrative. From some of the comments I got on the narrative of the story, they still said it wasn't clear in places. Therefore to emphasise my narrative is playing in reverse of the sequence of events of the couples relationship, I have decided to film some clocks and watches. I might experiment with the use of time laps on these and then reverse them, showing the clock turning quickly back in time that links with the lyrics of the song. This should alliterate the aim of my video and also convey the passing time in thee couples relationship.

● Reduce the length of some of my shots. Although the comments made about the long shots at the end of my music video was a glitch when playing it through premier pro, there are some shots that need reducing. Especially the shot in the park with all three people, I think this would work better if I reduced the length of it, or change shot a bit more frequently to add variation. Therefore I have decided to look back over my footage to see what I could fit in to find a solution to this, as well as in other scenes, to create a cleaner cut of my video.