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Writing Captions that Captivate
Lizabeth A. Walsh, MJE
Worth a 1,000 words… oh no, they’re not!
Photographs are worth so much more than that
Photographs represent: The events that happenedThe people who attended themThe action they captureThe reactions to what happenedThe emotions associated with themThe history of the school and the communityThe memories of the year
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What structures can I use to caption? Identification (Who?) Explanation (Who is doing what?) Detailed (When, where, why, or how?) Storytelling (Let the picture talk)
IdentificationIdentification
When you’re trying to get more people into the book, you’re going to have many smaller photos with less design space for large captions.
Find a place for telling us who those people are, and do it consistently.
ExplanationExplanation Tell the reader who is doing what in a
single sentence.
Use present tense to capture the “action.”
Don’t even think about writing a “duh factor” caption. Sophomore Susie Smith smiles for the camera.
Really? We had no idea what she was doing. Thanks, pal. We were lost without your brilliant explanation.
DetailedDetailed Provide the 5 Ws and H for the
photograph, giving readers context and providing historical value.
Use one present tense sentence for the action (Explanation portion) and another in past tense for the remaining details. Why mix tenses? The present tense captures
action, and the past provides information about an event that has clearly already happened.
Sophomores Tricia Keane, Helen Lanning, Liz Grabo Trainers Emily Grady, senior; and Sam Grabo, junior; running back Lawrence Nichols, senior
Dance team juniors2006 Pioneer Conference Champions
CONFERENCE CHAMPS. With unprecedented support from
both the school and the community, the football team rallied from a 20 point deficit
to defeat Fairview 28-27 in the conference championship
game on Nov. 3. Fans were brought to their feet when
injured running back Lawrence Nichols returned to the game after pulling the a calf muscle in the opening minutes of the
second half.
CONFERENCE CHAMPS. With unprecedented support from both the
school and the community, the football team rallied from a 20 point
deficit to defeat Fairview 28-27 in the conference championship game on Nov. 3. Fans were brought to their
feet when injured running back Lawrence Nichols returned to the
game after pulling the a calf muscle in the opening minutes of the second
half.
StorytellingStorytelling
All of the above parts of the detailed caption
PLUS
A quote from an interview about the event Now, the picture talks- it’s like turning
up the sound and hearing the audio to match the video.
CONFERENCE CHAMPS. With unprecedented support from both
the school and the community, the football team rallied from a 20
point deficit to defeat Fairview 28-27 in the conference championship game on Nov. 3. Fans were brought
to their feet when injured running back Lawrence Nichols returned to
the game after pulling the a calf muscle in the opening minutes of the second half. “When we were
presented the championship trophy, all I could think of was the speech that Jon Germuska gave in
the locker room at half-time. He talked about believing in ourselves. After all the setbacks as a result of
injuries, we showed that we are a team that has character. We had another chance to prove that we
are a team that never backs down and never gives up. It was
awesome to come from behind and beat Fairview,” said kicker Jonah
Martin, senior.
Sophomores Tricia Keane, Helen Lanning, Liz Grabo Trainers Emily Grady, senior; and Sam Grabo, junior; running back Lawrence Nichols, senior
Dance team juniors2006 Pioneer Conference Champions
CONFERENCE CHAMPS. With unprecedented support from both the
school and the community, the football team rallied from a 20 point deficit to
defeat Fairview 28-27 in the conference championship game on
Nov. 3. Fans were brought to their feet when injured running back Lawrence
Nichols returned to the game after pulling the a calf muscle in the opening
minutes of the second half. “When we were presented the championship trophy, all I could think of was the
speech that Jon Germuska gave in the locker room at half-time. He talked
about believing in ourselves. After all the setbacks as a result of injuries, we
showed that we are a team that has character. We had another chance to prove that we are a team that never
backs down and never gives up. It was awesome to come from behind and beat Fairview,” kicker Jonah Martin,
senior, said.
Start by headlining itStart by headlining it(aka Lead-in)(aka Lead-in)
Should be clever
Go beyond the expected
Have a clear visual-verbal connection
Remember to design your spread to accommodate whatever types of captions you’re writing.
PracticePractice List words or
phrases that come to mind
Think of something clever- not just “Hey, look at that kid in the glasses!”
So now that I know what they So now that I know what they are, how do I create them?are, how do I create them?
Follow the A-B-C method Action Lead Basic Information Complementary Information
A — Action Lead-In B — Basic Information C — Complementary Information
Practice TimePractice TimeWho: Seniors Amy Antal and Josh FouseWhat: Amy paints Josh’s face in blue and gold at the “Rally in the Alley.”Where: The “Rally in the Alley” started in 2003 and was held at a senior’s home. The entire school was invited to a barbeque before each home game.When: The picture was taken before the first home football game of the season against the Canon MacMillan, “Big Macs.” Detail: The final score was 33-14.
Fine tune your writingFine tune your writing Make each caption begin in a
different way. Variety is spicy.
Re-write your caption using each of the following grammatical approaches: Adjective, adverb, infinitive,
preposition, verbal, causal, and conditional
Adjective - Real crowd pleasers, the drum line performs “Martian Mambo” before the Westlake game.
Adverb - Colorfully dressed as aliens, the drum line performs “Martian Mambo” before the Westlake game.
Infinitive - To engage the crowd before the Westlake game, the drum line performs “Martian Mambo” in alien attire.
Prepositional - Before the Westlake game, the drum line performs “Martian Mambo” in alien attire.
Verbal (Present Participle) - Playing the “Martian Mambo,” the drum line, dressed in alien attire, warms up the pre-game crowd.
Verbal (Past Participle) - Dressed as aliens, the drum line performs “Martian Mambo” before the Westlake game.
Causal - Since the half-time show had a Star Wars theme, the drum line previewed the performance for the pre-game crowd with the “Martian Mambo.”
Conditional - If the drum line performed their pre-game warm-up in alien attire, the Band Boosters promised the percussionists five extra large pizzas.
Now add Now add the remaining detailsthe remaining details
Why: The number 44 on Amy’s face was to support her friend, senior running back and linebacker, Tyler Beitel.
How: Students painted up, cooked dogs and burgers, and listened to student rock bands.
The tradition has moved several times. This particular picture was taken at senior Angelea Kuruc’s grandmother’s house, the location of this year’s “Rally in the Alley.”
Quote from Antal: “The worst part was when the paint dried and cracked all over everyone’s skin. It really hurt.”
Now mix things upNow mix things up
How about just an identification & quote?
Could we just use the quote and explain a bit afterwards to give it context?
How about moving the quote up in the caption and moving some details down?
Revise & Proof for Revise & Proof for QualityQuality
Check all name spellings
Verify quoted material is accurate
Remove any non-specific pronouns - many, some, a few
Make sure that you read the entire spread- only one caption per spread may use a particular lead sentence style
More Quality ConcernsMore Quality Concerns
More Quality ConcernsMore Quality Concerns Consider retaining the spelled out class
descriptions (freshman, sophomore, junior, senior) because it doesn’t interrupt eye flow for the reader.
Retain subject-verb order in attributions “I like pie,” sophomore Susie Smith said.
Consider embedding attribution within longer quotes, so everything doesn’t end in said. “I like pie because it’s so yummy,” sophomore
Susie Smith said. “My favorite is cherry, but really, I’ll eat almost any flavor.”
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