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English as a Second Language, 0510, Paper 1, Grade CKey:

Question

Student ResponseExaminers Comment

This candidate demonstrates a solid performance at Grade C. There is evidence of

straightforward understanding and communication skills. The candidate is able to deal with

texts of varying lengths and difficulty relatively well.


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Exercise 1

Read the following advertisement about wild animal parks, and then answer the questionson the opposite page.


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(a) What kind of parks are Port Lymper and West Coast Holiday Parks?

holiday parks [1]

(b) How much do the furry friends usually cost?

$2.99 [1]

(c) What do the keepers offer on the programme daily?

a talk telling you about the animals they look after. [1]

(d) What is the latest time for entrance to the parks each day?

3 p.m. [1]

(e) What can teachers access to help their students?

www.westcoasttholparks.net [1]

(f) Which park would you contact for more information?

Port lymper [1]

[Total: 6]

The candidate began this first exercise quite confidently although the response to Question(a) is incorrect. The candidate has given the general idea of holiday parks rather than the

correct response, animal parks.


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Exercise 2

Read the article below and then answer the questions on the opposite page.


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(a) What would be the teams double world record achievement?

be the first all-womens team in the world to have reached both poles. [1]

(b) How will Anns weight differ from normal at the end of the expedition?

2 K less [1]

(c) What aspect of the expedition do scientists particularly want to study?

human endurance at extreme cold temperatures. [1]

(d) How does Pom Olivers age compare to Carolines?

well... Pom olivers is fatter than Caroline. her weight is 15K more than Caroline. [1]

(e) What benefit will Ann Daniels get from the extra weight?

He has a bigger layer of insulation to potect her from cold. [1](f) What is Zo Hudsons role in the expedition?

is the team base-camp manager on the walk to the north pole. [1]

(g) Why are multivitamins preferable to fresh fruit on the expedition?

too heavy to carry [1]

(h) How do they use a natural resource to prepare their meals?

hot drinks made from boiling snow [1]

(i) Give two details of the physical challenges the team will endure during the expedition.

suffer temperatures lower than -40C [1]walk 500 miles on moving pack ice [1]

[Total: 10]

This was a challenging exercise for both extended and core candidates. This candidate has

achieved a good score of 7 from 10 available marks, demonstrating clear understanding of

both the stimulus text and the requirements of the questions.

The response to Question (d) seems to demonstrate a misunderstanding of the question. This

candidate has referred to the weight of the two women rather than the difference in their ages.

In the response to Question (g) too heavy to carry it is not made clear whether the vitamins

or the fruit are too heavy.


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Exercise 3

Martin Gobos is a very keen explorer. At 17 years of age, he is one of the youngest full-timeexplorers in Argentina. He is one of the team of professional explorers who work in theEXTEC department of the River Plate Exploring Company. Martin lives in the capital city,Buenos Aires, at 141 San Reno Drive. Unfortunately, there is no telephone connection at hishouse, but he does have an email address: [email protected], and he checkshis email daily while at work.

Martin works with a team of older explorers (there are 10 members, including himself) and islearning all the time. He left school only a year ago and describes his work as challengingbut enjoyable. The country the team will be visiting is the Democratic Republic of Congo incentral Africa. They will explore a section of the Congo river and plot a route along its banksas far as possible using new computer technology to update the current maps of the region.They are due to leave in three months time, in July, and are very busy planning for themission. They will spend about 50% of the time living in huts but will also need to stay intents when they are exploring away from the base camp.

While at school, Martin gained experience by joining the Young Explorers Club. After three

years he became President of the club and when he left school it had become the secondmost popular after-school club, football being the most popular.

Before an explorer goes on a journey, a personal information form has to be completed.

Imagine you are Martin. Fill in the form on the opposite page, using the informationabove.


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PERSONAL INFORMATION FORM

SECTION A

Full name: Martin Gobos

Male/Female (delete whichever does not apply)

Age group (please circle): under 20 / 20-30 / 30-40 / over 40

Home address: Buenos Aires, at 141 San Reno Drive

Home country: Argentina

Email address: [email protected]

Occupation: works in the EXTEC department

Name of employer: EXTEC

Previous experience: in school joined to the young explorers club

Number of people in team (please tick box):

1-9 10-19 20-29 Over 30

When you plan to leave for your next trip (please tick box):

within 2 months 2-4 months 5-6 months

Destination of trip: visiting the democratic Republic of congo in africa

SECTION B

In the space below, write one sentence about where you will live during your time andone sentence about the reason why the mission is going to that area.

To explore a section of the congo river and plot a route along its banks as far asspossible using new computer technology to update the current maps of the region.We will spend 50% of the time living in huts, also in tents when they are exploringfar from the base camp.

[Total: 10]


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This response displays an average performance with the candidate scoring about half marks.

There are problems with theAddress which is in the wrong order and inclusion of the

unnecessary preposition at. Occupation andEmployer Name are inaccurate but the rest of

Section A is correct. In Section B, the first sentence does not show clear sentence

construction and it is not written in the first person. The second sentence would have been

awarded a mark if it did not contain the error they are exploring in the second half.


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Exercise 4

Read the speech by the Mayor of a large city who is talking about his ideas to encouragerecycling the waste that we currently throw away.

Mayors Speech

Good morning to you all. Its nice to be here today to talk to you about the vital need tomanage our waste in a better way.

Did you know that about 73% of household waste in this city is landfilled, buried in a hole inthe ground, usually outside the city? Around 20% is burned, and only 7% is recycled. Withlandfill sites filling up, and public unease about incineration growing, something will have tochange soon.

I wonder if you have ever seen a landfill site? Over one million tons of waste each year isdeposited in landfill sites around this city. This is not a pretty sight. As this figure grows everlarger, we are becoming more concerned about toxic compounds entering the groundwater

system. We really dont know how much damage we are all doing. And because the waste isburied, we think that the problem is buried too. We do, of course, take great care to line thewaste collection points with protective material so that there isnt any leakage, but it doeshappen.

Medical research is now suggesting that there is a small risk of birth defects in thepopulation living within a 2 kilometre radius of a landfill site. Its not proven yet, but this is aworrying suggestion. Those people living near to a site also report occasional unpleasantsmells, even though a deodoriser is used on the perimeter of the sites to neutralize smells.

It does seem fairly simple for us to address our growing waste mountain. If we could makemore people aware of this problem and how relatively easy it is to reduce waste, we could alllive in a cleaner environment.

I am hoping that we can encourage people to separate waste for recycling. For example, taxreductions will be given to those who consistently sort their waste out into paper, plastic,glass and green material. We should use financial benefits to encourage more people totake notice of how seriously we regard this problem. We could introduce educationalprojects for schoolchildren to help raise the profile of waste management among theyounger generation. We will also offer more funds to local councils to set up expensivewaste recycling facilities, with the aim that within the next fifteen years at least half of ourcitys waste will be recycled and put to good use.

There is another incentive which I will use in the next five years if I have to. I think that if thegeneral public do not prove that they can manage their own waste effectively, I will introducea pay as you throw metered home collection system. Basically, the more harmful to the

environment your waste is, the more you will pay to have it removed. Also, if its shown thatyou have not sorted your waste efficiently, you will pay more for it to be taken away. Theseare not measures that I want to introduce, but they will surely get the message across tothose people who care little about what they throw away.


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You are a reporter writing an article about the Mayors speech. Prepare some notes to useas the basis of your article.

Make three points under each heading.

[Total: 6]

In response to Exercise 4, the candidate has again achieved half of the available marks. The

incorrect answers are either not precise enough or they do not correspond to the headings

under which they are placed.


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Exercise 5

Imagine that your newspaper wants you to follow up these notes with a short article.

Look at your notes in Exercise 4 above. Using the ideas in your notes, write a summaryof the proposals the Mayor is making.

Your summary should be one paragraph of no more than 70 words. You should useyour own words as far as possible.

about 73% of household is landfilled, 20% is burned and only 7% is recycele. Thiscreate big nasty waste mountains; This waste is Throwing toxic compounds to the

ground water system. Medical research suggest That in a radius of 2 km. There is arisk of birth defects, to prevent These to happen They will be tax reductions forthosewho separate waste for recycling (glass, paper and plastic), also financial benefits willbe made to encourage more people, and finally educational projects for school children.

[Total 4]

The summary writing is over the recommended word length so cannot be awarded full marks

even though the candidate has shown some effort to paraphrase. A capital letter is not used in

the first sentence and, in general, capitalisation is haphazard throughout the summary. There

is, however, some sense of order and sequencing so that the candidate has been awarded two

of a possible four marks.


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Exercise 6

Your school/college is planning to invite a famous person to give a speech at the next PrizeDay.

Think of any famous person you would like to invite. Write an article for yourschool/college magazine giving your suggestion.

Your article should be about 100-150 words long.

Dont forget to include:

who the person is

what you admire about her/him

why you think others in your school/college will approve of your choice

You will receive up to 5 marks for the content of your article, and up to 5 marks for the styleand accuracy of your language.


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School managers...I think that the school should invite, to the next prize day, Bill Gates, because thisman is one of the richiest person on the globe. He always been an example ofimprovement and buissnes management for me, having all he has, he is not attach to hismoney, or maybe he is, but this fact can show all my friends that money is not all on

the world, I can bet that any of my friend is happier than this man, having not even1/30 of what he has. Telling us about his life can gives us an idea of how to make usrich, that is any kids dream, but it can also teach us a very important leson thatnobody can give us, and is the real value of money. These word can show all the schoolthat happiness is only inside yourself. nothing material can garantizes you to be happy.Thanks you for your time, I hope the person you choose, can help us in our future.

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For Exercise 6, the candidates response has been awarded 4 for content and 3 for language.

The rubric prompts are addressed in a satisfactory manner, and the register is appropriate.

There is some development but no paragraphing and multiple errors in spelling and

expression.


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Exercise 7

You have recently learned that there are plans to build a very large factory near yourneighbourhood.

Here are some comments from local people:

Write a letter to the head of your neighbourhood council giving yourviews about theplans.

Begin your letter Dear Councillor. Do not write an address.

Your letter should be about 100-150 words long.

The comments above may give you some ideas, but you are free to use any ideas of yourown.

You will receive up to 5 marks for the content of your letter, and up to 5 marks for the styleand accuracy of your language.


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Dear Councillor

I been told that a very large factory is going to be build in our neighbourhood. I thinkthat this plan cant be develop for three reasons. First, for many years thisneighbourhood had been a silent and peacefull place, full of kids playing on the greenareas. If the factory is build, some of these green areas will be replaces by big noisy

buildings. and the silent and peace will be replaced, by machines sounds and I littlebitt of danger. second, this is not an industrial zone, this is a living zone, factorys willbring a big amount of pollution for our environment and for ourselfs. if this factory isbuild, many others in some future will do the same and our air will be full of toxics. Andfinally, this neighbourhood will be a non save place for our babies, and kids. This planmay give job to many people on the surroundings, but is not logic to sell our peace andsilent for a job you can get far from our home. I will be pleased if you can dosomething to stop the beginning of a big industrial zone.

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For this response to Exercise 7 the candidate achieved 4 for content and 3 for language.

Although the candidates writing shows order, sequence and a clear sense of audience, thelanguage errors detract from the meaning and overall clarity of the writing.

These two writing exercises illustrate a C candidate who achieves a good score for the

content of the writing, but is unable to move into the next grade because of weaknesses in

language and general expression.

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