Assessment FeedbackWRITE ABOUT THE RELATIONSHIP BETWEEN GERALD AND SHEILA IN PAGES 27 – 28

Write down what you think you need to improve on in your PEELA writing

On your post-it note…

1. Embedding quotes

Make sure you include context and background information when embedding quotes

E.g. ‘she’s had a long, exciting and tiring day’

Embedded: Gerald asks the Inspector to excuse Sheila from the room as ‘she’s had a long, exciting and tiring day’.

2. Word classes

Noun Pronoun Verb Adverb Adjective

‘I must obviously be a selfish, vindictive creature’

‘It’s bound to be unpleasant and disturbing’

3. Write more…

At least 2 and a half sides of A4

4. In-depth analysis of the quote

‘It’s bound to be unpleasant and disturbing’

Gerald tells Sheila this when she insists on staying when the Inspector interrogates him about Eva Smith.

In your pairs, analyse this quote

Gerald responds to Sheila

‘You’ve been through it – and now you want to see somebody else put through it.’

Write your improvements paragraph

Using your feedback and what we have been through, choose one paragraph to improve