英文作文教學與批閱新竹女中應惠蕙

FAQs• When?• What?• How?

得高分的秘訣• Grammar 無誤• Content 新鮮• Structure 正確• Diction 難度提升• Pattern 多變化

句子加長 ( 一 )The alligator eats.The green alligator eats.The green alligator eats quickly.The green alligator eats quickly in the

pool.The green alligator eats quickly in the

pool at 9:00 A.M.The green alligator eats quickly in the

pool at 9:00 A.M. because he is hungry.

Who:What:How:Where:

When:

Why:

句子加長 ( 二 )

• + 對等連接詞 Mark was excited but nervous.

• + 關係子句 Mark was invited by Tracy to sit at her table, where they shared a pot of coffee.

• + 同位語 Mark, an extremely shy person around girls, was invited by Tracy to sit at her table, where they shared a pot of coffee.

句子加長 ( 三 )

• + 副詞子句 After Mark had coffee with Tracy, he decided to ask her out for a date.

• + 分詞片語 Mark, having butterflies in his stomach, did not know what to say.

• + 獨立分詞片語 His eyes closed, Mark was thinking about Tracy.

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Translation

• textbook 背佳句 comfortable, prosperous jobs matching rival• 百寶書 : sentence patterns 1, 2, 3• 句型 + 時事 *• 佳作 1

寫作的基本概念• paragraph punch• paragraph writing exercis

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• OWL• 普渡大學線上寫作教室

與課文相關的練習 ( 一 )• worksheets 1, 2, 3, 4• summary 1, 2, 3• prediction • letter of gratitude/apology• change point of view B3U10• picture books 1, 2, 3, 4, 5• comic strips• video• 學生作品• 利用課本動詞或句型

與課文相關的練習 ( 二 )

• The Difficulty I Have Ever Encountered• Describe a nervous situation• My Favorite Corner of the Campus• Working Holiday• The Person I Admire Most

分析學測作文題目• 題型• 文體 : Narration, Description• 字數• 評分標準

記敘文 (Narration)

• Beginning, Middle, End• Who? When? Where? What? How? Why?• 5 senses: see, hear, feel, smell, taste• theme• flashback• Quotation Marks• Imagery

常見的題目• A Memorable Event in Your Childhood• An Unforgettable Trip• My Ideal College Life• A Nightmare/Dream• The Thing I Treasured Most• Writing Prompts

描寫文 (Description)

• an experience• a person: appearance, personality, action• a place: clockwise, counterclockwise• a memory• an object

Example

• I grew tired after dinner.• As I leaned back and rested my head against

the top of the chair, my eyelids began to feel heavy, and the edges of the empty plate in front of me blurred with the white tablecloth.

Describing a Person

• general appearance

• top to down• clothing• a general

statement http://everystockphoto.com/photo.php?imageId=270544

Example of describing a person

He has a potbelly and a squeaky voice. His arms and legs are as thin as sticks. He wears funny-looking red shorts with big white buttons, and he has big round black ears and a pointed nose.

Describing a Place: Gathering Details

• Sensory details my team running onto the field (sight)

the crack of the bat (hearing)smooth wooden seats (touch)hot dogs cooking (smell)warm, buttery popcorn (taste)

• Factual details• Figurative details• Thoughts and feelings

Describing a Place: Organizing details

• Spatial Order from top to down from left to right clockwise/counterclockwise• Order of Importance from least important to most important from most important to least important

Example of describing a place

Located about fifty kilometers off the coast of Taitung County, Orchid Island is a magical spot set in the deep blue Pacific Ocean. From the air, the mountains peak out from the clouds as you approach the island. As your airplane lands, you can see the green fields and woods along with the blue water. On arriving, you can catch sight of fishing and farming villages. From the mountaintops to the crashing waves on the rocky beaches, Orchid Island, a paradise waiting to be discovered, seems frozen in time.

Another Example

Moist and salty, a chilly breeze blows in across the swells, bringing with it the pungent smells of seaweed and fish and making me pull my jacket a little closer. Sea spray transforms into fiery prisms as the waves splash against the shore, catch the last golden rays of sun, and toss them up like liquid crystals.

http://www.writeshop.com/blog/2010/02/23/choosing-vocabulary-to-describe-a-place/

Description Topics

• A Treasured Belonging• My Favorite Book• My Favorite Food• My Ideal College Life• Ten Years from Now

Weather

• one day• one burning hot day• one scorching day• on a freezing cold day• one foggy winter day• one gloomy/dark/cold rainy day• one beautiful sunny day

Color

• + light/dark• ruby red, bloody red• emerald green, jade green• sapphire blue, ocean blue, midnight blue• rosy pink• pitch dark• -colored• as red as blood, as white as snow

emotions

• I was happy... --> I was delighted with/by/at... --> I was overjoyed to... --> I was ecstatic about... --> I beamed with joy... --> I was thrilled at... --> I was on top of the world when... --> My heart leaped when...

emotions

• He was angry... --> He was furious at/about... --> He was outraged by... --> He lost his temper... --> He was red/hot with rage... --> He flew into a rage... --> He saw red...

emotions• He burst out crying/laughing.• He burst into tears/laughter.• He was green with envy.• He was overwhelmed by grief.• He trembled with fear/rage.• He had butterflies in his stomach.• He was struck dumb with fear.• He was stunned with grief and anger.• He was tongue-tied.• He was like a cat on hot bricks.

看圖寫作的步驟• narration & description• Who? What? Why? When? Where? How?• 5 senses• emotions• patterns: with + O + OC, 分詞構句 : Adj, S + V 倒裝句 : only when, not until• imagery (like, as...as)• quotation marks• flashback*• message

寫作拿高分的秘訣• 文法正確• 合主題• 字數至少 150字• 不要只用簡單句• 用一 ~ 二個分詞構句• 用一個 with + O + OC• 擅用比喻• 加一句引句，但注意標點• convey a message or teach a lesson

應避免的錯誤• 時態• Every persons was early.• Apple is good for health.• She had his book in his hand.• You eats lunch.• 人稱換來換去• Edit Checklist http://jc-schools.net/write/checklist.pdf

Expository

• paragraph punch• brainstorm• genres: giving examples/reasons, sequence,

comparison, cause and effect, problem and solution, definition

• 歷屆考題• 佳作

批改的方式• 有交就 100 分• A+, A, A-, ...• peer correction*• 只改要改的地方• 利用評分標準 *• 討論 common errors• 列出優點• 佳作分享

說明文拿高分的秘訣• 架構正確• 有主題句、結論句及轉折詞• 注意事項 *

Q & A