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    Writing the Analytical Essay

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    The run-down:1. Checking our assignment.

    2. Brainstorming ideas.

    3. Finding quotes.4. Creating a thesis.

    5. Establishing a structure.

    6. Starting with whats natural.

    7. Filling in the details.

    8. Compiling and Revising

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    Check the Assignment:Prompt:In a 3 page essay, address the following prompt: Apply

    Hemingways Iceberg theory of writing to our reading ofThe Sun

    Also Rises.Quote atleast3 examples of Hemingways Iceberg

    style, explainingthe effectiveness ofhis style and the hiddenmeaningunderneath the minimalist expression. In other words,

    describe 3 different areas where Hemingway uses

    understatement, and express an opinion on whether or not it is

    effective. Exemplary papers will explore the strength of

    Hemingways style,yetwilloffer a critique ofthe limits oftheminimaliststyle.

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    Check the rubric:A 10 has all the qualities of a 9, but is more mature instyle, strength of argument, and has no errors.

    A 9 displays a strong grasp of Papas style and offers

    relevant commentary on Hemingways use of

    understatement. It also explores the limits of

    understatement and what potentially is lost in the

    brevity of verse. It has a clear thesis and the argument

    is organized, makes sense, and cites the text. It has fewto no errors in punctuation, formatting (MLA), and is (at

    least) 3 pages in length.

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    So what we know so far: 3 pages

    At least 3 quotes

    Were talking about minimalism and

    understatement.

    We have to critique (show something

    negative) about minimalism.

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    Now, we brainstorm.

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    Qualities of Minimalist Style:

    Short, simple, declarative sentences.

    Terse dialogue.

    Lack of description.

    Rapid-fire dialogue.

    Eliminates extraneous details.

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    Positives /N

    egatives Engages reader by allowing

    them to interpret the text.

    Allows for different

    meanings, which appeals todifferent readersexperiences.

    Easy to read /straightforward.

    Allows for clever

    understatement / pithyremarks.

    Reader as participator instory.

    Can lead to

    confusion because

    of missinginformation.

    Lack of description

    can become boring.

    Lack of creative

    language can make

    prose bland.

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    Next, we add in quotes (only need 3).

    Positive examples:

    Youre not a moron.

    Youre only a caseof arresteddevelopment.(Harvey Stone, 51)

    Love you? I simplyturn all to jelly whenyou touch me. (LadyBrett Ashley, 34)

    Negative example:

    Im not joking you. I

    never joke people. Jokepeople and you make

    enemies. Thats what I

    always say. (Count M.,

    65)

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    Initial commentary: Youre not aClever, pithy statement creates engaging

    dialogue. Engaging way to reveal Cohns true problem - using aminor character to articulate what the major character is always

    thinking. Love you Shows, through indirect comment, Bretts truefeelings. By not overstating feelings, we are left to add in ourown experience in falling in love.

    Im not joking Choppy, dry sentences. Dialogue sounds

    forced, even a little clich (thats what I always say.). Also, veryambiguous what author is implying. Should we sympathize withthe Count, who we barely know, or Brett, who we know well andalready have some kind of connection with?

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    Slimming down those ideas into:

    Clever, pithy statements are engaging.

    Allows reader to add in true emotion.

    Ambiguous comments can lead to

    confusion.

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    Now, we write our thesis:

    Hemingways use of understatement

    creates pithy, clever moments that engage

    the reader by allowing space forinterpretation. But, he does this at the cost

    of misunderstanding and confusion, which

    can lead to unintentional tension in the

    text.

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    Before we begin our actual writing, a

    forethought from Strunk and White

    Write in a way that comes

    easily and naturally to you,using words and phrases that

    come readily to hand.

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    And Anne LamottFor me and most of the other

    writers I know, writing is not

    rapturous. In fact, the only way I

    can get anything written at all is to

    write really, really bad first drafts.

    The first draft is the child's draft,

    where you let it all pour out and

    then let it romp all over the place,

    knowing that no one is going to

    see it and that you can shape it

    later.

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    And next, we establish a structure.I. I

    ntroductionA. Broad introduction tomytopic.

    B. Relating tothe prompt.

    C. Big-time thesis,making bold claim.

    II. BodyParagraph

    A. WhatamI going toteach you today? (Purpose)

    B. Heres why whatI have to say is so good. (Concrete Detail)

    C. To helpyou understand. (Commentary)

    D. Toremindyou ofwhatI just said. OR Totransition nicely. (Summary)

    III. BodyParagraph

    A. Im going to elaborate on mypoint. OR Make a newpoint. (Purpose)

    B. Heres a genius insight. (Commentary)

    C. Heres some insurance, toprove Imright. (Concrete Detail)

    D. Heres how thatties in. (Commentary)E. Toremindyou ofwhatI just said. OR Totransition nicely. (Summary)

    IV. BodyParagraph

    A. Now, Im going toofferthe otherside ofthe story. (Purpose)

    B. Remember, this is whatIdalready established. (Commentary)

    C. But, now I wantto explore this. (More Commentary)

    D. Heres an example. (Concrete Detail)E. Letme explain whatImean. (Commentary)

    F. Now, doyou see how that works, too? (Commentary)

    V. Conclusion

    A. Although I just showed something different, I like whatIfirst said.

    B. Doyou remember? Oh, Ill tell you.C. And, justtomake you feel good, Im going to end with a nice, round, fulfilling sentence.

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    Then, we fill in the details with

    concise, efficient language.

    Vigorous writing is concise. A

    sentence should contain no

    unnecessary words, a paragraph

    no unnecessary sentences, for

    the same reason that a drawing

    should have no unnecessary

    lines and a machine nounnecessary parts.

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    Introductory Paragraph:A. Broad introduction to my topic.

    B. Relating to the prompt.

    C.Thesis, making bold claim.

    ErnestHemingways life mimickedthe adventures found

    in his novels.He lived big although he wrote, in a sense, very

    small.Henry James commentedon Hemingways life and writing

    by saying, Giants ofhis sortare trulymodest;there is much

    more behindHemingway's formthan people know.

    Perhaps Hemingways size anddepth ofexperience gave him

    the confidence to write in a sparse, understated style.

    Hemingways use ofunderstatement createspithy, clevermoments that engage the readerbyallowing space for

    interpretation.But, he does this atthe costofmisunderstanding

    and confusion, which can leadto unintentional tension in the

    text.

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    Body 1:

    A. What am I going to teach you today?

    (Purpose)

    B. Heres why what I have to say is so good.

    (Concrete Detail)

    C. To help you understand.

    (Commentary)

    D. To transition nicely.

    (Summary)

    Harvey, while talking/interrogating Cohn comments, Youre notamoron.

    Youre onlya case ofarresteddevelopment.

    (51)

    Hemingways use ofthe catchy, pithy, understated comment

    engages the readerin the text.His creativity is revealedthrough the brevity

    ofverse, and when executedproperly, his remarks are catchyand

    memorable sound-bites.

    While this commentmay have been loston Cohn, the readerfully

    understands Harveys biting remark. Andalthough this example is an

    explicit insult, Hemingways iceberg style is revealedthrough his choice

    in character.He chooses Harvey, not Jake, toarticulate an idea Jake

    thinks throughoutthe novel. ForHemingway, Jake is tootimidtovoice

    this opinion outright, butthrough an indirect commentfromHarvey,

    Hemingwayvalidates the readers suspicion thatCohn is socially

    underdeveloped.

    This example ofindirect charactercommentary is alsomimicked in

    Hemingways usage ofindirect comments, directlyfromthe character.

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    Body 2A. Im going to elaborate on mypoint.(Purpose)

    B. Heres a genius insight.

    (Commentary)

    C. Heres some insurance, toprove Imright.

    (Concrete Detail)

    D. Heres how thatties i

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