Work Options During Today’s MC Visit

Summer Rdg Notes submitted to Turnitin.com (if missed previous date)

SP ProposalAnnotated Bibliography WorkArgument #1: Turnitin.com submission (see Homework/Reminder

slide)

JOURNAL COLLECTION/CHECK

Required Entries: 23Focus: Entry Completion (5 pts per entry; 1 pt deduction for partially completed entries)

-Place Framework and Deadline Checklist on your desk (collection @ end of class)

Classwork: Sept. 16, 2015

Upon Return From Fall Break: Discuss Current Event LogTitle/Thesis (refer to handouts)Kahoot.it (Alvarez’s “IWBMA”Writing Workshop - Postponed until Tues., Sept. 29: Peer-review Requirements/PQP Argument #2 (Draft #1)

Classwork: Sept. 17, 2015

◦ Kahoot.it (focus: Alvarez’ “I Want to be Miss America”)◦ Current Event Reading Log Discussion◦ Writing Workshop Focus: - Peer-review Requirements/PQP Argument #2 (Draft #1)

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Sample Senior Project Research Paper Claims When children grow up watching horror movies there are many psychological effects in the form of family life, social

interactions and thought processes. My Response: Hummmm, okay… Not too shabby! I’m interested in the way this author is going to prove this...what avenues will be taken to support this claim. Work on crafting this with better word choice(in other words, build up your argument more). Keep chipping Away…Great Start.

The development of robotics is accelerating at a blistering pace; soon robots will be a part of our daily lives just like computers.

My Response: Hummmm, okay… needs some fine-tuning. This claim is too vague. Consider specifying a particular area. That would be more interesting and arguable to me. Keep chipping Away…you’re getting there.

With the rise of Coca-Cola products, the beverage industry is slowly evolving into a more competitive market. My Response: Hummmm, okay… this claim has peaked my interest. I’d like to see how this person is going to prove how Coca-Cola products have risen (reword “rise”), and how the ENTIRE industry has become more competitive as a result. Keep Chipping Away at this, though…Great Start!!

Set design is just as important as the actual production.My Response: Hummmm, okay… needs some fine-tuning. This claim is too obvious, and doesn’t engage me.

This author needs to build up the argument so that I will care about how the . Keep chipping Away…you’re getting there.

Improved Senior Project Research Paper

Claims• Cosmetologists are creative artists who make a difference in people’s lives, giving them the confidence and positive energy needed to make a

difference in the community.• My Response: Hummmm, okay… Much • improved. I hear where the author is going • with this and I appreciate her leap. • Cosmetologists=community-builder… I like it! • Work on the diction. Keep Chipping Away at this, • though…Much-improved!!• Although there are many acceptable pastimes for teens, there are far too many still finding themselves in trouble.• My Response: Hummmm, okay… needs a good bit of fine-tuning. This claim is too • vague; it lacks specificity. Further, the author needs to build up the claim in such a way that I’ll be engaged. Upon reading this for a 2nd

time, it reads in an incongruent fashion (acceptable pastimes ≠ too many in trouble. Not sure where you’re going with this. Keep chipping Away…

• Playing an instrument helps stimulate brain activity and improves intelligence.• My Response: Hummmm, okay… needs some fine-tuning. The author needs to craft this claim using • more engaging diction to engage me. Keep chipping Away…Almost!• Is good advertising a direct correlation to increased sales or does the product speak for itself?• My Response: Hummmm, okay… much fine-tuning. I can tell where the author is TRYING to go, but the argument is formed using an

interrogative, and it needs to be a definitive statement. Rephrase this so that you are building/crafting your argument in a concise and engaging manner. Keep chipping away…

Teacher Commentary on Titles and Theses

Copy:Student: Bennett CrawfordTitle: TOPSoccer: Effective at Fostering Physical, Mental, and Emotional Growth for the Disabled

My Commentary: Strengths: Clear focus (I know the whole scope of your paper before reading your claim, capped first letter in all major words, correct font size, didn’t boldImprovements Necessary: Rephrase “Effective At” Address “Why” TOPSoccer is effective

Thesis: TOPSoccer is adequately effective at fostering the physical, mental, and emotional growth and development of disabled athletes.

My Commentary: Strengths: 1 fluid sentence; passes the “So What” test; details talking points that will appear in the paperImprovements Necessary: “Athletes” is not mentioned in your title; “adequately effective” is redundant; Address “Why” TOPSoccer is effective

Title Formation Notes

A straightforward title is better than one that is cute or too clever. Keep it simple. The title shouldn’t leave your reader wondering, “What’s that about?” A colon is helpful. You might write the topic first,

followed by a colon, followed by your limited focus.The title should not be stated as a complete sentence.

Although it might suggest a question.Your title should be a concise version of your thesis

(identifying your paper’s topic and focus).

Title Formation Practice Activity

Copy the following faulty titles, note the title formation error(s) and revise:a. Credit Card Problemsb. Too Many Children Don’t Know What to Do in a Firec. Mystery Novels and Moviesd. Feeding the Diet Industrye. Escaping With the Wizard of Oz (hint: refers to Hot Air

Ballooning)

JE #23, Sept. 16: Reread Alvarez’s “IWTBMA” (pp.91-96)

Add the following questions and your responses to Qst 1-4. 5. Why does Alvarez put an explanation point after every word of the contestant’s introduction in paragraph 3? What does this unusual punctuation achieve?

6.In paragraph 4, Alvarez writes, “There they stood, fifty puzzle pieces forming the pretty face of America…though most of the color had been left out.” How does this figurative language reinforce the main idea of her essay? Miss America Pageant 2016

7. How does Alvarez’s concluding paragraph differ in tone from the first paragraph of her essay? What message does this difference in tone convey to the reader?

8. (Add vocabulary and definitions to Vocab. Log): acutesashayedinane

aspirationsprodigiessappydiaphonousgratifyingsallow

READING WORKSHOP:

Julia Alvarez’s “I Want to Be Miss America” (pp.91-96)Step #1: *Authorial Background Notes: Julia Alvarez (List a few notes in bullet-point form)*Cultural Background Notes: Dominican Culture: (List a few notes in bullet- point form)1. Where is the Dominican Republic located?2. How do the father’s words and actions fail to match when choosing his favorite contestants

in the Miss America pageants?3. How does watching the pageants broaden the sisters’ ideas about what they can do and be?4. Why does Alvarez say that the popularity of exotic, “ethnic” looks in the late ’60s “came too

late” for her and her sisters?Step #2:Apply SOAPSTone on your own paper

JE #22, Sept. 15: Alvarez’s “IWTBMA”

◦ Place textbook on desk◦ Alvarez and her sisters had a strong need to “look as if we belonged” (para. 1)? Why are some people so motivated not to express and celebrate their differences but to simply “fit in”?

Claim/Evidence Requirements For ALL Papers

Intro. ¶: attention-grabber (INTERESTING • FACT/STAT., anecdote, INTERESTING • quote)• Basic 2-3 sent. background summary of • the topic• Thesis: Central claim that you are • PROVING in your essay• Body ¶: Transitional word or phrase• Topic sentence• Lead in for Evidence (in the form of a • Quote or Passage or another • form of Concrete Detail • Commentary (brief explanation about how the evidence supports

claim) • Concluding ¶: A general statement that explains how your central • Claim/Argument/Thesis is resolved

ARGUMENT #2Argument Paper #2 Focus:Should the government pass the law that states that a male can be fined (made to pay money) if he wears his jeans below his waist in public? This law says a guy can actually get a ticket for wearing his jeans below his waist, thus exposing his underwear.Do you agree or disagree with this law? You will write a persuasive argument using pathos, ethos, and logos to prove your point.Step 1: Prewrite: Plan your paper using the SOAPSTone strategy and include 2-3 examples of Ethos, Pathos, Logos that you will use in your paper to further argue your point. Step 2: Draft 1 (Due Tuesday, Sept.15): Typed; Proper Format; 5 Vocab. Words from units 1-4; Examples of ethos, pathos, logos

RESEARCH PAPER DOCS:

◦DEADLINE CHECKLIST◦RESEARCH PAPER RATIONALE/PLANNING/Q&A/FORMAT

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GENERALLY APPLICABLE QUESTIONS ABOUT VOICE (Notes in Reading Section)1. Whose voice(s) do you hear? What words or lines identify these

voices for you?2. What voices are familiar or alien? What words, phrases, or lines

tell you that?3. What is the situation? How do you know that?4. Who is the audience? What helps you determine that?5. What is the speaker’s tone? How do you know?6. What is the speaker’s mood? How do you know?

READING RHETORICALLY• Prereading

• Getting ready to read• Surveying the text• Making predictions and asking questions• Introducing key vocabulary

• Reading• First reading• Looking closely at language• Rereading the text• Analyzing stylistic choices• Considering the structure of the text

• Post-reading• Summarizing and responding• Thinking critically

Adopted from the California State University Task Force Materials

WRITING RHETORICALLY• PREWRITING

• Reading the Assignment• Getting Ready to Write• Formulating a Working Thesis

• WRITING• Composing a Draft• Organizing the Essay• Developing the Content

• REVISING AND EDITING• Revising the Draft• Editing the Draft• Reflecting on the Writing

• EVALUATING AND RESPONDING• Grading holistically• Responding to Student Writing• Using Portfolios

Adopted from the California State University Task Force Materials

Research Paper Documents (links)

RationaleFrameworkDeadline ChecklistTitle Formation

Homework/RemindersSP Timeline Link

*Begin Looking for a mentor, and researching a topic for a 5-7 p. paper**Journal Check This Week* Wednes., Sept. 16: Due Arg. #2: Draft #1/Discuss committee-graded SP Resume Thurs., Sept. 17: Due: RP Framework Mon., Sept. 28: Due: Unit 4 Vocab. FC Tues., Sept. 29: Due: Turnitin.com by 11:30 p.m.- Publish Ready Draft (Most Significant MC Theme) Fri., Sept. 18: Meet in Library- MLA/Annotated Bibliography Fri., Sept. 18: Due Date: SP Proposal Fri., Sept. 18 @11:30 p.m.: Deadline #2 For Turnitin.com Summer Reading (if you missed D#1 for Summer

Rdg Chap Notes on Book #1) Thurs., Oct. 1- Turnitin.com Deadline by 11:30 p.m.: Argument #1: Publish-Ready Draft: Most Significant

MC Lit Theme TBD: Resume Revisions Thurs., Oct. 22: Book #2: Summer Rdg Chapter Notes submitted to Turnitin