DAY 13 IMPROVING

SENTENCES DAY 1

SEATING CHART: TEAM GLEN

Winning does not require people to be against someone else; people can reach their goals through cooperation just as well as they can through competition. Winning is not always the result of selfish individualism. People achieve happiness by cooperating with others to increase the happiness of all, rather than by winning at others’ expense. Ours is not a world in which the price of one person’s happiness is someone else’s unhappiness.

Assignment: When some people win, must others lose, or are there situations in which everyone wins?

Grace

Qamar

Yasmin

Laith

Fatina

Raghd

Amanda

Shahd

Door

Ustaz GlenMohammad

Ghamin Ahmad

Yara

Omar

Warm Up:1. Have your

homework out.2. Take 3 Minutes to

Brainstorm your answer.

SEATING CHART: TEAM RACHEL

Winning does not require people to be against someone else; people can reach their goals through cooperation just as well as they can through competition. Winning is not always the result of selfish individualism. People achieve happiness by cooperating with others to increase the happiness of all, rather than by winning at others’ expense. Ours is not a world in which the price of one person’s happiness is someone else’s unhappiness.

Assignment: When some people win, must others lose, or are there situations in which everyone wins?

Aseel

SabaNadine

Rita Kosty

IbrahimMazen

Sara A

Abdelrahman

Door

Leena

Ustaz GlenSara O

Reem

Warm Up:1. Have your

homework out.2. Take 3 Minutes to

Brainstorm your answer.

SEATING CHART: TEAM RADHAWinning does not require people to be against someone else; people can reach their goals through cooperation just as well as they can through competition. Winning is not always the result of selfish individualism. People achieve happiness by cooperating with others to increase the happiness of all, rather than by winning at others’ expense. Ours is not a world in which the price of one person’s happiness is someone else’s unhappiness.

Assignment: When some people win, must others lose, or are there situations in which everyone wins?

Adam

Saja

Leen

NadaElyaa

DanaZeina

Sara

Bana

Door

Khaled

Ustaz Glen

DinaNicole

Warm Up:1. Have your

homework out.2. Take 4 Minutes to

Brainstorm your answer.

SEATING CHART: TEAM ROBIN/ALLISON

Winning does not require people to be against someone else; people can reach their goals through cooperation just as well as they can through competition. Winning is not always the result of selfish individualism. People achieve happiness by cooperating with others to increase the happiness of all, rather than by winning at others’ expense. Ours is not a world in which the price of one person’s happiness is someone else’s unhappiness.

Assignment: When some people win, must others lose, or are there situations in which everyone wins? Warm Up:

1. Have your homework out.

2. Take 4 Minutes to Brainstorm your answer. Shaima

Serry

SewarGhaith

Zain

TalaNourNadeen

Bashar

AGENDA Warm Up: Essay Overview of Strategy Modifiers Wordiness البغل سباق

Homework: Pg 429. 1-14. Explain Answers and come in with questions.

STRATEGY FOR IMPROVING SENTENCES

Skip Directions Don’t Read Answer A. It’s the exact same as

the sentence Common Focuses

1. Run-On Sentences 2. Sentence Fragments3. Misplaced Modifiers4. Passive voice5. Parallelism6. Faulty Coordination/Subordination7. Wordiness

8 STEP PROCESS1. Read the sentence and try to hear the problem.2. If you find an error, eliminate A.3. Before you look at the answer choices, figure

out how to fix the error.4. Find the correction that most closely matches

yours.5. If no correction matches, eliminate answers

that repeat the error or contain new errors.6. If you’re still stumped, reach into your bag of

tricks 7. Plug your answer back into the sentence to

check it.8. If you’re still stumped—cut, guess, and run.

BAG OF DESPERATE TRICKS Go with the shortest answer. Cut answer choices that change the

meaning of the sentence. Cut answer choices that begin with

words ending in -ing. (Should be the noun)

Don’t forget about A.

MODIFIERS A Modifier is a word or set of words that

describes, clarifies, or gives more detail about a concept/part of sentence.

Modifiers can include adjectives, adverbs, phrases, and clauses

Modifiers should be located as close as possible to the word they are modifying in order to avoid confusion on what it is modifying

Often introduced by sets of commas

EXAMPLES

1. Mazen barely kicked that ball twenty yards.Mazen kicked that ball barely twenty yards.2. When looking for bargains, the small shops

off the main street usually offer good sale prices.

The small shops off the main street usually offer good sale prices to shoppers looking for bargains.

EXAMPLE Flying for the first time, the roar of the

jet engines intimidated the small child, and he grew frightened as the plane roared down the runway.

The subject is usually the first noun that follows the introductory modifier.

PARTNER PRACTICE

PASSIVE VOICE Passive voice is not always considered

an error. If the answer includes no other errors as

is active, choose it instead of the passive voice

If the sentence construct includes “by ____” it’s probably passive.

The tray was polished by Jonathan

WORDINESS The fewer the words, generally the

better.

البغل سباق Class Divided into Teams A problem is put on the board Everybody Answers the Question I will call on one person randomly from each team to see if

they got the correct answer. If they get the correct Answer they get to draw a card Numbers 1-10 = the Value You can choose to go cutthroat Red Jacks = -5, Black Jacks = - 10 Queens = Steal one player from another team + 10 points Kings = Switch Points with another player Jokers = Red Joker, You steal all the points from a team of

your choice. Black Joker: You give all your points to another team.

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EXIT PASS

HOMEWORK Pg 429. 1-14. Explain Answers and come

in with questions.