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They Say, I Say The Moves that Matter in Academic Writing Ch. 8, 9, & 10

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They Say, I Say. The Moves that Matter in Academic Writing Ch. 8, 9, & 10. Tying It All Together. Ch. 8: “As A Result” Connecting the Parts. The authors give an example of a student, named “Bill” who had a particular sentence pattern. - PowerPoint PPT Presentation

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They Say, I SayThe Moves that Matter in Academic Writing

Ch. 8, 9, & 10

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Tying It All Together

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The authors give an example of a student, named “Bill” who had a particular sentence pattern.

It read “something like this… ‘Spot is a good dog. He has fleas.’” (105).

They urged him to “connect his sentences.” They suggested to him the ideas of:

“Spot is a good dog, but he has fleas.” “Spot is good dog, even though he has fleas.” (105)

Bill never connected or took their advice

Ch. 8: “As A Result”Connecting the Parts

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“Bill” failed “to mark his connections, his writing was as frustrating to read” (106).

The authors notes that: “Bill [never realized] that to write a good sentence

he had to think about how it connected to those that came before and after; that he had to think hard about how that sentence fit into the sentences that surrounded it.” (106)

Needing to Use Transitions

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This chapter aims to put into practice a “do it yourself principle” – you must make the connections, not your readers.

Putting principle into action:

1. Using transition terms (like “therefore” and “as a result”)

2. Adding pointing words (like “this or “such”)

3. Developing a set of key terms and phrases for each text you write

4. Repeating yourself, but with a difference – a move that involves repeating what you’ve said, but with enough variation to avoid redundant

Strategies

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Addition: Also Furthermore In fact And In Addition Moreover Besides Indeed So too

Example: After all Specifically As an illustration To take a case in point For example Consider For instance

Use Transitions (common ones)

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Elaboration: Actually That is To put it bluntly By extension In other words In short To put it another way Ultimately To put it succinctly

Comparison: Along the same lines Likewise In the same way Similarly

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Contrast: Although Despite Nevertheless But Even though Nonetheless By contrast However On the contrary Conversely In contrast On the other hand Regardless Whereas While yet

Cause and Effect: Accordingly Hence Then As a result Since Therefore Consequently So Thus

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Concession: Admittedly Naturally Although it is true Of course Granted To be sure

Conclusion: As a result In sum Consequently Therefore Hence Thus In conclusion To sum up In short To summarize

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Should go unnoticed in your paper, if done right

They can “not only [help you] move from one sentence to another, but to combine two or more sentences into one” (111).

Combining helps to avoid the choppy, static sentences --- like Bill

Transitions…

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Very literal in their meaning

Most common: this, these, that, those, their, and such – as well as simple pronouns such as: he, his, she, her, it, and their

They refer back to something you have mentioned

Need to be used carefully though – make sure that you have identified, clearly, what the pronoun is referring to before using them

Use Pointing Words

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The authors provide this example as to how a pointing word can be ambiguous and unclear

Alexis de Tocqueville was highly critical democratic societies, which he saw as tending toward mob rule. At the same time, he accorded democratic societies grudging respect. This is seen in Tocqueville’s statement that…

Issue with what “this” is referring to here

You can fix it by making sure that there is only one “object” that the pointing word can refer to

How can you do that in the example above?

A bad example…

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When making an argument, it’s good to make use of repeating the key terms that you wishing to make.

A good example can be found in Martin Luther King Jr.’s use of the key words: criticism, statement, answer, and correspondence in the opening paragraph of his “Letter from Birmingham Jail”

Repeat Key Terms and Phrases

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My Dear Fellow Clergymen:

While confined here in the Birmingham city jail, I came across your recent statement calling my present activities "unwise and untimely." Seldom do I pause to answer criticism of my work and ideas. If I sought to answer all the criticisms that cross my desk, my secretaries would have little time for anything other than such correspondence in the course of the day, and I would have no time for constructive work. But since I feel that you are men of genuine good will and that your criticisms are sincerely set forth, I want to try to answer your statement in what I hope will be patient and reasonable terms.

“Letter from Birmingham Jail”

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This means saying what you have already said, but in a slightly different way

Think of it as “building bridges” between ideas

You can do this “by echoing what you’ve just said while simultaneously moving your text into new territory” (116).

Repeat Yourself – But with a Difference

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You can “repeat yourself in a different way” by using transitions:

Phrases like – “in other words” and “to put it another way” --- these indicate to your readers that you are rewording something you have already said and aids in clarity

Repetition --- it can help you move your paper along. It “is a central means by which you can move from point A to point B in a text” (118).

Issues – Repetition is key to making a point, but you want to avoid falling into the habit of getting trapped in a place where you repeat yourself and never make a point

Solution – “The trick therefore is not to avoid repeating yourself but to repeat yourself in varied and interesting enough ways that you advance your argument without sounding tedious” (118).

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The authors open this chapter by asking the question:

“Have you ever gotten the impression that writing well in college means setting aside the kind of language you use in everyday conversation?” (121).

The answer is: it’s a conversation. You do want to use academic and sophisticated words but it can be appropriate to use a “turn of phrase” or how you would talk with family and friends in your paper

Ch. 9: “Ain’t So / Is Not”Academic Writing Doesn’t Always Mean Setting Aside

Your Own Voice

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One can “write effective academic arguments while holding on to some of your own voice” (121).

This does mean that you should not fill your paper with any language you use around your friends, or “fall back on colloquial usage as an excuse for not learning more rigorous forms of expression” (122).

The authors feel and suggest that ---

[One use a] relaxed, colloquial language can [serve to] enliven academic writing and even enhance its rigor and precision. Such informal language also helps you connect with readers in a personal as well as an intellectual way. (122)

What is important…

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I can serve to mix the two approaches

Marking and judging formal and mechanical errors in student papers is one area in which composition studies seems to have a multiple-personality disorder. On the one hand, our mellow, student-centered, process-based selves tend to condemn marking formal errors at all. Doing it represents the Bad Old Days. Ms. Fidditch and Mr. Flutesnoot with sharpened red pencils, spilling innocent blood across the page. Useless detail work. Inhumane, perfectionist standards, making our students feel stupid, wrong, trivial, misunderstood… (122-123)

Can you identify the “popular” phrases and words from above.

Mix Academic and Colloquial Styles

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Article uses words like: “mellow”

Article uses phrases like: “Bad Old Days”

Also, look at generic names of the “mean” teachers and red ink as “blood”

Informal language

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One can always experiment with one’s writing

Knowing when to be formal and informal rests primarily on the aim of your paper and the audience who you are trying to reach.

Demonstrate an awareness of what you are seeking to achieve and who is going to listen to what you are saying when making the choices for how you will say what you plan on saying

When to Mix Styles?Consider Your Audience and Purpose

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What is metacommentary?

You know what “commentary” is, right?

The trick is, we engage in metacommentary all the time, take the following template:

What I meant to say was , My point was not , but . You’re probably not going to like what I’m about to say,

but .

Metacommentary – it “is a way of commenting on your claims and telling others how – and how not – to think about them” (129).

Ch. 10: “But Don’t Get Me Wrong”The Art of Metacommentary

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Greek Chorus – in a Greek drama, it is their job to stand off and elaborate and explain on what is unfolding on the stage

They explain what the characters are doing and usually talk directly to the audience

Modern examples: C-3PO and R2D2 from Star Wars or Jay and Silent Bob from any of Kevin Smith’s movies

Who knows what a Greek Chorus is?

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Why use it? Why can’t you just be clear to begin with?

The answer is that, no matter how clear and precise your writing is, readers can still fail to understand it in any number of ways. Even the best writers can provoke reactions in readers that they didn’t intend, and even good readers can get lost in a complicated argument or fail to see how one point connects with another (131)

“Because the written word is prone to so much mischief” it is important for an author to use metacommentary effectively to help clarify and avoid misinterpretations (131).

Use Metacommentary to Clarify and Elaborate

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It can also “help you develop your ideas and generate more text” (131).

A good use is to avoid that “shuttering” stop you sometimes come to at the end of a paper. Metacommentary can help you discuss your own writing and lead you to more discussion or even wrap up your paper…

Metacommentary can…

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Even if you think you’ve said everything…

In other words, she doesn’t realize how right she is.

What really means is .

My point is not but .

Metacommentary should, ideally, “help you recognize some implications of your ideas that you didn’t initially realize were there” (132).

Examples of metacommentary

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Take this example:

Amusing Ourselves to Death: Public Discourse in the Age of Show Business

Titles can serve as a kind of metacommentary on your whole paper.

They are your newspaper headlines for what the paper is about, so give it some thought when developing them

Titles as Metacommentary

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To ward off potential misunderstandings

Essentially, I am arguing not that we should give up the policy, but that we should monitor effects far more closely.

That is not to say , but rather .

X is concerned less with than with .

Templates for Introducing Metacommentary

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To alert readers to an elaboration of a previous idea

In other words, .

To put it another way, .

What X is saying here is that .

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To provide readers with a roadmap to your text

Chapter 2 explores , while chapter 3 examines .

Having just argued that , I want now to complicate the point by .

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To move from a general claim to a specific example

For example, .

, for instance, demonstrates .

Consider , for example.

To take a case in point, .

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To indicate that a claim is more, less, or equally important

Even more important, .

But above all, .

Incidentally, we will briefly note, .

Jus as important, .

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To explain a claim when you anticipate objections

Although some readers may object that , I would answer that .

To guide readers to your most general point

In sum, then, .

My conclusion, then, is that .

In short, .

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Complete each of the following metacommentary templates in any way that makes sense

In making a case for the medical use of marijuana, I am not saying that .

But my argument will do more than prove that one particular industrial chemical has certain toxic properties,. In this article, I will also .

My point about the national obsessions with sports reinforces the belief held by many that .

I believe, therefore, that the war is completely unjustified. But let me back up and explain how I arrived at this conclusion: . In this way, I cam to believe that this war is a big mistake.

Ch. 10 - Exercises