REVISING AND EDITINGA STEP BY STEP TO A 100FINAL DRAFT DUE FRIDAY 10/29

EDITS FOR MONDAY 10/25 Read your Rough Draft CLOSELY. Does it make

sense???? Remove any uses of the following: I, You, My, Remove any uses of the following: In my opinion…, I

believe…, Have you…, Do you…, Did you ever…, Imagine…

Reword sentences that begin with: So, But, And, Well and Because

Rework any part of your INTRO that contains: This paper is going to tell you…, I am going to tell you…, This paper is about…, I am going to write about…

Rework any part of your CONCLUSION that contains: In conclusion…, Therefore my conclusion…, This concludes…

If you have any questions or think something is questionable, PLEASE ASK!

EDITS FOR TUESDAY 10/26 Read your INTRO CLOSELY. Your thesis should contain 2 parts: the topic and a

comment. Does your thesis sound/look like these? “Reality TV is taking teens down the wrong path with

life skills such as behavior, violence and unhealthy competition.”

“The proposal for a longer school day or year is not accepted by parents or students for 3 major reasons.”

“Dangerous teen driving is mostly caused by driver errors such as speeding, over correcting and losing control.”

If your THESIS is not constructed the way the examples are, CORRECT it now.

EDITS FOR TUESDAY 10/26 Read your BODY PARAGRAPHS CLOSELY. Can each one be CLEARLY and UNMISTAKEABLY

identified as: Your Stancethe Opposing Viewthe Counter Argumentthe discussion of your CartoonYour Conclusion

If you answered NO to any of these, go back and develop those paragraphs

EDITS FOR WEDNESDAY 10/27 & THURSDAY 10/28 Read your Rough Draft CLOSELY. Go through your paper and UNDERLINE what you say about your topic

and then HIGHLIGHT the quote you used to support what you said. Check for proper parenthetical citation. If the author's name is mentioned in the text If the author's name is used in the text introducing the source material,

then cite the page number(s) in parentheses: Branscomb argues that "it's a good idea to lurk for a few weeks, to ensure

that you don't break any of the rules of netiquette" (7) when joining a listserv.

If the author's name is not mentioned in the text If the author's name is not used in the sentence introducing the source

material, then include the author's last name in the parenthetical citation before the page number(s). Note that no comma appears between the author's name and the page number(s). EX. (Bateson 97).

DON’T FORGET YOUR WORKS CITED PAGE. Go to www.easybib.com for help.