7/21/2019 Response to Oil

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 Nick Evangelista

ENG 107 B8

Professor Otis

Response to Alternative Energy Source in Saudi Arabia

My initial reaction to this paper is that there is defnitely potential here

but it still needs refning, which is okay or a rough drat. The ocus on the

topic is about alternative energies, which were eatured throughout the

paper. These included solar and wind power. What liked about these were

that both the pros and cons were given and ways to i!prove the!. also

liked the beginning how a personal anecdote was given and you showed

where your interest co!es ro!. "n how to i!prove the paper, frst there a

ton o gra!!atical errors, but those can be f#ed easily. Another thing is

there is no real protagonist or narrative, which think could work. think you

could !ake a researcher to !ake into a protagonist, and write about the

statistics that s$he fnds or so!ething like that. "r, you could e#pand !ore

on your grandather and tell !ore about what he went through and the

things we !ight e#pect us to go to i we ran out o oil.