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Peer Review ReportDirections:

1 . Read the rough draft once through without making any corrections or suggestions.2. Read the rough draft a second time and answer the questions on pages 1-3. USE

PENCIL!!!3. Read the rough draft a third time and make corrections and suggestions directly on the

rough draft. Use the comment codes to mark problems. Also, refer to the "big five"while marking corrections. USE PENCIL!!! ______________ .......

4. Use the Honors Writing Rubric and assess the eight categories (Context, Thesis,Structure, Logic, Evidence, Style, Citation, Grammar) on pages 4-7 of this packet. USEPENCIL!!!

5. Make a photocopy of this document or scan it when you are finished.6. Submit the photocopy (or scan) to Mr. Fenwick on Monday, April 25th by 4:00pm.7. Give your partner his/her rough draft and the original peer review report in class on

Monday, April 25th.

FIRST READING (Just read the entire paper once.)

SECOND READING (Read the entire paper again and answer the questions below)Is this paper typed? NJOIs this paper double-spaced? y£5Does this paper have one-inch margins?Is this paper typed with size- 12 Times New Roman font?Does this paper cover all of the claims in the thesis and answer the historical question?Explain.

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6. How many pages is this rough draft? (/>7. Does the paper flow in a logical order? Explain.

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8. Are there transitions between paragraphs?9. Are there any spaces between paragraphs? (This should be NO!10. Are there any open unnecessary white spaces in the paper? (This should be NO!)11. Is there a properly formatted title page? \ £3

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12. Are the pages numbered correctly? (Title page should not be numbered.)13. Are there any errors in sentence structure (run-ons, fragments)? NJ^Ja14. Does the writer use any slang words, inappropriate abbreviations, or "text messaging

language"? (cuz, wuz, nada, b/c, ur, thru, etc.)? f\JQ ,15. Does the writer use the word "like" at any time when it is unnecessary? fyQ

Introduction:1. Is the setting introduced well (answering who, what, where, when)?2. Does the writer raise the fundamental question of the research proces3. Does the introduction have clearly defined claims?4. Does the introduction offer a clear thesis statement?5. Is the introduction longer than a page (This should be NO)? f v D

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Body of the Paper:1 . Are the claims dealt with in the same order as they were introduced in the introduction?

NiB ,..2. Does each paragraph express one idea with evidence? V\j03. Does the writer use both paraphrases and direct quotes?4. Are the quotes unreasonably short or far too long?5. Are footnotes used throughout the paper? V&s6. Is there any sign that plagiarism is occurring?

Conclusion:1 . Does the conclusion address the end of the story (who, what, where, when)? VCS2. Is this section AT LEAST three sentences?3. Is it longer than a page (the answer should be NO)?

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Citation:1. Does this paper have a separate bibliography page at the end?2. How many sources does the paper have? -^3. How many footnotes does this paper have? ^4. Was each source listed used in at least one footnote? fy 05. Is the bibliographical information correct and correctly presented?6. Is the footnote documentation correct? (\JO7. Does each footnote include the page number of where the information was found?8. Does this paper cite footnoted information at the right places?9. Are there any times when something should be cited and it is not? If so, please note on

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Writing Rubric Assessment

Use the Honors Writing Rubric (attached) to evaluate the rough draft. For each category, give aletter grade on the writing rubric that "fits" what you have read. You must explain why you gavethe grade you did and offer constructive feedback.

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