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Barbara Ulloa

Ms. Ingram

English 1102 024

27 November 2012

More Thought in the Writing Process

Throughout the English 1102 course this semester, I have been assigned different assign-

ments to write on, but all relating to a theme on “What it’s like to be healthy.’ Every assignment I

completed came together in forming my inquiry question of what its like to be healthy. We start-

ed off with the book “Peace, Butter and Jelly” I was able to get an idea of what I thought it meant

to be healthy. Then we met the author and we viewed his life from the book, and then we asked

him questions, on how he stays healthy. We continued to ask how he stays healthy physically and

mentally. The annotated bibliography assignment continued into the scholar’s, doctors, and

anorexics, facts and claims about anorexia and eating disorders. Which i researched throughout

the semester, with very researched and good facts and claims I was able to explore and get the

viewpoints on what exactly anorexia was. I was then able to gather all my research from different

sources to began a thought process on my argumentative essay, that will be interested in reading

about anorexia.

Every assignment allowed me to think and get involved in the research and the writing

process. These assignments put me to work and use everything I’ve learned in my past english

classes, such as note taking, research, reading, and peer editing. By now I am well developed en-

gaged writer and know how to take information, translate it and use it to my ability.

The first assignment was to write an essay describing “what it’s like to be you.” In my ev-

idence the first thing I went back to was the journal writing we had the first day of class. That ba-



sically introduced me to Ms.Ingram and told her a little bit about me. When I started revising my

essay my peers had gave me lots great ideas, and input on how I should change or rearrange sen-

tences so they would make better sense, Ms.Ingram included stuff too that helped out a lot. In the

essay I focused on how my present is going to make for a better future, like David said in his

book.

I got very personal in my what it’s like to be me, not so someone could feel sorry for me,

I wanted to get the whole me and not just part of me. I lost my father when I was younger, and

one of the peers who helped edit my paper encouraged me and wrote something really nice in my

paper. Also told me God has control, and knows what he is doing at all times, and that my dad is

sitting on the right hand of the Lord. It touched me on how sweet it was, made my eyes water up

some, just to think about it like that. I took the reader to my childhood, high school, now and

how I want to be in the future with my college education as a psychologist. I also included how

I’m accident prone to this day since I was a little girl. How my life was when I started at UNCC

first it was terrible, felt like it was going down hill because my iphone was stolen, and how my

hair straightener had broke. Things changed thanks to the help of David because he helped me

mediate and take deep breaths and relax. By exposing the reader to this quality I feel like in my

revised essay the audience can get a better understanding of my present life, and future dreams.

In the essay it allows the reader to get a grasp and full story of what its really like to be me.

As a part of the writing process I had to read, and research about the academic conversa-

tion that was interested in the topic I choose which was anorexia nervosa. In my evidence to the

topic I chose, was somewhat Peace, Butter, and Jelly, David had recipes in there and talked about

health. Then I was in the library searching typing in random topics. But then I remembered about

my friends, some family members, and myself about how we all had an eating disorder. The neg-



ative image I had on myself over the years was pretty intense. The negativity I would hear from

my brother while I was thin, working out, barely eating would just make me go harder and stick

to being “ana.” My doctor would be shocked when I would go in every week because I would be

losing five pounds, she would ask if I was eating. I was eating, but I was burning the calories I

had in my body at the gym. My friends and family that hadn’t seen me in forever where shocked

at how I looked, but I was proud. So my academic conversation I was looking for was do recov-

ering patients really know what recovery means.

In my group we had did a brainstorming activity of what we thought was was healthy,

sexually, mentally, and physically. I was reminded of David’s positive attitude, and positive

mind-set, I was then took back and thought that what it is like to be healthy. For me finding my

topic was easy, and interesting. Even though anorexias have it tough, they still have supporters to

support them and help them get through the day. They encourage and keep a positive mind-set,

dealing with a eating disorder is hard and it gets tough. I read that some anorexias do mediate in-

stead of eating, and have different rituals too. I was able to make a personal investment to the

topic. Being interested in the topic motivated me to research as much as I could about anorexia,

so I could have personal knowledge and if anyone suffers from it I could help. In the future too

being a psychologist when I get the degree.

After choosing my topic I began researching anorexia nervosa in order to complete my

annotated bibliography assignment. Looking at feedback I had received, and given, included in

my evidence. I mentioned the audience of the sources were meant for, and the credibility of the

source.

As we gathered three or more sources from the annotated bibliography, we got an assign-

ment. The three-sided-argument which consisted of different viewpoints of your research. I in-



cluded in my three viewpoints, first one was pro-ana, second patients and the third was doctors.

What helped me on picking those three arguments was the conference we had with our group

members and teacher. I was able to discuss how I wanted my paper to be, and when I explained

it, it sounded like I could write some excellent arguments. Those all have a little bit in common

with me which, I have knowledge in and gained some knowledge too.

What helped me put my essay more put together was all the feedback I had got from my

group, and the different peers that edited my paper. They lead me to a better perspective. I like

when they tell me I’m going on a good path and that I am using my sources usefully. What also

helped me was my inquiry book the orange book as I call it. I would take notes every time I got

assigned to read pages. This one of the easiest assignments I feel like because I had all the infor-

mation, and research all I had to do was put it together.

The last assignment which I struggled with was the research paper. I have no idea why

this gave me such problems. I had past information from all the other assignments all I had to do

was put it together, and get more research done. Introducing the argument, defining and explain-

ing anorexia and the pro-ana stuff. Who and why they disagree and why they are wrong. That is

how I went with my research paper.

The conference meeting we had was useful. I got the help I needed and pointed to the

right direction. My problem is that I’m unorganized and all over the place with my work and re-

search. Very scattered brained. I started using a outline on it when I revised it I had too, only way

I could focus and go about writing and stay on topic. It concluded that everyone can be a anorex-

ic, and when you recover from anorexia you can still go back to it like relapsing. I’m glad I

chose the topic I had a joy writing the papers, and getting so deep into the community of pro-ana



communities. Getting the doctors view and recovering views too. Its like you have to put your-

self into there shoes and see how they feel.

The semester has came to an end, and so have the assignments. I must say my academic

writing has improved greatly, and my texting is still the same. Drafting, editing, revising is what

I will keep in mind when I write any further papers. I never noticed reading out loud can make

such a difference and catch simple errors. Cover letters were the best thing invented to so your

group knows what is about to happen and how you want them to interpret the paper they are

about to read. But just like everything else this paper and class is over, but my academic writing

is not.

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