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IELTS WRITING TASK 2

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Hm nay mnh correct mt s bi Task 2 ca cc bn hc sinh lp Writing thng 2. Mnh cm

thy rt vui, phi ni l phn khch. Cc bn u vit rt tt, nhng bi np cho mnh phn ln

u trn band 6.0. Tt c u follow ng phng php, mi body thn bi u s dng mnh

quan h, cu iu kin ng nh m hng dn. c cm thy tht d chu. Nhn ngy phn ph,

mnh tng cc bn mt bi essay hc sinh mnh vit c mnh correct li. Bi ny bn c th

tham kho MU band 9.0 ca thy Simon, nhng bi di y cng hon ton c th t band

8.0~8.5. Mi kin ng gp u c hoan ngnh, k c nm , dm hng :D

Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it

is better to get a job straight after school.

Discuss both views

Graduating from high school, the young often wonder whether they ought to keep on studying further or not. Many people

suppose that continuing to study at university or college can be the best way to guarantee their successful career, whereas

others believe working right after school is much better.

Working straight after graduation is beneficial in some ways. Firstly, young people are able to earn money as soon as

possible. If they finish high school, they will be mature enough to live independently on their own income. It is common

sense that having a job can prove ones maturity. Secondly, a person who chooses to get a job instead of studying higher is

likely to progress rapidly in their career. This may bring about a good chance to obtain a lot of real experience and skills for

their chosen profession.

On the other hand, there are a variety of reasons why people have a tendency of choosing to continue education after high

school. First, a college education will provide young people with more qualifications, which is what most employers expect

these days. University graduates will probably get a much higher salary than those without university education.

Furthermore, the job market is becoming more and more competitive. In fact, people would be well-advised to get a degree,

as hundreds of applicants often chase the top jobs. It is an obvious advantage for university graduates. For example,

graduate engineers in Vietnam are highly paid and find it easy to get a top job

In conclusion, it seems evident that both working right after school and choosing to continue higher study are advantageous

in their own ways.

274 words (Band 8.0~8.5)



PHN TCH

note trc, mnh chia s cho cc bn mt bi vit ca hc sinh c mnh correct li

xng ng band 8.0-8.5. Thc ra, bi vit ca bn hc sinh ny kh tt (band 7.0) mnh ch

sa li mt s ch n t band~8.0-8.5. Gi mnh s phn tch c th bi vit ti sao li t

band cao nh vy da trn 4 tiu ch chm thi ca IELTS Writing task 2

+ Task response:

Cu hi ca bi a ra l: tho lun 2 quan im vi ngi tin rng nn tip tc i hc, trong

khi ngi khc tin rng nn i lm lun (mnh dch i cho nhanh bn hiu thi) v bi vit

ca mnh tr li hon ton y cu hi ca bi.

Bi vit chia 4 kh: m bi, 2 kh thn bi, kt lun

-Intro: Gm 2 cu. Cu 1: paraphrase li cu ca bi 1 cch ngn gn. Cu 2: tr li cu hi

ca bi: rng bi vit ny s tho lun 2 quan im nu bi. Ch l mnh nu c th, ko

dng cc cu chung chung nh This essay examines both sides of views. l cc cu dng c

cho mi bi dng discussion s b nh gi l hc thuc lng -> ko tt

-Thn bi : 2 kh thn bi mi kh mnh u bt u bng mt cu topic sentence vit n gin,

ngn gn

Thn bi 1: mnh tho lun quan im it is better to get a job straight after school. V c 2

nh h tr cho idea ny. Th nht, Young people often need to earn money. Th hai, if you

start your career early you start to learn skills and gain experience right away. Mnh gii

thch v pht trin cc h tr trn y

Thn bi 2: tho lun quan im cn li v cng c 2 idea nh h tr cht ch nh kh trn. Ch

nh h tr th 2 competition for jobs is very fierce, and so qualifications are vital mnh

c a ra v d c th Vit Nam For example, graduate engineers in Vietnam are highly paid

and find it easy to get a top job. Cu rt n gin nhng gim kho thch nhng cu nh vy

- Kt lun: mnh paraphrase ngn gn cu 2 ca m bi. ch : bi khng hi quan im c

nhn ca bn. tuyt i ko nu quan im c nhn kt lun v bt k phn no trong essay.

V nhng l do trn -> im tiu ch hon thnh nhim v ca bi vit trn l band~8.0

+ Coherence and cohesion:

Bi vit ca mnh c b cc mch lc, r rang. Cu trc on vn n gin, logic. Mi on

vn tho lun mt quan im. Cc cu topic sentence u ngn gn, n gin nu c ca c

on vn (v bm st vo cu 2 ca phn m bi)



Vi mi on vn: vic s dng cc t ni nh Firstly/Secondly tuy n gin nhng gip gim

kho nh v c ngay u l kin h tr ca bn. Mnh cng s dng cc t nh This/It/In

fact kt ni cu ny vi cu trc

Do vy, im cho tiu ch ny ca bi vit trn -> band~8.0-9.0

+ Lexical resource

Nh mnh ni trong cc video bi ging hng dn Writing ca mnh, im t vng trong

Task 2 khng phi cho cc t big words m l cho cc topic vocabs t vng lin quan c th

n ch ca bi. Vi bi ny l cc t

mature enough to live independently/their chosen profession/working right after school/prove

ones maturity/hundreds of applicants/ chase the top jobs

V mnh s ng v chnh xc cc t

Do vy, im cho tiu ch ny band 8.0

+ Grammatical range and accuracy:

V tiu ch ny, c th rt nhiu bn sm soi tht k s thy cn 2,3 li lt vt. Nhng nhn

chung bi vit hu nh khng c li ng php

Th hai, nu gim kho tm kim cc complex sentences. Ok, h thy y. cc cu vi

subordinate clause (mnh ph), cu iu kin, adverb clause, relative clauses. Cu trc cu

khng b lp li, thi ca ng t chia u chnh xc, s dng ng cc dng so snh

im cho tiu ch ny band 8.0

Da trn im 4 tiu ch nh vy, im bi vit trn ca mnh l BAND~8.0-8.5

Cui cng, bn c th thy lc u c bi vit bn thy rt n gin, ch c g phc tp nhng

qua phn tch, bn thy n tun th cht ch cc quy tc v phng php ch khng phi vit bn

nng. Cc cu iu kin, cu trc ng php u c nht vo ng ch v c dng n im

tng tiu ch mt ch khng phi thch nht u th nht

Cc bn c th theo di knh ging IELTS Writing online ca mnh hiu hn cc phng

phpny:



Bi vit ca mnh chc chn l khng hon ho v kh nng ca mnh cn hn ch nhng hy

vng cc bn thy bi vit c ch.

Chc cc bn hc tt

-Ngoc Bach-

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