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Name: Pham Thi Thuy Linh Date: 02/05/2009

Class: E1-K41

WRITING ASSIGNMENT WEEK 12

(The first version)

Topic: Trial Marriage: For or Against

Outline:

I. Introduction

TS: However, that prevalent phenomenon has been dogged by controversy because of its related

problems.

II. Body

1. A feeling of insecurities

2. Illegitimate children

3. Cons + Refutations

III. Conclusion

RS: Feeling insecure in both two people and creating miserably unofficial children are the most

two big problems surrounding trial marriage.

Essay:

People are becoming more and more open-minded and have individual freedom to love

and to be loved without becoming a burden to the other. Living together before marriage is nolonger regarded as a revolutionary behavior, especially among the young blood. However, that

prevalent phenomenon has been dogged by controversy because of its related problems.

A feeling of insecurities is easily recognized in trial marriage. Two people do not have

any legal tie with each other, which is the root of all the following problems. They are always

threatened by the third person. To be not allowed to question or complain, their suspicions

further fueled whenever slightest differences arise. Hence, they are easily irritated, angry or

nervous, and finally, end up with a miserable life. If they have conjugal properties when they live

together, make a claim of share is another complicated matter. It will be more stressful and heart

breaking experience for both of them.

Illegitimate children will be the direct victims suffered from this situation. Firstly, they do

not have the right to bring the name of their fathers. Going to school, therefore, they will be

teased mercilessly by their friends because they are born out of wedlock. Absolutely feel

embarrassed, their emotional life is likely to be affected. Moreover, their family, future and

inheritance are not secured. It is not certain whether they will receive any support from fathers if

their parents are separated. Moreover, the devastating consequences are proven to follow from

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parents separation, while in fact, Western statistics show that people with cohabitation are more

likely to divorce than people who did not live together before getting married.

Some people claim that trial marriage is a good way for the couple to learn more about

each other and have better adjustments before tying the knot. However, one may pretend to be

perfect, it seems like you have exactly what you are looking for all years. But the truth might beshocking in many ways for his/her unbearable aspects. Demerits would be exposed completely

after cohabitation, and then it leads to a tragic ending.

Anything can be tried before we make up our mind, except marriage. Marriage is holy

and any try of it is a violation of marriage rules. Feeling insecure in both two people and creating

miserably unofficial children are the most two big problems surrounding trial marriage.

(394 words)

Comments:

I am afraid of say this: your essay seems not to live up to my expectationas it should be. In other words, it is not persuasive enough for me to give

up the decision of trying cohabitation. (a cohabitation supporter just

kidding!)

About your ideas: I think illegitimate children can be seen as an

disadvantage of cohabitation. However, when I read your supporting

sentences, I think they are not so good: the child will not have his father

surname? But in fact, some of the couples will get married afterwards

while the others will decide to have the abortion. Hence, talking about

abortion, you may have more convincing ideas to support the idea, I think.

Some mistakes as I have mentioned above.

Hope these comments help!!!

Peer editor: Nguyen Thi Thinh