8/6/2019 IELTS Essay Corrected 5

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8/6/2019 IELTS Essay Corrected 5

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9.state has, MOST EUROPEAN STATES HAVE...

10.state should be plural = states

11. nation is, nationS ARE more developED

12.compared to other continents. Maybe better to say compared to other countries,because you haven't mentioned continents beforehand.

13.country, COUNTRIES must be plural because you didn't place the article.

14.say than to be done.What you wrote was OK but here is a common expression whichsounds better: Easier said than done.

15.anti corruption.ANTI-CORRUPTION

16. as well, should be placed a the end of thesentence. http://wiki.answers.com/Q/Using_as_well_as_in_a_sentence

17. reach each, Here reach out to each other would be more appropriate.

TASK ACHIEVEMENTYou were able to give viable reasons and solutions to wealth inequality between countries.

LEXICAL RESOURCE

State, governance, corruption, policies, all of these are good examples of topic specificvocabulary which you used, well done.

COHESION AND COHERENCEExplanation is clear and logical. However incorrect use of some words clouded themeaning, for example institution.Good introduction and paragraphing although I did separate the paragraphs with an extrawhite line to enable myself to follow it better, I would do this for the written. Theparagraphs were appropriate and the content was structured well.

GRAMMATICAL RANGE AND ACCURACYGood range of grammar structures e.g. Perfect tenses: Has been, comparatives: easier,Conditionals; would be.Some errors are committed, mainly with regards to plurals.

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