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#1 (permalink) Sun Jul 08, 2012 16:01 pm Haste Makes Waste!
Please Luschen check my essay. I am going to take the exam in August.
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Haste makes waste.
“Haste makes waste” which is an old saying accepted almost by everyone. Some people are prone to do the tasks as
quickly as they can but then they realize that everything got wrong. From my point of view, we should not do things
precipitately but instead we should act carefully.
For a start, haste makes us lose our attention. The main reason is that we only think about consequences of our aim when
we act quickly. So eventually it may result in unpleasant and dangerous events. For instance, researchers have recently
shown that about ninety six percent of car accidents are caused by fast driving. Sometimes drivers think that they may get
faster to their desirable place but this belief may pull them into a grave rather than their location.
Secondly, people are no able to effectively use their mind when they conduct tasks faster. In other words, our brain cannot
implement some commands in a very short time. For example, I had a major English test three months ago which I did not
do very well on it. There were twenty questions and twenty minutes to finish. So I decided to write faster as I could. After
accomplishing I was feeling as if I had written very well but when I received my grade I was shocked. There were also many
questions that I missed since I had not seen them. Concisely, haste makes the things in opposite.
Last but not least, haste can even pull us into a precipice. Since sometimes it is a big risk to make quick decisions. For one
thing, a friend of my father worked in business. Everything was good. But he suddenly became bankrupt because of the
issue which he resolved in a very short time.
To sum up, time is going and it never stops but it does not indicate that we are supposed to do things quickly. Also it is
worth to mention that haste can pull us into unpredictable outcomes so we should act slowly and carefully if we consider
our bright future.
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TOEFL listening lectures: A university lecture in the Social Sciences Department
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#2 (permalink) Mon Jul 09, 2012 15:37 pm Re: Haste Makes Waste!
Hi, I thought this was one of your best essays yet. Your grammar is very good in this one, with only a few errors - more
towards the end of the essay though. You have some good vocabulary words, but much of your essay is still a bit simple
and basic. It was easy to understand though with only a couple odd phrases. Overall, I would rate it a 4 out of 5.
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Vuqar1.618 wrote:
Please Luschen check my essay. I am going to take the exam in August.
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Haste makes waste.
“Haste makes waste” which is an old saying accepted almost by [almost] everyone. Some people are prone todo the tasks as quickly as they can but then they realize that everything got wrong. From my point of view,we should not do things precipitately but instead we should act carefully.
For a start, haste makes us lose our attention.{"lose our attention" is odd - maybe "haste can prevent usfrom paying proper attention"} The main reason is that we only think about consequences of our aim when weact quickly.{do you mean you don't think about the consequences when you act quickly?} So eventually itmay result in unpleasant and dangerous events. For instance, researchers have recently shown that aboutninety[-]six percent of car accidents are caused by fast driving. Sometimes drivers think that they may getfaster to their desirable place [faster] but this belief may pull them into a grave rather than [to] theirlocation.[destination] {this is a good sentence, but we would more commonly say "push them into a grave" -pull sounds like there is a corpse or something pulling them in - spooky!}
Secondly, people are no[t] able to effectively use their mind[s ] when they conduct tasks faster. In otherwords, our brain cannot implement some commands in a very short time. For example, I had a major Englishtest three months ago [in] which I did not do very well on it. There were twenty questions and twentyminutes to finish. So I decided to write faster [as fast] as I could. After accomplishing[completing the test] Iwas feeling as if I had written {good choice and use of verb tense here!} very well but when I received mygrade I was shocked. There were also many questions that I missed since I had not seen them. Concisely,haste makes the things in opposite. {this is unclear to me}
Last but not least, haste can even pull us into{"push us over" makes more sense} a precipice. {comma} Sincesometimes it is a big risk to make quick decisions. For one thing,{this is not the best transition - use thiswhen giving reasons, not examples} a friend of my father worked in business. Everything was good. But hesuddenly became bankrupt because of the issue which he resolved in a very short time. {this example needs alittle more detail to be effective - if you don't know the details, you could just make them up}
To sum up, time is going and it never stops but it[this] does not indicate that we are supposed to do thingsquickly. Also it is worth to mention[ing] that haste can pull us{"pull us" is quite repetitive here} intounpredictable outcomes so we should act slowly and carefully if we consider our bright future.
Words: 343
TOEFL listening lectures: [url=*english-test.net/toefl/listening/A_university_lecture_in_the_Social_Sciences_Department.html]A university lecture inthe Social Sciences Department[/url]
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#3 (permalink) Mon Jul 09, 2012 16:24 pm Re: Haste Makes Waste!
Thanks you Luschen for your feedback. You are very affectionate and helpful.It seems that I made many mistakes.
When it comes to you revision you predicted right that I meant(people don't think about the consequences when you act
quickly).In addition,i have a shortage of time while writing. Concisely, thank you Luschen again.
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