Final Portfolio

Ethan CraigMr. KellyWriting 421 AlphaJanuary 27th, 2014

My Treasured Object

Mr. Kelly’s Comments

“Great story! And a fine

tribute to your Grampy.”

Why I Chose This Piece

I enjoyed being able to write about my Grampy

It is one of my best pieces of writing

It gave me time to think about my Grampy and remember him

“I can’t quite remember when he gave it to me, but I received

this object from my Grampy Frank. He gave it to me so that I would have a place to keep all

of my loose change, just like he did. The can that he used to

make the bank had a crack in the side. So, he did what any

other male adult would do; tear off a thin strip of duct tape and wrap it around the top of the

can! He then used a black Sharpie and scrawled “Ethan’s

Bank” down the side of it. It was perfect. I now had my very own ‘bank’ just like Grampy’s to

keep my loose change in.”

How I Wrote It

First I decided what each paragraph was going to be aboutI proceeded to think about these ideas before writing down as paragraphs

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Peer editing

Personal Analysis

You definitely do a better job of something when you enjoy doing

it.

What if We Hadn’t Hit That Bird?

Mr. Kelly’s Comments“Great conclusion. Maybe the bird carried the ‘Avian Bird Flu’ and you saved PEI millions in healthcare and thousands of lives. Pass

my gratitude on to Linda!”

Mr. Kelly’s Comments

Why I Chose This Piece

One of the most fun essays to write

It was my favourite topic this semester

It made me think

Mr. Kelly’s Comments

“It was the morning of the U14 PEI Basketball

Provincials in the spring of 2012. My mom and I were driving into Charlottetown for my team’s first game.

As we drove along the Bedford road, a bird flew

right in front of the van and collided with the windshield. “Uh-oh. We may have killed that bird, and that would be

a bad omen,” my mother explained. Not six hours later, my left leg was in a

cast and I was watching my team from the bleachers.”

Mr. Kelly’s Comments

How I Wrote ItI thought back to the current events at the time of my injury

Played out scenarios in my head and wrote them down

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Peer editing

Personal Analysis

I feel that this piece is also one of my best of the

semester. Again I feel that my introduction and

conclusion are strong. This was the best topic I have

written about and I wouldn’t change anything.

What I Learned From Writing Four Two One

• Always write out numbers in words• That I shouldn’t use ‘that’ so much that it seems

that the only word that I use is ‘that’• Spend time writing a good introduction and

conclusion• Run-on sentences are very bad things indeed and

there is no reason for them in any piece of writing no matter what the topic or subject and there is never any need to write a run-on sentence in any situation good or bad and you should never do this as the reader will be gasping for air trying to read the entire sentence in one breath