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  • I would change the line when sam says

    "SAM: That means somethings wrong. I would know.

    we know he knows so he doesnt have to say it, it would be much more natural for him just say something like "Sam common" or something.

    Also I would be careful that the Foglig doesnt turn into infatuation. It makes people loyal not in love.