Incorporating Quotes and Using Transitions

*How would it be if a fourteen-year-old girl was living as a fugitive, running away from the law? Lily Owens, the protagonist in Secret Life of Bees by Sue Monk Kidd, experienced this first-hand when she escapes her abusive father’s control and runs away with her maid and confidante Rosaleen. She makes a quick decision to lie about everything in life, for self-preservation, she changes her names, and she becomes Lily Williams. She uses her made-up story to hide behind, similar to the way bees live secretly with their hives, for protection against everything happening around her, in hopes for her dream world to become a reality.

*Attention grabber is in purple*Thesis is underlined

*When starting a new paragraph, it is important to transition from the first to the second*Start by making sure you conclude the first paragraph*Take a look at the following example

*Thesis: She uses her made-up story to hide behind, similar to the way bees live secretly with their hives, for protection against everything happening around her, in hopes for her dream world to become a reality.*Throughout the novel, Lily Owens continues to build up her lie

of who she really is and why she ran away in order to keep people from being suspicious or questioning her. She struggles to concoct explanations to questions that she and August both know she cannot answer. Symbolically, Lily is climbing deeper and deeper into the honeycombs of the hive, or digging further into her hole. “It’s your secret,” Rosaleen said. “You do what you want with it” (Kidd 79). Everyone at the house knows that Lily is hiding something; however, they do not push her to tell the truth. Instead, the Boatwright sisters accept that she would reveal the truth when she was ready. Lily had to find her own way out of the “hive” and deal with reality.*Quote is in pink*Quote interpretation that ties to your reason is in blue*Wrap-up of point to easily transition to next point is

underlined.

*Transition statements will come at the beginning of the next body paragraph.

*Be sure to connect to your previous paragraph.

*Common transition statements:*In addition Not only*Furthermore First, second, etc…

*Not only does Lily Owens hide from the truth, but she also tries to protect herself from what she will not accept as real. She refuses to deal with her problems and continues living in a make-believe world she created for herself. To Lily, “The first week at August’s was a consolation, a pure relief” (Kidd 82). As Lily describes the comfort of the Boatwrights’ home, she works to block out any thoughts or realizations of T. Ray or the police coming to look for her and drag her back to that man and that life. Lily jumped every time she heard a siren or saw a strange car, fearing that she would be found out and taken away. She refuses to talk to August about the truth, wanting to preserve and protect her time staying with the Calendar Sisters where she was sure she was safe. Just like in a honeybee’s nest, the bees work together as one unit exhibiting unity and protection. Lily felt that with August, May, June, and her dearest Rosaleen and was not ready to have that world destroyed by the truth.*The sentence in pink begins with a transition from the previous

paragraphs and the leads into the topic sentence for the 2nd reason.*Quote and quote analysis is in blue*Wrap-up of point and connection to thesis with the honeybees is

underlined

*First, find a quote that helps prove your reasoning. For example, if you are using the tree as a symbol of strength, what would be a good quote that shows trees are strong and so is Melinda?

*To incorporate a quote, introduce it- Melinda states, “quote here”(author pg. #).

*At one point, Mr. Freeman tells Melinda, “You must walk alone to find your soul” (Anderson 38).*Notice that the period always comes after the

citation!

*Thesis: She uses her made-up story to hide behind, similar to the way bees live secretly with their hives, for protection against everything happening around her, in hopes for her dream world to become a reality.*Throughout the novel, Lily Owens continues to build up her lie

of who she really is and why she ran away in order to keep people from being suspicious or questioning her. She struggles to concoct explanations to questions that she and August both know she cannot answer. Symbolically, Lily is climbing deeper and deeper into the honeycombs of the hive, or digging further into her hole. “It’s your secret,” Rosaleen said. “You do what you want with it” (Kidd 79). Everyone at the house knows that Lily is hiding something; however, they do not push her to tell the truth. Instead, the Boatwright sisters accept that she would reveal the truth when she was ready. Lily had to find her own way out of the “hive” and deal with reality.*Quote is in pink*Quote interpretation that ties to your reason is in blue*Wrap-up of point to easily transition to next point is

underlined.

*Not only does Lily Owens hide from the truth, but she also tries to protect herself from what she will not accept as real.

*This is a good transition statement because it references the main point of the previous paragraph, but also introduces the main point of the second paragraph (notice that both points are the reasons from the thesis)

*This gnawing fear of losing the people that she now feels is family and being taken from the only place she truly feels is her home keeps Lily’s secret hidden in the dark while she continues to create this falsehood of a life she never led by a girl she never has been. “What’s wrong with living in a dream world? And Rosaleen would say, you have to wake up” (Kidd 125). While staying at the Boatwright house, Lily continued to implant the belief that she belonged there, and that everything was just fine. When Rosaleen would tell Lily to wake up and face reality, she refused to confront the inevitable. Instead of answering August’s questions, she would avoid them and ask August hundreds of inquiries to protect herself. However, just like August knows about the secret lives bees have inside the hive, she knew that Lily was buried under her own hive of lies. “Most people don’t have any idea about all the complicated life going on inside a hive,” August states, revealing that she understands Lily has issues in her own life Lily does not want others knowing about, not, at least, until she can figure out a way to accept knowing the truth will mean for her (Kidd 148). *Transition from previous paragraph which leads to reason #3 is in

blue*Quote and interpretation is in pink*Connection to thesis with the bees and another quote and

interpretation wraps up the final body paragraph and is underlined.