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My main point in this narrative was to show personal example of how I have the literacy that

I do.

First I made a list of literary factor then I related events of my life to them. I did not change

the shape of my story that much. I kept it for the most part the same.

It gave me advise on things to improve on in my story and in general writing.

I like that I havepersonal event to tie in each literary factor.

I would spend more time on expanding my vocabulary and improving the flow of my story.

I now see that even the little things in my life have big impacts towards my literacy level.

Writing in general in a challenge for me, but seeing my story written out is a wonderful

reward.

What do you think the greatest factor of literacy is for me?

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Comment [LH2]: That does work


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According to Google, literacy means the competence or knowledge in a

specified area. You can have literacy in anything from sports to education. We all

have our strengths and weaknesses in these aspects of our lives and it all

depends on your background. Most people think of literacy as just your ability to

read and write. This is true but literacy is not limited to this. For instance I have a

high level of literacy in soccer,. I know how to play and I know the rules. I have

obtained this literacy by playing soccer since I was six. Growing up playing with

my sisters helped improve my level of this literacy. I could go on about the

different things I seem to be literate in but I will stick to my literacy in reading and

writing.

There are so many so factors that can affect the level of someones

reading and writing skills. These factors range from education to social events in

a persons life. The surroundings in which a child grows up in and the role models

they have can help or harm their level of knowledge. Family involvement in a

childs life is another factor. Influences of literacy can also come from the

classroom background that a child gets, because n. Not all children get the same

opportunities and this leads to kids concern about therekids tend to have varying

opinions about theireducation. If theirre opportunities are fun and engaging it will

lead to a positive reaction of learning, b. But this can also have the negative

effect. The amount of teacher support is an additional factor along with peer

influence. These are just of a few of the issues that could and do affect literacy.

A child is most influenced by the world at a young age, so the people the

support and surround the child influence him or her the greatest. I grew up in


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what I thought was a big family. I have three older sister and two loving parents. I

also live very close to my extended family like my grandparents, aunts, uncles

and cousin. We are a very close family and we are always together. Needless to

say the majority of my childhood was spent with my large, crazy caringloving

family. My family holds a really high value onfeducation. Since my sisters where

older than me they always read to me and helped me learn. They all were very

smart in school and this gave me something to live up too. I was known as a

Keranakis Girl and I sawtookthatthis, as I had to be smart and well behaved. I

did not want to disappoint them so I worked my hardest in school. Also mMy

aunt was a teacher and she even ended up teaching me. She would always ask

me about school and make me show her what I had learned. This aided my

growth in education because I wanted to learn to impress my family. The positive

support and influences they showed me increased my literacy level. I worked

hard to improve my reading and writing skills for their approval.

Parents are seen to be a childs first role model. Both of my parents are

very smart and hard working. They pushed me to do better and I wanted to for

them. Every night before going to sleep my dad would make me pick a book out

of our bookcase to read. He would help me along in reading and t. This made me

enjoying reading as a young child. I looked forward to my reading session with

my father. My mom usually reads a book every night before she goes to sleep

and I always wanted to be like her. So when I finally learned to read I would go

cuddle beside her and read my book while she read hers. Sometimes she would

make me read aloud just to test my reading ability ability to read and i. If I came

Comment [LH3]: I think your memstarts to flow much better here, as

more personal. You sound more naless generic.

Comment [LH4]: This would be a

opening line for your memoir.

Comment [LH5]: Maybe a few mo

specifics on them? Education? Prof


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across a word I did not know she would make me write it down and look it up. It

was a game for me and I loved sharing these moments with my mother.

Along with family involvement, the classroom environment plays a key role

in the literacy level of a child because s. Some children get different levels of

learning. My familys support and teaching helped me have a high level of

knowledge level and in return allowed me to get into AIG classes in elementary

school. During the normal reading and math time in class some students,

including myself, were pulled out of class to be taught by a special teacher. We

were taught at a higher level than our classmates that stayed in class. The

teachers said that we were not being challenged enough in regular class so they

gave us harder work. I adored AIG classes, my teacher was the best and her

teaching style was remarkable. It was more of a free learning ability for the few

students that were in these classes. Instead of sitting in a classroom of twenty

kids, it was usually five students to one teacherand w. We were able to do more

interactive learning. The entertaining quality of learning helped us take more out

of the lessons. This was a positive factor to me because I got a higher education,

but this was an unfair advantage to my classmates. They did not get the same

opportunities as I did. The unequal chances helped me rise above the average

students.

My AIG classes helped me not only to learn better but also to make

connections to other smart kids. I became friends with the other AIG students;.

sSince we spent so much time together we had many things in common. This

helped me towards a higher literacy level by giving me other to inspire me to

Comment [LH6]: I think you do a of showing the impact of family on

educational opportunities. You see

aware that your access to resource

big piece of your literacy.

Comment [LH7]: See comment 6.

you can do more with this theme. M

come back to it as you conclude? W

answer to unequal chances for ex

Comment [LH8]: Again, you do a

of showing how opportunities and

environment feed off each other.


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work harder. We all had friendly competition against each other and we found it

fun and amusing to push each other. It made learning a lot easier because I had

peers persuading me to work. The friendly competition is still with us today; m.

My friends and I still to this day talk about grades and how well we did on things.

This improved my literacy level by giving we something to work up to. Plus

having smart friends was good too when I needed help. I was strong in math and

would help them if they helped in English. We made a support system that truly

helped us all improve our l iteralness.

Teachers seem to notice my improvements and because of this they gave

me more support. They would push me to what they thought was my level. All of

my teachers appeared to do this but none of my teachers pushed me as hard as

my senior high school English teacher. Mrs. Urbanski (Mrs. U) was by far my

favorite teacher. Not only was she my English teacher but also she had been my

soccer coach all four years and . I was also the manger for the boys team she

coached too. She watched me throughout high school grow in literacy. When I

found out she was going to be my senior English teacher I was nervous because

I knew she would expected a lot out of me. I was smart student but English was

never my strongest subject because. I did not like reading aloud and I hated

writing. I knew she thought I was a smart kid and I knew she was going to push

me. Our first assignment was to write a paper about our life and . I wrote what I

thought was a nicely written paper that was not completely thrown together at the

last minute, but when I got my grade back I was shocked. She had given me a 70

on it. I looked at some of the other papers in the room that scored higher than

Comment [LH9]: I dont think this

right word.


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mine and I could not understand why I got such a low grade. I finally managed to

muster up enough confidence to ask her why I got the grade I did. Mrs. U said,

You did not try, you simply just threw meaningless words on to paper. To be

blunt you bullshitted the whole thing. I was shocked to hear her say that but it

made me think. I had but little to no effort into that paper and I see that it showed.

Every paper after that I tried my hardest to improve my writing. As a result I

slowly saw my grade increase. Her push and motivation caused me to want to

better my writing. Having her belief in me and that I could do better, boosted my

view on how I saw my own writing. It made me take risk and write some rather

good stories while in her class. She is my main positive influence towards the

literacy level that I am today. I still may not be the best writer in the world but I

am improving.

Even though I have had so many positive influences of literacy, I am still

not where I want to be. I still to this day do not see myself as a strong writer. I

have trouble with getting my point across in writing. I never am able to coherently

put my thoughts together. It takes me awhile to write because I cannot seem to

find the words to say. My weakness in spelling also plays a roll in this. The fact

that I cannot spell every well makes me a safe writer. I am often afraid to take

risk in my writing so I keep my words short and simple. However I am working on

becoming a better writer. In my Engineering major I need to be literate in writing

and reading. The ability to get my point across in writing and also the need to be

able to understand others writing, is vital to my success. A also need to be able

Comment [LH10]: The specifics h

great.

Comment [LH11]: Maybe talk a b

some of the other writing you did?

Comment [LH12]: Good to bring uthe present.

Comment [SK13]: Expand


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to understand others writing. A person should never stops learning, so. I must

continue to try to improve my literacy level.

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