Do Now #30:

• Which of the following sentences would Which of the following sentences would work better as a thesis statement? Be work better as a thesis statement? Be prepared to explain your reasons for your prepared to explain your reasons for your choice. choice.

A.A.Although they are widely ignored and Although they are widely ignored and derided as mindlessly violent, video games derided as mindlessly violent, video games are a form of popular art that deserves to be are a form of popular art that deserves to be evaluated as seriously as television or film. evaluated as seriously as television or film.

B.B.Video games are not as mindless as people Video games are not as mindless as people think.think.

Aim: How do you compose an Aim: How do you compose an effective thesiseffective thesis??

Aim: How do you compose an Aim: How do you compose an effective thesis?effective thesis?

• TOPICTOPIC• GeneralGeneral• ObjectiveObjective• Word or phraseWord or phrase• What do you see?What do you see?

• THESISTHESIS• SpecificSpecific• SubjectiveSubjective• SentenceSentence• What are you What are you

saying ABOUT saying ABOUT what you see?what you see?

Aim: How do you compose an Aim: How do you compose an effective thesis?effective thesis?

• TOPICTOPIC• Analogy between Analogy between

his love and summer his love and summer • Shakespeare Shakespeare

compares his love to compares his love to summersummer.

• THESISTHESIS

• Shakespeare draws Shakespeare draws an analogy between an analogy between his love and summer his love and summer to develop the to develop the timeless nature of timeless nature of her beauty.her beauty.

Aim: How do you compose an Aim: How do you compose an effective thesis?effective thesis?

• Effective:Effective: • Significance—Why is Significance—Why is

what you see what you see important?important?

• Consequence—What is Consequence—What is the effect or result of the effect or result of what you see?what you see?

• Reason—Why did the Reason—Why did the author do this? What is author do this? What is the purpose of what you the purpose of what you see?see?

• Ineffective:Ineffective:• Too FactualToo Factual

• Too BroadToo Broad

• Too VagueToo Vague

Aim: How do you compose an Aim: How do you compose an effective thesis?effective thesis?

• Too FactualToo Factual: The first polygraph was : The first polygraph was developed by Dr. John A. Larson. developed by Dr. John A. Larson.

• Revised:Revised: Because the polygraph has not Because the polygraph has not been proved reliable, even under the most been proved reliable, even under the most controlled conditions, its use by private controlled conditions, its use by private employers should be banned employers should be banned (Consequence).(Consequence).

Aim: How do you compose an Aim: How do you compose an effective thesis?effective thesis?

• Too BroadToo Broad: Mapping the human : Mapping the human genome has many implications for genome has many implications for health and science. health and science.

• RevisedRevised: Although scientists can now : Although scientists can now detect genetic predisposition to specific detect genetic predisposition to specific diseases, not everyone should be tested diseases, not everyone should be tested for these diseases. for these diseases. (Significance)(Significance)

Aim: How do you compose an Aim: How do you compose an effective thesis?effective thesis?

• Too VagueToo Vague: The way the TV show : The way the TV show ER ER portrays doctors and nurses is interesting. portrays doctors and nurses is interesting.

• RevisedRevised: The writers of : The writers of ER ER dramatize the dramatize the experiences of doctors and nurses to experiences of doctors and nurses to portray health care professionals as portray health care professionals as unfailingly caring and noble. unfailingly caring and noble. (Reason)(Reason)

Aim: How do you compose an Aim: How do you compose an effective thesis?effective thesis?

Aim: How do you compose an Aim: How do you compose an effective thesis?effective thesis?

• Sometimes our words fall short of their mark Sometimes our words fall short of their mark in expressing our true feelings. When we in expressing our true feelings. When we struggle we often resort to songs or poems. struggle we often resort to songs or poems. Write an essay in which you compare and Write an essay in which you compare and contrast a song or poem with that of contrast a song or poem with that of Shakespeare’s Shakespeare’s Sonnet 18. Sonnet 18. Consider the Consider the literary techniquesliterary techniques each author uses to each author uses to express the speaker’s feelings towards his or express the speaker’s feelings towards his or her subject.her subject.

Aim: How do you compose an Aim: How do you compose an effective thesis?effective thesis?

Aim: How do you compose an Aim: How do you compose an effective thesiseffective thesis??• Exchange your thesis with a partner for review Exchange your thesis with a partner for review

and respond to these questions in writing:and respond to these questions in writing:1.1.Does the thesis state a Does the thesis state a significance, a significance, a

consequence, or a reasonconsequence, or a reason? ? 2.2. Is the thesis too obvious? If you cannot oppose Is the thesis too obvious? If you cannot oppose

it, it might be it, it might be too factualtoo factual. . 3.3.Can you support the thesis with the evidence Can you support the thesis with the evidence

available? If it requires a book to prove, it is available? If it requires a book to prove, it is too broad. too broad.

4.4. Is any language Is any language too vague too vague in the thesis? Could in the thesis? Could it be made more specific? it be made more specific?

Aim: How do you compose an Aim: How do you compose an effective effective thesisthesis??

A.A. Although they are widely ignored and Although they are widely ignored and derided as mindlessly violent, video derided as mindlessly violent, video games are a form of popular art that games are a form of popular art that deserves to be evaluated as seriously deserves to be evaluated as seriously as television or film. as television or film.

B.B. Video games are not as mindless as Video games are not as mindless as people think.people think.