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Details Clearing Things Up

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  • 1. Details Clearing Things Up

2. Objectives Understand the types of details Develop techniques to use details Explain how details can be used Use imagery to enhance detailsRev 2/20102 3. Use of Details Details explain ideas Details give life to writing Details are selected to meet the purpose of the essay Imagery is a detail which use the sensesRev 2/20103 4. Abstract vs. Concrete Flower RoseYellow RoseThe alarm clock rang The alarm clock was a klaxon shattering sweet reposeThe alarm clock woke me with a start.The dress was pretty The dress had a nice patternThe dress was blue with light yellow checks.He was happy He smiled broadlyThe smile on his face was a large as the grill on a 1950s Buick.Rev 2/20104 5. Abstract/Concrete Exercise Read each of the following words and decide where the example is on the concrete/abstract scale Maple tree are pretty trees in the fall. Sunday afternoon is a fun day. He was a graceful man: tall, thin and elegant. Lana wants success in her life. Everyone knows the dangers of global warming. Rev 2/2010AbstractConcreteAbstractConcreteAbstractConcreteAbstractConcreteAbstractConcrete5 6. Abstract vs. Concrete BasicGalileo was too sick to observe with the newly invented telescope the three comets of 1618.Rev 2/20106 7. Abstract vs. Concrete Details A small comet glowed in the skies over Florence that September of 1618. Though unspectacular, as comets go, it was nevertheless the first comet to appear since the birth of the telescope. Other astronomers took to their rooftops with instruments of Galileos design, but Galileo himself remained indoors an invalid. Then another comet arrived in mid-November, while Galileo unfortunately fared no better than before. And even by the end of November, when a truly brilliant third comet burst on the scene to garner the attention of observers all over Europe, Galileo still could not stand among them. Galileos Daughter Dava SobelRev 2/20107 8. Senses Sight Sound Smell Taste TouchAllegory of the Five Senses -- 1668 Rev 2/20108 9. Using Senses Sense words can increase the details in writing She smelled nice. She smelled of roses freshly budded on a dewy morning. It was hard work. When I finally pushed the print button on the computer, a wave of satisfaction filled me because I knew that I had finally finished the paper.Rev 2/20109 10. Clear Sentences Avoid sentences overly long and complicated Avoid sentences that are difficult to understandDuring my research on this project, which covers an important topic that everyone should be aware of and concerned with, I discovered that my long held beliefs on this subject were nave and fuzzy.Rev 2/201010 11. Types of Details Examples Anecdotes Fables and tales Facts Statistics Metaphors and similesRev 2/201011 12. Examples Relevant Unified Answers questions the reader might haveMr. Cabot smoked cigarettes since he was fourteen. At the age of fifty, he died of slow suffocation because 36 years of Lucky Strikes turned his lungs to beef jerky.Rev 2/201012 13. Anecdotes Anecdotes are usually longer than examples They can be several paragraphs They make good introductory paragraphsIn high school Mary hid with her friends behind the schools gym to be hip and smoke their cigarettes. When she turned twentyfive she cut back from three packs a day to two. At fifty, though most thought she was over sixty, Mary stopped dancing, going shopping, and playing with her grandchild. She just got too winded to do more than just sit beside her full ashtray.Rev 2/201013 14. Fables and Tales Fables usually have animals do human activities for the purpose of a moral Tales a usually made up anecdotes Fables and tales are seldom used in a research paperRev 2/201014 15. A Fable tortoise decided to The after theand the harethe tortoise.have a rematch several decades hare lost to The day of the big event arrived, and the hare was again boasting between puffs of her cigarette that she had learned her lesson not to be over confident. This time she was running as fast as she could regardless of the pace of the tortoise. The pair were out of the starting gate like a bullet from a gun and a boulder from a slingshot. The tortoise saw nothing but the dust the hare left behind. But soon the tortoise caught up to the hare, who was panting and wheezing beside a large oak tree. Although the tortoises speed would hardly kick up dust, he crossed the finish line without seeing the hacking hare again. Moral cigarettes can take the zip out of you. Rev 2/201015 16. Facts Facts carry weight Be certain facts are correct Be certain facts are from a reputable sourceRev 2/201016 17. Facts More than 400,000 deaths in the U.S. each year are from smoking-related illnesses. Smoking greatly increases your risks for lung cancer and many other cancers Among infants to 18 months of age, secondhand smoke is associated with as many as 300,000 cases of bronchitis and pneumonia each year. Pregnant women who smoke are more likely to deliver babies whose weights are too low for the babies' good health. If all women quit smoking during pregnancy, about 4,000 new babies would not die each year. Facts About Smoking National Institutes of Health, National Cancer Institute, & American Cancer Society 2/201017 18. Statistics Statistics are similar to facts except are based on probability analysis Understand the scope and methods used Look for biasRev 2/201018 19. Statistics The Tobacco Industry kills more people in North America from Monday to Thursday of each week than the terrorists murdered in total on Sept. 11, 2001 90% of lung cancer occurs in those who have smoked. Each package delivers the equivalent of one chest x-ray. Chemicals contained in second hand smoke are not even allowed in most city landfills When it comes right down to it, aren't you tired of being a slave to cigarettes? Quit Smoking Right Now. (2008) 2/201019 20. Similes and Metaphors Compare unlike things Similes uses like or as in the comparison Nobody should smoke cigarettes - and smoking with an ulcer is like pouring gasoline on a burning house. -- Dr. Sara Murray Jordan Metaphor is a direct comparison She was cigarette thin and just as deadly.Rev 2/201020 21. Clich A clich is imagery that has been over used and is no longer vibrant He smoked like a chimney. Hungry as a bearRev 2/201021 22. Grammar Like and as Like is a preposition used with nouns and pronouns She sang like a bird. As is a conjunction and is used with clauses She sang as though she were a bird.Rev 2/201022 23. Filler Words Avoid filler words. Usually these word mean little except to add words. Bill has a lot of money. What is a lot? Really A lot Very Many There are Ginger studied very hard. How much time did she spend studying?Rev 2/201023 24. Haiku Is a short poem of Japanese origin which Usually has 3 lines Has 5 7 5 syllables to a lines Includes nature and personal emotion Uses imagery to convey insight into reality.Basho 1644-1694 The most famous Japanese practitioner of haikuRev 2/201024 25. Old AgeNow I see her face, The old woman abandoned, The moon her only companion.Rev 2/201025 26. NatureWith plum blossom scent, This sudden sun emerges Along a mountain trail.Rev 2/201026 27. Talent Seen in plain daylightThe fireflys nothing but a Simple brown insect.Rev 2/201027 28. FameUngraciously, under A great soldiers empty helmet,A cricket sings.Rev 2/201028 29. Ezra Pound 1885-1972In a Station of the Metro The apparitions of these faces in the crowdPetals on a wet, black bough. Rev 2/201029 30. Write Your Own Haiku Write a haiku for extra credit.Rev 2/201030 31. Summary Details support the writer's key ideas Details help the readers understanding the key ideas Details enhance the readers experience Details are necessaryRev 2/201031 32. Resources Using statistics print/research/PDFs/r_stats.pdf Elementary Concepts in Statistics Writing for Success (anecdotes) Aesops Fables On line 2/201032 33. Basic Statistical Terms Percent ratio between a whole category and a part Average generic term for 3 ways to average Mean statistical term for average Median middle number (used to eliminate wide extremes) Mode most frequently occurringRev 2/2010 25% = = 1:4 (2+3+8+9+73)/5 = 19 2,3,8,9,73 = 8 2,5,3,2,3,3 = 333