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Kelompok 2
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Finding Faults on a Writing
Kelompok 2
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Hani Afdaliah’s Writing
Rizka Pratiwi’s Writing Andi Ratnasari’s Writing
Finding Faults on a Writing
CONCLUSION
ENGLISHFinding Faults on a Writing
XII IPA UNGGULAN 1 SMAN 5 MAKASSAR
Hani Afdaliah’s Writing
Rizka Pratiwi’s Writing Andi Ratnasari’s Writing
Kelompok 2
ENGLISHFinding Faults on a Writing
CONCLUSIONHOME
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13 Hasri Ainun Syawal
18 Siti Anissa Safira
31 Andi Devi Putri Awalina
CONCLUSION
Long time ago, there was a hill called Passanggarahan. It was located in the middle of Sengkang city and it wasn’t far from Lake Tempe. Passanggarahan was a beautiful place because it had wonderful scenery. The weather was so fresh because this place was full of trees. In the middle of the hill, at the top of Passanggarahan hill, there was a very large tree. According to the people around it, this tree was the only big tree in Sengkang. The people around the hill believed that that large tree had a magic power because at night, the people could see the tree clearly. For the first time, they tried to come for praying under the tree in order to make their dream comes true. Passanggarahan hill was not only visited by people around Sengkang city, but also the people from the outside city. They came to that place to sacrifice their own pet like goat, cow, chicken and others and they believed they would get a prosperity in their life forever. One day, there was a single man came to Passanggarahan hill with his little goat. He started to sacrifice his goat while prayed in front of the large tree. He believed if he did that, he would be able to get a beautiful and rich woman. Day by day passed, but he couldn’t get what he wants since he came to Passanggarahan. He trusted too much about Passanggarahan’s magic power. He waited for weeks and months for his dreaming girl. Someday, he realized something important about what people did in Passanggarahan hill was useless. After that, within a few days he died without a woman by his side. This story was spread to the all people and since at that time, many people didn’t believed about Passanggarahan’s power anymore. Untill now, Passanggarahan was well known as a usual hill which didn’t have something special. It was just a place where the people stayed. In fact, the Passanggarahan’s power was a myth.
The Story of Passanggarahan Hill
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FAULTS1.A false tense found in the 2nd Paragraph
line 6th, there’s a mistaken word in future tense, the sentence is “…. in order to make their dream comes true.” mistaken word goes to “comes”.
2.There’s also a mistaken word in negative tense found, • in the 3rd Paragraph line 1st the
sentence is “Passanggarahan hill was not only visited by people around Sengkang city“
mistaken word goes to “visited” • and in the 5th Paragraph line 1st the
sentence is “many people didn’t believed about Passanggarahan’s power anymore” and the mistaken word goes to “believed”.
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FAULTS1.A false tense found in the 2nd Paragraph
line 6th, there’s a mistaken word in future tense, the sentence is “…. in order to make their dream comes true.” mistaken word goes to “comes”.
2.A false tense found, there’s a mistaken word in negative tense, • in the 3rd Paragraph line 1st the
sentence is “Passanggarahan hill was not only visited by people around Sengkang city“
mistaken word goes to “visited” • and in the 5th Paragraph line 1st the
sentence is “many people didn’t believed about Passanggarahan’s power anymore” and the mistaken word goes to “believed”.
The Story of Passanggarahan Hill
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FAULTS1.A false tense found in the 2nd Paragraph
line 6th, there’s a mistaken word in future tense, the sentence is “…. in order to make their dream comes true.” mistaken word goes to “comes”.
2.A false tense found, there’s a mistaken word in negative tense, • in the 3rd Paragraph line 1st the
sentence is “Passanggarahan hill was not only visited by people around Sengkang city“
mistaken word goes to “visited” • and in the 5th Paragraph line 1st the
sentence is “many people didn’t believed about Passanggarahan’s power anymore” and the mistaken word goes to “believed”.
The Story of Passanggarahan Hill
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FAULTS1.A false tense found in the 2nd Paragraph
line 6th, there’s a mistaken word in future tense, the sentence is “…. in order to make their dream comes true.” mistaken word goes to “comes”.
2.A false tense found, there’s a mistaken word in negative tense, • in the 3rd Paragraph line 1st the
sentence is “Passanggarahan hill was not only visited by people around Sengkang city“
mistaken word goes to “visited” • and in the 5th Paragraph line 1st the
sentence is “many people didn’t believed about Passanggarahan’s power anymore” and the mistaken word goes to “believed”.
The Story of Passanggarahan Hill
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Main Ideas1. Passanggarahan hill.2. Passanggarahan was a
beautiful place.3. People believed that
Passanggarahan hill could get them a prosperity in life forever.
4. A single man came to Passanggarahan hill to pray.
5. Passanggarahan’s power was a myth
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CONCLUSION
There was a very stupid man. His name was La Tongko- Tongko. He lived with his mother. One day, La Tongko- Tongko told his mother that wanted to get married. If you want to get married, you have to find a girls first. Then ask her to marry you.La Tongko- Tongko listened to his mother. So, he started to find a girl. And while he was looking around, he met a girl. She was carrying some potatoes in her bag.Hey, girl I want to get married. Do you want to be my wife?The girl was angry! She thought La Tongko- Tongko was mocking her. She threw the potatoes at him. La Tongko- Tongko ran away!At home, La Tongko- Tongko told his mother about girl he met today.Oh, you are so stupid La Tongko- Tongko. You cannot ask a girl to get married like that. You and the girl have to love each other then you can get married, explained his mother.La Tongko- Tongko immediately went out. He still remembered his mothers advce. While he was looking around, a girl was walking and she was carrying some fire woods. La Tongko- Tongko approached her and talked to her.Hey, girl I love you. Do you love me? If you do, lets get married.The girl was angry! She threw some woods at him. La Tongko- Tongko ran away!Again, La Tongko- Tongko told his mother about the girl he met.Oh, no. Youre so stupid. You cannot do that. Love takes time. Besides that you have to talk nicely and gently, explained his mother.La Tongko- Tongko walked around. Finally, he arrived in the jungle. He saw a girl was lying on the ground under a big tree. He did not know that the girl was dead. He approached the girl and talked to her.Hi, beautiful girl. I really love you. How about you? Do you love me?Of course the girl did not respond.After all she was dead already. However, La Tongko- Tongko thought that girl needed time to respond. He remembered his mothers advice. He repeated his question again. And when she kept quiet, La Tongko- Tongko thought the girl was shy. Finally, he asked the final question.Do you want to marry me? If you keep quiet, I will think you say yes.And because the girl did not say anything and did not move at all, La Tongko- Tongko held her and brought her home.At home, La Tongko- Tongko put her in his bed room. He told his mother tha t he had already found a wife. The mother was happy. She wanted to meet the girl. And when she saw a dead body in the bed room, she screamed!La Tongko- Tongko,why did you bring a dead body to our home?Dead body? How did you know she is dead? asked La Tongko- Tongko.Cant you smell the stink from her body? Bury her body now!La Tongko- Tongko then buried the girls body. He felt that he just learned something. And after finished burying the body, he went back home.Before he went to bed, he broke wind. It smelled so bad. La Tongko- Tongko thought that he was dead. He dug a hole and buried his body. And when his mother saw him, she was really angry.what are you doing?Im dead mother. I broke wind and it smelles so stink.The mother could not do and say anything. He just left La Tongko- Tongko alone. And after several hours, La Tongko- Tongko could not hold it anymore. He freed himself and went back to his home.
La Tongko Tongko
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FAULTS1.The Paragraph are not arranged correctly.
2.A false on writing a direct sentence found in a few lines in the writing, the direct sentences that written not using the “ symbol in the beginning and the end of the sentence, and they are found in the line 2nd, 3rd, 6th, 10th, 15th, 18th, 19th, 22nd, 26th, 31st, 32nd, 33rd, 38th and 39th.
3.A misspelled word found, and that is “advce” in line 12th.
4.A false tense found in the line 41st, there is a mistaken word in past tense, the sentence is “I broke wind and it smelles so stink.”, the false goes to the “smelles” word.
La Tongko Tongko
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FAULTS1.The Paragraph are not arranged correctly.
2.A false on writing a direct sentence found in a few lines in the writing, the direct sentences that written not using the “ symbol in the beginning and the end of the sentence, and they are found in the line 2nd, 3rd, 6th, 10th, 15th, 18th, 19th, 22nd, 26th, 31st, 32nd, 33rd, 38th and 39th.
3.A misspelled word found, and that is “advce” in line 12th.
4.A false tense found in the line 41st, there is a mistaken word in past tense, the sentence is “I broke wind and it smelles so stink.”, the false goes to the “smelles” word.
La Tongko Tongko
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FAULTS1.The Paragraph are not arranged correctly.
2.A false on writing a direct sentence found in a few lines in the writing, the direct sentences that written not using the “ symbol in the beginning and the end of the sentence, and they are found in the line 2nd, 3rd, 6th, 10th, 15th, 18th, 19th, 22nd, 26th, 31st, 32nd, 33rd, 38th and 39th.
3.A misspelled word found, and that is “advce” in line 12th.
4.A false tense found in the line 41st, there is a mistaken word in past tense, the sentence is “I broke wind and it smelles so stink.”, the false goes to the “smelles” word.
La Tongko Tongko
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FAULTS1.The Paragraph are not arranged correctly.
2.A false on writing a direct sentence found in a few lines in the writing, the direct sentences that written not using the “ symbol in the beginning and the end of the sentence, and they are found in the line 2nd, 3rd, 6th, 10th, 15th, 18th, 19th, 22nd, 26th, 31st, 32nd, 33rd, 38th and 39th.
3.A misspelled word found, and that is “advce” in line 12th.
4.A false tense found in the line 41st, there is a mistaken word in past tense, the sentence is “I broke wind and it smelles so stink.”, the false goes to the “smelles” word.
La Tongko Tongko
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FAULTS1.The Paragraph are not arranged correctly.
2.A false on writing a direct sentence found in a few lines in the writing, the direct sentences that written not using the “ symbol in the beginning and the end of the sentence, and they are found in the line 2nd, 3rd, 6th, 10th, 15th, 18th, 19th, 22nd, 26th, 31st, 32nd, 33rd, 38th and 39th.
3.A misspelled word found, and that is “advce” in line 12th.
4.A false tense found in the line 41st, there is a mistaken word in past tense, the sentence is “I broke wind and it smelles so stink.”, the false goes to the “smelles” word.
La Tongko Tongko
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Main Ideas1.La Tongko Tongko is a stupid man.2.To get married La Tongko Tongko have to find a girl.
3.To get married La Tongko Tongko and the girl have to love each other.
4.To get married La Tongko Tongko that it needs time and he have to talk nicely to the girl.
5.La Tongko Tongko found a dead body.
6.La Tongko Tongko found out that the girl was already dead.
7.La Tongko Tongko thought that he was dead.
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CONCLUSION
As many people are now interested and trying to find the apparations of the world of mystery,some residents in town Watansoppeng pointed flock of bats hanging in a tree in the district capital Soppeng as sightings of a mystery world.According to the stories of risidents,swarms of bats bird kingdom since the time of selecting trees that grow around town Watansoppeng as rest place during the day is not just any bat.Night birds is believed to be one of the royal guards tangible bat.Argument folklore,it is mentioned,that throughout the kingdom in Soppeng area became the center of power Datu (King) Soppeng with a radius of 1 kilometer square that has now become part of the city Watansoppeng always safe from tampering or enemy attacks.This bat will immediately transformed into a royal guard doing any defense as well as resistance to the movement of other troops wil enter the kingdom.Soppeng havoc in the region.Maintaining security in the region in the past Soppeng kingdom that is also mentioned that the Dutch Government in 1905 ordered to create a European-style building blend with the architecture in the city Bugis Watansoppeng for the office as well as the residence of the Dutch kontreliur.There’s even mention if the building is made safe a place to rest Queen Juliana (Queen of the Netherlands).That is why,before the building is being used as a museum,Soppeng many residents who call as Villa Dutch Queen Juliana thoughit has never been to this place.Uniqueness of the life cycle of herd bats choose trees that grow in the area of about 1 square kilometer area of central authority in the former Datu Soppeng-current conditions:north bordering Lapajung urban areas (around the central market Watansoppeng),east of the village Lemba and Lalabata Rilau village,south of the village Botto,and west to the village Bila.Bats that are still choosing which grows in the area,at night flying around looking for food to pass other districts in the province of South Sulawesi,but the morning they were back to the trees that now grow in the downtown section Watansoppeng.Mystery behind the story sounds great-grandchildren and great-grandchildren-bats decorate the trees in the city during the day Watansoppeng there was also a myth that call,for anyone who urinated bats from the trees will get lucky omen unexpected.As for those whose bodies are overwritten ‘poo’ bat is going to address the matchmaking meet men or women from Soppeng district.
Intangible Royal Bodyguard Bat Sightings
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FAULTS1.A few misspelled words found, and they are
“apparations” in 1st paragraphth 1st line, “risidents” in 2nd paragraph 1st line, and “wil” in 3rd paragraph 5th line, “thoughit“ in 4th paragraph 6th line, and “kontreliur” in 4th paragraph 4th line.
2.A few mistakes in words arranging found, they are in way the city name was written. The writer put the word “city” ahead of the city title which is wrong. They are “town Watansoppen”, “district capital Soppeng”, “city Watansoppeng”, ”village Botto”, “village Lemba” and “village Bila”.
3.A false tense found in the 3rd paragraph, the sentence is “square that has now become part of the “ and the mistaken word goes to “become”.
4.A few non-senses paragraph found, they are• “Mystery behind the story sounds great-grandchildren and great-
grandchildren-bats decorate the trees in the city during the day…“• And many more
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FAULTS1.A few misspelled words found, and they are
“apparations” in 1st paragraphth 1st line, “risidents” in 2nd paragraph 1st line, and “wil” in 3rd paragraph 5th line, “thoughit“ in 4th paragraph 6th line, and “kontreliur” in 4th paragraph 4th line.
2.A few mistakes in words arranging found, they are in way the city name was written. The writer put the word “city” ahead of the city title which is wrong. They are “town Watansoppen”, “district capital Soppeng”, “city Watansoppeng”, ”village Botto”, “village Lemba” and “village Bila”.
3.A false tense found in the 3rd paragraph, the sentence is “square that has now become part of the “ and the mistaken word goes to “become”.
4.A few non-senses paragraph found, they are• “Mystery behind the story sounds great-grandchildren and great-
grandchildren-bats decorate the trees in the city during the day…“• And many more
Intangible Royal Bodyguard Bat Sightings
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Andi Ratnasari’s Writing XII IPA UNGGULAN 1 SMAN 5 MAKASSAR
FAULTS1.A few misspelled words found, and they are
“apparations” in 1st paragraphth 1st line, “risidents” in 2nd paragraph 1st line, and “wil” in 3rd paragraph 5th line, “thoughit“ in 4th paragraph 6th line, and “kontreliur” in 4th paragraph 4th line.
2.A few mistakes in words arranging found, they are in way the city name was written. The writer put the word “city” ahead of the city title which is wrong. They are “town Watansoppen”, “district capital Soppeng”, “city Watansoppeng”, ”village Botto”, “village Lemba” and “village Bila”.
3.A false tense found in the 3rd paragraph, the sentence is “square that has now become part of the “ and the mistaken word goes to “become”.
4.A few non-senses paragraph found, they are• “Mystery behind the story sounds great-grandchildren and great-
grandchildren-bats decorate the trees in the city during the day…“• And many more
Intangible Royal Bodyguard Bat Sightings
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Andi Ratnasari’s Writing XII IPA UNGGULAN 1 SMAN 5 MAKASSAR
FAULTS1.A few misspelled words found, and they are
“apparations” in 1st paragraphth 1st line, “risidents” in 2nd paragraph 1st line, and “wil” in 3rd paragraph 5th line, “thoughit“ in 4th paragraph 6th line, and “kontreliur” in 4th paragraph 4th line.
2.A few mistakes in words arranging found, they are in way the city name was written. The writer put the word “city” ahead of the city title which is wrong. They are “town Watansoppen”, “district capital Soppeng”, “city Watansoppeng”, ”village Botto”, “village Lemba” and “village Bila”.
3.A false tense found in the 3rd paragraph, the sentence is “square that has now become part of the “ and the mistaken word goes to “become”.
4.A few non-senses paragraph found, they are• “Mystery behind the story sounds great-grandchildren and great-
grandchildren-bats decorate the trees in the city during the day…“• And many more
Intangible Royal Bodyguard Bat Sightings
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Andi Ratnasari’s Writing XII IPA UNGGULAN 1 SMAN 5 MAKASSAR
FAULTS1.A few misspelled words found, and they are
“apparations” in 1st paragraphth 1st line, “risidents” in 2nd paragraph 1st line, and “wil” in 3rd paragraph 5th line, “thoughit“ in 4th paragraph 6th line, and “kontreliur” in 4th paragraph 4th line.
2.A few mistakes in words arranging found, they are in way the city name was written. The writer put the word “city” ahead of the city title which is wrong. They are “town Watansoppen”, “district capital Soppeng”, “city Watansoppeng”, ”village Botto”, “village Lemba” and “village Bila”.
3.A false tense found in the 3rd paragraph, the sentence is “square that has now become part of the “ and the mistaken word goes to “become”.
4.A few non-senses paragraph found, they are• “Mystery behind the story sounds great-grandchildren and great-
grandchildren-bats decorate the trees in the city during the day…“• And many more
Intangible Royal Bodyguard Bat Sightings
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Main Ideas1.bats as sightings of a mystery world.
2.Bat is believed to be one of the royal guards tangible bat.
3.This bat will immediately transformed into a royal guard doing any defense.
4.Many residents call the villa as Queen Juliana Villa.
5.herd bats choose trees that grow in the area of central authority.
6.Bats doing activities at night and sleep in the morning.
7.anyone who urinated by bats from the trees will be lucky.
Intangible Royal Bodyguard Bat Sightings
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CONCLUSION
From the texts, we found many faults, start from misspelled words, paragraph and sentence arrange till wrong tenses structures.But mostly, the common faults are found in misspelled words.
We hope that this presentation can give a positive effects to all of us for writing better in the future.
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