charlie and writing a diary entry about when he
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Good morning Year 2!
Today you are going to be pretending you are Charlie and writing a diary entry about when he finds the coin in the snow and consequently the
golden ticket!!
You'll need to use the sentence work we've been doing over the past couple of days to make your writing
as amazing you can!
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On the next slide is an example of what you're going to write. It's split into 4 paragraphs:
P1 Opening
P2 Finding the coin
P3 Being in the shop
P4 Finding the golden ticket
Read the example and note down any words of phrases you might want to use in your own work.
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Dear Diary,
What an amazing day this was! I found a GOLDEN TICKET! I literally couldn't belive my eyes, my hands were shaking as I pulled it out of the torn wrapper. I have never been this excited!
Use dear diary remember a comma after.
Exclamatory sentence
Lots of feelings and showing how Charlie is feeling "my hands were shaking..."
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It all started when I was slowly trudging home in the snow. My fingers were freezing and the icy wind stung like daggers on my face as I huddled in my scarf. Suddenly, something shiny caught my eye...a glistening 50 pence was sitting in the deep, white snow. Shivering, I bent down and picked it up. It was as cold as ice. I knew I should take it home so my Mother could buy food but, as I gazed at the delicious Wonka bars sitting in the window of the shop and I imagined the taste of the creamy chocolate, I just couldn't resist.
Sentence openers Adverbs to describe verbs.
Simile use as or like:
It was as cold as ice.
Exciting verbs:
trudging, huddled, shivering, gazed and imagined.
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Quickly, I stepped into the cosy shop and walked straight up to the shopkeeper. High on the shelves were hundreds of brightly coloured Wonka bars. I asked for a WhippleScrumptious Fudgemallow Delight and gobbled it down. The taste was incredible. Something, I don't know what it was, made me ask for another one. This time I opened the wrapper more carefully. I felt nervous. Then I froze. From inside the wrapper I saw a brilliant flash of gold. It was a Golden ticket, I'd found the final golden ticket!
Start sentences with adverbs followed by a comma.
Adjectives to describe nouns.
Short sentences:
I felt nervous.
I froze!
Describe the shop and Charlie's feelings.
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Trembling with excitement, I pulled the sparkling ticket out. Everyone in the shop went crazy but I could barely remember what they said. All I could think was I have to go and show my family. I sprinted off into the snow, it didn't seem cold anymore.
Sentence openers conjunctions:
and, but, so, because.
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Now you've had a look at an example it's over to you Year 2.
We can't wait to read some of your diaries!
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What you could include:• Different sentence types• Adjectives• Adverbs• Sentence openers• A range of punctuation , ! ?• Exciting verbs• Thoughts and feelings• Paragraphs• Dear Diary,