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Introduction to Daily Paragraph Editing
Why Daily Paragraph Editing?Daily Paragraph Editing is designed to help students master and retain grade-level skills inlanguage mechanics and expression through focused, daily practice. Instead of practicingskills in a series of random, decontextualized exercises, Daily Paragraph Editing embedslanguage skills in paragraphs that represent the types of text that students encounter intheir daily reading and writing activities across the curriculum. A weekly writing activityallows students to apply the skills they have been practicing throughout the week in theirown short compositions.
What’s in Daily Paragraph Editing?Daily Paragraph Editing contains lessons for 36 weeks, with a separate lesson for each day.
Each week’s lessons for Monday through Thursday consist of individual reproducibleparagraphs that contain errors in the following skills:
• capitalization• punctuation• spelling• language usage, and more
Student’s daily lesson pages for Monday through Thursday include:
a label indicating the typeof writing modeled in theweekly lesson
,‘ as needed, the‘Watch For” logo
a paragraph with alerts students toerrors for students more challengingto correct; along skills to addresswith the other in the paragraph3 paragraphs forthe week, thisforms a completecomposition
daily and weeklylesson identifiers
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Students correct the errors in each daily paragraph by marking directly on the page. A
reproducible sheet of Proofreading Marks (see page 10) helps familiarize students with
the standard form for marking corrections on written text. Full-page Editing Keys show
corrections for all errors in the daily paragraphs. Error Summaries help teachers identif
the targeted skills in each week’s lessons, and therefore help teachers plan to review or
introduce the specific skills needed by their students.
Teacher’s full.sized annotated Editing Key pages include:
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the originalstudent textwith correctionsmarked in red(using theproofreadingmarkspresented onpage 10)
daily and weeklylesson identifiers
When corrected and read together, the four paragraphs for one week’s lesson form
a cohesive composition that also serves as a writing model for students. The weekly
four-paragraph compositions cover a broad range of expository and narrative writing
forms from across the curriculum, including the following:
• nonfiction texts on grade-level topics in social studies and science
• biographies, book reviews, editorials, instructions, interviews, journal
entries, and letters• fables, fantasy and science fiction, historical fiction, personal narratives,
and realistic fiction
• a label indicating the typeof writing modeled in theweekly lesson
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a summary of theerrors in eachparagraph to usein identifyingunfamiliar skillsto teach or reviewwith students priorto assigning theparagraph. Somestudents may be
l more successfulif you share theError Summarywith them before
‘ they read and editthe paragraph.
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Each Friday lesson consists of a writing prompt that directs students to write in responseto the week’s four-paragraph composition. This gives students the opportunity to apply theskills they have practiced during the week in their own writing. Students gain experiencewriting in a wide variety of forms, always with the support of familiar models.
Friday writing prompts include:
• a prompt to write a composition in the sameform as modeled in the weekly lesson
hints to helpWrite a paragraph thai gives information about kite. Write your own topicsentence, or choose one provided below. Don’t forget to add exomples or studentsdetails obout the topic.
address• sample topic bid you know that kites have been used to do important jobs as well as4k 4for having fun? 5ii.iiiS U laL aresentences to
People have been making and using kites for over two thousand years. specific to thesupport reluctant. All over the world, people make and fly kites, writing formwriters
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- the type ofWrite a paragraph that describes the work that was done by ®or Mendel. Tell writing modeled
• a weekly lesson about at least one important thing that was learned from his work. Begin with in the weeklyof these topic sentences, or Write your own:identifier lesson&ragor Mendel’s work has helped scientists understand how traits arepassed from parents to children.
gregor Mendel’s work with plants has also helped scientists understandhumans better.
Does it seem possible that studying plants could help us learn about people?
An Editing Checklist for students (see page 11) helps them revise their own writing orcritique their peers’ efforts. An Assessment Rubric (see page 9) is provided to help youassess student writing.
A reproducible student Language Handbook (pages 168—176) outlines the usage andmechanics rules for students to follow in editing the daily paragraphs. The Handbookincludes examples to help familiarize students with how the conventions of languageand mechanics are applied in authentic writing.
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How to Use Daily Paragraph Editing
You may use Daily Paragraph Editing in several ways, depending on your instructional
objectives and your students’ needs. Over time, you will probably want to introduce
each of the presentation strategies outlined below so you can identify the approach
that works best for you and your students.
The four paragraphs that comprise each week’s editing lessons include a set of errors
that are repeated throughout all four paragraphs. We recommend that you provide
a folder for students to keep their Daily Paragraph Editing reference materials and
weekly lessons. It will work best to reproduce and distribute all four daily paragraphs
for a given week on Monday. That way, students can use the previous days’ lessons
for reference as the week progresses.
Directed Group Lessons
Daily Paragraph Editing activities will be most successful if you first introduce them
as a group activity. You might also have students edit individual copies of the day’s
lesson as you work through the paragraph with the group. Continue presenting the
Monday through Thursday lessons to the entire class until you are confident that
students are familiar with the editing process. Try any of the following methods to
direct group lessons:
Option I1. Create and display an overhead transparency of the day’s paragraph.
2. Read the paragraph aloud just as it is written, including all the errors.
3. Read the paragraph a second time, using phrasing and intonation that
would be appropriate if all end punctuation were correct. (You may find it
helpful to read from the Editing Key.) Read all other errors as they appear
in the text.
4. Guide students in correcting all end punctuation and initial capitals in the
paragraph; mark corrections in erasable pen on the overhead transparency.
5. After the paragraph is correctly divided into sentences, review it one
sentence at a time. Have volunteers point out errors as you come to them,
and identify the necessary corrections. Encourage students to explain the
reason for each correction; explain or clarify any rules that are unfamiliar.
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Option 2Follow Steps 1—4 on page 4, and then work with students to focus on one type of errorat a time, correcting all errors of the same type (i.e., capitalization, commas, subjectlverbagreement, spelling, etc.) in the paragraph before moving on to another type. Refer tothe Error Summary in the Editing Key to help you identify the various types of errors.
Option 3Use directed group lesson time to conduct a minilesson on one or more of the skillsemphasized in that day’s lesson. This is especially appropriate for new or unfamiliarskills, or for skills that are especially challenging or confusing for students. Afterintroducing a specific skill, use the approach outlined in Option 2 to focus on thatskill in one or more of the week’s daily paragraphs. To provide additional practice,refer to the Skills Scope & Sequence to find other paragraphs that include the sametarget skill.
Individual PracticeOnce students are familiar with the process for editing the daily paragraphs, theymay work on their own or with a partner to make corrections. Be sure students havetheir Proofreading Marks (see page 10) available to help them mark their corrections.Remind students to refer to the student Language Handbook as needed for guidancein the rules of mechanics and usage. Some students may find it helpful to know at theoutset the number and types of errors they are seeking. Provide this information byreferring to the Error Summary on the annotated Editing Key pages. You may wish touse a transparency on the overhead to check work with the group. Occasionally, youmay wish to assess students’ acquisition of skills by collecting and reviewing theirwork before they check it.
Customizing InstructionSome of the skills covered in Daily Paragraph Editing may not be part of the grade-level expectancies in the language program you use. Some skills may even be taughtdifferently in your program from the way they are modeled in Daily Paragraph Editing.In such cases, follow the approach used in your program. Simply revise the paragraphtext as needed by covering it with correction fluid or by writing in changes before youreproduce copies for students.
Comma usage is an area where discrepancies are most likely to arise. Daily ParagraphEditing uses the “closed” style, where commas are included after short introductoryphrases. Except for commas used in salutations, closings, dates, and between cityand state in letters, journals, or news articles, all commas that appear in the dailyparagraphs have been correctly placed according to the closed style. All other skillsrelated to the use of commas are practiced by requiring students to insert missingcommas, rather than moving or deleting extraneous commas.
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Occasionally, you or your students may make a correction that differs from thatshown in the Editing Key. The decision to use an exclamation mark instead ofa period, or a period instead of a semicolon, is often a subjective decision madeby individual writers. When discrepancies of this sort arise, capitalize on the“teachable moment” to let students know that there are gray areas in English usageand mechanics, and discuss how each of the possible correct choices can affect themeaning or tone of the writing.
You may wish to have your students mark corrections on the daily paragraphs in amanner that differs from the common proofreading marks on page 10. If so, modelthe marking style you wish students to follow as you conduct group lessons on anoverhead, and point out any differences between the standard proofing marks andthose to be used by your students.
Using the Writing PromptsHave students keep their daily paragraphs in a folder so they can review the week’s
four corrected paragraphs on Friday. Identify the type of writing modeled in thefour-paragraph composition and any of its special features (e.g., dialog in a fictional
narrative; salutation, closing, and paragraph style in a letter; opinion statements andsupporting arguments in an editorial; etc.).
Present the Friday writing prompt on an overhead transparency, write it on theboard, or distribute individual copies to students. Take a few minutes to brainstorm
ideas with the group and to focus on language skills that students will need toaddress in their writing.
After students complete their writing, encourage them to use the Editing Checklist
(see page 11) to review or revise their work. You may also wish to have partnersreview each other’s writing. To conduct a more formal assessment of students’writing, use the Assessment Rubric on page 9.
If you assign paragraph writing for homework, be sure students have the week’s four
corrected paragraphs available as a reference. You may wish to set aside some timefor volunteers to read their completed writing to the class, or display compositions
on a weekly writing bulletin board for students to enjoy
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Assessment Rubric for Evaluating Friday Paragraph WritingThe Friday writing prompts give students the opportunity to use the capitalization,punctuation, and other usage and mechanics skills that have been practiced during the week’sediting tasks. They also require students to write in a variety of different forms and genres.
In evaluating students’ Friday paragraphs, you may wish to focus exclusively on their masteryof the aspects of mechanics and usage targeted that week. However, if you wish to conducta more global assessment of student writing, the following rubric offers broad guidelines forevaluating the composition as a whole.
Characteristics of Student Writing
EXCELLENT GOOD FAIR WEAK
Writing is Writing is Writing is loosely Writing is unclearClarity and exceptionally generally clear, focused on the and unfocused.
Focus clear, focused, focused, and topic.and interesting, interesting.
Main ideas are Main ideas are Main ideas are Main ideas areDevelopment clear, specific, identifiable, but overly broad or unclear or notof Main Ideas and well- may be somewhat simplistic, expressed.
developed, general.
Organization is Organization is Organization is Organization isclear (beginning, clear, but may attempted, but is not coherent.
Organization middle, and end) be predictable or often unclear.and fits the topic formulaic.and writing form.
Details are Details are Details may Details are absentrelevant, specific, relevant, but may be off-topic, or insufficient
Use of Details and well-placed. be overly general. predictable, to support mainor not specific ideas.enough.
Vocabulary is Vocabulary is Vocabulary is Vocabulary isexceptionally colorful and ordinary and may limited, general,
Vocabulary rich, varied, and generally avoids rely on clichés, or vague.well-chosen. clichés.
Demonstrates Demonstrates Errors in use of Limited abilityexceptionally control of conventions of to controlstrong command conventions of mechanics and conventions of
Mechanics of conventions punctuation, usage distract, mechanics andand Usage of punctuation, capitalization, but do not usage impairs
capitalization, spelling, and impede, the readability of thespelling, and usage. reader. composition.usage.
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Proofreading MarksUse these marks to show corrections.
Mark Meaning Example
9’ Take this out (delete). I love % to read.
0 Add a period. It was kites
E Make this a capital letter. First prize went to fliaria.
I Make this a lowercase letter. We saw a lack .at.
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Fix the spelling. This is our
4 Add a comma. Goodnight1Mom.
“/ Add an apostrophe. Tha Li bike.
Add quotation marks. ome he said.
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the book.
Close the space. Foo ball is fun.
redA Add a word. Thepen is mine.
Underline the words. We read Old Yeller.
4’ Add a colon. Alex arrived at 00.
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Editing Checklist
Use this checklist to review andrevise your writing:
Q Does each sentence beginwith a capital letter?
Do names of people andI places begin with a capital
letter?
Does each sentence end witha period, a question mark, oran exclamation point?
QDid I use apostrophes toshow possession (Ana’s desk)and in contractions (isn’t)?
Q Did I choose the correct word(to, too, two)?
Did I check for spellingerrors?
Q Did I place commas wherethey are needed?
Are my sentences clear andcomplete?
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Editing Checklist
Use this checklist to review andrevise your writing:
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Did I check for spellingerrors?
Did I place commas wherethey are needed?
Q Are my sentences clear andcomplete?
Q Does each sentence beginwith a capital letter?
Do names of people andplaces begin with a capitalletter?
QDoes each sentence end witha period, a question mark, oran exclamation point?
QDid I use apostrophes toshow possession (Ana’s desk)and in contractions (isn’t)?
Q Did I choose the correct word(to, too, two)?
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EDITING KEY: Social Studies Article Daily Paragraph Editing
Preview the 4 daily lessons to ensure you review or introduce skills that may be unfamiliar to students.
Kites—Not Just for Fun Error Summa
have Capitalization 6People the world over - been flying kites Language Usage 1
for centuries .L fact, kites were invented over two Punctuation:0 Comma 1
thousand years ago! one ancient story tells of aPenod 6
chinese general his army was trying to overthrow a Spelling 1ØE
cruel emperor. the general made a kite he tied aknot E
in the strin. Next, his soldiers flew it in the0
direction of the palace When the kite was over the0
palacthe general marked the string and reeled in
the kite0
MONDAY WEEK 1
the general measured the length between the Error Sum ary
knot and the mark he made on the kite string. Capitalization 3
measurement Punctuation:
e used this - -- - to plan a tunnel to the Apostrophe 1
emperors palace His soldiers spent days digging the Period 14
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tunnel. Finally, it was read His soldiers crept through0
the tunnel they came out inside the walls of the0z defeated
palace The cruel emperor was with the help0
of a simple kite!
TUESDAY WEEK 1
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SOCIAL STUDIES ARTICLE: Kites—Not Just [or Fun Daily Paragraph Editing
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Kites—Not Just for FunPeople the world over has been flying kites
for centuries in fact, kites were invented over two
thousand years agol one ancient story tells of a
chinese general his army was trying to overthrow a
cruel emperor. the general made a kite he tied a
not in the string Next, his soldiers flew it in the
direction of the palace When the kite was over the
palace the general marked the string and reeled in
the kite
MONDAY WEEK 1
the general measured the length between the
knot and the mark he made on the kite string.
he used this mesurement to plan a tunnel to the
emperors palace His soldiers spent days digging the
tunnel. Finally, it was ready His soldiers crept through
the tunnel they came out inside the walls of the
palace The cruel emperor was defeeted with the help
of a simple kite!
TUESDAY
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WEEK 1
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EDITING KEY: Social Studies Article Daily Paragraph Editing
haveKites , also been used in modern warfare. rror Summa
before airplanes were invented cameras were tied to Capitalization LI
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kite they were sent high in the air to take pictures. Punctuation:enemy 1
This was a way of gathering information about . ammo
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forces. sites have also been used to carry radio spelling 2
eq,uipment up into the air this made it easier to sendreceive
and signals. Kites were used in emergency
lifeboat kits to help lost boats signal to searcherb
WEDNES DAY WEEK 1
Even though kites have been used for warfareA Er or urn a
they are mainly used for fun. People fly kites at Capitalization 3
Punctuation:
parks and beaches. Some places hold yearly kite-flying Comma 5
contests or festivals. In both ç.hina and apaspecial Other 1
holidays include kite-flying as part of the celebration.
kites can be large and expensive or simple and
affordable. You can easily make a kite by using sticks
papetapand string. So go fly a kite,J\
THURSDAY WEEK 1
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SOCIAL STUDIES ARTICIE: Kitcs—Not Just for Fttii Daily Paragraph Editing
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Kites has also been used in modern warfare.
before airplanes were invented cameras were tied to CH0
run-on sentenceskites they were sent high in the air to take pictures.
This was a way of gathering information about enemi
forces. kites have also been used to carry radio
ecuipment up into the air this made it easier to send
and recieve signals. Kites were used in emergency
lifeboat kits to help lost boats signal to searchers
WEDNESDAY WEEK 1
Even though kites have been used for warfare
they are mainly used for fun. People fly kites at 4rCH
• commasparks and beaches. Some places hold yearly kite-flying• exclamation
contests or festivals. In both china and Japan special points
holidays include kite-flying as part of the celebration.
kites can be large and expensive or simple and
affordable. You can easily make a kite by using sticks \/paper tape and string. So go fly a kite
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EDITING KEY: Science Article Daily Paragraph Editing
Preview the 4 daily lessons to ensure you review or introduce skills that may be unfamiliar to students.
How Traits Travel Erro Summary
Capitalization LI
bo you tFunk that plants could help sCientists Punctuation:
learn about peop7 Although it may seem odd regor Comma LI
7A Period 2mendel found that he could learn a lot about people er 1
by studying plants, actually, plants helped Mendel learn Spelling 2
about heredit heredity is the way traits pass fromOE
parents to children In humans, eye color hair color0 4’ passed4’
skin color and height are all traits. They are past onthrough A
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MONDAY WEEK 2
Gregor rneridel was born into a farming family Error Summ ry
in 1823 he was a gifted student. His family could Capitalization 8
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not afford to pay for university studieInstead, Punctuation:
mendel became a monk at the time, this was a good Comma 1
Period 14
way for mendel to keep studying and learning. He also
began to teach science to high school students Mendelloved 0
loved nature. He -love- to walk in the garden among the
plants. on one of these walks mendel saw an unusualdecided A =
plant. he - • to study it.
TUESDAY WEEK 2
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SCIENCE ARTICLE: How Traits Travel Daily Paragraph Editing
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How Traits TravelrCHbo you think that plants could help scientists
commaslearn about people. Although it may seem odd gregor
meridel found that he could learn a lot about people
by studying plants. actually, plants helped Mendel learn
about heredity heredity is the way traits pass from
parents to children In humans, eye color hair color T T
skin color and height are all traits. They are past on
threw heredity.
MONDAY WEEK 2
Gregor mendel was born into a farming family
in 1823 he was a gifted student. His family could 4rCH°
commasnot afford to pay for university studies Instead,
mendel became a monk at the time, this was a good
way for mendel to keep studying and learning. He also
began to teach science to high school students Mendel
loved nature. He love to walk in the garden among the
plants, on one of these walks mendel saw an unusual
plant. he decide to study it.
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EDiTING KEY: Science Article Daily Paragraph Editing
Mendel planted the unusual plant next to a rror Summary
common type of plant. He wanted to see if plants Capitalization 2
Language Usage 1
that grew in the same conditions would look alik0 Punctuation:
when new plants grew mendel saw that they did not Comma 1
Period 3
look alike. Each new plant looked like the “parent” suing 1
cameplant that it -eeme- from. Mendel wondered about this
0He wondered if new plants always looked like the
studiesparent plant Mendel planned more tudys.
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grewMendel 9rwed- plants from two tall parent plants. Error Summary
He gowe4 plants from two short parent plants. He Capitalization 2
grew Language Usage 3
also plants with one tall and one short parent. Punctuation:
When both parent plants were alike the new plants Comma 1
Period 2
looked like the parents. The plant that grew from
a tall and a short parent was tall mendel laterQE
learned that some traits are stronger than others
his discoveries helped us learn how human traits are
passed from parents to children.
THURSDAY WEEK 2
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SCIENCE ARTICLE: How Traits Travel Daily Paragraph Editing
Name
Mendel planted the unusual plant next to a
common type of plant. He wanted to see if plantscommasthat grew in the same conditions would look alike
when new plants grew mendel saw that they did not
look alike. Each new plant looked like the “parent”
plant that it come from. Mendel wondered about this?
He wondered if new plants always looked like the
parent plants Mendel planned more studys.
WEDNESDAY WEEK 2
Mendel growed plants from two tall parent plants.
He growed plants from two short parent plants. Hecommasalso grow plants with one tall and one short parent.
When both parent plants were alike the new plants
looked like the parents. The plant that grew from
a tall and a short parent was tall mendel later
learned that some traits are stronger than others
his discoveries helped us learn how human traits areT T t
passed from parents to children.
THURSDAY WEEK 2
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EDITING KEY: Editorial Daily Paragraph Editing
Preview the 4 daily lessons to ensure you review or introduce skills that may be unfamiliar to students.
Uniforms Are Not the Answer rror Summa
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It seems that more arid more schools these Punctuation:
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of Those who support school uniforms0
that switching over to uniforms can help schools
solve many problems. jt would be wonderful if tough
problems could be solved with such easy answers.too
Its #e- bad that is just not the case.
MONDAY WEEK 3
Those who support uniforms say that they will Error Summary
• . Capitalization 2help make all students equa They also beheve that
• Language Usage 2
students will focus on schoolwork instead of comparing Punctuation:
classmate”clothes Uniform supporters feel that Apostrophe 1
0 easier 9” Period 5
shopping for clothing will be 9’ or student s and Spelling ‘4
parents ik- some say that uniforms may even helpare
solve the gang problems that some schoolsfacingI’
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Unif rms Are Not the AnswerIt seems that more arid more schools these
days are choosing to have student’s wear uniforms
At first, school officials reasons seem to make a lot
of cents Those who support school uniforms beleive
that switching over to uniforms can help schools
solve many problems. it would be wonderful if tough
problems could be solved with such easy answers.
Its to bad that is just not the case.
MONDAY WEEK 3
47CH O
apostrophes
Those who support uniforms say that they will
help make all students eq,ual They also believes that
students will focus on schoolwork instead of comparing
there classmates clothes Uniform supporters feel that
shopping for clothing will be easyer. For student’s and
parents a like some say that uniforms may even help
solve the gang problems that some schools facing
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This kind of thinking just does make sense0 E or Summ
Kids who join gangs will not change9’ust because Capitalizafion 2
Punctuation:
they wear uniforms at school. Lt may seem easier to Apostrophe 2ecide wear Comma 1let the school dd what students -rc each day
, Period 2
but is it really a good idea in the long run?The job Other 2
of parents and teachers is to help children learn to Spelling 2
make good choices. Dont kids deserve to practice I
making good choices every chance they ge7
WEDNESDAY WEEK 3
If we want kids to think for themselves when E or Summa
they grow up we need to let them make simple Capitalization 1
A are Language Usage 2
decisions as soon as they ‘ ready. Choosing clothes Punctuation: I
for school is an easy way to practice making good Comma 1
Period 2
choices. Adults should help children learn.94 o make s&ling 1
good decisions and to think for themselves. We I
sure I
should be ‘ that there are caring adults at I
childhome and at school to help guide every
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This kind of thinking just doesnt make sense
Kids who join gangs wiW not change. Just because
they wear uniforms at school. it may seem easier to
let the school deside what students ware each day
but is it really a good idea in the long run. The job
of parents and teachers iS to help children learn to
make good choices. bont kids deserve to practice
making good choices every chance they get.
WEDNESDAY WEEK 3
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apostrophes
If we want kids to think for themselves when
they grow up we need to let them make simple
decisions as soon as they is ready. Choosing clothes
for school is an easy way to practice making good
choices. Adults should help children learn. To make
good decisions and to think for themselves. We
should be shure that there are caring adults at
home and at school to help guide every children
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EDITING KEY: Letters Daily Paragraph Editing
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Pen Pals Erro Summary
Capitalization LI
dear AnaA
Punctuation:
— I was so happy to get your letter last week. Apostrophe 3
Comma 3Now that school has started again it seems like ages 24’, en
ago that we were at summer camp. m glad that were Spelling 2
keeping our promise to stay in touchlFourth
grade has been fun so far! am still taking0=
violin lessons and I’m also playing on a basketball team= too
after school, dad doesnt want me to get -*o- busy
because we get homework every day now0
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What have you been reading these dayl we are or Summary
reading island of the blue dolphins. So far, I really Capitalization q
Punctuation:
like it We are learning about the Native americans of Comma 20 =
california and my teacher makes it lots of fun. today Penod 2
meal E Other 1
we collected acorns to make acorn mccl spelling 10
Please write soon and tell me all about what you
are doing.
your friend= 4’Mayra
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LETTERS: Pen Pals Daily Paragraph Editing
I was so happy to get your letter last week.
Now that school has started again it seems like ages
ago that we were at summer camp. Im glad that were
keeping our promise to stay in touch!
Forth grade has been fun so far I am still taking
violin lessons and I’m also playing on a basketball team
after school. dad doesnt want me to get to busy
because we get homework every day now
MONDAY WEEK 4
What have you been reading these days we are
reading island of the blue dolphins. So far, i really
like it We are learning about the Native americans of
california and my teacher makes it lots of fun. today
we collected acorns to make acorn meel
Please write soon and tell me all about what you
are doing.
your friend
Mayra
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• letter (closing)
• book titles
Name
dear Ana
Pen Pals
• letter(salutation)
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dear nara Error Summ ry
— thanks for writing back to me so quickly! I love Capitalization 7
— Punctuation:getting letters in the mail more than getting e-mai L Apostrophe 2
do( know why but i think i1’ more exciting to find a Comma 3
real E Period 3envelope waiting for me. Spelling 2
j had a good day at school today we have beenstudying
tudyng fractlonsAand today we had a fraction party.
My group had to divide two pizzas into equal parts
for the whole class We used sixteenths.0
WEDNESDAY WEEK 4
I have been really busy with my music. have Error Sum a
been practicing a duet with my friend un. it starting Capitalization 7
to E Punctuation:too sound really good. I’ll bring the music to camp Apostrophe 1
next summer and you and I can play it together Comma 2A 0 Penod 3
We’ve been reading y the shores of Silver lake, other 2
Weren’t you reading that over the summe ?i loveit Spelling 2
again A 0lease write agc soon
0our friend
ana
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LETTERS: Pen Pals Daily Paragraph Editing
Name
dear mayra
thanks for writing back to me so quicklyl I love
getting letters in the mail more than getting e-mail I
dorit know why but i think its more exciting to find a
reel envelope waiting for me.
i had a good day at school today we have been
studyng fractions and today we had a fraction party.
My group had to divide two pizzas into eq,ual parts
for the whole class We used sixteenths.
WEDNESDAY WEEK 4
I have been really busy with my music. i have
been practicing a duet with my friend lin. Its starting
too sound really good. I’ll bring the music to camp
next summer and you and I can play it together
We’ve been reading By the shores of Silver lake.
Weren’t you reading that over the summer. I love it
please write agen soon
your friend
ana
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• letter (closing)
• book titles
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Birthday Mail Error Summary
Capitalization 114dear daniel—
— A Punctuation:= =
you are invited to celebrate my 11th birthday Comma 3
Period 6with my family and me We will be camping overnight
0 We’ll er
at bat cave camp in Smoky ridge state park. Spelling 1
hike swim and fish at the park. We will leave at
10 from my house at 9231 cypress road on
saurday the 16th. your parents can pick you up at
610 pmat my house on sunday the 17th, or you can
call for a ride home after we get back0
MONDAY WEEK 5
We will have a ten food and cooking gear. Error Su mary
You will need to bring a sleeping bag a flashlight Capitalization 2
4% 4% Punctualion:
extra batteries hiking boots a cap insect repellent Comma 10
sunscreen and all your clothing. If you have a fishing Period 2
Spelling 1
pole, you might want to bring it along. Please call0
555-3020 to let us know if you will be able to comesure
I hope you can!
your rienS
Nick
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Birthday Mail‘4TCHO
dear daniel• names of places
you are invited to celebrate my 11th birthday• dates
with my family and me We will be camping overnight . i time
at bat cave camp in Smoky ridge state park. We’l
hike swim and fish at the park. We will leave at
10.00 am from my house at 9231 cypress road on
saturday the 16th. your parents can pick you up at
6-00 pm at my house on sunday the 17th, or you can
call them for a ride home after we get back
MONDAY WEEK 5
We will have a tent food and cooking gear.
You will need to bring a sleeping bag a flashlight• commasextra batteries hiking boots a cap insect repellent
sunscreen and all your clothing. If you have a fishing
pole, you might want to bring it along? Please cafl
555-3020 to let us know if you will be able to come
I shure hope you can1
your Friend
Nick
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bear daniel, rrorSu mary
.thank you so much for coming to my birthdayCapitalization 3
—Punctuation:
camp-out. I had a great time with Mik- Ton and you. Apostrophe 3great ‘ Comma 2
The headlamp you gave me was a gif0 s thePeriod 1
perfect thing to use for exploring caves. I really like other 1
having both my hands free when m walking in a dark Spelling 1
cave, and a light on my head is the perfect solution.
so much better than a regular flashlight. Thanks)\
WEDNESDAY WEEK 5
My ,Wom took my film to be developed today, Error Sum a
and the pictures from our camping trip should be Capitalization 6
Punctuation:
ready next wee0l’m not sure if the pictures we Apostrophe 1
Comma 1took in the cave will turn out. It might have beentoo Period 3
-- dar I cant wait to see the pictures of that fish Spelling 20= two
we caught. we are getting -fe- copies so that you can
have some pictures for your albu0
your frien
ick
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Name
bear daniel,
thank you so much for coming to my birthday
camp-out. I had a great time with Mike Tony and you.commas
The headlamp you gave me was a grate gift its the
perfect thing to use for exploring caves. I really like
having both my hands free when Im walking in a dark
cave, and a light on my head is the perfect solution.
Its so much better than a regular flashlight. Thanks
WEDNESDAY WEEK 5
My Mom took my film to be developed today,
and the pictures from our camping trip should be
ready next week i’m not sure if the pictures we
took in the cave will turn out. It might have been
to dark i cant wait to see the pictures of that fish
we caught. we are getting to copies so that you can
have some pictures for your album
your friend
nick
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The Letter Error Summary
Capitalization 2
through4’autumn morninand I Language Usage 1
shuffled *i’irew- the leaves on the sidewalk. The letter Punctuation:
his Apostrophe 2carrier waved as he drove off to h’— next stoi Comma 5
waved back and then I paused in front of the row Period 2
Other 1of mailboxes. I took a deep breath,\exhaled slowl SlIing 1
and opened our box. Would this be the day that the
letter awaited so anxiously would finally come?IA
wasn sure j could take even one more day of waiting= 0
MONDAY WEEK 6
It had been weeks since I sent my application Error Summary
V . . . Capitalization 3off to space camp Id spent anxious difficult hours
4’ Language Usage 1
writing the essay that accompanied the application. Punctuation:science written A str h 1
my teacher Mrs uchida had me a p0 op e
4’ ®E 4’ Comma 7
wonderful letter of recommendation and my Xom Period 2
had filled out all the required information for my 5mg 1
scholarship request. Everything was complete so all4’
I could do was wishhopeand wait for a letter
of reply.
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REALISTIC FICTION: The Letter Daily Paragraph Editing
Name
The LetterIt was a crisp cool autumn morning and I
shuffled threw the leaves on the sidewalk. The letter
carrier waved as he drove off to her next stop I
waved back and then I paused in front of the row
of mailboxes. I took a deep breath exhaled slowly
and opened our box. Would this be the day that the
letter Id awaited so anxiously would finally come I
wasnt sure I could take even one more day of waiting
MONDAY WEEK 6
It had been weeks since I sent my application
off to space camp Id spent anxious difficult hours
writing the essay that accompanied the application.
my sceince teacher Mrs uchida had wrote me a
wonderful letter of recommendation and my Mom
had filled out all the required information for my
scholarship rectuest. Everything was complete so all
I could do was wish hope and wait for a letter
of reply.
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EDITING KEY: Realistic Fiction Daily Paragraph Editing
I slowly pulled open the door of the mciilbo0 ErrorSummary
Capitalization 3.g stack of mail was piled inside the box. Rat the
Punctuation:
first piece was addressed to “Resident” and was jUSt Comma LI
the weekly grocery ad announcing the current price Penod 2
of chicke halloween cand and seasonal fruits. below
that was a letter addressed to my mom. It was
from the phone compan so it was probably a bill.
There was one letter lef I could hardly stand0
to look!
WEDNESDAY WEEK 6
I took a sb deep breath and pulled out a cr15 Error Summary
Capitalization 2new envelope. It was addressed to me. Ye .t was
Language Usage 1
from space camb bid the letter have good news for Punctuation:
m or was I about to have a terrible disappointmenf9’Aposfrophe 2
kids A Comma 5
I knew that plenty of other would be getting Penod 2
letters like this on m sure they wanted to go 0th 1
0 Spelling 1
to space camp just as much asj did. In one moreknew’
momen I -ri# d have my answer.
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REALISTIC FICTION: The Letter Daily Paragraph Editing
Name
I slowly pulled open the door of the mailbox
a stack of mail was piled inside the box. Rats the
first piece was addressed to “Resident” and was JUSt
the weekly grocery ad announcing the current price
of chicken halloween candy and seasonal fruits. below
that was a letter addressed to my mom. It was
from the phone company so it was probably a bill.
There was one letter left I could hardly stand
to lookl
WEDNESDAY WEEK 6
4TCH O
• commas
I took a slow deep breath and pulled out a crisp
new envelope. It was addressed to me. Yes It was
from space camp bid the letter have good news for
me or was I about to have a terrible disappointment.
I knew that plenty of other kid would be getting
letters like this one Im sure they wanted to go
to space camp just as much as I did. In one more
moment I new Id have my answer.
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A New Life in Old California Error u mary
Capitalization 6
It has been more than five years since We left Language Usage 3
our home in New pai Lt seemed like we had -H-- Punctuation:
= 0= spent Comma 1
there forever. After all, I had pidd- all eight Period 3there seems
years of my life i+&.. That time and place • so Spelling 1
distant no0Sometimes it feels like our new home in
Salinas, Alto california, is worlds away from new Spain= = = 0
jJ was such a tirindifficult journey between our old
home and our new one that we might as well be in
another world!
MONDAY WEEK 7
Sailing ships seldom bring supplies to Id Error Summ ry— grown Capitalization q
çphfornia. Almost everything we have must be grcn= Punctualion:
or made with our own hands ur home is a simple Comma 30=
one made of adobe. we have far fewer comfortsPeriod 2
Spelling 1
than we did in new pain. We all must work hard to
finish the work at must be done every day. Only
my youngest brothe edrwho was born here in lta
California does not have a job to d.0
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Name
A New Life in Old CaliforniaIt has been more than five years since we left
our home in New spain it seemed like we had live
there forever. After all, I had spended all eight
years of my life their. That time and place seem so
distant now Sometimes it feels like our new home in
Salinas, Alta california, is worlds away from new Spain
it was such a tiring difficult journey between our old
home and our new one that we might as well be in
another world1
MONDAY WEEK 7
Sailing ships seldom bring supplies to old
california. Almost everything we have must be groan
or made with our own hands our home is a simple
one made of adobe. we have far fewer comforts
than we did in new spain. We all must work hard to
finish the work That must be done every day. Only
my youngest brother pedro who was born here in alta
California does not have a job to do
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my job is to care for the cattii lead the cows Error ummary
out to the pasture9”arly in the momma in the late Capitalization 7
Punctuation:
afternoon I herd them back into the barn. Besides Comma 5/‘\
helping me milk Marta spends the day caring for Penod 5
4’pedro. In the early evening pedro likes to sit in the- 4=kitchen while mama pats out tortillas for our dinner
0He likes to help pat the grainy salty cornmeal into
4’flat round shapes that mama cooks on the griddle
4’ = 0
WEDNESDAY WEEK 7
This week, it is Papa turn to guard the mission0 rror u m ry
stealingbandits have been t!9 cattle and horses in this Capitahzation 6
Punctuation:
area The settlers are all taking turns standing Apostrophe 1Ocy guard
guard? Papa says that j am old enough to ;r the Comma 2
0 Period 5
cattle at home. Next year, when i’m lI4APaPa says he sIIing 3
will take me with him to the mission. Perhaps I will
see lovabljolly Father beltran again he will be happyknow -
to that I still enjoy reading and writing0
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Name
my job is to care for the cattle I lead the cows
out to the pasture. Early in the morning in the late
afternoon I herd them back into the barn. Besides
helping me milk Marta spends the day caring for
pedro. In the early evening pedro likes to sit in the
kitchen while mama pats out tortillas for our dinner?
He likes to help pat the grainy salty cornmeal into
flat round shapes that mama cooks on the griddle
WEDNESDAY WEEK 7
This week, it is Papas turn to guard the mission
bandits have been steeling cattle and horses in this
area The settlers are all taking turns standing
guard? Papa says that i am old enough to gard the
cattle at home. Next year, when i’m 114 papa says he
will take me with him to the mission. Perhaps I will
see ‘ovable jolly Father beltran again he will be happy
to no that I still enjoy reading and writing
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Lewis & Clark Error Summary
Capitalization 13The United states of america was a young Language Usage 1
nation in the early 1800s. It was much smaller than Punctuation:
reached Period 1it is today, as it rcccht only from the Atlantic
Spelling 1
Ocean to the mississippi river. In 1803, thebought
government of the united states byd a large area
of land from france. This land was known as the
“louisiana Territory.” It stretched from the mississippi
river to the rocky Mountains. Many native americans
lived ther — — —
MONDAY WEEK 8
Thomas jefferson was the president who bought Error Summ ry
the louisiana territory. He had many q,uestions about Capitalization q
Punctuation:
this new Ian What kinds of plant animal and people Apostrophe 1
could be found on these lands2 President Jefferson Comma 3
wondered Period 3
- what the land west of the rocky mountains otlier 1
was like he knew some of it was mexic 5 lan but he Spelling 1
OEcouldn’t help wondering if there was a route by river
that would lead to the pacific Ocea
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Lewis c ClarkThe United states of america was a young
nation in the early 1800s. It was much smaller than
it is today, as it reacht only from the Atlantic
Ocean to the mississippi river. In 1803, the
government of the united states buyed a large area
of land from france. This land was known as the
“louisiana Territory.” It stretched from the mississippi
river to the rocky Mountains. Many native americans
lived there
MONDAY WEEK 8
4TCH0
names of places
Thomas jefferson was the president who bought
the louisiana territory. He had many questions about
this new land What kinds of plants animals and people
could be found on these lands. President Jefferson
wundered what the land west of the rocky mountains
was like he knew some of it was mexicos land but he
couldn’t help wondering if there was a route by river
that would lead to the pacific Ocean
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President Jefferson decided to have a group of Error Summary
explorers cross the new land. He wanted them to Capitalization q
Punctuation:draw maps study plants and animals and learn about Comma 5
the natives He put Captain Meriwether Lewis in Period 1
0 Spelling 1charge of the explorers and capt. lewis chose william
= = =
Clark to help him lead the group. it took months tojourney
prepare for the . on may 1’4 18014 wis andA 4=
clark set out with more than 30 explorers.
WEDNESDAY WEEK 8
The explorers spent the winter of 18014 in the or S mmamet Ca italization 10area now known as north dakota. There they mct p
Language Usage 1a trench canadian trader and sgcagawea his young Pund.Iion:
native american wife both of them joined the Comma 3
OE Period LI
expedition Sacagawea helped to find food and make Spelling 1friends 0
with other natives By november of 1805 the0=
group reached the pacific Ocean. When they returned
home they were welcomed as heroes0
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President jefferson decided to have a group of
explorers cross the new kind. He wanted them to 4rCHf°
• names of peopledraw maps study plants and animals and learn about• commas
the natives He put Captain Meriwether Lewis in
charge of the explorers and Capt. lewis chose william
Clark to help him lead the group. it took months to
prepare for the journie. on may 114 1804 lewis and
clark set out with more than 30 explorers.
WEDNESDAY WEEK 8
The explorers spent the winter of 1804 in the
area now known as north dakota. There they meet• names of peoplea french canadian trader and sacagawea his young• commas
native american wife both of them joined the
expedition Sacagawea helped to find food and make
frends with other natives By november of 1805 the
group reached the pacific Ocean. When they returned
home they were welcomed as heroes•
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The Everglades Error Su ma
Capitalization qThe United tates of merica stretches from Language Usage 1
the acific ocean to the citlantic ocean with lots Punctuation:
Is Apostrophe 2of land in between Each region of the country
QComma 1
uniq,ue. A special feature of the southeast is a Period 5
• Spelling 1wet grassy area in florida this area is called “the
Everglades.” The Everglades has been described as
a “river of gras “ Thats because currents of freshflow 0
water f!cc through the grass to form the Everglades
special habitats0
MONDAY WEEK 9
spreadsThe everglades across millions of acre0!t Error Summary
is home to thousands of species of plants and animals. Capitalization LI
Language Usage 1
Many of these plants and animals were found only in Punctuation:
the uniq,ue varied habitats of the everglades. There Comma 3
are E Period 2
many different types of habitats in the Everlade Spelling 1
these include mangrove forests, cypress groves marine=
estuaries and freshwater sloughs.,;\
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The Everglades4rCHf0The United states of america stretches from
names of placesthe pacific ocean to the atlantic ocean with lots
of land in between Each region of the country are
unique? A special feature of the southeast is a
wet grassy area in florida this area is called “the
Everglades.” The Everglades has been described as
a “river of grass” Thats because currents of fresh,-,
water floe through the grass to form the Everglades
special habitats‘ .. r
11.
MONDAY WEEK 9
The everglades spreds across millions of acres it
is home to thousands of species of plants and animals.• commasMany of these plants and animals were found only in
the unique varied habitats of the everglades. There
is many different types of habitats in the Everglades
these include mangrove forests, cypress groves marine
estuaries and freshwater sloughs.
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Each Everglades habitat needs to keep a delicate rror ummaryea ‘ 3
balance to stay --ty. When things get out ofap a 1Z on
chemicals Language Usage 2
balanc problems begin. For example, that Punctuation:
pollute the everglades can kill alga- algae are a simple Comma 2
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life-form at the bottom of the food chain. Cf the Spelling 2have
algae disappea,ç the animals that eat algae -h no foob
i:his can cause plants and animals in the food chain to= becomeI._w I
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biggestToday, the -b-. cause of problems in the E or Summa
• drain Capitalization ‘4everglades is people. People have tried to away
Punctuation:
water so they can build homes ther-They have also Apostrophe 1
tried to change the direction that water flows in the Penod 2
Spelling 3
verglades. These changes have created many problemsScientists
in the vergIade’s habitats. are trying to
find a way to make the .verglades healthy again so
this uniq,ue ecosystem will be preserve.0
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Each Everglades habitat needs to keep a delicate
balance to stay heithy. When things get out of
balance problems begin. For example, kemicals that
pollute the everglades can kill algae algae are a simple
life-form at the bottom of the food chain. If the
algae disappear the animals that eat algae has no food
this can cause plants and animals in the food chain to
became out of balance
WEDNESDAY WEEK 9
Today, the bigest cause of problems in the
everglades is people. People have tried to drone away
water so they can build homes there They have also
tried to change the direction that water flows in the
everglades. These changes have created many problems
in the everglade’s habitats. Sientists are trying to
find a way to make the everglades healthy again so
this uniq,ue ecosystem will be preserved
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Arrowheads in Space Error Summary
eagle Capitalization q
What do A feathers and arrowheads have Language Usage 1
to do with the International Space Station?american Punctuation:
Apostrophe 1astronaut jphn Herrington took these items with him Comma 2
zrodewhen he . the space shuttle endeavour into outer Penod 1
Other 2space in iiovember 20g. The leader of the ç.hickasaw spelling 1
Nation and 200 of it 5,000 members traveled from
Oklahoma9’o cipe Canaverafiorida, to see herringto
historic launch.
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John h_errington is one-eighth = ickasaw through rror Sum ary— . ‘ .
. V Capitalization 11his great-grandmother on his mother side. Herringtons
madeLanguage Usage 1
mother sure to register Cohn as a member Punctuation:
of the chickasaw tribe. When talking about his Apostrophe 2
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n_ative g.merican heritage errington has said,,’I take Quotation ark 1
tremendous pride in who’ I am and where I ‘come Spelling 1
proudfrom.VThe ç.hickasaw nation is also very of the
first Qmerican jdian in outer space.
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Arrowheads in SpaceWhat do eagel feathers and arrowheads have
to do with the International Space Station american
astronaut john Herrington took these items with him
when he ride the space shuttle endeavour into outer
space in november 2002. The leader of the chickasaw
Nation and 200 of it’s 5,000 members traveled from
Oklahoma. To cape Canaveral florida, to see herringtons
historic launch.
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• names of people
John herrington is one-eighth chickasaw through
his great-grandmother on his mothers side. Herringtons
mother make sure to register John as a member
of the chickasaw tribe. When talking about his
native american heritage herrington has said “I take
tremendous pride in who I am and where I come
from. The chickasaw nation is also very prowd of the
first american indian in outer space.
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Herringtons family moved 114 times within rror Sum ary
2klahoma colorado wyoming and texas during his school Capitalization q
d 4’ Language Usage 1
year0lhat madeS difficult. Herrington first Punctuation:
enrolled in college to become a forest ranger but he Apostrophe 1
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flunked out. Later, he returned to college and Period LI
math and engineering After that, herrington entered SIling 1
0the u.s. Navy and became a test pilot in 1q96, he
== 0=joined NASA to train as an astronaut
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Native american artifacts were not the only items Error Summarycarried . .
. Ca italizationherrington to the space station special piece
Punctuation:
of eq,uipment that cost $390 million was also on board Period 1
the Endeavour. Herrington and other members of the er 2
crewSpelling 2
space station ee- hooked up the equipment to the
orbiting station during a series of spacewalks. Spare
parts were also shuttled to the space station by
herrington and the Endeavour crew.
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Herringtons family moved 14 times within
oklahoma colorado wyoming and texas during his school
years that made studyng difficult. Herrington first
enrolled in college to become a forest ranger but he
flunked out. Later, he returned to college and study
math and engineering After that, herrington entered
the u.s. Navy and became a test pilot in lqq6, he
joined NASA to train as an astronaut
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Native american artifacts were not the only items
herrington carryed to the space station a special piece
of equipment that cost $3O million was also on board
the Endeavour. Herringtori and other members of the
space station crue hooked up the equipment to the
orbiting station during a series of spacewaiks. Spare
parts were also shuttled to the space station by
herrington and the Endeavour crew.
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A Monumental Tribute E or Summary
Capitalization 11
In 1q23, Doane robinson had a big idea. He Language Usage 1wanted —
-we# to carve a huge sculpture into the granite Punctuation:
Comma 1
rock of south dakota, his home state. He wanted Period 2
to honor people who helped to make the united Spelling 1
states a great natio He wanted to honor nativeleaders 0
merican such as Chief crazy horse a Sioux
leader. He also wanted to honor american explorers
like lewis and Clar0
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In 1q24, robinson hired Gutzon borIuna Error Summary
sculptor to create the enormous carvin. together, Capitalization 10
OE Language Usage 1
orglum and Lobinson chose mount Rushmore as Punctuation:
the place for the monument mount rushmore is in Comma 3
has 0= = Period 3
south akota and it 4je tall granite cliffs. Borglum spelling 1= = country’sproposed that the carving show the countrie-s- most
famous presidents. Robinson agreed that more people
would probably come to see famous president0
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;:A -
In q214, robinson hired Gutzon borglum a
sculptor to create the enormous carving together,
borgium and robinson chose mount Rushmore as
the place for the monument mount rushmore is in
south dakota and it have tall granite cliffs. Borgium
proposed that the carving show the countrie’s most
famous presidents. Robinson agreed that more people
would probably come to see famous presidents
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A Monumental TributeIn 1c123, boane robinson had a big idea. He
want to carve a huge sculpture into the granite
rock of south dakota, his home state. He wanted
to honor people who helped to make the united
states a great nation He wanted to honor native
american leeders such as Chief crazy horse a Sioux
leader. He also wanted to honor american explorers
like lewis and Clark
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Plans and models for the project had been E orSu mary I
completed by 1l27. For 14 years, workers continued Capitalization 12
Punctuation:
to blast drill and hammer away at the rock Ihe Comma 7 IoPeriod 2
faces of george washington thomas Jefferson theodore= = ,= I
roosevelt and abraham lincoln all beA
gan to take shape.
On october 31 N41 the mount rushmore National I
= 4\ 4\Memorial was completed. Seven years later, work on
another rock sculpture began
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In 1Lt8, A sioux leader, chief henry standing Erro Summ I
Capitalization 16Beak began to work on a memorial to honor the
Language Usage 2
Sioux Nation this sculpture would show chief crazy Punctfion: I
IeaderOz I
horse a dr- and warrior who protected the Aposfrophe 1
= Comma 3
sioux lands from the u.s. Army. Work on the crazy Period 1
horse memorial is still-gion today. When itis Spjg 1
\/compJeteit will be the worlds largest sculpture.
The crazy Horse Memorial will be 87 tall! I
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Plans and models for the project had been
completed by 1927. For 14 years, workers continued 4TCH0
• commasto blast drill and hammer away at the rock the• names of people
faces of george washington thomas Jefferson theodore
roosevelt and abraham lincoln all began to take shape.
On october 31 1941 the mount rushmore National
Memorial was completed. Seven years later, work on
another rock sculpture began
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In 1948, A sioux leader, chief henry standing
sear began to work on a memorial to honor the• commasSioux Nation this sculpture would show chief crazy• names of people
horse a leeder and warrior who protected the
sioux lands from the u.s. Army. Work on the crazy
horse memorial is still gone on today. When it is
completed it will be the worlds largest sculpture.
The crazy Horse Memorial will be 87 foot talH
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My Tree House Error Summa
quiet Capitalization 1When I need a q,uito place to sit and thinI> Punctuation:
have just the perfect place to go and be by myself. Apostrophe 3
Comma 5Its not far from my homeAbut it feels like I’m in Spelling 1
another world when I go there. Its through the gate
in the back fence across the empty lot and right at
the edge of the field. That’s where my tree grows
and thats where I can climb up into the branches and
into a world of my very own.
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The first day we came to see this housmy ad or Summarywander c ital ation 14
let me through the backyard while he looked ap z
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inside. The boy who was moving out of the house Punctuation:came . .
. C 3come out into the yard. Without saying a wordA he omma
“across Period 2
opened the back gate. in silence, he led me Spelling 3
the empty lot to a tree. As he started to climb hefound
looked down.9’ o be sure I had the first foothold.
I was right be md him
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My Tree HouseWhen I need a q,uite place to sit and think i
have just the perfect place to go and be by myself.
Its not far from my home but it feels like I’m in
another world when I go there. Its through the gate
in the back fence across the empty lot and right at
the edge of the field. That’s where my tree grows
and thats where I can climb up into the branches and
into a world of my very own.
MONDAY
The first day we came to see this house my bad
let me warnder through the backyard while he looked
inside. The boy who was moving out of the house
come out into the yard. Without saying a word he
opened the back gate. in silence, he led me accross
the empty lot to a tree. As he started to climb he
looked down. To be sure i had find the first foothold.
I was right be hind him
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Maybe it was because the boy showed me the E or Summary
tree house without saying a won, ma be it was Capitalization LI
0 E secret Punctuation:
because j felt he had shared a special -Seacro# with Apostrophe 2
me. m not sure. ye never said a word about the Comma 1
Period 3tree house to anyon but dad probably knows about spelling LI
it. He’s seen me %r out the back gate countless
times. ou can even see a corner of the tree house’riyeway
from our
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understandsI guess ad - -; - - that the tree house is a Error Summ ry
special place for me. I a place for me to be one. Capitalization LI
Language Usage 1
I love to lie on my back and stare up at the green Punctuation:
against the blue sk i love to take a book and po op eOE Comma 1
get lost for hours in a world of adventure. Macbe Period 2
what j love best of all is that this special place is Spelling LI
mm and I dont have to share it with anybody els0
its a place all my cwr.
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Maybe it was because the boy showed me the
tree house without saying a word may be it was
because i felt he had shared a special seacret with
me. Im not sure. lye never said a word about the
tree house to anyone but dad probably knows about
it. He’s seen me disapear out the back gate countless
times. you can even see a corner of the tree house.
from our drivewaye
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I guess dad understand that the tree house is a
special place for me. Its a place for me to be a lone.
I love to lie on my back and stare up at the green
leafs against the blue sky i love to take a book and
get lost for hours in a world of adventure. May be
what i love best of all is that this special place is
mine and I dont have to share it with anybody else
its a place all my owne.
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Gold! Error Summa
people Capitalization 7In 18148, there were about 20,000 living Language Usage 1
grewin California. Just four years later that number grow. Punctuation:
Comma 2to over 200,000. Why did so many people come to Penod 1
californi:?they came for the Gold Rush! The Gold Other 1
— A— Spelling 2rush began in 18149 when a man named ames
marshall found a gold nugget in the american Riverexciting
He could not keep this news to himself. In
about six weeks almost every man in california was
panning for gold.
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when word of ames marshalls discovery reached rror Summa
the newspapers working men across the united states Capitalization 6
loaded 4s Language Usage 1
quickly cdd- up their wagons or boarded ships and Punctuation:kept A str h 1
headed to California. treams of striking it rich keeped- po OP eComma 2
the men hopeful during the harsh difficult journey. Peod 1
hy were these men called “forty-niners’?They got Other 1
= A Spelling 1
that nickname because they headed for the gold
country in the year 18149
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Gold!In 18’48, there were about 20,000 peepil living
in California. Just four years later that number grow
to over 200,000. Why did so many people come to
california. they came for the Gold Rush! The Gold
rush began in 1849 when a man named James
marshall found a gold nugget in the american River
He could not keep this ekciting news to himself. In
about six weeks almost every man in california was
panning for gold.
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when word of James marshalls discovery reached
the newspapers working men across the united states
q,uickly loded up their wagons or boarded ships and
headed to California. breams of striking it rich keeped
the men hopeful during the harsh difficult Journey.
why were these men called “forty-niners” They got
that nickname because they headed for the gold
country in the year 18149
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To begin mining for goldAmen had to find some Error ummary
Capitalization 2land that had not yet been claimed. Most miners
Language Usage 1
claimed land along rivers and streams Although much Punctuation:belonged LI
of this land bcr1; to native americans that did not omma
Period 3
stop the eage greedy gold miners from claiming it Other 1
for themselves Once a miner made a claim he began
to pan for gol.0What is panning for gold. t is a
simple method for separating gold from sand.
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By the late 1850s most of the surface gold Error Summary
stream/” Capitalization LIin the rivers and trccr was gone. ome of the
Language Usage 1
forty-niners went to work for large mining companies. Punctuation:
thers ;;v up mining for goldA and they looked for omma
= Period 1
work on ranches or in store miners actually other 1
struck it rich. The qold Rush was over as q,uickly as spelling 1
it began but it had a lasting effect on the growth of
alifornki. bo you think it was a positive effect?A
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To begin mining for gold men had to find some
land that had not yet been claimed. Most miners
claimed land along rivers and streams Although much
of this land belong to native americans that did not
stop the eager greedy gold miners from claiming it
for themselves Once a miner made a claim he began
to pan for gold What is panning for gold It is a
simple method for separating gold from sand.
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By the late 1850s most of the surface gold
in the rivers and streems was gone. some of the
forty-niners went to work for large mining companies.
others give up mining for gold and they looked for
work on ranches or in stores Few miners actually
struck it rich. The gold Rush was over as cuickly as
it began but it had a lasting effect on the growth of
california. bo you think it was a positive effect
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Electric Energy Error Sum ary
Capitalization 2You come home one evening in flovember. The Language Usage 1
is =
house dark and col. mom unlocks the front door Punctuation:0 E darkness Comma 1
and you hurry inside. You fumble in the dcrkras-9’ Period 3
until you find the switch. You flip the switch and the Other 1
Spelling 2room fills with bright light. Mom walks over and flips
another switch Hot air from an electric heater beginswarm
to wQrne the room. Have you ever wondered what life
would be like without electricity?A
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Before people had electric energy at home Error ummary
they had to use candles or lanterns to light up the Capitalization 2
were in Language Usage 1
darkness. Houses -wee heated by burning wood Punctuation:
stoves or fireplaces. fire was also used for cooking. Comma 3
Period 2
Stoves were heated by burning woo coal or ga0 other i
How do we cook tod ? Many stoves use heat from Spelling 1
Aelectric energ high-speed microwave ovens also use
0electric energy.
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Electric Energy4rCH O
You come home one evening in november. Theq1uestiori marks
house are dark and cold mom unlocks the front door
and you hurry inside. You fumble in the darknes.
until you find the switch. You flip the switch and the
room fills with bright light. Mom walks over and flips Nanother switch Hot air from an electric heater begins
to warme the room. Have you ever wondered what life
would be like without electricity.
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Before people had electric energy at home
they had to use candles or lanterns to light up the 4TCHf0
question marksdarkness. Houses was heated by burning wood inn
stoves or fireplaces. fire was also used for cooking.
Stoves were heated by burning wood coal or gas
How do we cook today. Many stoves use heat from
electric energy high-speed microwave ovens also use
electric energy.
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energyWhere does electric -encrgio- come fro ? How rror Summary
does power get to the electric outlets at your house? Capitalization 1
uses A Language Usage 2
jt all starts at a power plant. The power plant Punctuation:
energy to make electricit Some power plants use Comma 1
0 Period 2
energy from flowing water to make electricity and other 2
some use energy from steam. This energy is used Spelling 2
machineto make a machine spin. The spinning machine uses
anwires and magnets to create electric current.
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currentThe electric made at the power plant Error Summary
flows through large wires these are called transmission Capitalization 3
OE Language Usage 3
line0The transmission lines carry the electric current Punctuation:
an Period LI
to energy substation. From there, the electric0 seen Other 1
current flows through distribution lines. Have you -sce- Spelling 1are
these linehey held up by poles. These lines carry
electricity to your house that is how you get power0=
when you flip a light switch.
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Where does electric energie come from. How
does power get to the electric outlets at your house 4TCH
question marksit all starts at a power plant. The power plant use
energy to make electricity Some power plants use
energy from flowing water to make electricity and
some use energy from steam. This energy is used
to make a machine spin? The spinning mashine uses
wires and magnets to create a electric current.
WEDNESDAY WEEK 14
The electric curent made at the power plant
flows through large wires these are called transmissionquestion markslines The transmission lines carry the electric current
to a energy substation? From there, the electric
current flows through distribution lines. Have you see
these lines they is held up by poles. These lines carry
electricity to your house that is how you get power
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when you flip a light switch. “—A
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A Woman of Science Error Summ
Capitalization 6
Marie curie was born in warsaw oland, in 1867. Language Usage 3= liked
As a young girl marie -l-ke- science and she was an Punctuation:
4’ Comma 7
excellent studen When Marie was older she wanted .
o 4’ Penod 1
to study science and math at a college in warsaw. Spelling 1
were =At that time however women -was- not allowed to
4’ 4’ studystudy at Polish colleges so marie continued to tude
and read textbooks on her own. She also studiedwomen
with other wmn at a secret school.
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When marie curie was 2she went to ari Error Summary
france to attend college she went to the Sorbonne Capitalization 6
— A A Punctuation:
a very well-known university. Curie didnt have as much Apostrophe 1
trainingscience tr as many of the other students. She omma
Period 1
had to work very harS but soon she was the best spelling i
student in her class. curie graduated with a science
degree in 18q3. By the next year she had completedA
a second degree in math.
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A Woman of ScienceMarie curie was born in warsaw poland, in 1867.
As a young girl marie like science and she was an
excellent student When Marie was older she wanted
to study science and math at a college in warsaw.
At that time however women was not allowed to
study at Polish colleges so marie continued to studie
and read textbooks on her own. She also studied
with other woman at a secret school.
When marie curie was 2L4 she went to paris
france to attend college she went to the Sorbonne
a very well-known university. Curie didnt have as much
science traning as many of the other students. She
had to work very hard but soon she was the best
student in her class, curie graduated with a science
degree in 1813. By the next year she had completed
a second degree in math.
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learnedIn 18q6, curie learn- of recent discoveries made rror Su mary
about the element uranium an element is a pure Capitalization
ØE Language Usage 2
substance that cannot be broken down any further. Punctuation:scientist d 5
Another -cionti-s-1 had discovered that uranium gave eno
began Spelling 1
off a type of energ Marie curie studying
this energy She called it “radioactivity” she wanted to0
find out how uranium was able to create radioactivity.0
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spentmarie curie £pondod the rest of her life rror Summary
studying radioactivity. She discovered that uranium Capitalization 7
Language Usage 1
gives off radioactivity through its atombc.urie work Punctuation:
helped scientists learn more about atoms Even more Apostrophe 1
Comma 2
importantly, curie discovered two new elements and Peod 2=
they both were radioactive. By the end of her life
in 1c3LXmarie curie had become the first woman to
receive a nobel Prize for her work.
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In 186, curie learn of recent discoveries made
about the element uranium an element is a pure
substance that cannot be broken down any further.
Another sientist had discovered that uranium gave
off a type of energy Marie curie begun studying
this energy She called it “radioactivity” she wanted to
find out how uranium was able to create radioactivity?
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marie curie spended the rest of her life
studying radioactivity. She discovered that uranium
gives off radioactivity through its atoms curies work
helped scientists learn more about atoms? Even more
importantly, curie discovered two new elements and
they both were radioactive. By the end of her life
in 1314 marie curie had become the first woman to
receive a nobel Prize for her work.
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Terrific Teeth Erro Summa
Capitalizalion 2Can you imagine having special tools to cut up Punctuation:
the foods that you eat? ou’d need something sharp to Apostrophe 1
Az Comma 3cut off a slice of hardAcrisp carrot. something pointy Period 1
would help you pierce a firn>crunchy apple. Yo Other 2
Spelling 3probably need something else7to help you work your
delicious steakway through a juicy piece of take Actually,
you probably have a complete set of tools to do thesetools
jobs. The -t-t4e- are your teethA
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Grown-ups usually have a full set of 32 adult Erro Summa
teeth. A full set for children is only 20 teet most Capitalization 3
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children lose their primary teeth between ages 6 and Punctuation:different 2
11. There are several diffreii1 types of teeth. in the ommaPeriod 3
center of your moutyou have 4 thin teeth on the spelling 1
top and 4 on the bottom. You use them to cut into
hard crunchy foods that you bite. These teeth areteeth
called incisors babies often get these firstOE 0
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Terrific TeethCan you imagine having special tools to cut up all
the foods that you eat you’d need something sharp to
cut off a slice of hard crisp carrot, something pointy
would help you pierce a firm crunchy apple. Youd
probably need something else. to help you work your
way through a delisious juicy piece of stake. Actually,
you probably have a complete set of tools to do these
jobs. The tules are your teeth
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Grown-ups usually have a full set of 32 adult
teeth. A full set for children is only 20 teeth most
children lose their primary teeth between ages 6 and
11. There are several diffrent types of teeth. in the
center of your mouth you have ‘4 thin teeth on the
top and 4 on the bottom. You use them to cut into
hard crunchy foods that you bite. These teeth are
called incisors babies often get these tooth first
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There are 4 pointy teeth next to the incisors. r or umm ryare
Capitalization 2They on the left and right sides of your moutLanguage Usage 1boffom
there are 2 on top and 2 on the -be+et10These sharpA Punctuation:
Comma 1pointy teeth are used for tearing food. They areii Period 5
called canine teeth, or”yeteeth.” The rest of the Quotation Mark 1wider
teeth are . and flatter. They are used to crush Spelling 2
and grind foo. these teeth are called molars. MolarsOE
work hard to make it easier for us to digest our foo.0
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Teeth-Tcci+t do an important job in our bodiethey Error S mma
breakhelp us . our food down into smaller pieces. this Capitalization 3
easier Language Usage 1
makes it for the digestive system to do its Punctuation:
job. important to take care of our teeth9’ yApostrophe 2
Comma 2mealsbrushing and flossing after . If we do brush/\ Period 3
food and germs left on our teeth can begin to cause Other 1
Spelling 3decay. becay can weaken and destroy stronhealthY
teeth. So be sure to brush and floss9’every dA
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SCIENCE ARTICLE: Terrific Tccdi Daily Paragraph Editing
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There are ‘4 pointy teeth next to the incisors.
They is on the left and right sides of your mouth
there are 2 on top and 2 on the botom These sharp
pointy teeth are used for tearing food? They are
called canine teeth, or eyeteeth.” The rest of the
teeth, are widder and flatter. They are used to crush
and grind food these teeth are called molars. Molars
work hard to make it easier for us to digest our food
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Tooths do an important job in our bodies they
help us brake our food down into smaller pieces. this
makes it easyer for the digestive system to do its
job. Its important to take care of our teeth. By
brushing and flossing after meels. If we dont brush
food and germs left on our teeth can begin to cause
decay. becay can weaken and destroy strong healthy
teeth. 5o be sure to brush and floss, every day.
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The Amazing Internet Error Summary
break yoyr Capitalization 2Spring is coming and -you re- family is
PUnCtUatiOn:
planning an outing to a local theme park. As you Apostrophe 1
Comma 2finalize your planthere are some details to chec
Period 2V weather
You want to find out about next weeks - -- _our Other 1
— Spelling 3parents need to get directions to the amusement
parand your brother wants to see how many roller
coasters there are. Where can you go to find out
everything in one place?just look on the Internet1
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takeng few years ag it would probably have took Error S m a
more time and effort to find all this information. Capitalization LI
found Language Usage 2
You might have a long-range weather forecast Punctuation:studied 5in the newspaper. Your parents might have tudyed— omma
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a map to find the best route to the ark and your
brother would have telephoned the park. today, people
can find this information on the Internet from a
computer at home work school or the public library.AA
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The Amazing InternetSpring brake is coming and you’re family is
planning an outing to a local theme park. As you
finalize your plans there are some details to check
You want to find out about next weeks wether your
parents need to get directions to the amusement
park and your brother wants to see how many roller
coasters there are. Where can you go to find out
everything in one place just look on the Internet!
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a few years ago it would probably have took
more time and effort to find all this information.
You might have find a long-range weather forecast
in the newspaper. Your parents might have studyed
a map to find the best route to the Park and your
brother would have telephoned the park. today, people
can find this information on the internet from a
computer at home work school or the public library.
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The work that led to the creation of the Error Summbegan were
!nternet in the 1605. Most computersLanguage Usage 2
used by the government universities and businesses. Punctuation:
The u.s. government was looking fora way to link Apostrophe 1
its E E Comma 2
:.‘ computers together so that information could be Period 2
easily shared. •y the first four computers had
been linked together in a network. Information flowed
between them9’over telephone lineb
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buyin the 18Os, people began to -bye computers to Error Summ ry
use at hom more computer networks were created Capitalization 5
Oz: began LanguageUsage 2
and the early Internet - - to grow. In order to Punctuation:
use the internet users had to -Z- in complex codes. Comma 2
= Period 2
Finally, in lqcjl, the World Wide Web was created Spelling 3easier 0
That made it to use the Internet. By 15,
people could connect to the jnternet on their homebegun
computers. A new era in information had -b€g+n.
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SCIENCE ARTICLE: Thc Amazing Internet Daily Paragraph Editing
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The work that led to the creation of the
internet begun in the 1960s. Most computers was
used by the government universities and businesses.
The u.s. government was looking for a way to link
it’s computers together so that information could be
easily shared. by lq6q, the first four computers had
been linked together in a network. Information flowed
between them. over telephone lines
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in the lq8Os, people began to bye computers to
use at home more computer networks were created
and the early Internet begun to grow. In order to
use the internet users had to tipe in complex codes.
Finally, in 11, the World Wide Web was created?
That made it easyer to use the internet. By 19q5,
people could connect to the internet on their home
computers. A new era in information had begin.
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Indiana Sundays 0 Summa
Capitalization LI
As a child, I adored summer sunday afternoons. Punctuation:
At precisely twelve oclock the huge church bells Apostrophe 3
Comma 7rang out from the towe, and the gian heavy doors er 1
swung open. Quick as a flash my cousins andj
burst out into the brigh hot afternoon. We’d pile
into each othe s cars in a wild disorderly fashion.\/
Grandma and grandpas farmhouse was our destinatio
and eating lunch was our first mission. Yum!A
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Our noontime meal was large loud and long. Once rror Summary
we were completely stuffed we slammed our way out Capitalization LI
v Punctuation:
grandmas back door. That is when the fun began. we Apostrophe 2
chased barn cats stomped in cow pies and threw — Comma 7
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each other into haystacks. We explored every nook
and cranny of randpas wecithere rickety bar weOE
tossed one another into wheelbarrows and raced across
the earthen hay-covered barn floor.
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Indiana SundaysAs a child, I adored summer sunday afternoons.
At precisely twelve oclock the huge church bells
rang out from the tower and the giant heavy doors
swung open. Quick as a flash my cousins and i
burst out into the bright hot afternoon. We’d pile
into each others cars in a wild disorderly fashion.
Grandma and grandpas farmhouse was our destination
and eating lunch was our first mission. Yum
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Our noontime meal was large loud and long. Once
we were completely stuffed we slammed our way out
grandmas back door. That is when the fun began. we
chased barn cats stomped in cow pies and threw
each other into haystacks. We explored every nook
and cranny of grandpas weathered rickety barn we
tossed one another into wheelbarrows and raced across
the earthen hay-covered barn floor.
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Another favorite place to play was the basemenb o Sum ry
no matter how many times we’d been down there it Capitalization 3
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always seemed like there was more to discover. Wow,f Apostrophe 1
There were flowers from grandm garden9’drying in Comma 2
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the cramped quarters behind the enormous,, massive 1I,’
furnacbshelves were lined with the vegetables that
randma began canning as soon as her garden yielded
its usual bumper crop in late sprin.0
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As soon as night feSwe’d leave the dardrafty rror Summary
basement for the yard. Catching fireflies was aCapitalization L4
Punctuation:
favorite outdoor activit0chasing each other through Comma 3
the yard playing nighttime tag was also popular. We Period 1
Spelling 1
knew it was time to go when randpa began his
nightly ritual of turning out the various lanterns
around the farm. Under the pitch-black sky we’d• ASunday
sadly say good-bye to one more indiana undao.
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PERSONAL NARTIVE: Indiana Sundays Daily Paragraph Editing
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Another favorite place to play was the basementno matter how many times we’d been down there italways seemed like there was more to discover. WowThere were flowers from grandmas garden. drying inthe cramped quarters behind the enormous massivefurnace Shelves were lined with the vegetables thatgrandma began canning as soon as her garden yieldedits usual bumper crop in late spring
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As soon as night fell we’d leave the dark draftybasement for the yard. Catching fireflies was afavorite outdoor activity chasing each other throughthe yard playing nighttime tag was also popular. Weknew it was time to go when grandpa began hisnightly ritual of turning out the various lanternsaround the farm. Under the pitch-black sky we’dsadly say good-bye to one more Indiana sundae.
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The View from bown Here Error Sum ary
Capitalization LI
I was only three years old but I still remember Language Usage 3felt =
how I -fz on that day so long ag. j can still see Punctuation:
0= taken Commahow it all looked to me. My parents had I.AI U5 Period 2
to the museum with them. They had been planning Spelling 1
this outing for day and it was a special occasion. I
remember that om wore a blue dress and my -athersuit =
had on a -t1’. My sister and -t wore matching
dresses and we had on our patent leather shoes4’ 0
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There must have been a special exhibit at the E ror Sum arycrowded
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Capitalization 3museu !t was very cr and my sister and ie
Oz 4’ Language Usage 2
bumped into strangers as we trailed after our parents Punctuation:an C 2
from one room to another. Was it exhibit ofomma
Period 3
paintings or of sculpture?! cannot remember hat I other 2Az tagged®
do remember is growing restless as I after my Spelling 2
parents in that crowded stuffy place. Ugh!4’ A
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The View from bown HereI was only three years old but I still remember
how I feeled on that day so long ago i can still see
how it all looked to me. My parents had take us
to the museum with them. They had been planning
this outing for days and it was a special occasion. I
remember that mom wore a blue dress and my Father
had on a sute. My sister and me wore matching
dresses and we had on our patent leather shoes
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There must have been a special exhibit at the
museum it was very crouded and my sister and me
bumped into strangers as we trailed after our parents.
from one room to another. Was it a exhibit of
paintings or of sculpture I cannot remember what I
do remember is growing restless as I taggd after my
parents in that crowded stuffy place. Ugh
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VIm not sure when I realized that ! was alone, or Summa
— Capitalization 2When I looked around I could not see my F othe
Language Usage 1
father or sister any’where. Panic came over me i5 I Punctuation:wondere
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Apostrophe 2wndcr which way they had onI felt relieved when
Comma 3
I saw my fathers familiar shoes with the pattern of Period 2
swirling dots9’across the toe. I rushed over to stand Spelling 2
shoesnext to those . I took hold of the large warm
hand that hung down near my shoulder.
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surpriseMy relief q,uickly turned to crprie- and then rrorSumma
embarrassment as I looked up’/ t the man standing Capitalization 6
Language Usage 2
in those familiar shoes. It was not my rather at all. Punctuation:burst
Oh, Who was this total strange ?i bttr.i#&d- into Apostrophe 1
A A Comma 1
tears and started to run. Suddenly, ! was swept up Period 2=
Other 2into my mothers arms in a comforting hug. Whenheard came Spelling 2
she 4er’d- the commotioshe eee- to my rescue. the
concerned stranger looked at me. Then he smiled.
o did
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Im riot sure when I realized that I was alone.
When I looked around I could not see my Mother
father or sister any where. Panic came over me as I
wonder which way they had gone I felt relieved when
I saw my fathers familiar shoes with the pattern of
swirling dots. across the toe. I rushed over to stand
next to those shoose. I took hold of the large warm
hand that hung down near my shoulder.
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My relief q,uickly turned to serprise and then
embarrassment as I looked up. At the man standing
in those familiar shoes. It was not my Father at all.
Oh, no Who was this total stranger. I bursted into
tears arid started to run. Suddenly, i was swept up
into my mothers arms in a comforting hug. When
she herd the commotion she come to my rescue. the
concerned stranger looked at me. Then he smiled.
so did i
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An American Classic rror Summary
Capitalization 18Little house on the prairie is the second book in Punctuation:
the autobiographical series by beloved american author Apostrophe 1
Comma 5laura ingalls wilder. The first booLittle house in er 1
the big woods is the story of laura childhood in the Spelling 2
wisconsin woods. Laura was seven years old when herfamily traveled
moved from wisconsin to kansas. she
in a covered wagon with ma pa older sister mary andE4EA E 4’
baby arrie.
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The early part of the book describes everyday Error Summary
life during the fami1c trip. We see how a took aCapitalization 2
break Punctuation:
from driving the wagon to stop and hunt for Apostrophe 1
food. Ma cooked the meals and she even did the Comma 2
A Period 1
familys laundr6Laura and mary enjoyed all the new Spelling 2
sights and sounds of the prairie and Ma had fun4’
watching them chase prairie hens and their chicks.
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An American ClassicLittle house on the prairie is the second book in
the autobiographical series by beloved american author
laura ingalls wilder. The first book Little house in
the big woods is the story of Iauras childhood in the
wisconsin woods. Laura was seven years old when her
familee moved from wisconsin to kansas. she traviled
in a covered wagon with ma pa older sister mary and
baby Carrie.
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The early part of the book describes everyday
life during the families trip. We see how pa took a
brake from driving the wagon to stop and hunt for
food. Ma cooked the meals and she even did the
familys laundry Laura and mary enjoyed all the new
sights and sounds of the prairie and Ma had fun
watching them chase prairie hens and their chicks.
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The family finally reached a place on the prairie E ro S m IV
Capitalization 1where they decided to settle the next part of thePunctuation:
book describes all the stages of building a log house Apostrophe 1building C 2and its furnishings and it also describes bding a omma
Period 3stable. Laura described the familys daily lif,\and Spelling 1
she explained the chores done by each member of
the family. Readers will see the difference9’between0
modern-day and pioneer life.
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By the end of Little house on the Drairie the Error Summa“i” Capitalization q
american government had decided that settlers could= Punctuation:
not remain in the area of kansas known as Indian Comma 2
territory. Once again, the ingalls family packed up Period 2
Other 2their covered wagon9’ nd moved on. Readers can join
the family as they move to a new home and new
adventures in minnesota just read 0 e B ks o0
Plum Creek the next book in the series.‘;\
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The family finally reached a place on the prairie
where they decided to settle the next part of the
book describes all the stages of building a log house
and its furnishings and it also describes bilding a
stable. Laura described the familys daily life and
she explained the chores done by each member of
the family? Readers will see the difference. between
modern-day and pioneer life.
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By the end of Little house on the prairie the
american government had decided that settlers could
not remain in the area of kansas known as Indian
territory. Once again, the ingalls family packed up
their covered wagon. And moved on. Readers can join
the family as they move to a new home and new
adventures in minnesota just read On the Banks of
Plum Creek the next book in the series.
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Bored in Space Error Sum apassed Capitalization 5
Four years had pct since we blasted off Worim.Punctuation:
All the planets in our star system were so crowded Apostrophe 3
Comma 2that we couldnt find a place to land we wanted to
0= Penod 2
stay on WorimAbut it was too dangerous. uotafion Mark 2
Spelling 1“the worms have eaten everything that was
green and most things that are,” mom said. “we
could be next”, \,/
ie got to find a new planet where we can
settle’said dad.
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onboardI had read all the books that we had -“-‘ Error ummary
our craft and our communication system did offer Capitalization 2
Punctuation:
much entertainment. There was so much litter Apostrophe 1
cluttering deep space that we could barely pick up Comma 3
Period 2
the important space traffic messages. ! was getting uotation ark 2
pretty tired of the same old duS boring routine Spelling 1
every day!
here must be something you can do in the
science lab RobinYmom finally suggested one day
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Bored in SpaceFour years had past since we blasted off Worim.
All the planets in our star system were so crowded
that we couldnt find a place to land we wanted to
stay on Worim but it was too dangerous.
“the worms have eaten everything that was
green and most things that arent,” mom said. “we
could be next”
Weve got to find a new planet where we can
settle. said dad.
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I had read all the books that we had onbored
our craft and our communication system didnt offer
much entertainment. There was so much litter
cluttering deep space that we could barely pick up
the important space traffic messages? i was getting
pretty tired of the same old dull boring routine
every day’
There must be something you can do in the
science lab Robin, mom finally suggested one day
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“Well mom what did you have in mm “ I asked Error Sum aA
Capitahzation 6as we entered the lab togethe
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vRobi remember good old Grow-Bot?” Mom asked. Comma LI
She pointed toward a metal for it was partly Period 3
piece OE Quotation Mark 2
covered by a of cloth. Other 2
“momAdo you think i could forget my computer Spelling 2
tuto.’ I replied as 1 uncovered the machine that jknew
practically by hear0
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“You know Robin you’ve learned so much about Error Su mary
computers IateiyYMom remarke.’emember how you Capitalization 5
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helped ad reprogram the autopilot function last Comma 7
month’ — Period 3
really Quotation ark 5
“Mo do you rly think I could reprogram otlier 1
Grow-Bot. I aske. Spelling 1
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“You kno mo “ I said, “I think this could turn
out to be fu =
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“Well mom what did you have in mind” I asked
as we entered the lab together
Robin remember good old Grow-Bot? Mom asked.
She pointed toward a metal form it was partly
covered by a peace of cloth.
“mom do you think I could forget my computer
tutor” I replied as I uncovered the machine that I
practically new by heart
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“You know Robin you’ve learned so much about
computers lately, Mom remarked remember how you
helped dad reprogram the autopilot function last
month”
“Mom do you reely think I could reprogram
Grow-Bot? I asked
You might as well try robin” mom said cheerfully.
“You know mom” I said, I think this could turn
out to be fun”
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Schools Should Lead by Example E orSumm ry
believe Capitalization 3
j - -; - schools should lead the way in caring Language Usage 1
for our environmen or example, many children eat a Punctuation:0 Comma 3
school lunch’very da and school kitchens all over Period LI
our nation make these lunches. Unfortunately, most Spelling 1
school lunches are packaged in materials made from
nonrenewable resource Plastic packages aluminum foil0 4’
and plastic silverware all use nonrenewable resources.creates
This also -ee&e- waste in our landfill0
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productsSchools should use - made from recycled Error Summ ry
and renewable material here are many new types Capitalization 2
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of food packages made of recyclable material0For Punctuation:
instance, if schools used cardboard packaging for Comma 2
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lunches they could recycle thousands of packages
every da Also, think of all the paper that schools0 recycled
usbJ.f every school across the nation rcyc1e- pape
countless trees could be save.0
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Schools Should Lead by ExampleI beleave schools should lead the way in caring
for our environment for example, many children eat aschool lunch. Every day and school kitchens all overour nation make these lunches. Unfortunately, mostschool lunches are packaged in materials made fromnonrenewable resources Plastic packages aluminum foiland plastic silverware all use nonrenewable resources.This also create waste in our landfills
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Schools should use product made from recycled
and renewable materials there are many new types
of food packages made of recyclable materials Forinstance, if schools used cardboard packaging for
lunches they could recycle thousands of packages
every day Also, think of all the paper that schools
use if every school across the nation recycle paper
countless trees could be saved
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schools should make sure that every classroom Error Summa
has several recycle bins so paper plastic aluminum and Capitalization 2
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glass can all be recycled, many - - already recycle Punctuation:
at home. bo schools think that should set a Apostrophe 1
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good example and practice recycling, toe.? Another Period 1
way that schools can set a good example is to have er
an€- environmental awareness program. They can plan a
whole week of activities for students0
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on monday, students could plant treebSince it Error Su mary
takes 17 trees to make one ton of paper planting Capitalization 5
A Punctuation:
would help replace this renewable resource. On Comma 1
tuesday, schools could challenge students to a “zero Penod 3
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garbage” da the goal would be to see if studentsOE
can use recyclable and reusable materials to avoidwaste lead
creating products. schools should 4ee- by
example and motivate students to care for our plane0
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schools should make sure that every classroom
has several recycle bins so paper plastic aluminum and
glass can all be recycled, many student already recycle
at home. bont schools think that he should set a
good example and practice recycling, too. Another
way that schools can set a good example is to have
a environmental awareness program. They can plan a
whole week of activities for students
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on monday, students could plant trees Since it
takes 17 trees to make one ton of paper planting
would help replace this renewable resource. On
tuesday, schools could challenge students to a “zero
garbage” day the goal would be to see if students
can use recyclable and reusable materials to avoid
creating waiste products. schools should leed by
example and motivate students to care for our planet
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Blackbeard the Pirate E or urn ary I
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nobody knows just when edward teach became Language Usage 1known= = I
-know- as Blackbeard the Pirate we do know thoughAPunctuation: I
OE Comma 2
that edward teach joined Captain benjamin Hornigold’s Period 3= whether I
crew in 1716. It is unclear - - - teach knew that Spelling 1
capt hornigold planned to raid ships in the caribbeanE®ESea. However, teach helped hornigold capture a french
ship in the Caribbean in 1717 —
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Cap horriigold gave the captured french ship to Error Surn a0 chang d Capitalization 7
edward Teach. The shi name was to Queen= Language Usage 1
anne’s Revenge and she soon was feared as a dreaded Punctuation:A Aposfrophe 2
pirate ship. Edward leach also changed his namTheComma 3
pirate ‘aptain of •ueen Annes Reven e was now called Period 3
“blackbeard.” When he took his fierce colorful nam Other 1
Blackbeard also changed the way he lookecb
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Blackbeard the Piratenobody knows just when edward teach became
as Blackbeard the Pirate we do know though
edward teach joined Captain benjamin Hornigold’s
in 1716. It is unclear weather teach knew that
hornigold planned to raid ships in the caribbean
However, teach helped hornigold capture a french
in the Caribbean in 1717
Capt hornigold gave the captured french ship to
edward Teach. The ships name was change to Queen
anne’s Reven e and she soon was feared as a dreaded
pirate ship. Edward teach also changed his name The
pirate Captain of Queen Annes Revenge was now called
“blackbeard.” When he took his fierce colorful name
Blackbeard also changed the way he looked
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Blackbeard let his beard grow out to a frizz E or S m cry
bushy tangle he wove braids into his beard and he’ Capitalization 2
tied A Punctuation:
even #ye4- them with ribbons. He stuck fuses from Comma 5
cannons under his pirate hat. These fuses were made Penod 3
water Spelling 3
of string soaked in mixed with gunpowde5
When blackbeard lit the fuses they sizzled andsmoked A
- Aafld their ghostly light and fouL gassy smell
scared his victims0
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In the summer of 1718 blackbeard sank ueen rro S m a
Ann9’reveng, off the coast of North caroliri. Capitalization 8
= raids Punctuation:
However, he still had other ships to use in Apostrophe 1
along the coast. eople decided that this terror must Comma 3
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stoso Lieutenant .obert Maynard organized a secret Spelling 2
mission to capture lackbeard. The fierceA beardeddeath
‘4”
pirate battled to the -de#h- and was beheaded by the
victorious Lt. aynard.
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Blackbeard let his beard grow out to a frizzy
bushy tangle he wove braids into his beard and he
even tyed them with ribbons. He stuck fuses from
cannons under his pirate hat. These fuses were made
of string soaked in watter mixed with gunpowder
When blackbeard lit the fuses they sizzled and
smoaked and their ghostly light and foul gassy smell
scared his victims
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In the summer of 1718 bkickbeard sank queen
Annes’ revenge off the coast of North carolina.
However, he still had other ships to use in rades
along the coast. people decided that this terror must
stop so Lieutenant robert Maynard organized a secret
mission to capture blackbeard. The fierce bearded
pirate battled to the deth and was beheaded by the
victorious Lt. maynard.
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A Gifted Girl nor Summary
an Capitalization 16Ballerina aria aIlchief was born on jndian Language Usage 2
reservation in oklahoma in 1q25. Her athe>i family Punctuation:
Apostrophe 2was from the Osage trib-0her $others ancestors Comma 3
were from cotland and Ireland. The sage once Period 2
buffalo and gathered food in the area that is now
arkansas, kansas missouri and oklahoma. After taking= A = governmenf
most of their land the U.S. , ,. moved the
2sage to a reservation in 2klahomb
MON DAY WEEK 24
After oil was found on the sage reservation in or Sum arywealthy Ca ital afion 6
the late 1800s the tribe became very . Marias P iz
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father Alex talichief always had a very comfortable Punctuation:I,’ = 4’ fIt
life because of this. He #bd- he did not need to p0 op e
a Comma 7
go to college or have e- career. marias mother Ruth Period 1
tallchiewanted her children to learn as much as spelling 1
possible. So maria and arjorie her younger siste= = I,’
began music and dance lessons at around age three0
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A Gifted GirlBallerina maria talichief was born on a Indian
reservation in oklahoma in 1q25. Her Fathers family
was from the Osage tribe her Mothers’ ancestors
were from scotland and ireland. The osage once hunt
buffalo and gathered food in the area that is now
arkansas, kansas missouri and oklahoma. After taking
most of their land the U.S. goverment moved the
osage to a reservation in oklahoma
MONDAY WEEK 24
• commas
• names of people
• names of places
After oil was found on the osage reservation in
the late 1800s the tribe became very welthy. Marias
father Alex tallchief always had a very comfortable
life because of this. He feeled he did not need to
go to college or have an career. marias mother Ruth
tallchief wanted her children to learn as much as
possible. So maria and marjorie her younger sister
began music and dance lessons at around age three
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wereeven when they q,uite young %oth maria and rror Summ ry= 4’ =
her sister showed great promise in music and dance. Capitalization q
decided Language Usage 1Their mother . - the family should move to !os Punctuation:
believed =
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Comma 2nelealifornia. She -b€4efved- that her daughtersPeriod 1
would have a better chance to develop their talents SIling 2
n hollywood. The family made the move when maria
was entering second grade0
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Maria began to focus on dance more than music Error S ma0
he started studying with a famous russian ballerina Capitalization 14
= studied = 4’ PunCtUation:
Bronislava Nijinska. She kudyed- with madame nijinska Comma 2
for five years until finishing high school. She was Period 1
perform Spelling 2then invited to with a professional ballet
company. This was the start of her brilliansuccessfuI
career as a “prima ballerina,” or ballet star.
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even when they was q,uite young Both maria and
her sister showed great promise in music and dance.
Their mother desided the family should move to los
angeles california. She beleived that her daughters
would have a better chance to develop their talents
In hollywood. The family made the move when maria
was entering second grade
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Maria began to focus on dance more than music
she started studying with a famous russian ballerina
Bronislava Nijinska. She studyed with madame nijinska
for five years until finishing high school. She was
then invited to preform with a professional ballet
company. This was the start of her brilliant successful
career as a “prima ballerina,” or ballet star.
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[DITING KEY: Book Review Daily Paragraph Editing
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C. J. Clark Has Another Hit Error Summary
Capitalization 8it looks like author C00 lark has another big Language Usage 1
hit! Her latest book : Saah Roth and the Wisdom Punctuation:
Apostrophe 1Crystal. This is the third book in the series published Comma 1
by Creative book ress. Sarah Roth and the Wisdom Period 2= Other 2
Cr stal has the same ten-year-old heroine fromtwo
Spelling 1
clark’s first books. If you enjoyed Clarks other
adventure taleyou’ll love Sarah Roth and the
wisdom crystal.
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Like the other books in the seriesarah roth Error Su mary
and the wisdom crystal is a magical adventure. Once Capitalization 8
Emixes Language Usage 1
again, the author modern science with fantasy0 Punctuation:
she also introduces some unusual exciting characters. Apostrophe 1
= Comma 3
Sarah’s /unt, Professor Eudora Vista is a scientist Period 3
she studies rocks in the New exico desert. The tale
actually takes place during Sarah summer vacation in
New Mexico0
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C. J. Clark Has Another Hitit looks like author C j clark has another big
hit! Her latest book are Sarah Roth and the Wisdom
Crystal. This is the third book in the series published
by Creative book press. Sarah Roth and the Wisdom
Crystal has the same ten-year-old heroine from
clark’s first to books. If you enjoyed Clarks other
adventure tales you’ll love Sarah Roth and the
wisdom crystal.
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• book titles
• abbreviations
Like the other books in the series sarah roth
and the wisdom crystal is a magical adventure. Once
again, the author mix modern science with fantasy
she also introduces some unusual exciting characters.
Sarah’s Aunt, Professor Eudora Vista is a scientist
she studies rocks in the New mexico desert. The tale
actually takes place during Sarahs summer vacation in
New Mexico
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Another interestincolorful character is Error ummary
eleven-year-old Red Bird Roybal. The “wisdom crystal” Capitalization 6
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in the books title belongs to hi 0his grandfathe a Apostrophe 2
wise Pueblo elder gave it to him. sarah and her unt Comma 14
A E Period 3
meet red bird on one of their rock-gathering trips.==
When rof Vista tries to learn more about Red Birds=0
rare crysta,they travel to another dimension where
an amazing adventure bein
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Lets hope nobody tries to make h Error Summ ry
, . - I. n into a movie. Chances are it Capitalization 6
weak PunCtLKltiOn
would be just as - - as the movie version of Sarah Apostrophe 3
. That book did not work Comma 1
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well in the film version. Readers will be better off Other 20
just imagining the scenes in book three all of Spelling 1
0=_oo larks books offer great food for childrens activeA
eager imaginations.
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Another interesting colorful character is
eleven-year-old Red Bird Roybal. The “wisdom crystal”
in the books title belongs to him his grandfather a
wise Pueblo elder gave it to him. sarah and her Aunt
meet red bird on one of their rock-gathering trips.
When prof Vista tries to learn more about Red Birds
rare crystal they travel to another dimension where
an amazing adventure begins
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Lets hope nobody tries to make Sarah Roth
And The Wisdom Crystal into a movie. Chances are it
would be just as week as the movie version of Sarah
Roth and the Star Seeker. That book did not work
well in the film version? Readers will be better off
just imagining the scenes in book three all of
c j ckirks books offer great food for childrens active
eager imaginations.
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Atlantic Oil Spill Threatens E orSumm ry
Capitalization 7Spanish Coast Language Usage 1
La Corufia, spain november 19 2002 Punctuation:4.’ Comma 2
The Prestige, a damaged oil tanker that was Penod 3leaking .
!DDk:9 fuel oil off the coast of spairiA split in two Other 1=
i”. Spelling 2and sank this morning. The tanker ran into trouble
weeklast wxk9’ uring stormy seas off northwestern spain
the Prestiqe was carrying 77,000 tons of heavy fuel
oil about 5,000 tons have already leaked out inan
areaGE
known as the Coast of beath.
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The spanish government took immediate action Error Summ ry
to protect the coastal area Floating barriers were Capitalization LI
an 0 Language Usage 2
set up in effort to save the rich fishing grounds9’ Punctuation:
nd delicate marine ecosystems that are at risk. Apostrophe 1
Period 5
The world community has been q,uick to respond Spelling 1
to Spains call for help clean-up experts from theare
Netherlands ‘ working on the disaster specialtow 0
tugboats were needed to tcc the ship away from
the shoreline0
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Atlantic Oil Spill ThreatensSpanish Coast
names of shipsLa Corua, spain november 19 2002
The Presti e, a damaged oil tanker that was
leeking fuel oil off the coast of spain split in two
and sank this morning. The tanker ran into trouble
last weak. buring stormy seas off northwestern spain
the Prestige was carrying 77,000 tons of heavy fuel
oil about 5,000 tons have already leaked out in a area
known as the Coast of beath.
MONDAY WEEK 26
The spanish government took immediate action
to protect the coastal area Floating barriers were
set up in a effort to save the rich fishing grounds.
And delicate marine ecosystems that are at risk.
The world community has been q,uick to respond
to Spains call for help clean-up experts from the
Netherlands is working on the disaster? special
tugboats were needed to toe the ship away from
the shoreline
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the ‘resti’e had been towed about 70 miles Error Summary=seaz Capitalization LI
out to - before it shudderedAsplit in twandLanguage Usage 1
sank today in atlantic waters that are over 2 miles Punctuation:
deep. The ship still has some 72,000 tons of fuel Apostrophe 1
Comma 5
oil’n its tanks. If the fuel leaks it could create Period 24’
the largest oil spill ever. The World Wildlife Fund 2
an 4” Spelling 1
environmental that oil from the
Presti e would create a spill twice as large as‘i0
AJask&’ 1i8 disaster
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Expert2’hope that the cold waters of the or Summarythicken
atlantic will cause the heavy fuel oil to thkkr oil Capitalization 3
CE Language Usage 2
has never before been removed from tanks that Punctuation:
su k Comma 1have so deep in the sea. Special gear and
created Period 3
salvage methods may have to be crct to remove Spelling 3
the fuel from the tanks as experts search forQE
solutionthey fear that the many rare coral and fishmi hi
species in this habitat never recover from the
effects of a spill0
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the prestige had been towed about 70 miles
out to see before it shuddered split in two and
sank today in atlantic waters that are over 2 miles
deep. The ship still has some 72,000 tons of fuel
oil. In its tanks. If the fuel leaks it could create
the largest oil spill ever. The World Wildlife Fund
a environmental group warned that oil from the
Prestige would create a spill twice as large as
Alaskas’ 1989 disaster
Expert’s hope that the cold waters of the
atlantic will cause the heavy fuel oil to thikkeri oil
has never before been removed from tanks that
have sink so deep in the sea. Special gear and
salvage methods may have to be create to remove
the fuel from the tanks? as experts search for
solutions they fear that the many rare coral and fish
species in this habitat mite never recover from the
effects of a spill
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Earth on the Move Error Summci
discoveries Capitalization 3
People have been making : about Earth Language Usage 1humans here
for as long as -httman- have lived -koer. sometimes, Punctuafion:
= Comma 1
people have to let go of their old-fashioned1\widely Period 3accept
accepted beliefs before they can - = new idea Spelling 3
±or example, many people in the late 1400s believed
that Earth was flat Some people were not convinced
that Earth was round9’until ships made it safely all
the way around the world.
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studiedFor many years, people who -; -; maps of the Error Summary
noticedworld saw something interesting, they -; - that the
Language Usage 2
shapes of some of the continents seemed to match. Punctuation:
It looked like they were shaped to fit together, Comma 1
pieces Period 1
ust like puzzle pei-cs. In the early 18OOan Spelling 2
explorer found rocks in south Qmerica that looked= = found
like rocks in africa. scientists have find several other
similarities between the two continentb
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Earth on the MovePeople have been making discoverys about Earth
for as long as human have lived hear. sometimes,
People have to let go of their old-fashioned widely
accepted beliefs before they can except new ideas
for example, many people in the late V400s believed
that Earth was flat Some people were not convinced
that Earth was round. until ships made it safely all
the way around the world.
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For many years, people who studyed maps of the
world saw something interesting, they notice that the
shapes of some of the continents seemed to match.
It looked like they were shaped to fit together,
Just like puzzle peices. In the early 1800s an
explorer found rocks in south america that looked
like rocks in africa. scientists have find several other
similarities between the two continents
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In the early 11OOs a man named alfred egener Error Summary
—stu • ed— Ca’italizafion 7noticed something interesting. egener -; -; the
Language Usage 2mountain ranges of south merica and Africi0he fit Punctuation:
the two continents together as if they were puzzle Comma 2Period 3
pieces. He saw that the mountain ranges lined up spelling 1•elieved
wegener that these continents had once
been one continuous solid mass of land that hadbroken
- apar0
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When wegener died in 1q30 scientists did not or Summary
yet accept his ideas. They did not believe that Capitalization
Punctuation:Earths continents had ever been joined in unfamilia, Apostrophe 2
differently shaped masse in the 160s, scientists Comma 3
0 v’ Period 2
had new information that proved wegeners ideas uotation Mark 1
were correct. They learned that Earth is made up
of huge masses of rock called plates.” when the plates
movthe continents on top of the plates move, to.0
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In the early 1900s a man named alfred wegener
noticed something interesting. wegener studyed the
mountain ranges of south america and Africa he fit
the two continents together as if they were puzzle
pieces. He saw that the mountain ranges lined up
wegener believe that these continents had once
been one continuous solid mass of land that had
broke apart
WEDNESDAY WEEK 27
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When wegener died in 1930 scientists did not
yet accept his ideas. They did not believe that
Earths continents had ever been joined in unfamiliar
differently shaped masses in the 1960s, scientists
had new information that proved wegeners’ ideas
were correct. They learned that Earth is made up
of huge masses of rock called plates.” when the plates
move the continents on top of the plates move, too
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A Journey BeginsI didn’t want to let gbut mr.
moved me away from Mother. “There
he said. I’ll be leaving you behind if
hurry.” He picked me up and set me
next to aul my brother.=/\
Mother took off her shawl and
“a little bit of !reland to have with= = through
Bridget, she said her tears.
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VTake good care of them mary finneyYmother= =
called out.
“Like my own, roll don’t you worry,” mary=0= =
replied. I’ll take them to your brother as soon as
we reach bosto0
Our bags of rough scratchy burlap were filled“journey
with food for the long -. !t was all mother couldpotato = =
spare. The potatae- crop had rottedAso all the wheat
we raised went to pay the tax collector0
O’Brien gently
no> ridgetY
you don’t
in the wagon
wrapped me in it.
you on the ship
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I didn’t want to let go but mr. O’Brien gentlydialog
moved me away from Mother. “There now bridget,
he said. I’ll be leaving you behind if you don’t
hurry.” He picked me up and set me in the wagon
next to paul my brother.
Mother took off her shawl and wrapped me in it.
“a little bit of ireland to have with you on the ship —— —( 11U(Bridget, she said thru her tears.
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Take good care of them mary finney, mother
called out. 4TCH0
• dialog“Like my own, molly don t you worry, mary
replied. I’ll take them to your brother as soon as
we reach boston”
Our bags of rough scratchy burlap were filled
with food for the long journie. it was all mother could
spare. The potatoe crop had rotted so all the wheat
we raised went to pay the tax collector
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Uncle james, others brother sailed to america o Sum ary
two years ago. He sent mother so’me money r us Capitalization 11
Punctuation:
to join hi but there wasn’t enough for all of us Apostrophe 2
V . Comma LIto go to Qmerlca. When mary rnothers frien wasE A: Period 1
leaving to join her husband in boston, mother
decided it would be better for us there. She
promised she would come late meanwhile, uncleOE
James would care for us.
WEDNESDAY WEEK 28
It was a tirin bumpy journey to the ship that E or Su ma
Capitalization 2would take us to america. As the wagon bouncedPunctuation:
along the roacSl turned to look at my brother. Comma L4
Paul, who was only eight years old, had started to Quotation Mark 1
cry. I reached out my hand and clasped hi and he
moved even closer to me. “We’re together,” I said
softly in his ear.’We’ll help each other. We’ll be just
fine.” beep in my heart ± knew then that we would be.
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Uncle James, mothers brother sailed to america
two years ago. He sent mother some money for us 4rCH
• commasto join him but there wasn t enough for all of us• names of people
to go to america. When mary mothers friend was
leaving to Join her husband in boston, mother
decided it would be better for us there. She
promised she would come later meanwhile, uncle
James would care for us.
WEDNESDAY WEEK 28
It was a tiring bumpy journey to the ship that
would take us to america. As the wagon bounced• commasalong the road I turned to look at my brother.
Paul, who was only eight years old, had started to
cry. I reached out my hand and clasped his and he
moved even closer to me. “We’re together,” I said
softly in his ear. We’ll help each other. We’ll be Just
fine.” beep in my heart I knew then that we would be.—IjI—I—
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This Inventor Is All Thumbs! E or Sum ry
Capitalization 10Last year, ten-year-old georgia £rawford set PunCtUafiOninventor
a record she became the youngest ctcr to sell Comma 1
Period 2a product on a network television show. After a
Other 1
five-minute ad about her product ran on the Spelling 1
ShoD-at-Home show sales of her product brought in
$2O,OOin this interview, business youth editor !van
green interviews ms. crawford (known to family and
friends as Gigi) about her success in business.
MONDAY WEEK 29
Ivan Green (IG): Ms £rawford could you tell Business E or Su mary0= 4’
Youth readers about the product that you invented? Capitalization 5
A Punctuation:
Georgia Crawford (GC): Yes mr Green but please Comma 6
4’ Period 3
call me Gigi. minnesota gets very cold during the Other 2
winte5no matter what I’d dy\i couldn’t keep my
hands warm and dry. Snow was always getting inside
my gloves or mittens and I’d end up with wet4’
freezing hands.
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This Inventor Is All Thumbs!Last year, ten-year-old georgia crawford set
a record she became the youngest inventer to sell
a product on a network television show. After a
five-minute ad about her product ran on the
Shop-at-Home show sales of her product brought in
$20,000 in this interview, business youth editor Ivan
green interviews ms. crawford (known to family and
friends as Gigi) about her success in business.
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• titles ofTV shows
Ivan Green (IG): Ms crawford could you tell Business
Youth readers about the product that you invented
Georgia Crawford (GC): Yes mr Green but please
call me Gigi. minnesota gets very cold during the
winter no matter what I’d do i couldn’t keep my
hands warm and dry. Snow was always getting inside
my gloves or mittens and I’d end up with wet
freezing hands.
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IG: So what did you do Gi ? E or umm ry
Capitalization 3
GC: Well, I started pulling my long sleeves down9’ Punctuation:Apostrophe 1
‘ver my hands before I d put on my gloves orComma 2
mittens. That way, Id have a warm layer inside Period 2
sealmy gloves to out the wet and col. my mother
0 Spelling 2
was doing the wash one day and she noticed thathole 4’
I had made a whole near the cuffs of lots of my
sweaters and shirts.
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IG: Was it because of the way you were pulling on Error Summary
themCapitalization 7
4’ A Punctuation:Apostrophe 1
GC: Yes, Mr. Gree i d been pulling my sleeves over0 Comma 2
my hands and holding them with my thumbboon Period 5
I wore holes through the sleeves! Thats when iSpelling 1
realized that j. needed a long-sleeved sweater or
shirt’With special holes for the thumbs. Now, IThey’re
sell shirts and sweaters with thumbhole0 -
- called
“Thumbkin’ No more wej cold hands!
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IG: So what did you do Gigi.
&C: Well, i started pulling my long sleeves down.
Over my hands before I’d put on my gloves or
mittens. That way, Id have a warm layer inside
my gloves to seel out the wet and cold my mother
was doing the wash one day and she noticed that
I had made a whole near the cuffs of lots of my
sweaters and shirts.
IG: Was it because of the way you were pulling on
them gigi.
GC: Yes, Mr. Green i’d been pulling my sleeves over
my hands and holding them with my thumbs soon,
I wore holes through the sleeves! Thats when I
realized that i needed a long-sleeved sweater or
shirt. With special holes for the thumbs. Now, I
sell shirts and sweaters with thumbholes their called
“Thumbkins” No more wet cold hands!
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Chen Wan’s Vacation biary E or S m ary
an Capitalization 7Monday, april 12: Spring break is going to be Language Usage 2
excitindifferent experience this year. ba Punctuation:
Apostrophe 1business partner is coming to towand he is going Comma LI
to bring danny his son. They live in montana. banny Period 3
has = A uotation arl 1never been to california. bad told me,’hen
Wan I’m counting on you to show danny the city=
while mr Connors and I have our business meetings”0
I have been busy making plans for our days toethe
MONDAY WEEK 30
wednesday opril9’1L4: I didr get a chance to write rror S mmary
=
an entry yesterday9’ ecause i was busy all day with Capitalization q
100= Language Usage 1
danny. today will be busy, . hats why m writing PuncttIon:
this morning before our day begins. Yesterday, we Apostrophe 14
buildings Comma 3
spent most of our time in Chinatow The - Period 2
°amaze. Quotation Mark 1and the chinese writing everywhere -emaze .anny.
— = Other 1
He said, “Wow I cant believe you can read these spelling 24\II
signs Chen Wan IVA
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Chen Wan’s Vacation biaryMonday, april 12: Spring break is going to be a
exciting different experience this year. bads
business partner is coming to town and he is going
to bring danny his son. They live in montana. bonny
have never been to california. bad told me, Chen
Wan I’m counting on you to show danny the city
while mr Connors and I have our business meetings”i have been busy making plans for our days together
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• commas
wednesday april, 14: I didnt get a chance to write
an entry yesterday. Because i was busy all day with
danny. today will be busy, to. thats why Im writing
this morning before our day begins. Yesterday, we
spent most of our time in Chinatown The bildings
and the chinese writing everywhere amaze danny.
He said, “Wow I cant believe you can read these
signs Chen Wan
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thursdaApril 15: Yesterday, danny and L went to rrorSu m ryZgreat
Golden ate ark. We had a time at the Capitalization 12
— —Language Usage 2
PlaygrourldAand we even rode the merry-go-round a Punctuation:
an Apostrophe 1few times. In the late afternoon we went to see
exhibit at the asian art museum dann favoritComma 7
es Period 1= = = CE
were the beautiful delicate hand-carved ivory figures. Quotation Mark 1
A 4’ other 1
“Read the chinese characters Chen Spelling 1He kept sayin 4’WanYit sure me feel important to know c.hinese!
— A
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Saturday, april 17: bad and I took danny and his E or Summa
father to the airport this morning, bad said he Capitalization 8
Language Usage 2
and Mr. connors were able to do everything they Punctuation:hoped
_______
Apostrophe 1had hoping to this week. At the airport, MbConnors Comma 3aresaid “Chen Wan banny says you the best san Period 2
4’ 4’rancisco tour guide a visitor could hope to haveY Quotation Mark 1
Spelling 1
I think I turned red when I heard that but i felt— v A
happy that I had helped dad. Im also happy tofriend =
have a newC
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thursday April 15: Yesterday, danny and i went to
Golden gate park. We had a grate time at the 4TCH0
• dialoplayground and we even rode the merry-go-round a• exckimationfew times. In the late afternoon we went to see a points
exhibit at the asian art museum dannys favorites
were the beautiful delicate hand-carved ivory figures.
He kept saying “Read the chinese characters Chen
Wan. it sure make me feel important to know chinese
WEDNESDAY WEEK 30
Saturday, april 17: Dad and I took danny and his
father to the airport this morning. Dad said he• dialoand Mr. connors were able to do everything they• commashad hoping to this week. At the airport, Mr Connors
said “Chen Wan Danny says you is the best san
francisco tour guide a visitor could hope to have.
I think I turned red when I heard that but i felt
happy that I had helped dad. Im also happy to
have a new freirid
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An Oregon Trail biary Error Summary
planning Capitalization 7
Monday, april 13\ 1852: fter months of and Language Usage 2
waitin the day is almost here! the wagons are Punctuation:
‘ loaded Comma 5
almost 4ede%and our journey to oregon will finally Period 2begin —
bg this week. Today, I helped mother pack all Spelling 3
the things we will need9”for cooking on the trail.wooden
Everything fIts in a hea sturdy box that
Father buil Ihe front of the box folds down
on hinges and 4e turns into a shelf where
mother can work.
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I arefriday April’11852: Amy and -e going to sleep Error ummary
in the wagon tonigh we will leave before daylight. Capitalizalion 6
finished Language Usage 3
mother and father have almost packing Punctuation:
the wagon. jam going to bring this journal with Comma 6
= Penod 3
meA but lather says I may choose only one toy to SIIing 2
= decidebring. It is not really difficult to -de+d because
0AmandaA my rag dolk is my most special toy.
‘‘ ‘‘ herGrandmother made for rn-0
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An Oregon Trail biaryMonday, april 11 1852: after months of planing and
waiting the day is almost here! the wagons are
almost loded and our journey to oregon will finally
began this week. Today, I helped mother pack all
the things we will need. for cooking on the trail.
Everything fits in a heavy sturdy woodiri box that
Father built the front of the box folds down
on hinges and he turns into a shelf where
mother can work.
MONDAY
friday April, 15 1852: Amy and me is going to sleep
in the wagon tonight we will leave before daylight.
mother and father have almost finnished packing
the wagon. I am going to bring this journal with
me but father says I may choose only one toy to
bring? It is not really difficult to deside because
Amanda my rag doll is my most special toy.
Grandmother made him for me
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mondci may 2 1852: We are camped on the banks of Error Su maA biggest have Capitalization 8
the missouri river. It is the biget river I ever= tomorrow Language Usage 2
seen! we will cross it . First, all the wagons Punctuation:= their
that arrived before us must take -+4r’ turns. I was Apostrophe 2
Comma 14
afraid of the crossing when i first saw the river but Pen 1
now that ye watched other wagons float across on spelling 3
the ferryboats9’I think we will make it just fine. im=
glad that we will not cross in -e stormy weathe0
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grown.tuesda may 1852: I have not tired of Error Summ ry
looking at this prairie, no matter where I look there Capitalization 8
Language Usage 1
are flowers blooming among the wil waving grass. Punctuation:we Comma 5
Amy and i picked a bunch for mother when #4’.ey-stopped = Spelling 2
--topod for our midday meal. I will press some of
the bright-yellow goldenrod here between the pages
of this journal, this will save a little bit of the
bright sunny prairie along with my memories of the
oregon trail.
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monday may 2 1852: We are camped on the banks of
the missouri river. It is the bigest river I has ever
seen! we will cross it tomorow. First, all the wagons
that arrived before us must take there turns. I was
afraid of the crossing when i first saw the river but
now that lye watched other wagons float across on
the ferryboats. I think we will make it just fine. im
glad that we will not cross in no stormy weather
WEDNESDAY WEEK 31
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tuesday may 17 1852: I have not groan tired of
looking at this prairie, no matter where I look there
are flowers blooming among the wild waving grass.
Amy and i picked a bunch for mother when they
stoped for our midday meal. I will press some of
the bright-yellow goldenrod here between the pages
of this journal, this will save a little bit of the
bright sunny prairie along with my memories of the
oregon trail.
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Why Making Maple Syrup Is Hard Work Erro S mmary
Capitalization 3
Not so very long aglife on earth was easy for Language Usage 2
people sunlight warmed the land. The forestsA meadowsA Punctuation:
were Comma 6and lakes home to countless animals Hunters ,eno
found plenty of game and the rivers offered a bounty Spelling 1A heav”
of fish. Berries hung Ton the bushes and thewere’’
cornfields grew tall. Even the trees full of sticky
sweet syrup. broken twig provided plenty of fresh
syrup right from the branch!
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Nanabozho was the mighty ruler of the seasons Error SummaryCapitalization 1
and of nature. One day, he went for a walk to enjoyPunctuation:
the sightsoundand smells of the world. when he Apostrophe 1
came upon the peopl though he was surprised. Comma 6
Penod 1
There was nobody to be seen anywherNanabozho Quotation Mark 1
found no one fishing in the stream no hunters fl9 3
throughwandering the woodsA and nobody weeding or
cornfieldhoeing in the . “How oddA he thought.
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Why Making Maple Syrup Is Hard WorkNot so very long ago life on earth was easy for
people sunlight warmed the land. The forests meadows
and lakes was home to countless animals Hunters
found plenty of game and the rivers offered a bounty
of fish. Berries hung hevy on the bushes and the
cornfields grew tall. Even the trees was full of sticky
sweet syrup. a broken twig provided plenty of fresh
syrup right from the branch!
MONDAY WEEK 32
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comi’ncis
Nanabozho was the mighty ruler of the seasons
and of nature. One day, he went for a walk to enjoy
the sights sounds and smells of the world. when he
came upon the peoples vilage, though he was surprised.
There was nobody to be seen anywhere Nanabozho
found no one fishing in the stream no hunters
wandering threw the woods and nobody weeding or
hoeing in the cornfeild. “How odd he thought.
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Perhaps they are gathering berrie “ thought or Su ma
Capitalization 2Nanabozho. As he walked toward the berry busheLanguage Usage 1
however, he saw a strange sight in the maple grov Punctuation:
He saw the people from the villag but they did not Comma 6
Period LI
see hi hey were lying on their backs with their uotation Mark 1
mouths open. They catching the droplets of
mois sweet syrup that dripped from the trees.
They did not want to get u. o hun fis or work
in the field0
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Nanabozho thought to himself “This cannot be. or Summary
Capitalization 5the people will become fat and lazy. They will notii Language Usage 2
want to work anymore. Soon, nanabozho had a pla Punctuation:took .
. Comma LIhe a basket to the river. He filled the basket
Period 2
many time and then e emptied -l’ over the top uotcition ark 1
of a maple tree. Soon, the trees had water
flavorless sap. Since then, people must work har.
o gather that thin sap and boil it down into
deliciou sweet syrup.
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Perhaps they are gathering berries” thought
Nanabozho. As he walked toward the berry bushes
however, he saw a strange sight in the maple grove
He saw the people from the village but they did not
see him they were lying on their backs with their
mouths open. They was catching the droplets of
moist sweet syrup that dripped from the trees.
They did not want to get up. To hunt fish or work
in the fields
WEDNESDAY WEEK 32
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commas
Nanabozho thought to himself “This cannot be.
the people will become fat and lazy. They will not
want to work anymore. Soon, nanabozho had a plan
he take a basket to the river. He filled the basket
many times and then He emptied her over the top
of a maple tree. Soon, the trees had watery
flavorless sap. Since then, people must work hard.
To gather that thin sap and boil it down into
delicious sweet syrup.
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“Hot Sauce” Is Sizzling! E or Summary
Capitalization LI
MiamJAflorida uly 12OO4 Language Usage 1
Have you hear.?Some fresh new voices are Punctuation:
Apostrophe 1making lots of noise these days in the world of musi o Comma LI
callthe teenage brother and sister cal1 themselves Hot Penod 3
• Other 1Sauce and everyone says their music is sizzling Its
0no surprise that twins Eva and Alex Cruz feel at
home onstage9’ nd in the recording studio. Both of
their parents are performers.
MONDAY WEEK 33
The new hit by hot sauce is a lively song called rror Sum ary
“Nice and Spicy.” The tune shows off the musical Capitalization 5
Punctuation:
talents of the duo according to the twinsA they have Comma 5
spent many tediousA hard hours over the past year on Penod 2
Other 1
lessonsA practicand rehearsals. The hard work seems Spelling 1“ paid ‘
to have pycd off. gjex sounds great on the guitar=
and eva does some fine work on the keyboard This0
duo has a long career ahead of them IA
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“Hot Sauce” Is Sizzling!h%q7. fOMiami florida July 1 2004
commasHave you heard. Some fresh new voices are
making lots of noise these days in the world of music
the teenage brother and sister calls themselves Hot
Sauce and everyone says their music is sizzling? Its
no surprise that twins Eva and Alex Cruz feel at
home onstage. And in the recording studio. Both of
their parents are performers.
MONDAY WEEK 33
The new hit by hot sauce is a lively song called
“Nice and Spicy.” The tune shows off the musicalcommastalents of the duo according to the twins they have
spent many tedious hard hours over the past year on
lessons practice and rehearsals. The hard work seems
to have payed off. alex sounds great on the guitar
and eva does some fine work on the keyboard This
duo has a long career ahead of them?
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According to the çruz familthe hard work Error Summary
doesn’t end once a recording becomes a hit. In fact,Capitalization LI
different begins Language Usage 1
thats when a totally d4.frn-t- kind of work Eva Punctuation:GA
Alex and their parents will now spend several busy Apostrophe 1
4’ cities Comma 6
actionpacked weeks touring big across the Period 2
united states. There will be interviews concerts, talk Quotation Mark 2
—— 4’ ii Other 1
shows and fans everywhere Hot sauce will sing ice Spelling 24’”
and SpiqYon the television show Yo T lent
WEDNESDAY WEEK 33
If hot sauce continues to have big hits like ice E or Summary
/ nd Spicwe may be seeing them on TV again later Capitalization 6
say Language Usage 1
this year. Sources in the music world that =ot Punctuation:
auce may win a music award for ice and picy’$YIf Comma 1
— Quotation Mark 14
so, count on seeing Eva and Alex Cruz on TV in the other i
Young Music Awards program next season. In the Spelling 2
keepmeantime, -keep- an eye on this hot duo because they
show no signs of cooling off anyJirne soon1
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According to the cruz fami’y the hard work
doesn’t end once a recording becomes a hit. In fact,
thats when a totally diferent kind of work begin Eva
Alex and their parents will now spend several busy
action-packed weeks touring big citys across the
united states. There will be interviews concerts, talk
shows and fans everywhere Hot sauce will sing Nice
and Spicy on the television show Young Talent.
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• titles of songs
• titles ofTV shows
If hot sauce continues to have big hits like Nice
And Spicy we may be seeing them on TV again later
this year. Sources in the music world says that hot
sauce may win a music award for Nice and spicy. If
so, count on seeing Eva and Alex Cruz on TV in the
Young Music Awards program next season. In the
meantime, keap an eye on this hot duo because they
show no signs of cooling off any time soon’
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A Weather Journal rror Summa
Capitalization 8november 200’4 1:30 3i. Language Usage 1
Yesterday, ms chan handed out weather Punctuation:
=— stud ing Comma 5
journals to each science team. we will be Penod 6
the weather for a couple of weeks each team got Spelling 1
0=special tools for checking the weather. ms chan gave
EOEus thermometer a rain gauge and a windsock we
4’ 4’will measure how hot or cold the air is with the
thermometer check the rainfall with the gauge and4’ 4’
find out the direction of the wind with the windsock
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1:45november9’6 200L4 1L’• pm Error Su mary
= 4’science 00 C it I 6Our —“- team is made up of nelson at paula ap a iz on
E i 4’ 4’ Language Usage 2
and me. yesterday, we set up our weather tools Pundfion:
The thermometer is tacked to the back wall of the Apostrophe 2
Comma 8
cafeteria and the rain gauge is in the ground at the Period 64’ looks
edge of the field It !cc like a tall cup attached to 1
0 Spelling 2
stick. Our windsock is on a pole and its in thetoo 4’
ground, . Our thermometer says 61°bihere is t any
rain fallinand the wind is blowing from the nortk
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A Weather Journalnovember 5 20014 1:30 pm.
Yesterday, ms chan handed out weather
journals to each science team. we will be studyng
the weather for a couple of weeks each team got
special tools for checking the weather. ms chan gave
us an thermometer a rain gauge and a windsock we
will measure how hot or cold the air is with the
thermometer check the rainfall with the gauge arid
find out the direction of the wind with the windsock
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Our sience team is made up of nelson pat paula
and me. yesterday, we set up our weather tools
The thermometer is tacked to the back wall of the
cafeteria and the rain gauge is in the ground at theedge of the field It look like a tall cup attached to
an stick. Our windsock is on a pole and its in the
ground, to. Our thermometer says 61°F there isnt anyrain falling and the wind is blowing from the north
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10:15Nov. 7 2004 . a.m Error mm ry
0bark patches began to cover the sky at dusk Capitalization LI
Language Usage 1
last nighbthen it started to rain and continued all Punctuation:
Apostrophe 1night. This morning, Mbchan sent us out to check
Comma 3
our weather statioour rain gauge had 0.75 in. of Period 6
water in it! Juan group only had 0.25 irbof rain in Other 1
antheir 9auebut they put it under awning. Our gauge
was completely uncoverethe air is now 5°Fand the
windsock is blowing in a northerly direction.
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It has been windy today but it hasn’t been Capitalization 5
4strai. ht Punctuation:
raininour windsock is flying strait out. Were not Apostrophe 3
sure if the wind is coming from the north.9’r the Comma 1
Period 11
northeast. We are sure about how much rain is in other 1
our rain gauge we had 1.25 in this afternoon. susans Spelling 1
0= cvgroup had 1 in0at 10:15 a.m. Juans group only had
0.75 in at 1:30 pm. Ms. chan wants us to figure out0 0
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Nov. 7 2004 10.15 a.m
bark patches began to cover the sky at dusk
last night then it started to rain and continued all
night. This morning, Ms chan sent us out to check
our weather station our rain gauge had 0.75 in. of
water in it! Juans group only had 0.25 in of rain in
their gauge but they put it under a awning. Our gauge
was completely uncovered the air is now 5q°F and the
windsock is blowing in a northerly direction.
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Nov 8, 2004 2’30 pm
It has been windy today but it hasn’t been
raining our windsock is flying strait out. Were not
sure if the wind is coming from the north. Or the
northeast. We are sure about how much rain is in
our rain gauge we had 1.25 in this afternoon. susans
group had 1 in at 10:15 a.m. Juans group only had
0.75 in at 1:30 pm. Ms. chan wants us to figure out
why we all got different amounts I have some ideas.
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Preview the 4 daily lessons to ensure you review or introduce skills that may be unfamiliar to students.
How to Make Napkin Rings o Summ ry
• than Capitalization 2
Nothing makes - holiday table more festive Language Usage 1
special napkin rings they are simple to make and they Punctuation:
Comma 8odd so much to a holiday meal ou will need to have Period 3
0=cardboard tubes from paper towel5\PaPer (wrapping Spelling 2
papeself-stick papeor paper you have decorated),
giuescissora pen or penca ruler and any extra4’Stickers
decorations you want to include. are great
for this project0
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First, use the ruler to make a mark at every Error Su maeach
inch on the paper towel tube. econd, cut alongCapitalization 2
Language Usage 1
mark to create cardboard rings. if you dont have a Punctflon:= repe t
ring for each of your guests -repe-t-e- t ese steps withApostrophe 2
Comma 1
another tube. Next, cut strips of paper that measure Period 1
two Other 1and one-half inches wide and five and oneAhalf Spelling 3
inches long. Yo need one of these strips9’for eachplan
of the rings you -p4en to make.
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How to Make Napkin RingsNothing makes an holiday table more festive then
special napkin rings? they are simple to make arid they
add so much to a holiday meal you will need to have
cardboard tubes from paper towels paper (wrapping
paper self-stick paper or paper you have decorated),
glue scissors a pen or pencil a ruler and any extra
decorations you want to include. Stikkers are great
for this project
MONDAY WEEK 35
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First, use the ruler to make a mark at every
inch on the paper towel tube, second, cut along eatch
mark to create cardboard rings, if you dont have a
ring for each of your guests repete these steps with
another tube. Next, cut strips of paper that measure
to and one-half inches wide and five and one half
inches long. Voull need one of these strips, for each
of the rings you plans to make.
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Spreadglue on the outside of a cardboard ring. Error Summa
center the ring on one end of a strip of paper Capitalization LI
roll Punctuation:
and the paper around it? There should be Penod LI
thre q,uarters of an inch of paper left over9’Jn Other 2
A Spelling 3
each side of the ring. Make cuts in the paper on
each side of the tube, about on half inch apar Rubglue A 0
-gew inside the rin. then fold the strips of paperOE
toward the inside of the ring.
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Now that your ring is covered with pape, you rror Su a
may add ribbo glitter self-hardening clay or any Capitalization 3
Language Usage 1
other decoration you wish. When the set of napkin Punctuation:finished
rings is use them for a special meal ust roll Comma 6
0= Period 3
a paper or cloth napki tuck it through a ring, and Spelling 1
thenS
Jn the table alongside the plate. Keep the
ings in a box or bag so you can use them again for
other special occasions0
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spred glue on the outside of a cardboard ring.
center the ring on one end of a strip of paper
and role the paper around it? There should be
three q,uarters of an inch of paper left over. On
each side of the ring. Make cuts in the paper on
each side of the tube, about one half inch apart Rub
glew inside the ring then fold the strips of paper
toward the inside of the ring.
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Now that your ring is covered with paper you
may add ribbon glitter self-hardening clay or any
other decoration you wish. When the set of napkin
rings is finish use them for a special meal just roll
a paper or cloth napkin tuck it through a ring, and
then sit it. On the table alongside the plate. Keep the
Rings in a box or bag so you can use them again for
other special occasions
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How to Make Stilts Error Summary
V Capitalization LI
Have you ever, tried to walk on stilt ,Its harder Language Usage 1
than it Jocks but i Jots of fun. walking on stilts can Punctuation:4’ Apostrophe 3
improve your balancits also a great way to be head Comma 2— crow.
and shoulders above the -: -: in a parade! In fact, in Period LI
Other 1the early 1700s rench shepherds used stilts to keep Spelling 1
an eye on their flocks. Stilts are easy to make. Ask
anadult to help you find the materials listed belo
hen follow the direction
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You will need wood, a tape measureAa hamme rror Su ma
a saw wood glue, andnails
. To make the handles forCapitalization 2
Punctuation:your stilts you will need two 6-foot lengths of lumber Comma 5
(1 in. thick by 2 in wide). or your stilt’s steps you Period 5
0 = 4’ Spelling 2
will need two 10-inch lengths of lumber (2 i 0thick by
‘4 in wide). Finally, you will need sandpaper to smooth0 paint
the handleb _ou may wish to peyn-t-e- your stilts9’wheri
they are finished.
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How to Make StiltsHave you ever tried to walk on stilts. Its harder
than it looks but its lots of fun. walking on stilts can
improve your balance its also a great way to be head
and shoulders above the croud in a paradel In fact, in
the early 1700s french shepherds used stilts to keep
an eye on their flocks. Stilts are easy to make? Ask
a adult to help you find the materials listed below
then follow the directions
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apostrophes
You will need wood, a tape measure a hammer
a saw wood glue, and nailes. To make the handles for
your stilts you will need two 6-foot lengths of lumber
(1 in. thick by 2 in wide). for your stilt’s steps you
will need two 10-inch lengths of lumber (2 in thick by14 in wide). Finally, you will need sandpaper to smooth
the handles? you may wish to paynte your stilts. when
they are finished.
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To make the handle first ask your helper Error Summaground Capalization 2
to measure the distanc -rom the to theLanguage Usage 1
top of your shoulders. Second, add 1 foot9’to this Punctuation:
measurement. Next, cut the two 6-foot lengths Apostrophe 1
Finally Comma 1
of lumber to this measurement. -Fiy, sand them Period 3
carefully with the sandpap0 ou want to make sure spelling 3
there are -knew splinters. I . hard enough to balanceworry
on stilts without having to worried- about slivers!
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spreadTo make the step first pred wood glue on E or Summary
one long side of each of the 10-inch lengths of Capitalization 2
Punctuation:
lumber. Second, attach the steps to the bottom of Comma 2four Pd 3the handle Next, use the hammer to drive #er nail eno
0 Spelling ‘4ihrough each handle and into the step. If you want
colorfulto make your stilts more colorft4wait until the glue
is completely dry and then paint them. Let the paintyou’re
dr now your ready to practice walking on your stilts!OE
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To make the handles first ask your helper
to measure the distance. From the grownd to the
top of your shoulders. Second, add 1 foot. to this
measurement. Next, cut the two 6-foot lengths
of lumber to this measurement. Finaly, sand them
carefully with the sandpaper you want to make sure
there are know splinters. Its hard enough to balance
on stilts without having to worried about sliverst
WEDNESDAY WEEK 36
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To make the steps first spred wood glue on
one long side of each of the 10-inch lengths of
lumber. Second, attach the steps to the bottom of
the handles Next, use the hammer to drive for nails.
Through each handle and into the step. If you want
to make your stilts more colorfull wait until the glue
is completely dry and then paint them. Let the paint
dry now your ready to practice walking on your stilts!
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Write a paragraph that gives information about kites. Write your own topicsentence, or choose one provided below. bon’t forget to add examples ordetails about the topic.
• bid you know that kites have been used to do important jobs as well asfor having fun?
• People have been making and using kites for over two thousand years.
• All over the world, people make and fly kites.
FRIDAY — WEEK 1 Social Studies Article: Kites—Not Just for Fun
Write a paragraph that describes the work that was done by Gregor Mendel. Tellabout at least one important thing that was learned from his work. Begin with oneof these topic sentences, or write your own:
• Gregor Mendel’s work has helped scientists understand how traits arepassed from parents to children.
• Gregor Meridel’s work with plants has also helped scientists understandhumans better.
• boes it seem possible that studying plants could help us learn about people?
FRiDAY — WEEK 2 Science Article: How Traits Travel
bo you think school uniforms are a good idea? Write a persuasive paragraph aboutthis issue. Be sure to clearly state whether you support this idea. Give at least threereasons to support your position. End with a strong closing sentence.
FRIDAY - WEEK 3 Editorial: Uniforms Are Not the Answer
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Write a short letter to a real or imaginary friend. bescribe what you are doing inschool these days, or tell about something that is going on in your life.
FRiDAY - WEEK 4 Letters: Pen Pals
Imagine you are having a birthday party. Write an invitation to a friend. Be sureto tell the date, time, and place of your party. Add any other details that you wantto include.
FRIDAY - WEEK 5 Letters: Birthday Mail
Write the last paragraph of this story, telling what the letter says and how thewriter feels about the news. Use the same voice as the narrator of the firstfour paragraphs.
FRIDAY - WEEK 6 Realistic Fiction: The Letter
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Write another paragraph about life in Salinas, Alta California. Describe some ofthe children’s other chores, like working in the garden, carding wool, herding sheep,
gathering eggs, or other tasks. Continue writing in the same voice as the author ofthe other four paragraphs.
FRIDAY — WEEK 7 Historical Fiction: A New Life in Old California
Write a paragraph that summarizes important information about Lewis and Clark’s
exploration of the Louisiana Territory. Be sure to include information about when
the group made the trip, the reasons for the trip, who took part in the trip, and the
outcome of the journey.
FRIDAY - WEEK 8 Social Studies Article: Lewis & Clark
Write one or two paragraphs about the Everglades. Explain what makes this placespecial. Describe the problems facing the Everglades today. Close with a strong
concluding statement. Begin with one of these topic sentences, or write your own;
• A special ecosystem like the Everglades deserves to be protected.
• People’s actions can upset the delicate balance of a habitat.
• One of America’s most unusual areas is the Everglades in Florida.
FRIDAY — WEEK 9 Social Studies Article: The Everglades
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Write a paragraph to summarize the information about Herrington and his November2002 mission to the International Space Station. Begin with one of these topicsentences, or write your own:
• Astronaut John Herrington took more than scientific equipment with himon his trip to outer space.
• Astronaut John Herrington is the first Native American to go into space.• The Chickasaw Nation gave a proud send-off to Native American astronaut
John Herrington.
FRIDAY — WEEK 10 Science Article: Arrowheads in Space
bescribe the two huge memorials in South bakota. Be sure to tell who designedthem, what they represent, and when they were made. Begin with one of these topicsentences, or write your own:
• South bakota is home to two of the largest memorials in the world.
• South bakota’s granite cliffs are perfect for carving monuments.
• Sometimes, big ideas can become big projects.
FRIDAY — WEEK 11 Social Studies Article: A Monumental Tribute
Write one or two paragraphs that describe a place that is special to you. What doesit look like and sound like there? How do you feel when you are there? What makesit such a special place?
FRIDAY — WEEK 12 Personal Narrative: My Tree House
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The Gold Rush was an important time in California’s history. In one or two
paragraphs, write a summary that describes events related to the Gold Rush.
Remember to include details about the way miners panned for gold and claimed land.
Begin with one of the following topic sentences, or write one of your own:
• The Gold Rush began in 18148 when a man named James Marshall founda gold nugget.
• Many forty-niners looked for their fortune in the American River.
• In 18148, many people began their journey to California with dreams
of striking it rich.
FRIDAY - WEEK 13 Social Studies Article: Gold!
Write a paragraph that tells about where electrical energy comes from and how it
is used. Begin with one of these topic sentences, or write your own:
• Most people are used to having electrical power available at the flip ofa switch.
• Have you ever wondered where the electrical energy in your homecomes from?
• Electrical energy can be made in different ways.
FRIDAY - WEEK 14 Science Article: Electric Energy
Write one or two paragraphs about the life and work of Marie Curie. Be sure to
include where and when she was born, and to describe some of the things that made
her an extraordinary person. Use one of these topic sentences to begin, or write
your own:
• Marie Curie was an inspiring woman and scientist.
• Marie Curie helped make some important discoveries in the world of science.
• Marie Curie spent her life studying, learning, and discovering.
FRIDAY — WEEK 15 Biography: A Woman of Science
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Write a paragraph that gives information about teeth and the work they do. Beginwith one of these topic sentences, or write your own:
• Teeth have different shapes because they do different jobs.• It’s important to take care of your teeth so they can do their job.• What is a tool that can cut, grind, and tear?
FRIDAY — WEEK 16 Science Article: Terrific Teeth
Write a paragraph describing how new technology has changed the way people findinformation. Be sure to give some examples. Begin with one of these topic sentences,or write your own:
• The Internet has become a one-stop source of information formany people.
• bo you know one place where you can find a weather report, buytickets to a baligame, or research a topic for school?
• Computers have changed a lot in recent decades.
FRIDAY — WEEK 17 Science Article: The Amazing Internet
Write a paragraph describing a day spent with your family, or tell about howyou spend a day on the weekend. Use your words to help paint a vivid picture foryour readers.
FRIDAY - WEEK 18 Personal Narrative: Indiana Sundays
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Write one or two paragraphs that tell about something that you did or that happened
to you. You can tell about something that happened recently, or when you were small.
Help the reader understand what happened and how you felt about it.
FRIDAY - WEEK 19 Personal Narrative: The View from Down Here
Use the information in the book review to write a summary of Little House on the
Prairie. Be sure to tell what type of book this is, where and when the story takes
place, and who wrote it. Include some information on what the book is about. You
might also give a recommendation.
FRIDAY - WEEK 20 Book Review: An American Classic
Write one or two paragraphs to continue this story. Tell what happens after Robin
starts working on Grow-Bot, the robotic tutor. Is the project a success? Is it a new,
interesting form of entertainment? Or do things get out of control and create a
disaster? What might happen? Include some dialog between speakers in the story.
Be sure to use capital letters, qpotation marks, and punctuation correctly when you
write dialog.
FRIDAY — WEEK 21 Fantasy: Bored in Space
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Suggest other activities that schools could plan for the rest of an environmentalawareness week. Present convincing arguments for the activities you propose forWednesday, Thursday, and Friday. Give examples of environmental problems, andexplain how the ideas you suggest would contribute to solving them. Be sure to endwith a strong concluding statement.
FRIDAY - WEEK 22 Editorial: Schools Should Lead by Example
Write a paragraph that describes the pirate Blackbeard. Be sure to tell about theway he looked and acted. Share some other interesting information about the pirateand his life. Start with one of the following topic sentences, or write your own:
• Blackbeard the Pirate knew just how to make himself look fearsome.• In the early 1700s, the sailor Edward Teach transformed himself into
Blackbeard the Pirate.
FRIDAY — WEEK 23 Character Sketch: Blackbeard the Pirate
Write one or two paragraphs about the life of Maria Tallchief. Explain what madeher special. Give details and use examples to create a picture of this gifted ballerina.Begin with one of these topic sentences, or write your own:
• Maria Tallchief had a rich cultural heritage that made her uniq,,ue.• Maria Tallchief was gifted in music and dance from an early age.• America’s first world-class ballerina was born on an Indian reservation
in Oklahoma in 1925.
FRIDAY - WEEK 24 Biography: A Gifted Girl
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Based on the information in the book review, describe Sarah Roth and the Wisdom
Crystal. Be sure to tell what type of book this is, who the main characters are, what
the setting is, and something about the plot. Also give some information on the
author. Finally, based on what you read in the book review, give your opinion about
whether you think this would be an interesting book to read.
FRIDAY - WEEK 25 Book Review: C. J. Clark Has Another Hit
Write a one-paragraph version of the news story about the Prestige oil spill. Be sure
to tell what happened, and when and where the events occurred. Choose one of these
headlines, or write your own:
• Spanish Fishing Waters at Risk
• Threat of World’s Worst Oil Spill
• Experts Seek Solution to SpiiJ
FRIDAY - WEEK 26 News Article: Atlantic Oil Spifi Threatens Spanish Coast
Write a paragraph that explains how people’s ideas about Earth have changed over
time. Be sure to give some examples. Begin with one of these topic sentences, or
write your own:
• People’s ideas about Earth have changed very slowly.
• Scientists now know much more about Earth than in the past.
• Is it hard to believe that some of Earth’s continents used to be
joined together?
FRiDAY — WEEK 27 Sdence Article: Earth on the Move
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Write another paragraph for Bridget’s story. Tell about what happens when theship finally arrives in Boston after six weeks at sea. Include some words spoken byBridget, Paul, Mary, or Uncle James. Be sure to use capital letters, q,uotation marks,and punctuation correctly when you write dialog.
FRIDAY - WEEK 28 Historical Fiction: A Journey Begins
Write one or two more questions and answers for this interview. Ivan Green mightask Gigi to describe how she felt after selling $20,000 worth of “Thumbkins” afterher ad ran on the Shop-at-Home show. He might ask her if she has had ideas forother inventions, or about how she will use the money she earns. Or, make up aq,uestion of your own to ask and answer.
FRiDAY - WEEK 29 Interview: This Inventor Is All Thumbs!
Write a journal entry for Friday, April 16. Write as if you are Cheri Wan, anddescribe your activities with banny. You could describe your outing to the movieson Thursday, or tell about something you did earlier in the day on Friday.
FRIDAY - WEEK 30 Journal Entries: Chen Wan’s Vacation Diary
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Write another journal entry about experiences on the Oregon Trail. You might wantto imagine the day the family saw Chimney Rock (a 325-foot-tall rock formation inNebraska) or crossed the Snake River in tdaho by ferry. Tell about sights and soundsthat the writer might have seen, such as wild animals, plants, or people.
FRIDAY — WEEK 31 Journal Entries: An Oregon Trail Diary
This story was written to teach an important lesson. What do you think that lessonis? Write a paragraph or two to explain your ideas. Be sure to support your ideaswith logic or examples.
FRIDAY — WEEK 32 Fable: Why Making Maple Syrup Is Hard Work
Write a news story describing one of the concerts given by Hot Sauce during theirU.S. tour. Be sure to mention when and where the concert took place, as well as some
of the highlights of the show. You might want to give some information about theperformers, or comment on the weak points of the show.
FRIDAY — WEEK 33 News Article: “Hot Sauce” Is Sizzling!
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Write another entry for the group’s science journal for November th. It will bean answer to Ms. Chan’s question to the class. Present an idea about why threedifferent science teams got three different measurements when they checkedtheir rain gauges. Use the same writing voice as the writer of the journal entriesfor Nov. 5 through 8.
FRIDAY - WEEK 34 Journal Entries: A Weather Journal
Write step-by-step directions for using napkin rings. Be sure to explain how toarrange the napkin in the ring and exactly where to place it on the table. Use wordsto help signal the order of each step, such as first, next, and finally.
FRIDAY — WEEK 35 Instructions: How to Make Napkin Rings
Write directions that tell how to make a pair of stilts. You may use numerals tolist the steps in order or use words like first, second, next, and finally to orderyour directions.
FRIDAY — WEEK 36 Instructions: How to Make Stilts
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Language Handbook
Basic Rules forWriting and Editing
Contents
Capital Letters 169
Sentences 169
Greetings/Closings in Letters 169
Days, Months, Holidays 169
Names, Titles, and Abbreviations 169
Nationalities, Languages, Ethnic Groups 170
Special Places and Things 170
Titles 171
Punctuation Marks 171
End Punctuation 171
Period (in sentences and abbreviations) 171
Question Mark 172
Exclamation Point 172
Comma 172
Quotation Marks 174
Hyphen 174
Apostrophe 175
Plurals 176
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Capital LettersA word that starts with a capital letter is special in some way.
Always use a capital letter to begin:
the first wordof a sentence Today is the first day of school.
the first word of a quotation: She said, “Today is the first day of school.”.
.,. bear Grandma,the salutation (greeting) and Thanks so much for the birthday gift!closing in a letter:
‘ Love,•
.
Sherry
the names of days, months, .
and holidays: . The fourth Thursday in November is Thanksgiving.
people’s first and last names Mrs. Cruz and her son Felix were both seen bytheir initials, and their titles: br. 5. C. Lee.
.
Note: Many titles can be abbreviated. Use these. . abbreviations only when you also use the .person’s name:
.‘
Mr. a man Capt. a captain. Mrs. a married woman Lt. a lieutenant
Ms. a woman Pres. the president of a country. . br. a doctor or an organization
a word that is used as a name: I went with bad and Aunt Terry to visit Grandma.. Be Careful! Do not use a capital letter at the beginning
.. of a word when it is not used as someone’s name:‘. . .
. I went with my dad and my aunt to visit my. •‘ . . grandma.
: - .. Hint: If you can replace the word with a name, it needs a
. ‘-. capital letter:
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I went with bad. —* I went with Joe.
the word tht ‘names .
yourself- - -
My family and I enjoy camping together.
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Capital Letters (continued)
the names of nationalities Mexican, Cuban, and Nicaraguan people all speakand languages Spanish
• the name&èf racial, ethni There were Asian, Native American, and Africanor euJtural groups dancers at the festival
the- nrnés of shp, pianes,’:’ The president flew on Air Force One to see the...ánd spaee vehieles: .. USS Abraham Lincoln, a U.S. Navy aircraft
.• . •. carrier.
Note You must also underline the name of a ship, plane,or space vehicle the space shuttle Columbia
to begin the names of these spec-ial places and things —
• street names Palm Avenue, Cypress Street, Pine Boulevard
; .• c-itiés, states, and :. Los Angeles, California, United States of America,
•: countries: . Paris, France
. contins: . : Asia, Europe, South America
• : • lâridforms and bodies.. of wter: -.
Great Plains, San Francisco Bay, Great Salt Lake
• .bui:ldings,.monüments, the White House, the Statue of Liberty,
‘•
and p.ubiic plaees: Yellowstone National Park
‘ - . The Gold Rush began in 1849.‘
,• historic events:.
:-,: -
‘ The Civil War ended in 1865.
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Punctuation MarksPunctuation gives information that helps you understand a sentence.End PunctuationEvery sentence must end with one of these three punctuation marks: .
A period (.) shows that a sentence is:
•giving information:. . I love to read short stories.
giving a mild comund:’. Choose a short story to read aloud.
:.. .
. Note: A period is also used in:. -
• abbreviations of months and days:Jan. (January), Feb. (February), Mon. (Monday), etc.
. .. . . .. •-
• abbreviations of measurements:, .. . .
. ft. (foot/feet), in. (inchlinches). . . . . .
. lb./lbs. (pound/pounds), oz. (ounce/ounces). . . . . . • time:
, .•. 8:00 a.m., 4:30 p.m., etc.
titles qfbqkSjsOrieS;poeths, and maga4nes:
The story “The Friendly Fruit Bat” appeared inRanger Rick magazine and in a science book calledFlying Mammals.
Be Careful! Do not use a capital letter at the beginningof a small word in a title, such as a, an, at, for, in, andthe, unless it is the first word in the title.
Note: When you write a title, remember...
Some titles are underlined:Book Titles: Frog and ToadMagazine Titles: Ranger RickMovie Titles: BambiTV Shows: Sesame StreetNewspapers: The.Daily News
Some titles go inside quotation marks:Story Titles: “The Fox and the Crow”Chapter Titles: “In Which Piglet Meets a Heffalump”Poem Titles: “My Shadow”Song Titles:. “Twinkle, Twinkle, Little Star”Titles of Articles: “Ship Sinks in Bay”
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A question mark (?) shows that a sentence is:
asking a question: bid you choose a story to read?
An exclamation point (I) shows that a sentence is:
expressing strongWow! That story is really long!
feelings:
CommaA comma (,) can help you know how to read things. Commas are often used in sentences.
Sometimes commas are used with words or phrases.
Some commas are used to keep things separate. Use a comma to separate:
the name of a city from t.h -
El Paso, Texasname of a state:
the name of a Gity from the- London, England
name of a countly:
the date from the year: October 12, 20014
the sàliitaithn (greeting) from. bear Ms. 5,lver,
the body of a letter:
the c-losing in a letter from. . Yours truly,
the signature:
two adjectives that tell about Nico is a witty, smart boy.the- arne ioun:
- Hint: To see if you need a comma between two
-
adjectives, use these two “tests”:
, 1 Switch the order of the adjectives. If the sentence still.‘
makes sense, you must use a comma:
. YES: Nico is a witty, smart boy. —.- Nico is a smart,
• .. -..
witty boy.. -. NO: Nico has dark brown hair. —.- Nico has brown
. - - ... .. - . - dark hair.
‘ - -- 2 Put the word “and” between the two adjectives. If the
- - -
- sentence still makes sense, you must use a comma:
• - ..
YES: Nico is a witty smart boy. —.0. Nico is a witty
: -- -. . .
- and smart boy.• .. -• ....
“ NO: Nico has dark brown hair. —o Nico has dark
- - -and brown hair.
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Some commas help you know where to pause when you read a sentence. Use a comma toshow a pause:
between three or more itemsNico won’t eat beets, spinach, or shrimp.in a list or series:
after or before the name of After: Nico, I think that you need to eat more.a person thatsomeone is
- Before: I think that you need to eat more, Nico.talking to in a seritence Both: I think, Nico, that you need to eat more.
•
. Mrs. Flores said, “It’s time to break thebetween the words spoken bysomeone and the rest of the pinata now!sentence: “I know,” answered Maya.
after an exc-lamation at the• b.eginning of a sentence: Boy, that’s a lot of candy!
after a short introduc-toryphrase or clause that comes After all that candy, nobody was hungry for cake.before the main idea:
before and after a word orThe cake, however, was already out on the picnicwords that interrupt the maintable.idea of a sentence:
before and after a word or• phrase that names or giyes. The cake, which had thick chocolate frosting,
more inforrntion about the melted in the hot sun.noun before it: . Mrs. Lutz, our neighbor, gave Mom the recipe.
before the connecting word. The frosting was melted, but the cake was great.in a compound sentence: Note: A simple sentence always includes a subject and a. yrk, and it expresses a complete thought. A compound
. S sentence joins two simple sentences together, so each of: the two parts of a compound sentence has its own subject
‘ and yth. The two parts of a compound sentence are.
joined by a comma and a conjunction. The conjunctions. and, but, for, nor, or, so, and yet are all used to
. .. .. .. —join two simple sentences into one compound sentence.
. .- - In a compound sentence, always place the comma before. . the connecting conjunction:
-
Maya candy, but too full to eat cake.S I
. Nico ate candy, and also gj a piece of cake.• -‘
Nico is thin, yet h eats lots of sweets.. I. -
Maya chubby, So watches what she eats.I. . —.
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Quotation Marks
Use quotation marks (“ “):
..keforeand after words that “This was the best birthday party ever!” Maya said.are’spoken by someqne:
Note: Punctuation that follows the speaker’s words goes. inside the quotation marks:
“May I have a pinata at my birthday party?” Martinasked.Mr. Flores replied, “You bet!”
Be Careful! When the words that tell who, is speakingcome before the quotation, put the comma outside thequotation marks. When the words that tell who isspeaking come after the quotation, put the commainside the quotation marks:
Before: Mrs. Flores asked, “bo you want a chocolate
cake, too?”After: “I sure do,” said Martin.
arund:word that are beingThe word “pifiata” is written with a special letter.
• discussed:
aound s}n wr.dssedWe all had to “chill out” after the party.
in ‘an unusuakway
Hyphen
Use a hyphen (— ):
between nuthbèrs in a One—half of the candies had walnuts, andfraction: . one—q,uarter had almonds.
to join two words that WorkIt’s not easy to find low—fat candy and sugar—free
together to make an adjectivesodabefore a noun:
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Apostrophe
An apostrophe (‘)helps show who owns something. You add an apostrophe after the nameof an owner.
When there is just one• owner, addan apostrophe:.; cat + ‘s — cat’s The cat’S dish was empty.first and then add an S
‘When there is.orari1e. cats + ‘ cats’ All the catS’ cages at the:owner? addnS first and
‘‘..• shelter were nice and big.then add an aosFrohe:
: •‘ ‘
-
,;‘ Be Careful! When the name of more than one owner•..
,- does not end with an S, add an apostrophe first and
:. ‘• thenaddanS:
children + ‘s —. children’s
The children’S cat was in the last cage
‘ ‘.,.., -
-. people ÷ ‘5 —- people’s. -•
‘.
-,‘
Other people’s pets were making lots of noise.
Use an apostrophe when I ÷ am I’m do + not don’toii put wo wrds together.
+ are you’re does + not doesn’ttomake one word. This is . ,
‘called a contracion. In a•’ he + is he s are ÷ not z aren tcontraeion the aposrophe:: it + is it’s could + not t.couldn’t
“ takes the 1ace of the mising’- we ÷ would we’d have + not haven’t. reteiorietrs:’ - ,
- they + will they’ll would + not wouldn’t
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PluralsA noun names a person, place, or thing. A plural noun names more
than one person, place, or thing.
Add anS tomakernost . girl —b girl + S — girlsnouns plura1 river river + S riverS
lunch — lunch + es .— lunches
if the noun ends hi ch, s, dress —, dress + es —,. dresses
sh, 01! X, add es brush — brush ÷ es —. brushes
.. ;.. fox—.fox+es——.foxes
If he noun eids in Y; ehange. fly fli + es fliesthey to I and add es . story.—, stori + es —‘ stories
..: •.. Note: If the noun ends in a vowel plus y, just add S:
bay—*bay+s——-ø.bays
•‘ key —* key + s — keys
I boy—*boy+s——-boy5
Be Careful! Some plural nouns do not have an S at all:
:* child — children foot — feet
. : man — men tooth — teethwoman — women goose —b geese
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