a scary story

A scary story…

…by a scary group of students…

Nivel intermedio. Group B

The story begun like this:

“One day I was home alone and a parcel was left at my door…”

This is what the students wrote…

“I was very scared because de black parcel had a strange sound.”

“I was really scared because the black parcel made a strange sound…

Or (this is a suggestion) “I was really scared because a strange sound came from that black parcel”

“I didn’t know if open it of not. Finaly I decided opening it and I jumped at the chain when I saw there was inside.”

“I didn’t know if I should open it or not. Finally, I decided to open it and I jumped on my chair when I saw what was inside”

“Into of the parcel where was a clock with a strange form and a strong noise…ring, rang…”

“Inside the parcel there was a strangely shaped clock that made a loud noise…tick, tock…”

“This clock marks the past and future years. I couldn’t believe it. What did it happen if I touched it?”

“The clock marked the past and the future. I couldn’t believe it. What would happen if I touched it?”

Suggestion: I would insert something here like: “then I made a shocking discovery: the clock…”

“During one hour the clock stopped and I decided to call a police”

“After an hour, the clock stopped, and I decided to call the police.”

“The police took a long time to came and I didn’t know to do. Perhaps it was a bomb. I decided to wait.”

“It took a long time for the police to come, and I didn’t know what to do. Perhaps it was a bomb!

I decided to wait.”

“but the clock moved again, the strong noise got on my nerves and I was really scared, so I called my neighbour because the police didn’t come”

“But the clock started working again. The loud noise got on my nerves and I was really scared, so I called my neighbour because the police didn’t come” (suggestion “never came”)

“My neighbour wasn’t at home, and I decided to come back at home. The street was dark.”

“My neighbour wasn’t at home, so I decided to go back home myself. The street was dark.”

Suggestion: I couldn’t find my neighbour, so I decided to go back home.”

“At last the police arrive my home. They were more frightened than me. So the boys of the group decided that they can’t caught the parcel and they came back t0 the police station and let me with the parcel. Alone, without any helpness.”

“At last, the police arrived. They were more frightened than me, so they decided that they couldn’t catch the parcel and they went back to the police station. They left me alone with the parcel. Alone and helpless.”

“Then the phone ran. My dog woke up and came next the parcel, and started to smell it. I told to it: ‘No, come in, don’t smell it, it would be dangerous.”

“Then the phone rang. My dog woke up, came next to the parcel and started to sniff it. I told him: ‘no, come here, don’t sniff it. It’s dangerous!”

“In that moment, my dog get crazy, an it started to ….. More aunxiusly around me while it was making big noise.”

“In that moment my dog got crazy, and started to bark more anxiously around me while a louder noise came out of the parcel.”

“I was so nervous and shouted ‘Shut up!’ to my dog. My dog was paralized looking something behind me. Suddenly, I felt cold in my back, and the parcel moved itself!

In that moment, I knew I was chosen to be one of them. Don’t stay alone at home. I could visit you.”

“I was so nervous that I shouted at my dog. Shut up! He was paralized, looking at something behind me. Suddenly, I felt something cold on my back. And the parcel moved! In that moment. I knew I had been chosen to become one of them. Don’t stay alone at home. I could visit you…”

This was the result. Good job!!!

Happy Halloween!